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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece Random review and your name came up. Here goes. I have run into this type of thinking myself and kind of wonder. So and so needs an upgrade. Really? Have you tried working. It doesn't take that long to earn more than enough points to make this work on a very limited budget.

Overall impression of piece The first rule of economics is, there is no such thing as free lunch. I can't dispute anything that is said here. I have never seen this before. You should put it on a sidebar on occassion.

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What I liked?*Smile* I like the differing colors and bolding of free. It kind of sings out hello. I have to admit, you are preaching to the choir on this and even if you aren't, what organization can you join for under 50 bucks in a year. There is a lot going on here. You can almost never get to the end of it. Of course you deserve to get paid. How much does anyone do for free. Certainly nothing of any note.

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure who the audience of this one is. It , on the surface is to the mythical young man who almost assuredly gave up because he couldn't get anything written. It might be better if you broaden the scope to include all readers. I think many are overwelmed with the site and just kind of give up

How the piece made me feel You innovate and those who read it for free can read it for free. Wow. Maybe the first law of economics doesn't apply, but you do have to apply yourself. that is what life is all about.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Random review, interest

Overall impression of piece I think a lot of things we think real really are not. Illusions do illu minate things that are not there.

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile*: You have a good reach for th e things that are not apparent b ut still very real. I have always liked that


What I disliked*Idea* Reflections reverberate seems to be a mixed metaphor. Reflections is light and reverb is sound. I have a hard time makeing the jump Allitersen poem doesn't show up on the foirst page of googol. Comes up alliteration. Some clarification would help. Use the word quacking and I think you might mean quaking

How the piece made me feel Mystery poem that seems to be not as mysterious as you might think.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Soulless Whispers  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)

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Why I chose this piece: Anniversary

Overall impression of piece: Interesting. I get the pain and anguish. Life certainly isn't fair. It gets worse as you get older. I hope you are still with us

Grammatical and spelling errors Quotes are not done well. A split quoote would be like this. "Help," she said, "Before it is too late." It's way unless there is more than one it which wouldn't make sense. Hareful doesn't make sense. I would suspect hateful

What I liked? Very visceral descriptions. I can see what is going on

What I disliked:This is hard to read. You need to either indent paragraphs, or ,my favorite, leave a line in between. I never really know what her feelings are post death and whether death was worth it.

How the piece made me feel I kind of see a darkness in suicide. I think the answers looked for in suicide, won't be there. God, I think wants us to live through the pain and help others live through theirs.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Random review.

Overall impression of piece Nice piece of work. A little disjointed but it kind of goes with the flash fiction genre. I can't say I would not feel the same way. Your descriptions have a visceral quality to them

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* I see that you didn't bold the words, but I have no doubt you used them. The use seems natural and the necessary words don't appear to be hammered into place as is often the case.

What I disliked*Idea* Nurses wouldn't beinvolved in an all out search for anything unless it is related to hospital care. Why Samantha is going climbing is unclear. Something like she remembered her childhood would help

How the piece made me feel I( think in our hearts we all feel kind of similar. Hospitals are not great places for goodbyes. We yearn for more.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Interested in your first piece and I thought I would try another. it is unusual to read anyone who can put to thoughts together. I write nearly all essays

Overall impression of piece> You have definitions of a whole person and a dualistic person. Paul wrestles with dualism in the bible in that there are things he would rather not do but does them anyway

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems awkward that the last sentence is past tense. I think at the least, a participle to indicate continuing action would be more approprate.

What I liked?*Smile* This asked a bunch of questions to me. How do we become whole? I think wholeness is a spirtual gift of being focused on the right things. How do we get so focused on evil? I know of very little on TV that focuses on good stuff. We'd rather see a mass murderer. Story you used to illustrate was simple, yet profound

What I disliked*Idea* Is this a matter of psychology or spirtual wisdom? I would guess the later. Can we reason our way to the right answer? I really doubt that.

How the piece made me feel I think God is the one who makes people whole. We are so confused in our day and time, because we won't lay hold to the one who has all the answers.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Rise Up  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Perusing prose. Found this interesting. Doubt if I have reviewed you before. Seem interesting. I get where you are coming from. I am about 6 years older.

Overall impression of piece I like using an image to place location. We will all live in a City of Stone, at least metaphorically. Seems like a waste of playground space to me. We mourn the loss of someone. the truth is, according to the Christian faith, they are not lost.. We know exactly where they are. I think one of the tombstones from Franklin said Pease is gone(that was his name) All that is left is the pod.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Overtime skin does not survive. Chinese would wait a few years and send bones back to China. I like the upbeat positive look at what most say is dismal and hopeless.

What I disliked*Idea* Ending of rise up almost seems Prosletyzing. I don't think they are speaking to those already dead. Maybe we write our faith while still alive. Doesn't seem quite right or effective.

How the piece made me feel What a great diversion from the dark death things that are so evident on the site. I am not sure why folks are drawn to that. Maybe they need hopelessness

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Newbie review. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: I always love spiritual pieces

Grammatical and spelling errors: Quote from jeremiah needs quote marks

What I liked?*Smile* You have faithfully recorded the truth of these passages and left it out for folks to see.. How the man in Is 29 prophitted, should be listed. I think the plan for original 1 to one evangelization really is the plan

What I disliked*Idea* This is a mysterious part of the Gospel that is not easily understandable. This part of Isreal was predominantly pagan. That is what the pigs were all about. By drowning all those pigs, he cut into business Tie ins to Mt 9 and Jeremiah 29 are a bit unclear. You should amplify them and help us make the connection

How the piece made me feel

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Random review

Overall impression of piece I kind of like this. It is amazing how cold miserable circumstances can bring us together, and almost forget winter. It is almost like it is like winter when the other is away

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* This reads well. Rhyme and rhythm seem to really add to its flow. The sentiments are simple but I feel are real and heart felt.

What I disliked*Idea* Sometimes love is simple and doesn't need a lot to describe it. I think it probably met the reason for which it was written. that is the good part. Artistically, it is kind of simple and could be embellished some to bring it out and make it more personal

How the piece made me feel Pretty much covered.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I love history. I assume this is based on the period. If it is a true story, you need a note somewhere.

Overall impression of piece: The font is impressive. It looks like some of the old typewritter font. first person gives it a lot of validity

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What I liked?*Smile* FDR had a lot of make work propositions. I think writers did have an avenue open to them. I would consider using that. It might have been related to the arts. You have pulled off a letter quality. Everything really was hush hush. Even troup trains in this country were classified. A lot of folks were talking about Eleanor.

What I disliked*Idea* Dictaphone kind of grabbed me but I looked back and saw some things in use in the 1940's. I always had the sense it was mainly stenography then. Definitely have to give the President a cane. He never went anywhere without it. I am sure he would have had a lieutenant do it for him. He was really pretty infirm. If you were close, you would have known

How the piece made me feel I feel the tenor of the times. They really were like this.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Taffy  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays and was worried that my last piece might have been a bit too sticky. Why not a piece on Taffy?

Overall impression of piece: I think most writers can identify with most of what you have written. I have wondered how to be inspired and persusasive. I get the analogy. It does not come all at once. Because I have to talk, then one space. Because it is too quiet is a clause. Drop the because

Grammatical and spelling errors: Is it pliable or palatable. I think it seems a little unclear, especially as you weigh it.

What I liked?*Smile* this is a great extended metaphor. I like the thing of cooking and molding your thoughts. You have elements of writer's block in here and getting trough that. There is beauty in the mechanics of words that has been fairly well pppresevered

What I disliked*Idea*: This is easy to identify with .

How the piece made me feel Should not be relegted to the dusty dish

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Scarce Attention  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece Perusing essays and came upon this one. I too have some family pieces. We know so little about our origins as a rule

Overall impression of piece: I think this is an intro of a dedicated and enthusiastic person. I think there is a market for this type of thinking and approach

Grammatical and spelling errors: By making stories short and onobrusive needs to be confined with the next sentence. As it stands, it is not a sentence

What I liked?*Smile* Interesting quote and formatting to start piece. I think there are a lot of outrageous things done in the field of family memmories. Points are well taken. I like listing your organizing principles. They would be very important for understanding

What I disliked*Idea* Who is the audience? Are they y our family or people in general? WQhat is the main theme? I think starting out that folks have no time really takes away from the piece which is about ancestory. Your main issue is you want someone to read it. You haven't really sold me that this might be worth reading.

How the piece made me feel Read some of my stuff out of my Family folder. It might give you some ideas. I like being brief. I think in that vein anyway. If you don't think they are interesting, no one else will either.

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Review of Mother-Tree  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Random review button

Overall impression of piece: I can see this was a contest with certain parameters.

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What I liked?*Smile* this is easy to identify with. How many things has a tree seen in a lifetime? Our trees predate our 60 year old house. Another house stood here. I do get the feeling of a sentient being here which I think is the intent.

What I disliked*Idea* A few things don't quite resonate. I realize this is poetic language but a trees windsong doesn't quite do it for me. Who owns the wind? I would think the wind does. Perhaps and just brainstorming here, wind playing in your branches Dermis of a tree. I come from a biological background and I think animal when I see that . The analogy is interesting an evocative but I would play it up a bit more if you want to use it.

How the piece made me feel Pretty much covered previously. We can either feel them or ignore them. They are still there as forgotten monarchs

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Random review

Overall impression of piece. How could you not like this one? My first thought is that it doesn't get much added by the poetic form. Yes I see the rhyme and the rhythm. On the other hand, there isn't too much need for detail to make this go and to be understood.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Very good

What I liked?*Smile* Great story simply told. Nice rhyming couplet to give closure to the piece.

What I disliked*Idea*: I think maybe there was more to be done here. I think you could have build up the heroic values more. I think a hero perseveres, even if he doesn't play at all. Kindness ran all over the field, slowly, but hey, it worked.

How the piece made me feel I like the heoic elements in this. The right thing may not be bold, but it is meaningful

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw you in essays and thought I should check out your site. I like spiritual stuff and I like to think

Overall impression of piece: Y our sphere of work is truly impressive. As a technical writer, all that is necessary is really there and your links are first rate. Obviously you have more than a little experience at doing this and are to be commended.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok. did not read exhaustively

What I liked?*Smile* This piece opened up a wealth of possibilities to me. Our styles are not the same, but I think the impetus to teach and inform are paramount in the presentations. This was an eye eyeopener

What I disliked*Idea*: I don't see anyone on the site that is this technically inclined to get through all the jargon and verbage listed here. I have seen others have their more complex version on U tube and a simplified focus with boiled down data. For instance, a gentleman was saying that the antichrist number was not 666 but three arabic symbols highly tied to the Muslim faith. the details, although fascinating were not gone into except on the u tube version

How the piece made me feel I appreciate what you are doing with this. Any attempt to educate is sadly needed in our society. People are notoriously dumbed down and I kind of felt the language of this ponderous and not user friendly. I really wasn't inspired to look any of them up

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays. I saw this on the list to be reviewed. here goes.

Overall impression of piece You have a lot of personality in this. It is personal and hits at some good points. Cyn ycism goes back to the ancient greeks. We apply it differently today

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* This is personal and it meant something to you. We are so cycnical that fperhaps we have no idea that we are cynical at all. Asberger's people are very bright, but don't always make good connections with other people. It will be a lifelong struggle.

What I disliked*Idea* You have two logic errors here. The first is taking the specific and generalizing it to fit everyone. Cynical means in modern usage that someone sees something only for their benefit or the benefit of someone else. We are very cynical about our government. I see an art critic in his comments--one that is not well informed. I am sure there are people who don't like just about anyone's work. The main issue is notdefining your terms. I wouldn't have called him cynical at all. Stupid, perhaps.

How the piece made me feel Since you have kind of illdefined your argument, y ou really didn't win an argument with me. I don't have to like your painting. It is the way things are. Kind of written in blog style and could use more focus as to what your point is.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Hexcon History  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like nonfiction. It is written as such and I accept your parameters. I think it could be which is part of the Fantasists trade.

Overall impression of piece Details make the piece and you have a lot of details. What people want to know is not necessarily a prospectus on the company. Weapons are big business, even today. 88% of households in America have guns.

Grammatical and spelling errors: a Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* We don't realize the menace of a weapon until they start firing it at us. Are there moral implications to what we say and do? I would have to say yes. There won't be repeat customers here. Maybe the service department will stay buzy. Lots of detail here. I buy the premise.

What I disliked*Idea* I think what most want to know is how they got started. I think some history of the company not in terms of numbers but the use, growth and expansion of their weaponry would be in order.

How the piece made me feel Don't shoot. I promise I won't shoot you

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like nonfiction. the topic fascinates me. We know of all kinds of movements joined by thousands of people--like Jonestown in Guyanna

Overall impression of piece: Great topic for a piece. I think these thoughts have plaqued us for a long time. Read on the suicide cult of Fiji. It can be stylish to kill yourslef.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Watch your format. Some folks won't review if they have to correct too much. Spell out you. Can't needs an apostrophe. Glamor is ok as a sentence. Maybe not exactly. but it works. You must have a capital as a new sentence

What I liked?*Smile* You have an interesting list of things here. They are interesting things in and of themselves. I think the list of power things is especially good.

What I disliked*Idea* I assume the final quote goes to Jackson. I would put them together in the same paragraph. I would flesh some of these ideas out more. Folks don't need just good ideas. They need to know how to live them. End with your own conclusion, not Jesse Jackson's

How the piece made me feel Good thoughts. Needs some polish. I think we all need encouragement to do what we are supposed to

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Perusing spiritual items. Different so I thought I would comment

Overall impression of piece Consider the lillies of the field. Here today anjd gone tomorrow. Solomon in all his glory was not robed like one of these.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Rhyme wise this seems to work although stanza two doesn't really rhyme. I am not sure why it works. I would suspect the meter holds it together.

What I disliked*Idea* Vitality of youth is fleeting is borderline cliche. flowers do have a time and I think people do to. I am not sure how to deal with the mystery

How the piece made me feel I am one of those grey haired guys that wonders if life has passed them by. this is certainly a gettable message. Oneil wrote, do not fade quietly into that good night. I have been diagnosed with a fatal illness, but when you get down to it, we all have. We can pray but studies have shown that prayed patients do better, but they don't live any longer. (Birds study on prayer). I fight stuff like mortality, but I am not sure if I have the end of the story in mind.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of New Beginning  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Random review. After reading something depressing, this is a welcome respite. We are not going to die of this life./

Overall impression of piece: this is beautiful and identifiable.

Grammatical and spelling errors Semicolon before leaving seems wrong. What follows is not a complete sentence. Consider a colon. Bringing her back is not really a sentence. don't think you need a comma after beginning of a new day

What I liked?*Smile* I love the positiveness of all this. Life will not necessarily be easy, but there will be something that you need to do. Great quote on the end. It would be easy to google the quote with a url. Hence
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What I disliked*Idea*Not really a short story. More like a piece of prose. Still very valid.

How the piece made me feel I guess I needed that. It is easy to lose hope

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece These are pretty universal thoughts. In silence and nature is the preservation of life and the species. Someone said that at one point. I think this can be identified with, even if we can not fully take it in due to our buzy lives.

Grammatical and spelling errors Many sentences aren't sentences. I really mean when I say is kind of redundant. I would hope the rest isn't lies.

What I liked?*Smile*: I think we are all looking for peace. I think peace has a way of of being a focal point for our souls to say, "I need more of this." You have made this personal and expressive enough to get most folks attention.
Your arguments are relatively emotional and experiential and than you kind of end with a logic statement. You can't prove emotions by logic.

What I disliked*Idea*: This seems to have an identity crisis. Is it a poem or is it a written piece. You poor use of sentences. Alalyze and make a list is a listing function. I would think a semicolon. Words have not been left out. The bonds we have with the universe are discovered in silence is much more direct.

How the piece made me feel I think the thoughts and feelings are pretty universal and appreciated. I would make your sentences more direct and to the point.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter. I like these kinds of pieces. I try and review everyday. it is what I can give to the world.

Overall impression of piece: We are wrestling with this in the bible study we are doing in the letters to churches. What does it mean to do things with love? Why was the persecuted church the one that wasn't condemned. I get the devine spark within all people. Quaker theology talks of "That of God in every man." Like the spahetti sauce, it is in there.

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile* The social gospel is all over the new testament. It makes us uncomfortable. It is demanding and imposing. We don't really like that. Sometimes God gets his work done is rather odd and different ways. We are all made like God. Whether we choose to acknowledge that is the real mystery of life. Why were they there. I am sure the Christiams were the only early finishers. This seems to be an open wrestling with an very important topic

What I disliked*Idea* Never really said who you were and how you wrestled with this. I am a Christian because I go to church is as improbable as I am a hamburger because I go to MacDonalds. Point of view kind of bounces around a bit.

How the piece made me feel Open honest and not too churchy. People can identify with all of this.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)


Why I chose this piece Interested in knowing how the group really works. thought I would review, because it is what I do best.

Overall impression of piece There certainly is talent in thie presentation. You have made RAOK initials thaqt nearly everyone understands and admires. Good to great general principles. Read your groundrules for giving upgrades and whole heartedly agree. You have to show some signs of interest in what is going on here.

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* Really set up for the people needing upgrades. Presentations is colorful and expressive. It is easy to join. I think I did, although I couldn't find my name on your list. It seems like a great idea in many ways. On the otherhand, I haven't paid for at least a couple of years as I do enough reviews and am credited for those quite generously. You seem to be a part of nearly every pie that is getting divided up. Extremely impressive.

What I disliked*Idea* I know you can affiliate reviews with RAOK. Why should we do that? I don't see any material on this. I see a lot of contests that benefit ROAK. Is this the best or only way to be involved. I hate raffles. If I understood the need and what was going on, I would probably just give gps. I would probably have a member only page.

How the piece made me feel I get the feling from reading this that we are so big and so well known that you don't really need to communicate with me

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Saw this advertised on a sideboard and bookmarked for future review.

Overall impression of piece: Numbers do make a difference. If oxygen level goes down, we become remarkably stupider. All the greatest thoughts to be thought would dance in the sysapses of the unexplored country to be lost forever.,

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile*: Logic is a basic premise of nearly all thought. Does this make sense? We could write a program for that or we could do somnething else.

What I disliked*Idea* Is there a mathematical bnasis for everything? Actually I kind of doubt it. Some things kind of our random. They are the very stuff of life on this planet. I would run you mathematics them a little more thoughtfully among all the disciplines.

How the piece made me feel Saw you footnotes in the other piece. I would combine them. If folks aren't interested, they will ignore them

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece Random review

Overall impression of piece: I think you have everything here you need to promote WDC. I apreciate the detail about devision in labor. I do appreciate y ou want and need for privacy. I really don't need any more. Obviously, you have the devision of labor pretty well devided up. Of course the software is proprietary, but it is a good thing to comment on.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* Format looks good. It helps us go back and reread certain parts of this

What I disliked*Idea* Should there be anything about moderators and other designators? Obviously you don't do everything yourself. I think it might be a way to encourage participation. If no one participates, you have no site.

How the piece made me feel This is a great promotional tool. Anyone investigating the site should have access to this. I like the other url's appended.

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece Newbie review. Interested in spiritual things.

Overall impression of piece: Now this is an ambitious undertaking.

Grammatical and spelling errors When we look at moses and how... This is a clause as there really is no verb.. Same with How David led. You could connect these things with a colon as to show a list of stuff.

What I liked?*Smile* The heart is the heart of the matter. It definitely is the place to start and if the heart is right, many things can be figured out

What I disliked*Idea* Love of God as identified with the leader of the church. than you go on to say that he might not have the love of god. Focus is kind of hazy. Is it to church memebers or to leader? I am all for short in this day and age. I would try and give us more to go on to point the direction you are going. You are selling your book. Don't go half way.

How the piece made me feel: Great idea. Don't be afraid to sell me. Why should I read this ?

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