Oh don't do that to me. Leave me hanging and not knowing what happened next. Did Old Man Doolittle come crashing through the basement door or not. If not, then what did happen. Once again you have written a nice little tale that held my attention from beginning to end.
Have you thought about taking all your stories and putting them together in a book?
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
I just read your tale, Unknown Caller. It's quite unnerving, yet it held my attention all the way to the end. I didn't notice any typos, misspelled words or forgotten words. It's well written.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
Once again you have written a somehwat creppy piece with, The Dream> I enjoyed reading it. I usually don't read much horror, yet I keep finding your stories mentioned and the title alway catch my attention. Once again you have written a well paced and nicely detailed story.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
I love your poem, The Land of All But Forgotten Things. I love fantasy and unicorns are one of my favorite fantasy creatures, followed by dragons, fairies & elves. Your little tale has plenty of details to give the reader a vivid picture to see. I only wish I could write poetry like this.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
I seem to keep coming back to your little tales of horror. I just read, Death Chamber and once again you had my attention from the get go. I kind of suspect that Hawkins might work of LaStrom so I wasn't surprise to learn that I was right.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
Reading the beginning of your tale, The Old Kirsch Place, put the mystery hound in me on alert. Nicely written. I see Rube is the braver of the two characters. Your description of what the mother did, the old barn, house and well made me see the background. I'm curious at what made the loud bang that scared Rube & her cousin off? IS the house really haunted or just an old broken down house in desperate need of repair?
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
I just read your poem, Long Gone Love and all I can say is bravo! It brought a smile to my heart and a tear of my eyes. It made me feel a bit sad for the gentleman.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
Ijust read your charming tale, The Old Oak Tree and enjoyed it very much. I only wish there was more to your tale. The only errors I saw was that many of the I's were not capitalized so you need to fix those. I kinda like that fact that the old tree talked to the lady, but then I love fantasy tales & realizes nature is full of wonders we don't always understand.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
I just read your tale, Djinn in the Box and love the twist on a genie in a bottle. I love the details of the Dijinn's box & how she is summoned. I could see the box & red sparks & smole. I could see the Dijinn's anger when Jake didn't fall into her trap of being seduced. Yet I was unprepared for the ending. Bravo! You caught me completely off guard. The story moves along at a good pace & holds the reader's interest. I don't see anything wrong with your tale.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
I just read your Stairway To Heaven. What a creepy little tale. I didn't see anything wrong with the writing or how you presented your tale. There are enough details to paint a quite vivid picture. I enjoyed it. I love the ending. What a fit punishment for a killer.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
I just read your tale Shards of Glass and found it quite charming. It is well written. You give enough details to allow me to see Malia, C.J. & the old Victorian house. I've always wanted to live in an old Victorian. They make wonderful backgrounds for mysteries and ghost stories. Perhaps a romance or two. I figured out what was going to happen when Malia crossed over, yet wasn't completely sure. I like the way you set the whole story up. And I like ghost stories that don't always scare someone silly. Those kinds of ghost stories are nice too.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
After reading your tale Romance Midst Tragedy I have to say WOW! It brought tears to my eyes. I coulde feel the ladies pain as she thought about loosing her baby and her worry about her husband. I've never lost a child and can only imagine the pain. Yet I watch as my mother went through it when my younger brother died at age 16 from a medical condition.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may while I wipe the tears from my eyes.
What a sad little tale your tale The Attic is. I can see the little girl wishing for someone to play with. She doesn't understand that her being dead means no one shall play with her. This makes me feel sorrow for her. I only wonder why she stayed in the attic and didn't cross over.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
Just finished readying your tale The House Elf. I love it. I can see Theo, Billy, Charlotte and Rebecca. You did a great job with your descriptions. Please tell me that there's more to this story. If you haven't written more I hope that you do.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
I just read your poem Wisdom Tree and it brought a smile to my face and gave me an uplift in an otherwise bad day. I like it much and it's well written.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
Just finished reading your tale Journey's End. It grabbed my attention. You've given just enough information to peek the reader's curiosity. I hope you plan on lengthing this tale. What's X-treme Living? Why did this group or person kill seven rich guys and lay them out in a circle? How were they killed?
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
Your tale Pandora's Box is well written. The details of the saleman make me see him in my mind's eye. I only wish there was more to this little tale. Do you plan on lengthen it?
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
I just read your tale, Burned. Great job! Margaret turning out to be a hitman caught me totally by surprise. Like Mr. Devoe, I thought she was a gusty reporter looking to get ahead in the news game.
Your details about Margaret being uncomfotable and a bit impatient show both quite well.
The first sentence makes me wonder what the guy is up to or what did he do that he feels the need to run.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
I just read your Shadow in the Hall and like your take on things that go bump in the night. This story makes me think of things I wish I could change if I had a chance.
I can see the house, kitchen and the clown. Your description gets the job done.
Bravo! Your story, Family Secret brought tears to my eyes even though I knew Garuda was a phoenix.
Have you ever thought about writing a book? This could be the beginning of a novel. You could tells us about all of Garuda's rebirths and where the bird orignally came from.
If this is a beginning of a story or novel fantastic. You have my undivided attention. When the sprightly young man appears dressed more for a formal event I just know something mysterious is about to happen. The scene inside the circus tent is well defined that I can actually see Andrew sitting there wondering what's going to happen next.
You have a good beginning for a story. I'm one of those reader who likes to know the main character's name within the first paragraph. Who is the main Character? Shyma or Tyllie? I like the names. They're unusual yet pronounceable.
It might be nice to replace a couple of the she's with the main character's name.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
You have a great beginning of an interesting murder mystery. I like the fact that you went in a different direction to learn the identity of the young woman, yet the following passage is a bit confusing with three he's in the same sentence. After rereading it I knew what you meant.
He had explained to Joseph a bit more about what went on in the lab but he didn’t want to admit that he had only followed about half of what he was saying. Friedman was still pondering over his proposal but it seemed that he approved.
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it may.
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