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I believe in constructive criticism and honesty. I can adapt my review style to fit the kind of feedback an author is looking for (e.g., developmental suggestions, fine-tuning, proofreading, etc.), but will always try to be as encouraging and helpful as possible.
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Plotting, characterization, dialogue, structure/pacing, and professional considerations. I can also do serviceable technical editing/proofreading, but I'm much better with developmental/creative feedback.
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I read almost everything. I particularly love genre fiction (mystery/thriller and science fiction/fantasy especially) and nonfiction of all kinds.
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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Free Folk  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi HollyMerry

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*Firework* Positives

I really enjoyed this item. I definitely learned a lot more about butterflies than I knew before, and you offered some great tips to take care of them well. All in all, this was a thoroughly enjoyable read!


*Firework* Suggestions

I don't have any specific suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, this was a solid read. nice work!


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi KingsSideCastle

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2024" .


*Train* Positives

This poem was a really great take on the prompt. I normally am not a fan of absurdist or nonsense type compositions, but I thought this one was great because there was still a bit of structure to it, and the individual lines were all thought-provoking and humorous.


*Train* Suggestions

I would have liked to have seen a little more cohesiveness between the lines of the piece. While they all worked really well on their own, the fact that each one felt like a different thought or concept made it difficult to appreciate the completeness of the piece. If you were to ever revisit this poem with an eye toward revising it, I wonder if it would be made stronger if some of the preposterous lines were somewhat related to one another and there were a loose framework to follow as far as the content is concerned.


*Train* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. It was a thoroughly entertaining read and I really enjoyed the GIF at the end which added a little extra enjoyment to the experience of reading it. Nice work!


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Review of We Stand Together  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Lorelei

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*Firework* Positives

I enjoyed the creativity in this piece. The class format told from the perspective of pets was a great idea and really engaging.


*Firework* Suggestions

I was a little unclear what the purpose of the narrative was. The class has dogs and snakes and ferrets in it, and the objective of the class (outside of "dealing with humans safely") wasn't fully articulated, leaving this reader a little confused about what the larger themes or intentions of the narrative might be.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, it was an entertaining, interesting story. I think a little more work on the backstory and/or clarifying the intention of the narrative would be useful, but even as is, it was an enjoyable read. Nice job! *Smile*


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Review of This is me  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi knight life

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*Firework* Positives

This was a really nice introduction to who you are and the things you value. I like the fact that you went more in depth that just the surface level material things in your life, and explained some of the personality traits that are important to you, as well as how you like to spend your time. It was a concise, well-rounded presentation.


*Firework* Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. If your goal was to give people a little insight into your mind and personality, then mission accomplished! *Smile*


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Review of Earl Grey Tea  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Steve

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*Firework* Positives

I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. As a fan of Edgar Allan Poe, I could immediately slip into the cadence and style of his famous "Annabel Lee" as I was reading. That's a really underrated skill when one is writing satire, and I thought you did a great job with it.


*Firework* Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, this was an excellent poem that I really enjoyed. You did a great job of capturing the essence of "Annabel Lee" while still making it almost entirely your own. Well done! *Smile*


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Review of Customer Care.  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
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Hi Petra Pansky

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*Firework* Positives

The two scenarios you selected (difficulties with your landlord or property management, and technical issues with online orders) are near-universal experiences that I think were a smart choice here to include along to exemplify the kinds of ridiculous things that many of us have to deal with every day. I also think that disclaimer at the top of your piece was a really smart, important element of the piece, so that the reader has context for your perspective.


*Firework* Suggestions

For me, the comedy in the situation didn't come through quite as well as I had hoped at the outset of the piece. Reading it felt a bit more like general complaints about the inconveniences of the events described, rather than inherently comedic scenarios or a humorous perspective on them. If you're looking to increase the humor in the piece, I'd recommend tweaking the tone of the piece a bit to be more tongue-in-cheek or witty rather than incredulous and cynical.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. It was an entertaining read with some real potential to be a very funny piece with a little workshopping of the comedy elements. Nice work!


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Free Folk  
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Serene Vanity

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*Firework* Positives

This was a thought-provoking piece. I thought you presented your ideas well and got your point across clearly.


*Firework* Suggestions

Given the complexity of the content, I'd suggest varying the format a bit to break the presentation into smaller, more digestible chunks of text. With so many ideas and concepts packed into each of two paragraphs, I found it a little hard to follow along with from time to time.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I enjoyed the piece. Nice work!


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Free Folk  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hi ~Sue~

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*Firework* Positives

This was an entertaining story that I thought was a really fun read.


*Firework* Suggestions

There were quite a few places in the story where you added necessary context, but stopped the narrative in order to do it (e.g., "I should stop the story here to tell you"), and each time that pause occurs, it halts the forward progress of the narrative. I'd recommend finding more organic ways to work that information into the narrative.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, this was an enjoyable read and I thought you did a good job with it. Nice work!


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Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for inviting me to check out your portfolio! I really enjoyed reading this statement of faith; in a religious tradition as varied as segmented as Christianity, I always enjoy learning about fellow Christians' individual beliefs and guardrails. Thanks for sharing this statement of faith with the community! *Smile*


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for entry "Fury" 
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi KingsSideCastle

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*Train* Positives

I really liked how this entry alludes to a much larger narrative. It takes the already visceral, dramatic imagery of the picture prompt and promises that it's far from a climax to the story, but rather just the beginning. I also liked the fact that you also hinted at a much greater backstory in mentioning that this violent act visited upon the car was retribution for some unknown history. By the end of this story hook, it's clear that the scene depicted in the photo prompt is merely one piece of a much larger narrative, with plenty of story to be delved into on either side.


*Train* Suggestions

If I were being really nit-picky, I would probably recommend slightly tweaking the character element that says Jenna's "dark expression revealed this was far from over" and "her revenge was just getting started." As a standalone hook for this contest, I think it works great. But in terms of a larger narrative, it hints at Jenna being pretty cold and unlikable. Knowing that you can't fully disclose enough backstory in an item this short to fully explain her reasoning, you might consider softening the way you describe Jenna's demeanor, potentially shifting it from purely dark and sinister to perhaps something a little more resigned, or even a hint of reluctance or regret.


*Train* Overall

Overall, I thought this was a great entry for the contest. Well done!


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Review of A Final Meeting  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi werden

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*Firework* Positives

I think you did a really great job with this piece, particularly your ability to capture the feeling of interacting with someone who struggles with Alzheimers or general senility. It can be a really devastating experience, and you captured that well through Bill's experience. I also like that you tied the story into a greater sense of obligation and a debate about regret, so it felt more significant and weightier than just an anecdote about the last time a character visits their grandmother.


*Firework* Suggestions

There was a part early in the story that threw me as I was reading:

"You have grown so tall and handsome," she said, beaming up at him.

"I knew you would," she continued, as he guided her stumbling steps into her room. He helped her take a seat and sat on a chair right beside her.

"I remember you as a little boy, how everyone liked you." she beamed at him.

I think it was the combination of using the "beaming at him" stage direction twice in a row, combined with the non-sequitur where she remarks on his appearance then immediately changes course. Because of the repetition of phrasing, I wasn't sure if that non-sequitur was intentional (i.e., grandma just changed the subject like she's prone to do), or if there's actually a piece of the narrative missing there.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought this piece was well-written and really touching, especially for anyone who's experienced this kind of loss with a loved one. Nice work!


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Review of Us(Us)  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice job with this! I thought the piece was concise, to the point, and well articulated. I thought the rhyme scheme in particular was really effective and worked well for the piece. Overall, I don’t have any suggestions for improvement. Well done on this!


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Review of Decisions  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Amethyst Angel🌊🌿🌞

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*Firework* Positives

Since you went to the trouble of writing a poem for "Rhythms & Writing: Official WDC Contest" , I figured the least I could do was send you a review. *Bigsmile*

I really liked the structure of this poem and the way it reflected many of the ideas and emotions present in the original song. I thought you did a good job with the imagery, the content, and the hourglass structure was really inventive and intriguing. Nice work!


*Firework* Suggestions

Based on the length of the poem, if this were an official entry and I were judging it, for me there was a little too much of the original in there for my tastes. While the structure was unique and you did use the song content to good effect, there was so much of the original song's imagery present that there wasn't as much of your own original work that I would have hoped. Again, from a strictly "if I were judging this for a contest" perspective. As a standalone piece, I think it's excellent.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a really job with this poem and I greatly enjoyed the read. Well done!


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Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I really enjoyed the detail and description in this piece. I thought you did a great job painting a vivid scene in comparatively few words, although it did feel like more of a vignette or anecdote as opposed to a cohesive narrative with a beginning, middle, and end. That said, I enjoyed the read. Nice job!


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Review of Failed love story  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
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Hi soliloquy

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*Firework* Positives

I'm really impressed with the way you were able to pack so much information and context into so short a piece of writing. You managed to give the reader a complete picture of the protagonist's perspective and emotions in only a few hundred words, and that's not easy to do!


*Firework* Suggestions

There were quite a few technical errors and typos in the piece, from the wrong word tense ("admire" instead of "admiration" in the first sentence), to improper capitalization (a lot of the "I"s in the piece are lowercase when they should be uppercase), to missing punctuation in contractions and elsewhere. A thorough edit to catch all the various typographical errors would help improve the readbility of the piece.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I enjoyed the read and thought you managed to fit a lot into a comparatively short piece. Nice job!


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi ruwth

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*Train* Positives

I like the way that you organized this blog item into different sections of experience, from your initial attempts, to visiting local churches both large and small, to trying a church in another town. You clearly laid out your plan, and the steps you took to try to become more fluent/conversational in Spanish, which was a great way of highlighting your commitment to developing a very hard to learn skill. Languages can be very difficult for some people to learn... myself included! *Smile*


*Train* Suggestions

This isn't so much a suggestion for the written piece itself as much as a suggestion for how to improve your conversational Spanish as a whole, but I think there are a variety of other options beyond just attending a Spanish-speaking church and hiring a private tutor. There are potentially local classes to take advantage of (lots of developed areas have adult/community education and learning a foreign language is one of the most popular offerings at those continuing education organizations), apps on your phone (Duolingo or Babbel, for example), independent study courses (Rosetta Stone), and a wide variety of other immersion activities. Church is a great one, but I've also heard of people having success with watching television with the Spanish language and/or subtitle option enabled, and placing yourself in other immersive environments such as conversational groups (especially with the prevalence of Spanish, you can often find a small group of both Spanish and English speakers willing to converse on a regular basis to develop the language skills of both).


*Train* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this item itself. It was well-organized, and detailed enough to give the reader a clear picture of the steps you've taken to try to learn Spanish. While a private tutor is an excellent (albeit expensive) option, I think there are some other opportunities still available to you as well. Whichever one you choose, I wish you the best of luck in learning to speak Spanish! Language skills are definitely some of the most useful skills you can have. *Smile*


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Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Unknown Icarus

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*Firework* Positives

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought the imagery was excellent, and the reminder of how powerful and comforting the rain can be is a really poignant one. As someone who has always loved the rain, I feel like you really captured what it is I love most about that kind of weather and what is has the potential to accomplish. Nice work!


*Firework* Suggestions

I don't have any suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I really enjoyed this poem and thought you did a great job with it. Well done!


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Review of Even Now  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Whitney

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*Firework* Positives

You did a great job with this prose. You effectively captured the emotions of longing and love. I thought the piece was simple, effective, and elegant. I particularly liked the way you structured each paragraph to start with the word "she", which was bookended by paragraphs that started "even now" at the beginning and end. That symmetry was really effective.


*Firework* Suggestions

No particular suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I really enjoyed this piece. Nice work!


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Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Vaish

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*Firework* Positives

I thought you did a good job articulating a definition of what success means to you. I appreciated how you steered the reader away from some of the common pitfalls of perceived success, such as measuring yourself against the success of others and depending external validators rather than your own metrics.


*Firework* Suggestions

While I think this is a good top-level look at the general concept of success, I think there's a lot more about the topic of success that was left unsaid. For example, while general success (e.g., in terms of whether you have a happy life, or enough money to make a living, etc.) is covered here, I think there are more specific types of success (e.g., achieving a very specific, limited-in-scope goal... or expanding into a domain you aren't currently familiar with) for which just advising people to "explore" and "engage in tasks that are within your reach and you feel confident about" could actually be detrimental to one's success.

For example, if I'm someone who is extremely overweight and trying to lead a healthier lifestyle, there might necessarily be some aspects of a diet and weight loss regimen which are uncomfortable and outside one's initial reach. Similarly, someone who dreams of one day being an astronaut, or becoming an Olympic athlete, or a surgeon would most likely have moments where they're not confident in their abilities, and might be coming from a place where that ultimate goal is (at least initially) well outside their reach.

If you were to ever look at expanding this piece, I would recommend augmenting it with advice to address different types of success (or success and different types of things) rather than just one particular general philosophy.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this essay, and offered some solid advice to the reader about not letting success be defined by what the world says you should do or be. Nice work! *Smile*


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Review of The Long Walk  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi phoenixrises

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*Firework* Positives

Overall, I really enjoyed this item. Having lost a few really important people in my life myself, I definitely empathized with your experience and your perspective. Nice work!


*Firework* Suggestions

The only two suggestions that I have are technical ones. About partway through the item the font size changes and gets noticeably bigger, and there's also a large amount of white space between the end of your item and the bottom of the page. I'd recommend deleting that extra space, and finding a uniform font size (I actually prefer the larger one for readability). Other than that, I thought you did a great job!


*Firework* Overall

I thought you did a great job with this item!


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Review of A Traitors' Tale  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi Epic Fail

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*Firework* Positives

I really enjoyed this poem. I'm a big fan of alliteration and I think you used that literary device to great effect in this poem. It made the piece read with a quick, staccato rhythm that I think really worked well with the subject matter.


*Firework* Suggestions

I can't think of any suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!


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Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Adherennium Dr of Phoolishness

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*Firework* Positives

I enjoyed this essay on the topic of retail and main shopping areas in metropolitan areas. I thought you laid out your position well, and illustrated it with effective statistics and details that kept the reader's interest.


*Firework* Suggestions

No particular suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a really solid job with this essay. It was a quick, easy, and informative read. Well done!


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Review of Midnight Light  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Dec-of-Glory

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*Firework* Positives

I enjoyed the structure and pacing of this piece. I thought both really accentuated the themes of this poem and you did a great job of putting everything together into an appealing, well-organized piece. Nice work!


*Firework* Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job. Well done! *Smile*


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Review of Homesick  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi ~Camrin~

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*Firework* Positives

I thought this was a well-written and thought-provoking piece of writing. The periodic questions you pose to the reader in the poem helps keep the reader engaged and contemplating throughout the reading experience. I also thought the second person point of view was a good choice for this type of item.


*Firework* Suggestions

No specific suggestions come to mind.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this poem. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Soul sister

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*Firework* Positives

I liked the overall message of this letter. You did a great job of covering the basics of how one goes about achieving salvation from a Christian theological standpoint, and emphasizing some clear steps that individuals can take to accept Jesus.


*Firework* Suggestions

In my experience, just telling people that they are sinners and in need of repentance is a difficult way to reach the lost. Given the brevity of this piece, I think it would be better to focus on why Jesus is worth following or learning more about. Getting someone to accept (or even see) their own faults can be really complicated and, while this piece may speak to those who know they fall short, it might have a difficult time reaching those who think they're already good people and don't have a need for salvation.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I enjoyed the read and thought you did a great job with this letter. Nice work!


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Jeff
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