I enjoyed this haiku chain. I thought you did a great job with the structure and the imagery; each haiku was evocative and stood alone, but all three worked together as a cohesive piece as well. Nice work!

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Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought the structure and pacing was good, and the sentiment behind the words was excellent. I like that you were able to make your point in a succinct and clear way. Nice job!

There were a couple of lines where the rhyme scheme was a little imperfect (smoke/ghost and jokes/broke) that caused a bit of a hitch in the flow of reading this piece.

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!

I really enjoyed this Dear Me entry. I thought you did a great job of looking at specific goals with things like your writing, then applying then to a larger goals about taking care of yourself and how you live your life in general. It was a great read!

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Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!

I like the worldbuilding and the detail in this piece. In only a few short paragraphs, you were able to paint a really vivid picture of the journey the character is on. Nice work!

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Overall, I think you did a good job with this piece. Well done!

I'm not familiar with this form of poetry, but I appreciated the fact that you put an explainer about the form in the piece. I thought you did a good job adhering to the form, and the imagery was excellent. Well done!

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Overall, I thought you did a good job with this poem. Nice work!

I thought you did a good job with this story. The detail and description was well done and the setting was easy to imagine. Nice work!

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Overall, I thought this piece was entertaining and engaging. Well done!

I liked the brevity of the piece and the amount of imagery that you were able to fit into so few words. It was short, to the point, and evocative. Nice work!

For me, the later part of the piece felt a little ambiguous. I would have loved just a little more to paint a more specific, vivid indication of what you want to leave the reader with.

Overall, I enjoyed the read. Well done!

I really enjoyed the staccato rhythm of this piece. I thought the structure was really effective, and accentuated the theme of the piece that reinforces the narrator is a scrappy personality who is persevering.

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Overall, I think you did a great job with this piece. Well done!

I thought you did a good job depicting the setting of an emergency room. As someone who's made a few visits to the ER myself, I thought you did a great job with the description in so few words. I also like the twist at the end, which was unexpected. Nice work!

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Overall, I enjoyed reading this piece. Well done!

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought you did a great job illustrating a struggle that I think a lot of people have, wondering when the people we care about realize we're flawed and just as human as anyone else. Well done!

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Overall, I think you did a great job with this piece. Nice work!

I enjoyed this piece. I thought a lot of the questions that are posed are intriguing and really challenge the reader to think. It was an intriguing read. Well done!

I think the piece could have benefitted from a bit more variance in the line construction (perhaps longer and shorter questions) for the sake of variety, but that's a relatively small quibble with an otherwise compelling piece.

Overall, I enjoyed the read. Nice work!

I thought you did a great job with the characterization and relationships in this story. The reader really gets to know who these characters are and effortlessly follows along as their attraction builds. Well done!

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Overall, I really enjoyed this read. Nice job!

I thought you did a good job working all of the prompts into the story. That's not easy to do in a piece this short!

It's unclear what the implication is of why Dafny's bikini turned brown after last year's plunge. Is the river that dirty? Is there another reason? I think some clarification is needed.

Overall, I enjoyed the read. Nice work!

I enjoyed reading this item. I thought you did a great job capturing the emotion and sense of import of being a printer in the day and age where the words being shared with the public were so resonant. Nice work!

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Overall, I thought you did a good job on this piece. Well done!

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought the structure was great, and you did a good job with the imagery. It was an entertaining read.

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Overall, I thought you did a good job with this poem. Nicely done!

I thought you did a good job of capturing the essence of a summer childhood experience. The detail was excellent, and the structure moved things along nicely. Well done!

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Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Nice work!

I enjoyed reading this item. I thought the dialogue from the kids was engaging and realistic, and the way Randel handled their questions at the end was both inventive and entertaining. Nice work!

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Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!

I really enjoyed this piece. I thought you did a great job capturing moments and imagery in this, and it was well structured and efficiently paced. Nice work!

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Overall, I enjoyed reading this poem and getting to know a little more about your childhood. Good job!

I thought you did a good job with this poem. I particularly like the imagery and the structure of the piece, creating a vivid picture that flowed well and was easy to follow along with. Well done!

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Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Nice work!

This was definitely a thought-provoking entry. The vision you lay out for a potential future is full of interesting details that make the reader want to know more.

While there's certainly nothing wrong with a piece that paints a broad brush, I think you were specific enough with some of your hopes/predictions for the future that it would have been beneficial to have a little more detail about how you think those things will be specifically accomplished, since they are such a departure from the status quo.

Overall, I enjoyed the read. Nice work!