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I believe in constructive criticism and honesty. I can adapt my review style to fit the kind of feedback an author is looking for (e.g., developmental suggestions, fine-tuning, proofreading, etc.), but will always try to be as encouraging and helpful as possible.
I'm good at...
Plotting, characterization, dialogue, structure/pacing, and professional considerations. I can also do serviceable technical editing/proofreading, but I'm much better with developmental/creative feedback.
Favorite Genres
I read almost everything. I particularly love genre fiction (mystery/thriller and science fiction/fantasy especially) and nonfiction of all kinds.
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Positives

I really enjoyed your item. I thought it was a great reminder of how important memories are to us, and how devastating it can be to suffer from an affliction like Alzheimer's which steals those memories. Nice work!


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No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I like the positive message you convey in this piece, about being fiscally responsible and finding value in the simple things. You did a great job of including just enough details to paint a vivid picture without weighing down the narrative.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I think you did a great job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Positives

I really enjoyed the detail and description in this piece. The interactions between the characters were natural and flowed well, and contrasted nicely with the vivid description. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, this was a very entertaining read. Nice work!


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Review of Mystic Eyes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Positives

I really enjoyed the imagery in this piece. I thought you did a great job conveying some really vivid details in comparatively few works. Nice job!


Suggestions

Some of the lines felt like they went on a little long, with multiple pauses and sections, which gave the structure a bit of a run-on feel at times. If you were looking to revise this piece, you might want to play around with the line breaks a little to experiment with different structures and pacing.


Overall

Overall, this was an enjoyable read and you're off to a great start with it. Well done!


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Review of Inattentive ADD  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I thought you did a great job of capturing the emotions of the situation in this poem. My wife works with students who have special needs and from what she's told me, this seems like a really accurate and vivid explanation for the experiences of someone with inattentive-type ADHD. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!


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Review of One For The Road  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Positives

I liked the setup for the piece. It was quick and to the point, and easily established the potential for a much larger story.


Suggestions

Ultimately, the setup is the only thing presented in this piece, and I was hoping for a little more about what happens after the characters introduce themselves to one another. The story that comes from this setup hasn't been told yet, and I'd love to see where it goes.


Overall

Overall, I thought this was a good intro to a larger story.


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Review of Publication  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Positives

I enjoyed reading this item detailing your thoughts on writing versus writing for publication. I think it's important that writers are able to distinguish between writing for themselves and writing for an audience, and being okay with the fact that some of their writings are one or the other, but not both.


Suggestions

I don't have any specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. It was short, but to the point and articulate. Well done!


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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Positives

This poem was short and simple, but packed a punch. I particularly liked the structure and the way you ended the last two stanzas with questions for the reader. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!


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Review of When She Cries  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Positives

I really liked the structure and the story you tell in this piece. I can definitely imagine it being set to music and being a really impactful song. Nice job!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed the read and thought you did a good job with these song lyrics. Well done!


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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Positives

I thought this was a sweet, short poem about the boy you first loved. The structure was excellent and it was a quick, easy read. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed the read and thought you did a great job with it. Well done!


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Review of Nurse not there  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Positives

I really liked the surprise twist at the end of this story. It caught me off-guard and definitely kept me thinking about the story even after it was over.


Suggestions

I think a thorough proofread would help round out the piece a little, as there were several spelling/grammatical errors. I also think the ending would be just a little bit stronger if you ended on the "we don't have any male nurses on this floor" line as the very last line, rather then the penultimate line with an additional bit of dialogue after it.


Overall

Overall, this was an entertaining read. Nice job!


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Review of Dear God  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I liked the structure and organization of this piece. In addition to a poem, it feels like it was almost structured as a mantra or a prayer that could be repeated daily or whenever the reader needs a reminder of what God is capable of. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought this was a good piece. Well done!


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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Positives

I really like the message of this piece. I think too many people are concerned with never making mistakes or being perfect, and the lesson you present at the end, of using mistakes as a source of wisdom and learning something from them is a lesson we should all take to heart when things don't quite go according to plan. We often learn more from our mistakes than we do from the things we do right!


Suggestions

From a technical standpoint, the piece felt a little unfocused. It starts with an anecdote about brushing your teeth with pain gel rather than toothpaste and missing a train (i.e., an unfortunate but relatively innocuous circumstance), and then specifically say that "making mistakes might be one of your strengths."

But the examples that come after (not telling your mother that you got in trouble at school and then losing your passport on an international trip) where the lessons learned are kind of very quickly summarized at the end as "don't blindside people" and "own your mistakes." While the overall point of the piece (embrace your mistakes and learn from them) is well-taken, it felt like a common throughline to these mistakes was missing, which led to the disjointed feeling where the theme of the piece is clear, but it's less clear how these three mistakes specifically tie together and why you chose them instead of other more thematically connective mistakes.


Overall

Overall, I think you're off to a good start here. You include a bit of humor to offset the serious tone of some of the concerns, and your writing style is casual and friendly. I think there's some room for refinement, but otherwise this was a very enjoyable read. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

Nice job on this poem. I thought the message was great, and you structured everything really well. It was a solid read. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I liked this piece a lot, and thought you did a good job with it. Well done!


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Review of Loneliness  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I really enjoyed the imagery in this piece. I thought you did a great job painting a vivid picture in each stanza, with each stanza contributing to the larger whole. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
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Positives

I think you have a good setup for a story here. The palace intrigue about how the "evil queen" character comes into powerful is interesting and a great lead-in to a story proper.


Suggestions

Some of the details of Naomi's reasoning (and the kingdom's rules) are a little unclear. Why does Nathaniel have to die in order for Naomi to take power? It's just kind of assumed that Nathaniel has to die in order for her to gain the throne, but most monarchies in the world have processes for abdication (or other disposition of the throne) and entire succession plans built around who the next person in line would be to the throne. It felt a bit like the mechanics of how Naomi took the throne weren't fully developed... and it could be as easy a fix as Naomi just not wanting any option other than Nathaniel's death. Maybe he offers to abdicate but she says she doesn't want any loose ends out in the world or something like that?

I think the fact that Nathaniel still wants out of the responsibility after his parents' deaths is what makes this difficult. It would almost make more sense for him to take his obligations as the new king seriously (to honor his parents), and then, when Naomi threatens him, he refuses to abdicate, so then Naomi feels like she has to kill him.


Overall

Overall, I think you're off to a good start with this story. Nice job!


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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Positives

This was an an interesting set of observations on the younger generation. I enjoyed the fact that you reveal at the end that you're very specifically talking about your kids as representatives of their generation, and not generalizing about the entire population.


Suggestions

You might want to consider adding secondary and even third-level genres to this piece so it's not just listed as a "holiday" piece. While the holidays are referenced in the piece, it's very clearly not about the holidays, so it might get more traction if it was also categorized as Political, Relationships, Personal, etc.


Overall

Overall, this was an entertaining read. Nice job!


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Review of Who am I?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I like the disjointed feeling of reading this poem; I think you did a great job using the structure to reflect the sentiment trying to be expressed.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. I always enjoy it when a poem's form also enhances its function, and you did that really well. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I really enjoy this form of poetry, and I think you did a good job fitting a complete sentiment inside a very restrictive form. It's not easy to manipulate a form this specific. Nice work!


Suggestions

No suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I think you did a great job with this piece. Well done!


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Positives

I thought the language and the visual imagery in this piece was really impressive. Your use of detail painted a vibrant picture for the reader despite the brevity of the piece. Nice job!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this item. Well done!


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Review of Nosy Peek  Open in new Window.
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Positives

This was a short, entertaining piece. I thought you did a great job with the structure, and capturing the fun of visiting someone's port here on WdC.


Suggestions

Given the breadth of material people are writing about here on the site, I think you could easily expand the content of this piece and find rhymes for checking people's ports for stories, poems, etc.


Overall

Overall, this was a great piece. Nicely done!


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Review of In Her Dreams  Open in new Window.
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Positives

I really enjoyed the amount of story you were able to fit into a story of less than 500 words. Especially toward the end, you managed to tell a lot of narrative in a short span of time.


Suggestions

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Overall

Overall, I thought this was a good piece. Well done!


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Review of Shopping Horror  Open in new Window.
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Positives

I thought this was a fun, lighthearted piece that was quite enjoyable to read. I can't say I share the same affinity for shopping that you do, but your passion for the pastime definitely shines through in this piece. Well done!


Suggestions

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Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Nice job!


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Positives

I loved the twist at the end of this flash fiction story. You did a great job conveying a compelling story in just a couple hundred words, which is not easy to do. Well done!


Suggestions

The narrative where the protagonist seemed to be having an inner monologue with the reader in the first paragraph (where he wonders if the psychiatrist thinks he's even crazier than he himself does, and then the protagonist calmly discusses believing in vampires) undercuts the emotion of the rest of the piece, where the protagonist is fired up about this issue and borderline irrational. I would stick to one or the other (either logical or irrational) to avoid conflicting messaging in the story.


Overall

Overall, this was a short, fun read. Nice work!


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Positives

The characterization in this story was excellent; you really captured a lot of personality and nuance in a fairly short narrative. Nicely done!


Suggestions

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Overall

I'm sorry to hear about the passing of Purdy so shortly after this piece was written, but I think it's a lovely tribute to her. Great job!


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