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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
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Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
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stream of consciousness
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Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review of Levirate  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

In some cultures, it is common for brothers to share a wife:
https://youtu.be/d4yjrDSvze0

Franky, I don't think the narrator truly loves Sally. He thinks of her as an object rather than a person. He never once considers what she wants.
“Love is that condition in which the happiness of another person is essential to your own.”
― Robert A. Heinlein

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Review of price  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This poem provides a lot of food for thought. However, the "terrible life" at the end seems far too open to interpretation.

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Review of People  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

As my dad says, "One monkey is no monkey." This is a great tip for making friends!

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very informative article. I don't live anywhere near Ghana, but it is good to know what is going on in the world.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an interesting story. It's heartwarming how he was reunited with his dog.

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Review of PopRocks  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! It says a lot about the characters in only a few words.

Formatting tip: when writing on the internet, add a blank line between paragraphs. It's standard practice and easier on the eyes. Indentation is used in books for economy of paper, but since paper is not an issue on the internet, we use an extra line.

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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Thanks for requesting my review!

I love the writing style of combining first and second person. It's a great way to explore deeply personal emotions. Soramimi Hanarejima also does that, and you can find his books on Amazon.

I would consider the narrator to be more of a stalker than a run-of-the-mill incel. While I'm sure that some incels fixate on one particular prospect, others get frustrated with females as a whole. As a female myself, I can see where they are coming from.

As females grow up, we are taught that we will be ostracized for having sex with too many partners. In some communities, even one partner before marriage is too many. When a man smooth-talks a woman's pants off and dumps her shortly thereafter, she often feels shame/guilt over the experience. Now, females are talking (and singing) about how they are happy without a man, likely after a bad experience with one:
https://youtu.be/CMla2ZIz7-4
https://youtu.be/QYh6mYIJG2Y

This leads to an imbalance in available sexual partners to those who want them.

We are social animals, and I don't believe that anyone is truly happy alone. I believe that reducing the shame females feel over sex can make society a happier place for everyone.

Some woke people are focusing on "teach men not to rape" as a solution, but that doesn't solve the issue of male loneliness. If males can trick themselves into being happy without a partner the way females have, that might help to some extent, but I don't think most males have the mental fortitude to do this. Science has shown that men generally have lower emotional intelligence than women: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sex_differences_in_e...
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I recommend organizing your writing into shorter paragraphs for easier reading.

I also recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You did an excellent job setting the scene and jumping into the action at the same time.

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

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Review of His Amber Eyes  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I've never heard of using antiperspirant for cleaning a wound, but I guess you've gotta use whatever is available. Did you mean disinfectant, though?

The emotions of the characters are great!

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is not a personal fetish of mine, but I am glad you are writing about what inspires you!

My baby doesn't use bottles. He drinks milk directly from my nipples.

We don't use baby powder, either. When he was first born, we used a thing called "butt paste" to prevent diaper rash, but then we started doing elimination communication and holding him over his potty every time we saw that he needed to poop. Sometimes, we don't pay enough attention, and he still goes in the diaper, but then we clean him up right away, so there's no more need for the butt paste. Here's a little more information on elimination communication:
https://youtu.be/qKkdTezOH0E

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Review of Words.  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Review of The house  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was an interesting story with a solid lesson. Great job!

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a cute story. I particularly liked the part about the cats drinking milk.

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Review of Forgotten  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

When my grandmother was still alive, I always loved listening to her stories. I know my parents have some great stories to tell my son when he's old enough to appreciate them.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

Formatting tip: when writing on the internet, add a blank line between paragraphs. It's standard practice and easier on the eyes. Indentation is used in books for economy of paper, but since paper is not an issue on the internet, we use an extra line.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Anxiety  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a lovely story. I like the unique premise, and the characters are delightful.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Lilac Rose  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great little story. I'm glad Lilac Rose found her place in the world :)

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Review of The Life Stream  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a lovely piece. It provides a lot of food for thought and flows almost like a poem.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The ugly hug  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me of a book our teacher read to us in elementary school. The moral of the story was that nobody really wants to be perfect, because being perfect is boring.

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Review of An easy mistake  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is so cute. It reminds me of a female classmate I had who was named Brooke with a silent e.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great story. Breaking toys is part of every childhood. I certainly remember breaking some of my favorites. I'm sure I will watch my son break numerous toys as he grows up.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

My husband, my parents, and I have all been vaccinated, but my husband's parents and some of our friends have chosen not to get vaccinated, even though the vaccine is freely available to them. Since our baby is not yet eligible for vaccination, and we know we can become carriers even though we are vaccinated, we are avoiding all in-person social interactions until we get our baby fully vaccinated. We hope that my milk will give our baby some immunity, but we are not counting on it.

What we are counting on is that a significant portion of the population will be irresponsible and continue spreading the disease. My cousin's child caught COVID-19, and her ex-husband dropped the child off at school instead of watching the child at home as he was requested to do. There's a reason that man is her ex.

I'm thankful that my baby is not yet old enough for us to be tempted to send him to school. If he was old enough, I'd like to think that I would have the fortitude to homeschool him while working from home at the same time. Then again, I get to work at my own pace and set my own deadlines. I don't envy single mothers and other families that have to send their children into dangerous situations so the adults can make enough money to pay basic bills.

"Story proceeds underneath promotion" is in this article, but there is no actual promotion here.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review of warui Yoru  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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