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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Writing is like a muscle, so keep working it out, and I'm sure you will be able to carry a full story someday.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of My inner demon  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. I like the level of self-awareness.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

As my dad says, "One monkey is no monkey." Being around people we trust is important, but so is alone time. Every day, I find that I need breaks from my baby and my husband to do things that make sense to me.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I will not comment on the grammar.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review of (untitled)  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me of something a passerby said to me many years ago when I was seated outside a cafe: "You're a monkey in a dream."

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Moving On  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things can help you process your feelings.

I recommend organizing your writing into shorter paragraphs for easier reading.

Moving is always a challenge. We had an in-town move when my baby was three months old, and my husband did most of the packing because I was breastfeeding and holding our baby most of the time. I did what I could to help, and I couldn't imagine doing all that on my own.

Part of me looks forward to the teenage years, and part of me dreads them. I think my parents did an amazing job raising me, so I'm going to try and follow their example as much as possible.

Tres has a point about the shampoos. It is a good idea to look at what other households are doing and use their strategies, or at least consider them. What is done in other households may not work for you, but it's important to understand why. Personally, I find that making my own soaps and shampoos is a lot of fun. Those things make great gifts, too. I never have to worry about what to get people for Christmas because they always love my soaps. Perhaps your daughter might enjoy making her own shampoo. Bulk Apothecary is a good place to order unscented shampoo base and scents that can be mixed in. Perhaps she would use less shampoo if it was more strongly scented, and if she's mixing it herself, she can control how much scent goes into the shampoo.

Of course, that's just one idea, and there could be any number of reasons why it wouldn't work for your household, but if it does, it could be a fun way for your daughter to express her creativity.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of On Happenings  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Indeed, this happening has affected everyone on the planet in one way or another, and it keeps happening because some people can't keep it in their masks.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Images in green  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

My first piece on here was also a grief piece. I'm sorry for your loss. Writing is a great way to process emotions.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Dreaming  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is great advice. Dreaming makes us who we are and is something to take pride in, especially when people have tried to squash our dreams along the way.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is quite a unique concept.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as is, are, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Unelm  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I will not comment on the grammar.

This gives me a very hopeful and soothing feeling.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This poem makes this man sound strangely alluring. However, it sounds like this is describing an emotionally abusive relationship.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of A Love From Afar  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a lovely concept. I think this is a great way to express how people feel anxiety in a way children can understand.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The fattening  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is not a personal fetish of mine, but I am glad you are writing about what inspires you.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of To Look(DRAFT)  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This sounds intriguing, but I can't quite tell what's going on. Aside from the side effect, what was the benefit of the drops? What are brain and heart boxes?

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of English Club  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I will not comment on the grammar. This is a good start. You have introduced the characters, though not much is happening yet.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

Good to know pregnant and lactating women should not do this. I'm currently lactating and plan to continue for at least another year or two. Then, I'm planning to try for another baby and lactate for another 2-3 years, so it will be a long time before I can undergo a procedure such as this. I'll keep it in mind, though.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a beautiful piece. It brings back memories of dancing at a certain place during my university years.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thanks for the intriguing journey.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very informative piece, though I do have one small quibble. My boyfriend died in a traffic collision in 2015, and this is a clip from his favorite movie:
https://youtu.be/puK5CwThaq4

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. I feel that home is wherever my loved ones are, but then again, I have never felt I didn't have loved ones to rely on.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great introduction, but it could use more action.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

It sounds clean to me, but then again, I listened to it through tts, so I might have missed something.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of You never cared!  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

I like wolves, too.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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