This was a fun one. It definitely fits well with a Thanksgiving theme. I definitely recommend sharing this in November. I enjoyed reading this. The couplet rhyming pattern worked well and the rhythm was very smooth. The plot of this poem made me smile as the turkey did his best to avoid the typical Thanksgiving outcome but seemed to fail at every turn. I cringed a little bit at the farmer approached the turkey holding the ax and then burst into laughter as the twist was revealed. It was a great ending and a Perfect Poem!
This is Great Poem that showcases that a symbol can represent a lot. The Seventh U.S. Army patch clearly has a lot of meaning behind it. I like the way that each color is given a specific meaning in this and all of them are shown to be important. There is some great visual imagery with raindrops, sunbeams, the mountains and the sky. There are also some powerful ideas that come across as you read this. You get a good sense of what the soldiers who earned this badge needed to go through to obtain it and the the reader walks away with a lot more respect for them.
Good Poem. I like the flow. It read very smoothly and was set up very well. With the questions being posed to the readers in three of the stanzas...there seemed to be a really good rhythm to them. My favorite segments though were the second and third stanzas of this. I liked how the words circled around i.e. (Fear leads to Fear, hate leads to hate etc). There was also a really great alliteration in Fear fosters anger. It was an interesting choice to cut the the question in the second to last stanza. It almost as if it displays a sense of exasperation on the part of the narrator that he/she couldn't finish their thought. I also like the change from the change from the question in the beginning vs the questions towards the end. In the beginning the questions being ask are about behaviors we could chance and at the end the questions are about behaviors we should aspire to. Well done
There is some great descriptive imagery in this poem. From the dark skies changing to brilliant blue as the rain passes. Readers are able to visualize the change as the poem progresses. That is not the only change the poem describes as the spirit and soul seem to adapt and grow with the Rain as well. I like that the author makes the connection that rain is a source of life. That acknowledgment allows readers to grow and change as they read this poem as well and end with a greater appreciation of the rain and some learning on their end too
I could visualize being in an busy airport when reading this. Filled with people of all sorts; Different countries, races, looks and outfits. This poem reflects just how much covid has changed our lives as how people are wearing their masks becomes a distinguishing characteristic for people visiting the airport
I think the strength of this poem is its description and word choice. I was able to picture the people in the poem very well from they were written out There is a gentle rhyme scheme for most of this poem with the 1st and 3rd lines of every stanza rhyming making it fun to read through. I liked reading this!
Neat poem. This is my first time hearing about Tetractys poetry form. I like the little bit of wordplay used with the title. Pretty creative to make a Tetris themed Teractys. If you really wanted to add another level to the title... you should have have made this one four stanzas. As a Tetris fan I think you certainly captured the essence of the game... the fast pace, the goal and the way the pieces are adjusted. The second half of the poem in particular made me feel like I was in the middle of a Tetris game as the stack got higher and the game got faster. Very Well done!!
Wow... this was a powerful poem. I like the way it personifies a Tsunami. You can feel the tension as the each syllable of the name is quietly whispered. There are also some great visual descriptions depicting the devastating power of the narrator. They hit with destructive force much like the type of tidal wave itself. There is also a nice bit of contrast at the end where the Tsunami is described as having its thirst quenched. It was definitely a thought provoking juxtaposition. Very well written!
I liked this poem. There is some great visual imagery. I love the image of the lightning bugs in the first stanza. The same with the Hummingbirds and Bees and breeze dancing with the moonflowers. Some beautiful images to imagine. The second stanza is amazing as well. When I think of blue light and the times described, I picture the time of day to be twilight. I liked the flow of this poem. The rhyme scheme was an interesting mix abab in the first line followed by cccc for the second stanza and dada for the third. It blended nicely.
This poem depicts the aspects of Solitude really well. There are some great contrasting images throughout this. For example the way the last couplet compares silence with the potential of a violent storm or the thrill of night with Angel Light in the fourth couplet. One of the great ideas conveyed in this work is to take pride in solitude. Often solitude is looked as something unpleasant but this poem turns that on its head. In terms of flow... this poem flows really smoothly with a great set of rhymes to read through. I enjoyed going through this very much.
This is a great poem. You really capture the essence of a predator perfectly. You can feel the fierceness of the predators described. It contrasts very well with the viewpoint given of the prey in this poem. The night setting is beautifully described. I am really impressed with how the rhyme scheme was done for this one with an all A setup. This pacing of the poem is face paced as the reader goes through each line very quickly and feels a sense of excitement reading it. It was a lot of fun to go through. Thank you for writing it!
This poem captures the importance of water perfectly and draws attention to the value of the commodity. It is interesting to think how water could be taken for granted as the first part of this poem discusses. The best segment of this poem for me was the third stanza where the reader is given a great description Women and Men, old and Young watching the sky for rain. The mention of the Rajasthan as a desert also provides a powerful visual image. It is structured well with a nice set of rhymes going allowing this poem to flow smoothly. Great Sonnet!
Great Poem. I love the cover image. The animals chosen for this poem are two really beautiful sets of animals. I really like the imagery that you are using depicting these creatures flying against the Azure sky. It is a very interesting comparison listing these two animals together and I like how you connect what they have in common.
I love the last stanza. You have a great description of the two animals wings. The hummingbird's rippling features contrast against the butterfly's tattooed wings nicely. It also ends with a great visual image of the two animals eating side by side happily. Nice writing!
Sweet song. I liked the accompanying story. It definitely captures the feeling of a person looking back and remembering the past. At the same time there is a nice contrast with the lead's youngest granddaughter getting married. The grandmother attending an event where her families future is in many ways just beginning makes the look back all the more poignant. The tone of the story fit the song in the video really nicely.
I'm a former teacher so there's a lot of props to you for being able to come up with 3-4 hour lesson. I've taught two hour classes and found it changing to pace the material evenly enough to fill the time span effective. I can relate to having to adapt the timing of your lessons. It really does take some scrambling to adjust the pace of your lessons. Your entry is written well and it is very nice to read through. Of course my favorite part was the strikethrough of Dorothy. It made smile. Great writing.
This is nice. There are some great descriptions and we get some strong contrasting imagery when describing the type of darkness that the author/narrator appreciates. Throughout this work darkness is seen as something that allows a person to appreciate the light at a particular moment and we get a lot of nice examples where light and darkness complement each other to provide a beautiful scene (an oil lamp, sunsets, a wood stove burning, stars and fireworks at night).
There is a lot of jumping around between each scene as this essay follows the narrator's thoughts/experiences from childhood to adulthood but the strong description allows a reader to picture what is going on in each moment. I could visualize the room she grew up in and how it changed upon redecorating, the summer home and the funeral. The vivid description really pulled the reader into each separate scene.
The title and description for this work was also a good hook drawing in readers and making them wonder the appeal of darkness. It pulled them straight into this story. It is a very well written piece!
Great Entry for the Banana Bar. I liked the story that you set up for Andre's musical instrument choice and the background behind getting to know the character. The first person point of view is a great choice and it makes the reader feel like they are getting to know Andre along with the Narrator.
There are some very very nice subtle comedic touches to this entry that I really liked. My favorites were the pop up note for Juli Ard [sic] and how Andre had to work his way up from the Late Late Late Late show. It was a lot of fun to read.
Nice Madlib. The song is easily recognizable. You have an idea of what you are changing as you attempt this but it still didn't work out like I pictured completely. I chose my cellphone as the object of choice. It produced some wild results. My question for what you wonder about produced was off. I phrased it badly and got "I wonder How Shiny it is?" It was very fun to try this. I'm sure people will really enjoy this. Thank you for making this.
This poem was a nice blend of astronomy and romance. I was visualizing the night sky and constellations as I was reading this. All of which were described beautifully. This soul mates in this are shown to have a powerful connection with cosmic forces uniting them. It is a really good read.
I've been reviewing a lot of Valentine's Day works as part of a challenge so it is a little refreshing to read a Valentine's Day themed poem that where there the narrator isn't blissfully in love throughout. Smashing Chocolates is certainly a fun way to work out aggression towards a holiday. This had a nice balance because it wasn't completely dark. The narrator still had good friend to spend Valentine's day with. It was fun to read.
Sweet story. The are some great descriptions in this. I could picture the wild atmosphere of the bar on Valentine's day really well and visualize how attractive the girl the narrator meets. The titular kiss was intense and described beautifully. I really enjoyed reading this very much.
Great Poem! It had a nice flow to it and the rhymes made it fun to follow. I love the descriptions and it is very sweet. I really relate to to the idea that a person can make your heart beat faster with a smile even if you've known them for a long time. It shows a very strong attraction and the author/narrator is lucky to have that type of love in his life.
This was a nice poem. I haven't found a lot of comedy poems on this site lately so this was really fun to read. You capture the experience of slipping on Ice perfectly. Ouch! The emotions and reactions sound about right. ^_^;
I was smiling and laughing throughout reading this but I cracked up the most at the "Where's Global Warming" line.
In terms of style ... it flows very nicely and the rhyme in this made it all the more fun to read. Thank you very much for writing.
This story was an exciting read. I tried Flash Fiction earlier this week so I know its quite a challenge to convey an entire story in a short amount of words. You did an excellent job. It reminded me of a Twilight Zone episode where characters come face to face with bizarre twists and the unexpected. The strongest elements of this story was conveying the tense atmosphere and Sam's emotions to the reader. It definitely works extremely well as a Thriller. Even when the events going on in the story are remain vague and mysterious, there's a sweetness to the ending that still comes across. Having Sam discover the shadowy character was the love of her life was a great way to close it out.
There is a good poem. There are a lot of emotions that rain can reflect that are shown here. It opens with a great verbal depiction for readers with the rain pouring down from dark clouds. Rain is often associated with sadness so the comparison of it being a teacher that helps the narrator of this poem embrace pain is a very interesting one. It was a powerful read. Thank you very much for writing.
I like the Zombie Genre and this setup lays the groundwork for an exciting story. The character profiles at the beginning was a great way to introduce characters to the reader and they are well developed. Readers get a sense of each characters personality and traits just by reading them.
The story segment reminded me of earlier seasons of the Walking Dead where each character had their own motivations and when they would interact with a new character there would be conflict between characters that were untrusting against those that were more humane. So far a very exciting plot and I hope to read more of this storyline in the future.
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and how Andre had to work his way up from the Late Late Late Late show. 
It was very fun to try this. I'm sure people will really enjoy this. Thank you for making this.
