I thought you've done a wonderful job on this. I didn't find anything to make note of. I thought this was heartfelt and touching. I enjoyed reading it and I hope to read more of your work in the future.
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Now for your review....I thought this was perfect. You've done a wonderful job and I couldn't find a thing to make note of.
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Now for your review....I thought you've done a wonderful job with this piece. I couldn't find anything to make note of.
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Now for your review....I thought this was well done and heartfelt. I truly enjoyed reading this and I've made a few suggestions below. Remember this is your work and you are under no obligation to change your piece.
to explore eachother (each other)
during times that werent right (weren't)
never have i fallen so quickly (I)
his patience i denied all hope from (I)
to produce something words cant describe (can't)
as though theyll never separate (they'll)
we were made for eachother (each other)
where i belong (I)
i cant hide myself from him (I can't)
one i could solely accept (I)
where i feel his delicate touch (I)
but seeing me as i am (I)
i only care to return (I)
for all the mistakes i have made (I)
loving him isnt one of them (isn't)
I would also add some punctuation, capitalization where needed and maybe even break this down into small paragraphs. Now, remember this is simply my suggestions. You don't have to make any changes to your work that you don't agree with.
Wow! This was perfectly done. You did an excellent job and I found nothing to make note of. Your grammar and spelling were perfect and you punctuation is as it should be.
I hope to read more of your work in the future. Great Job!
I thought this was cute and interesting. It was nice to read and reminded me of my days in school and how I could become so bored throughout the day. I couldn't find anything wrong and I hope to read more of your work.
I thought you did a great job on this. You held my attention completely through and the only suggestion I can make is to make sure you have paragraph spacing and a line break in between lines where needed.
I thought you did a wonderful job and I can't wait to read more of your work.
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Now for your review....I thought this was perfect. You did a wonderful job and I couldn't find a thing to make note of. I hope to read more of your work in the future.
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Now for your review....I couldn't have rated this any other way. I thought it was perfect and a great letter to yourself. Congratulations on the new baby and I hope all is well.
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Now for your review....Thank you for sharing a little about yourself. I enjoyed reading this. My recommendation is just write what and when you can. If you want to write a screenplay today and write a novel tomorrow, then do so.
Also, I would recommend that all I's pertaining to yourself should be capitalized.
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Now for your review....I thought this was awesome. I'm glad you shared it and I wonder if it's true. If it is, thank you for sharing and if it's not...thank you still. I couldn't find a thing wrong to make note of and I hope to read more of your work in the future.
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Now for your review....I thought this was perfect. I truly enjoyed reading this and I hope to see more of your work in the future.
You captured my attention and held it to the end. I didn't find a thing wrong and I thought you did wonderfully. I think you could lengthen this if you chose to. I think it would make a great tale.
You're descriptions were great and I pictured everything perfectly. Great Job and I hope to read more of your work in the future.
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Now for your review....I loved this piece. I am a mother of three and found this to be heartfelt and touching. You did an excellent job.
I found one thing...You were my life line since i was born, (i should be capital)
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Now for your review....This was not a bad piece at all. I enjoyed reading it and did find one thing to make note of...
First, I would keep an eye on your paragraph spacing...some need to be added and maybe some removed. It just makes it a little harder to read and with this straightened out makes it look neater.
Remember this is simply my opinion and by no means are you under any obligation to make any changes to your work.
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Now for your review....A truly heartfelt piece. I have a daughter going away to college...although this won't be for another year, I know it's coming and it scares me every time I think about it to have her so far away.
I thought you did a wonderful job and I did make a couple of notes below. Please remember these are my suggestions and you are by no means under any obligation to make any changes to your work.
Spending time alone, missing her everyway (everyway should be two words)
Time with out her is anything but (with out should be one word)
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Now for your review....I thought you did a wonderful job on this piece and I couldn't find anything to make note of. I thought it was filled with heart ache and pain and to the point.
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Now for your review....I absolutely loved this. I thought it was terrific. I have been a single mom of two daughters, although same father, was here but absent at the same time. I know those feelings and now we've found the happiness we've waited for.
I did make note of one thing...
Atruth she has realized (I would put a space between a and truth)
Other than that, I thought it was perfect and I hope to read more of your work in the future.
I thought you did a great job with your descriptions and I could picture everything well. I enjoyed the tale you told and I think it could be expanded upon. Though this is completely up to you.
One note...
I would check the paragraph spacing and add one where it's needed. I've noticed numerous paragraphs are run together because of no space.
Very Interesting. You held my attention completely through. I didn't find anything to make note of here. Your grammar and spelling were great and the line spacing perfect.
I thought you did a wonderful job & very well written.
Very interesting! I captured my attention and held it completely through. I didn't find anything in spelling or grammar, but I did make one note below and remember it's completely up to you and you are under no obligation to take my suggestion.
I would go through and fix the paragraph spacing on some. Some need a space between the paragraphs and some of the spaces should be removed.
I have fallen into this folder and haven't been able to leave. Your writing is wonderful and I truly love everything I've read.
I have three children of my own...two daughters who are teenagers now and a little boy of 3. I read the words you wrote and I had to smile remembering those times when my little girls had done the same things.
I truly love that you wrote this, it's a beautiful tribute to those special memories that will soon fade away and replaced with new special moments in time. Hold on to them all, I know I have tried because as time goes by it's hard and hard to remember them all.
I'm so glad you shared this with us. It gives me something to think about and hope others will read. I hear the truth in your words and know that some don't realize until they grow older somethings aren't worth the time.
I'm glad you have as well and I hope you've found yourself.
Keep up the great writing!
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