you could add more frightening emotional imagery into this to really feel the sense of creatures from the undead!
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Second stanza
The word that is bolded is what you need to correct. That way they really know who is coming out to see them…
I would add some punctuation to this stanza. When you are reading it out loud, this just goes like there is not stop.
This way you can have some awesome imagery if you are descriptive with this stanza. Writing more about the werewolf and how frightful he is would be awesome…really give attention to what the werewolf is doing or what he looks like!
Third stanza
I love the imagery in this stanza. You have done a great job! I have to say the only problem I see is that you have no punctuation. This makes it hard to tell which part is the most exciting part! If it is the screams of horrors or the ghosts and ghouls in the circle of night? I think if you put some punctuation you will be able to let the imagery work better and stays
Fourth Stanza
I would rewrite the this stanza because it is pretty meek. You need to add more to this stanza to keep this readers attention. If you don’t the reader is not going to go on with the poem. You could turn the questions into a descriptive sentences. I am just again suggesting and nothing more.
Fifth Stanza
This stanzas makes you want to ask who is “They?” This again is meek and doesn’t keep the readers attention at all. Again this stanza needs some punctuation. This would really help the reader as they are reading. This becomes a run on sentence that is now something that is tiredsome to read.
Sixth Stanza
Again you have one “.” and all the sentences are running together. This has some great imagery with the creatures, moons, and food being gone. This really can make a great picture in your mind as you see the Halloween end.
Seventh Stanza
This is a great part and one of my favorites as you can see this as they are getting everything done for Halloween until Next year! Error wise there is nothing wrong!!
Best Parts of the Poem:
Screams of horror
fill the night air
as ghosties and ghoulies
circle the fair
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It's quiet and calm
and all is serene
so until next year
HAPPY HALLOWEEN!
Both of these stanzas show imagery through out for the reader to want to keep reading the poem. You can hear the screams in the night air! Ghosties and Ghoulies are out to play! I love how you transition to the end of Halloween, all the calmness and serene in the air!!!
Have a HAPPY HALLOWEEN!!
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