Kiya, You have came up with a great way to have others improve on their reviewing plus give feedback to newbies, oldies, and everyone else too! This is also great way to meet others who want to be angels to help others out! Since i am recording my reviews in here, I have noticed that I try to do atleast 6 a day. If i can get more, I am doing great. But I love reviewing to help others out!! As I love to get my feedback, so that I can improve on everything I need to do!! Keep On Coming up with ideas to help!! WDC must have thought you were helpful here too with your pretty blue case!!! I am glad to he part of the Angel Army!!!!
Sherri this is a wonderful poem for you mom at Christmas. I know how hard the holidays to be with out your love ones. I have been there, it is not cool. I love the imaagery in this poem. I cam see that you are thinking about your mother! I hope to read more in your port! Keep On Writing!
Kiya, You have came up with another way to have all the Angels come and have a great way to hang out and have fun!! You definitely deserve that wonderful awardicon for this. I have enjoyed being an angel and hanging out here too! I can wait to get to everyone of the Angels!!! Keep on Helping out WDC members!!!
This is a really cute story that is hilarious. I Really like the imagery that this paints as you are reading this with all the animals and the snow fight. I do see that you need to try to center the poem. As you are reading it, the lines do not go straight down. May have been from taking it from a word documnet and pasting it on to wdc format. I think that you have done a great job and hope that you keep on writing! Keep On Writing!!!
This is a great story. I love the descriptions through out the story. The imagery in this is awesome. I really love how Mary-lynn was able to to trust her Nanna with all her heart. Abby was able to feel at home at Marta house. I love how Mary-Lynn was told the proper story of Jesus and Santa Clause. I think that really brought Nanna and Mary-lynn closer as the story was told. I love how Mary-Lynn was so into the Christmas lights. I think that her climbing to the roof to see Santa added just the right touch of suspense. Then to come home to Nanna house with all the lights and Santa on their roof too made a great ending! So she now knows that Santa has came to their house too!!
I think that this story has potential. I think that this story has started off really slow. The imagery in here is good, but could be better with the more descriptions and maybe more detail at the beginning of the story. I think that some of the long paragraphs could be put into more than one paragraph. I think that this has potential to become a great story! Keep On Writing!
I do like the imagery in your poem. I have to say though as you read the poem, that this is hard to read due to the flow of the natural pauses as you read this.
I am not sure if you are doing a rhyming pattern or not. Some of the lines were rhyming and some were not so I could not tell if there was a rhyming pattern. I do like the last stanza how you can picture this stanza. I hope to read this again and review it for you. Keep On Writing!
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I would like to thank you for entering Round 5. I wish you luck this round and hope to see you in future rounds.
I do like the imagery in your poem. I have to say though as you read the poem, that this is hard to read due to the flow of the natural pauses as you read this.
I am not sure if you are doing a rhyming pattern or not. Some of the lines were rhyming and some were not so I could not tell if there was a rhyming pattern. I do like the last stanza how you can picture this stanza. I hope to read this again and review it for you. Keep On Writing!
Again I wish you luck you this round and hope to see you in future rounds to come.
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. I am glad that you have entered Round 5 of the contest. Hope to see you in future rounds. Due to real life issues the judging was delayed.
I think that this story has potential. I think that this story has started off really slow. The imagery in here is good, but could be better with the more descriptions and maybe more detail at the beginning of the story. I think that some of the long paragraphs could be put into more than one paragraph. I think that this has potential to become a great story! Keep On Writing!
I wish you luck this round and hope to see you in future rounds of this contest.
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. I am glad to see that you entered Round 5 of the contest. Due to real life issues, the judging has been delayed.
This is a great story. I love the descriptions through out the story. The imagery in this is awesome. I really love how Mary-lynn was able to to trust her Nanna with all her heart. Abby was able to feel at home at Marta house. I love how Mary-Lynn was told the proper story of Jesus and Santa Clause. I think that really brought Nanna and Mary-lynn closer as the story was told. I love how Mary-Lynn was so into the Christmas lights. I think that her climbing to the roof to see Santa added just the right touch of suspense. Then to come home to Nanna house with all the lights and Santa on their roof too made a great ending! So she now knows that Santa has came to their house too!!
I hope to see you in future rounds of the contest. I wish you luck in this round. Keep On Writing!!
Kiya as always you are doing great ideas to help others out no matter what!!! I am so glad to see this group out there to help with upgrades!! I would like to be member if possible...I hope that you are guys help out all the members you can with the upgrades!! I can't wait to see you helping more and more every day!!! Keep On Helping!!
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. I thank you for entering this round for the contest. I would like to see you in further rounds to come.
Personally I could not read the rest of the this story. I am disturb with it...I Do think you did a good job with the imagery, and the descriptions of the words to get the picture of what you are writing about. I also think that it does need a better title and descripttion of the story. I do appreciate you entering the contest. Keep On Writing...
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. I would like to thank you for entering in this round of the contest. I also hope that you enter in future rounds.
First of all I think that this poem as great imagery. I could picture what the descriptions were painting as I read through this poem. This poem has alot of emotions in this too. I really enjoy reading this. Keep On Writing! I hope to see you in the future rounds...
Hello there I am one of the judges for the Free Content Contest. Thank for you entering the contest and hope to see you in future rounds. I love this poem. This poem has lovely imagery in this. I love the description of the words that painted when you read the poem. You can feel the emotion as you are reading this to you your mom...Keep On Writing!! I hope to see you in future founds of this contest and the best of Luck!
Hello there, I am one of the judges for Free Content Contest. Thank you for your entry in this contest and hope that you continue to enter each round after this round!
I love the imagery in this poem. I think that the descriptions of the words painted a perfect picture that you are going for with this poem. I can picture the drunk mother who does not calm the baby down. I can picture the stooped man thinking about his wife that he lost too. As usual you have done a wonderful job on your poem.
I hope to see you in the future rounds of this contest...Keep Writing...
I think that this is an awesome idea! I know that you are always think of awesome ideas to raise gp's and for the members to get enjoy and work on WDC. I can't wait until I have some extra time to get some more gp's to donate to RAOK. I am so glad that you and SM have this site so everyone can enjoy the community within here!
Hello, I am one of the judges for the Free Content Contest. I think that you done a good job in the story over all. I do see some areas that you could improve with a little more detail. For instance, the accident would be an area that you could let the reader know how it occurred, when it happened, what was the emotion that the character felt after the accident. I also think going into more detail about the mother and father a little bit will give the reader an idea on the whole background of the character.
I did see some imagery in this story, but the description lacked in details on the above items. I think that you have a great start with this story and it does have potential. I hope that if you do write more to this story, that I am able to read and review it again. I wish you the best in this contest, and invite you to come back again for future rounds. Round two has been opened, so I wish u good luck! Keep On Writing!!!
You are so right on this about persons with dyslexia...I am a fellow writer that has this problem too...Mine seems to be more now that I am no longer able to work. I ran a cash register for 8 years, so I had to focus on getting everything correct so I would not put the wrong code in for produce, soda 12 packs, and beer cases...I know that it is more difficult to type and see a word that was misspelled, and not correct it before I go to the rest of what I am writing about. I also have to write looking at my hands when typing on here too.
I am so glad that you have wrote about this...You did a great job on this, and it explains it carefully and precise...Yes everyone who has dyslexia have it in a different way, and no one is "dumb or stupid"! These persons who call all dyslexics "dumb and stupid" just have hide from the ignorence of what Dyslexia is! Keep On Writing!!!
Here I go again to stalk you...hehe...I think that this is an awesome contest that benefits the person being reviewed and reviewer...I Think that reviews are the most important part whether you are the reviewer or the reviewee!!! I can't wait to participate!!! Keep On helping!!
I think that this is a great idea to keep track of all your friends, comments, experiences, and reviews for your work...I think that you have a great way to let others know how they care about you!!! I hope to come back to lever more messages for you!! Keep On Writing!!!
This is a great poem...I love the imagery that you have in this...you can picture everything as you read through each stanza of the poem...I hope that you are going to be able to stay at your job...This poem shows that you truelly love your job and will fight until the end to keep this...Keep On Writing!!!
I think that you have described the person exactly as player...I could picture the person when reading this poem...The sad part is that there are many out there men and women that have to be a player because they do not want the commitment and want you when the feel and nothing more...Within this poem you have show many emotions that you went through with this person...
You show how the player messes with the emotion inside of you. I especially like the parts where you have shown that you are strong and will not let him get to you...I wish that I was strong enough on that part...I have let my guard down to many times...I am honored to have reviewed this...Keep On Writing!!!
Sherri this poem is short, sweet and simple...I love the imagery that it suggests when you are reading this...I enjoyed reading this poem becuase of the positive feeling it brings as you read the descriptions of the words, and it really describes you. I can picture it all as i am reading this...i can see you chasing the rainbows, and reaching for the stars. You can also picture you reaching all your dreams. This is great poem that you have showed everyone about yourself! Keep on Writing!!
As always you have a great poem...I always look forward to reading your poems when I see something knew...I hope to be back at your port agian to read more of these...There was so much imagery in this poem, and you could see how much love that you have for your husband as muchs as you did when you first married...Keep On Writing!!!
I have to tell you that this is a great story about a strong character. I hope that this is a fictional character that someone did not really have to go through all this...I hated to see that this daughter had to go through the rape and then having to get rid of the baby...All because she wanted to be "normal" and was not prepared for this...I hope that there will another short story to this, seeing what happens next...I would love to read it if you have it in your port already!! Keep On Writing!!!
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