This poem could be great...the flow in it is not smooth...could go a little more smoother...It seems like it is choppy and rushed as you wrote this...other than that this is a really good poem...you do get right to the point of the poem...and the imagery is there...The description of words follow with the picture that is percieved when you read this...Keep On Writing...
I think that this is a cool for newbies to read so they can have fun learning about WDC and to explore the site too...I think that this was funny and helpful at the same time...It is useful too...I love how you added the users links to the story too...so the reader can also go visit their ports too...I hope to read more of your port...Thank you for all your help here on WDC!!!!Keep On Writing and Helping!!!
Sounds like this will be fun...Like the race contest...Would have been fun..PC problems so I was not on yesterday for most of the day, glad that you have put down that you are going to give reviews...That makes this group a better idea to join...and You have one other member that is wonderful to!! Whome and Superman will make this an awesome group!! Thank you for helping others!!! Keep On Helping!!! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
Thank you for letting all the members of WDC celebrate the 6 years of WDC!!! I am so glad that I was able to find this community that has helped me to gain friendships, gain writing skills, and reviewing others...I Can not wait to enter more of the birthday contests, and review as I go...Have a great B-Day week!!!
Wow you did a great job on this!!! I really enjoyed reading it...love the rhythm and rhyme...I also loved the appologie to Edgar Allen Poe...I could actually picture this poem from the keg spilling over, to the nagging alarm, and all the kids talking about the professor being a bore...The imagery was just awesome with the descriptions as you wrote this...I will be back to read more of your port!! Keep On Writing...
Sounds like this will be fun...Like the race contest...Would have been fun..PC problems so I was not on yesterday for most of the day, glad that you have put down that you are going to give reviews...That makes this group a better idea to join...and You have one other member that is wonderful to!! Whome and Superman will make this an awesome group!! Thank you for helping others!!! Keep On Helping!!! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
ummmm...I am not quite sure what this was about...I am guessing that the character is someone who wants to be dead...and the trucker had no idea what he ran into...I think the description of the accident was really good...imagery was vague do to the characters...Please let me know when you have revised this and I will review it again...Keep On Writing...
Wow I am in tears after reading what happened to his hand...this is an awesome story...Imagery was fantastic...I hope that you continue on to see if Johnny will be able to play the piano again and not give up...I could picture this story as I read it perfectly...I hope that this was not based on someone you knew...Dreams are so hard to get back to when something tragic happens...Keep On Writing...
Well since I have BPD I can relate to this...this was powereful...I think that everyone thinks about death, some more than others...to be heard in another problem that is not addressed so that makes you want to be dead...Personally I have tried 7 times to take my life, and apparently I am not to go...so I want you to stay too...If you need someone to talk to...I am here...I know that it is hard, I am now trying to get my self to stop with teh self harm...it is hard when you have problems and no one wants to listen so you feel like it is better to not be here...Glad you are here, especially on WDC!!! Keep ON Writing...
Wow this was very interesting to read...I think that this was pretty cool...one thing I could not picture was bobby have a baby through a vagina...Overall this an attention grabber...If you go on to make this more than a short story let me know and I will read more of this...I am so glad that the little boy had a penis and that it started the male species again...
This is a pretty poem...I love it, you can see the imagery in this as you read it...The descriptions of the poem can be pictured as you are reading it...Hope to read more from your port!!! I will be adding you to my favorite author's list too...Keep On Writing...
Wow that is a beutiful poem...I really love the imagery in this poem...I am so glad to read this since I have been divorced 2 years...and it is hard still to realize that all the years that we were together are gone...I hope that the divorce is getting better for the person that this was wrote about...Keep On Writing...
I like this alot...YOu have so much Imagery in this as you read through this...I not sure on much about Ireland...I could see the place as I am reading the descriptions...I hope to read more in your port...Keep ON Writing!!! WIll be adding you to my favorte authors list...
I think that the second ending is the best for this story...I think that this story is really cool...I think that you really made a great fairy tale for kids to enjoy...I think that the first ending would be to plain for this story...I sure hope to return to see you port...Keep On Writing...
As always...Another beautiful poem that you have wrote...I love the imagery...I pictured it perfectly as I read the description...You can hear how the air cackled...I could hear the wind as it whispers and how sharp the rocks were...I will definitely be back to read more of your poems...Keep On Writing...
This is a cool column that you have wrote...Sorry about all the bad thing that have happened in you past...Some people are meant to be in sports and some are ment to write about it...that sounds like what you were meant to do...So I hope that you keep ON Writing!!!!
Wow this is an awesome poem too...I could feel the emotion in it as I was reading it...I love the imagery you could see through out the whole poem...The descriptions were great...I love the way the poem read too...Hope to read more of you work...Thanks for helping out with WDC...you are one of the greatist "Angels" around here...Keep On Writing...
This Writing is so true about taking people at face value...I could picture this as the descriptions were wrote...I think that this is an awesome piece and more people should read this...So many people do not act like they really are...For instance I know a few people who are like that...and not sure how to react to them like that...Keep on Writing....
This was interesting...I am not sure if I would go for it...Was this based on something you have wrote or on someone else's book...I was just wondering...I hope that you keep on Writing...I not sure that this is as convincing for reviewers...I would definitely do into more detail...and maybe hight light the 4 W's and all...
um that is differentm, but I think that was the point of the story...I think...ok maybe it is just me but I would not read this to any of my kids...unless this was for an older child...Cool imagery...loads of description of Jackie...definitely not a younger childs bed time story...Keep on writing...
I have to say this is so true and so funny at the same time...It is hilarious as I was reading this I could actually picture this...There was alot of imagery in this...Love the descriptions of all the different types of people who sue out there...Robin Hood I think was my favorite out everyone that was in this poem...Keep on Writing...
as usual another great piece...I love it...A ton of imagery...love to read everything that you have wrote so far...Love the description as I read it...Love the picture of Getrude...cutie...she looks better than my Connie the cow that is in my port that I adopted...hehe...Hope everyone else reads what is wrote in her port!!!
This could go on to another chapter...but you need to add more of it to keep the reader wanting to read it...There needs to more description in the story to keep it going for the reader to want to finish it...I had become confused a little bit on it when you could not tell which ship you were one...When you go to do the next draft...Let me know so I can finish reading it...This is a rally good start...I hope to keep on reading this...Will visit your port...You are added to my favorite authors list!!!!Keep on writing!!!
This seems like it will be an interesting book to read...are you adding more soon to it as you are only secret 3...also what is the November National Writing Challenge? Is that on Writing dot com or is it something else to watch for...I hope to stop by your port more often..you are added to my favorite authors!!! Keep On Writing...
This is a very interesting story...I have known Women who have left their families and all just to find what they wanted...It is hard to settle for normal if you are not sure what Normal is...The story really describes about women who do not want to be normal...They want to live the fast pace...
Like I said a really good story...Keep on Writing!!!!
Wow the Poem is great...I could see it all as I read it...lots of Imagery!!!! YOu are so right about judging...people judge more than they realize...this poem showed that...I think that if the ones that are judging would look and see that they have been judged too...Then everyone would not be judged anymore...(hope that made since) Keep On Writing...
Wow I would say that he has a lot of making up to do to her...I have some confusion though...I thought she said she was not going to marry him and then she does...Was it because they did not want to face everyone...or because she still deep down loved him...and wants him pay for what he did...I hope that you are going to be adding more to this...I kinda lost the whole character sense and how they met...if you would like to know more of what I think...you can email me back and I will let you know...Keep on Writing...
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