Some years ago my singer, songwriter husband who passed away in 1998, recorded a song called "Caught in the Act." So, naturally this title caught my eye. I had to laugh because the story line was so much like yours and I just loved that last line. Keep writing and I look forward to reading more from your site.
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I found your story very well written and especially liked the dialog between Kathy and Natty! It was very much a girl thing. I could feel the pain and anger Natty must have felt in the abusiveness she went through. Your character analyses is awesome and the
Story itself very well written.
I noticed a few little errors that you may want to fix:
He kiss (kissed her) her, he’d taken cold showers until his lips were blue, and (here you could leave off) recently he’d given up on cold showers'
A heartbreaking story that ends well! It is always such a sad thing to hear of abusive marriages and
when there are children involved it is even sadder.
You did a very nice job of pulling the colors together in your artistic picture. Thank you
so much for sharing this lovely piece with us. I look forward to visiting you again soon.
Sincerely
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I'd say you're a very courageous women, strong beyond our wildest imaginations.You have shown that you can do this and with the help and love of your wonderful daughter's you've pulled it off. So, I'd say your glass was not just half-full but it is over-running with an abundance of love, and there is more to come. God bless and keep the Faith.
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What a joyful blessing and so well written. I can tell that it came from your heart as your heart is exploding with joyfulness in this beautiful tribute
to our Lord. These lines tell the story:
'He is the one in my life, who is above and beyond,
The time in this life that I must go on.
Thank you so much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Marlena Duci
The perfect picture, from a perfect spot! I love this painting and the visual of this particular sunset is very mind blowing indeed. There is a favorite spot from my desk that allows me to look out at the mountains from my home and see this type of sunset. And if I arise early enough in the morning I can watch it rise from that same spot at my desk. Thank you so much, for sharing this beauty and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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Oh! Penny my friend, this is delightful and so worth the two-hundred dollars. I'm an expresso drinker, but I only drink it when in Northeastern Italy, never Southern. So, if you don't mind I'd like to put this in my Newsletter that goes out to my clients before each tour. I know they will love it as much as I do.
Thank you so much for sharing, and I will be back.
Sincerely
Marlena Duci
You held me right in the palm of your hands with this lovely piece. I like it very much and truly relate to it. I love the flavor and the explanation you give on why he/she is leaving, and it couldn't be clearer.
Two tiny errors you may want to fix, but they could not take away the understanding of your words.
'I'm sorry, i (I) turned life to hell,
I'm sorry, but this is my farwell, (farewell)
Congratulations on this poem and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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Sounds like the beginning of a very exciting story.
The first chapter left me wanting to read more of the happy adventures of Shauna and Chap. Looking forward to reading the rest of the story as it is completed.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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This is just a little cutie, and it lays a great foundation for the person needed to share in such a witty life. Hope all your recommendations are fruitful and that the person has the right qualifications: I really like this line a lot.
'All it takes is a nice application, strong resume and of course a good interview'
Good luck with the resumes.
Sincerely
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A haunting love song, is what comes to mind while
reading this lovely piece of art.
Your colors are amazing and seemed too splashed across the canvas like the undressing of a lonely heart.
I love that you speak about the child in each of them in hopes of recreating some lost flame from some long ago past. Great job beautifully written please write on.
Thank you so much for sharing and I will visit again soon.
What a beautiful blessing you are, and I know that
your dear Mother smiles down on you loving you all
the more. She, raised an incredible daughter, one who by her stripes has shown how durable she really is.
Thank you for sharing this wonderful talent and love.
I've had that dream before too! They are great while they last.
I've read maybe ten poems and short stories this morning from new authors on the site. And they've left me feeling like I was missing something from my morning hunt. I was about to leave the Newbie page when I caught sight of 'The Dream' I'm so happy that
I did. It's a darling piece, wonderfully spaced, and the colors are bright and clear. This was what I was missing, it’s like a breath of fresh air. So, now you've made my day, thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
This is great work I cannot find enough to say about this work. It took my breath away and left me drenched in tears. I could hear this song being sung by the masses, I felt as if millions of headless horsemen where riding into the very pages and lashing at everything and everyone in sight.
Thanks for sharing and continue to write about the need to be concerned, as our children are being killed and killing.
Sincerely
Marlena Duci
What a wee sweet story! I could see the children jumping for joy at the site of their wonderful little gift. I can hardly wait until Thanksgiving when my youngest grandchildren will be arriving for dinner, and I can pull out this lovely story and read it to them. You did a wonderful job of putting the colors in just the right places and your three little characters were so very real.
I am sure children as well as adults everywhere will love this story, and personally I like the first ending better, but I think most children will love the second one better, no matter they are both good.
Thank you so much for sharing with us.
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This little poem is very nice and very sweet.
I hope she will come to understand that you
care for her very much. I think you must tell
her! You may be surprised at how she may feel
about you.
I like what you are trying to say
in your poem, and I think you are doing very well with your english, it'll get better with practice.
Continue to write and please write some in French, there are many on this site who speak French also.
Thank you for stopping by and reading 'Mixing Worlds The Answer,' A Tribute to Women the World Over.
And welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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I think this is so cute, and I'd love to send you a
thousand GPs, if only you'd turn those hapless I's into capital I's.
Also I’d change the rating too.
Hopefully other reviewers will match my offer, and beg you have mercy on your author peer's eyes. This is just a suggestion, and you don't have to take my advice. It's still cute.
Sincerely
Mduci
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Without a doubt this is a tender love song, and although it starts out very strong it somehow lets your reader down because it seems to be unfinished.
There are weak and strong points to every bit of poetry or prose and we need to captivate the strong points and get them across. These are just my suggestions and not meant to lessen the affect of your work.
'But thanks to you, Atlast! You found
my weary soul weeping without a sound…
You revived me with your ardent love
sincerely shown, it is for me without a doubt'
The lines above could use a little revising.
Keep writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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What a vivid painting I see before me, I can see the girl you describe and I feel the wind as it surrounds her and causes the fabric of her dress to rustle and cling to her skin. I feel the fall as her foot is sucked between the two rocks and she falls backward.
I love your writing and the realness which you bring into the life size picture. Thank you so much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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I must congratulate you on becoming that wonderful father figure who will at some point I'm sure, cause her some grief; yet in time she'll come to understand that it was in her best interest. And of course there will come a time in her own life, when she will look for you in the heart, and eyes, of the man who steals her heart away from you. And of course you in time will come to understand.
It is wonderful to hear your words of love and protection, it is every young girl's dream to be; daddy's little princess, great read and so very touching.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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