This is a real lovely little piece and written right from the heart and soul of your being.
I love your display of the words and the color you presented to the poem. Thank you for sharing this sweet take on love and the essence of love. I look forward to dropping by for another visit very soon.
Sincerely
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This poem was so short, but oh so sweet. You have read one whole life time into seven very short lines. The interesting thing about this piece, besides it being awesome is this; Numbers are the key to life I truly believe that that is true. Thank you so much for sharing this work and welcome to Writing.Com.
I look forward to visiting your port again very soon.
Sincerely
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What a beautiful sentiment written about caring for and Cherishing the one you love. I could see the visual picture that you painted for the one who is in your
child’s life, in which you tell them to handle her with care.
I love your poem and thank you so much for sharing.
And a warm welcome, to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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As the Mother of three son's I can only say; what a fitting poem this is and so lovingly written from the heart of a parent to their child. I hope that someday, if not today that this pray will be answered and they will find it in their heart to call you and say hello. I know the hardest thing in the world to do when it comes to our children is letting go. Take care David, and send them this poem you've written from your .
Sincerely
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I do so much like this timely little piece.
I especially like the last line and not to
say how very clever this one is, for after
all what would a secret be if not told in
the listener’s ear. Thank you so much for sharing
this cutie and welcome to Writing.Com.
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I like this poem very much, and I must say I can relate.
It can be torture when you can't see the one you
love for long periods of time. Writing, phone call's, nor e-mails can help when you just want to reach out and touch the hand or face, or smell the hair or look into loving eyes that just can't be reached any other way, then by seeing them in the flesh. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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I can see that you are inspired by angels and I can certainly relate to that.
This is such a heartfelt poem and I know that there are children across this continent who must hear these same words spoken to them by their own special angels.
These words bring peace to the souls of those who have been abused and battered. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com, looking forward to reading more of your work.
Sincerely
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I'm happy to say that I loved this little cutie, and
You may not think much of yourself as a poem master, but you show much promise here.
Don't get me wrong, I love short stories and you have some that are far above the rest! And you'll do fine in any line your rhymes are just a test.
Thank you for stopping by my port back in September, I was away and the e-mail list was very long and I've gotten only so far in answering my e-mails to date. I will be returning to read more of your work.
Sincerely
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What a beautiful day it is here in this little Mt.
town in California where I live. The sun is beaming,
and at 8:45am the moon can still be seen kissing the
beautiful clear blue sky. And you have just made this day even more beautiful for me then you can ever imagine! Why I choose to pick you out from 'WHO'S ONLINE' only
God' knows. Then to be guided right to this piece was certainly no accident. Because my friend; I had this very dream last night, it awoke me, and I lived something so fantastic in this dream I cannot even begin to explain. I have no idea where it took place, but I do remember the words I heard spoken to me in a very clear voice. "It was from Eve that begat Adam." I have joked over the years about this being a possibility, but I'm certainly going to research this dream a lot more. Thank you sharing and I plan to look for more answers from you port so I have put you in my favorites.
Sincerely
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I must give a five when a five is due. I see nothing inside or outside of this poem that needs fixing. It's perfect from my view. I love each and every line,
also I can relate quiet well to it from my own point of view. So, thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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Now just which Paul were you the son of Jim's or the grandson? These story's always remind me of early Sunday morning on “The Road T.V.” I loved this story and it really brought the tears out…and a big laugh, for as we know 'Nothing happens by chance.' I hope Barbara and Paul got back together, and that the wedding never happened. Wonderful story, and I believe it, 100%. Thanks for sharing, looking forward to more like these.
Sincerely
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A girl pushed a pram came through the ornate metal gates
Some years ago my singer, songwriter husband who passed away in 1998, recorded a song called "Caught in the Act." So, naturally this title caught my eye. I had to laugh because the story line was so much like yours and I just loved that last line. Keep writing and I look forward to reading more from your site.
Sincerely
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I found your story very well written and especially liked the dialog between Kathy and Natty! It was very much a girl thing. I could feel the pain and anger Natty must have felt in the abusiveness she went through. Your character analyses is awesome and the
Story itself very well written.
I noticed a few little errors that you may want to fix:
He kiss (kissed her) her, he’d taken cold showers until his lips were blue, and (here you could leave off) recently he’d given up on cold showers'
A heartbreaking story that ends well! It is always such a sad thing to hear of abusive marriages and
when there are children involved it is even sadder.
You did a very nice job of pulling the colors together in your artistic picture. Thank you
so much for sharing this lovely piece with us. I look forward to visiting you again soon.
Sincerely
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I'd say you're a very courageous women, strong beyond our wildest imaginations.You have shown that you can do this and with the help and love of your wonderful daughter's you've pulled it off. So, I'd say your glass was not just half-full but it is over-running with an abundance of love, and there is more to come. God bless and keep the Faith.
Sincerely
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What a joyful blessing and so well written. I can tell that it came from your heart as your heart is exploding with joyfulness in this beautiful tribute
to our Lord. These lines tell the story:
'He is the one in my life, who is above and beyond,
The time in this life that I must go on.
Thank you so much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Marlena Duci
The perfect picture, from a perfect spot! I love this painting and the visual of this particular sunset is very mind blowing indeed. There is a favorite spot from my desk that allows me to look out at the mountains from my home and see this type of sunset. And if I arise early enough in the morning I can watch it rise from that same spot at my desk. Thank you so much, for sharing this beauty and welcome to Writing.Com.
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Oh! Penny my friend, this is delightful and so worth the two-hundred dollars. I'm an expresso drinker, but I only drink it when in Northeastern Italy, never Southern. So, if you don't mind I'd like to put this in my Newsletter that goes out to my clients before each tour. I know they will love it as much as I do.
Thank you so much for sharing, and I will be back.
Sincerely
Marlena Duci
You held me right in the palm of your hands with this lovely piece. I like it very much and truly relate to it. I love the flavor and the explanation you give on why he/she is leaving, and it couldn't be clearer.
Two tiny errors you may want to fix, but they could not take away the understanding of your words.
'I'm sorry, i (I) turned life to hell,
I'm sorry, but this is my farwell, (farewell)
Congratulations on this poem and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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Sounds like the beginning of a very exciting story.
The first chapter left me wanting to read more of the happy adventures of Shauna and Chap. Looking forward to reading the rest of the story as it is completed.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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This is just a little cutie, and it lays a great foundation for the person needed to share in such a witty life. Hope all your recommendations are fruitful and that the person has the right qualifications: I really like this line a lot.
'All it takes is a nice application, strong resume and of course a good interview'
Good luck with the resumes.
Sincerely
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A haunting love song, is what comes to mind while
reading this lovely piece of art.
Your colors are amazing and seemed too splashed across the canvas like the undressing of a lonely heart.
I love that you speak about the child in each of them in hopes of recreating some lost flame from some long ago past. Great job beautifully written please write on.
Thank you so much for sharing and I will visit again soon.
What a beautiful blessing you are, and I know that
your dear Mother smiles down on you loving you all
the more. She, raised an incredible daughter, one who by her stripes has shown how durable she really is.
Thank you for sharing this wonderful talent and love.
I've had that dream before too! They are great while they last.
I've read maybe ten poems and short stories this morning from new authors on the site. And they've left me feeling like I was missing something from my morning hunt. I was about to leave the Newbie page when I caught sight of 'The Dream' I'm so happy that
I did. It's a darling piece, wonderfully spaced, and the colors are bright and clear. This was what I was missing, it’s like a breath of fresh air. So, now you've made my day, thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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. Then to be guided right to this piece was certainly no accident. Because my friend; I had this very dream last night, it awoke me, and I lived something so fantastic in this dream I cannot even begin to explain. I have no idea where it took place, but I do remember the words I heard spoken to me in a very clear voice. "It was from Eve that begat Adam." I have joked over the years about this being a possibility, but I'm certainly going to research this dream a lot more. Thank you sharing and I plan to look for more answers from you port so I have put you in my favorites.