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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a fun poll about space aliens.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: LOL I can't remember the last time I took a WDC poll, but yours caught my attention. *Bigsmile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't see any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: What a fun poll! Frankly, I didnt' care for the choices. I would have: Text a friend; Taken a picture; Called my husband; Called the police: Looked around for 'balloon boy'...Anyway, I chose 'Take them to my favorite restaurant'. I think, actually, any alien should taste pizza or Chinese food. *Bigsmile*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: A spaceship image might spice up your poll, though I did have fun with it as it is. Thanks for putting this one together. *Smile*

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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This story should be an inspiration to those who always think the worst of things.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: What a sweet 'story-book' type story! After reading the title, and then the first line...Where the main character's name was Raine...I thought this would be the story of a challenge between characters such as rain and lightning. It turned into a really delightful story about a real-life type event.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: At first I thought the character's name didn't have a good feel to it. ...But it's great! It's the sort of name one would think of for a person who would dance and sing at the sight of snow when she had her outdoor wedding planned for that day.

I like the ideas in your story, such as the snow bride that the people built. It sounded as though they all made the best of the situation, and also made many memories because of it.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I was left with some thoughts as to what the bride wore. ...Did she have a white coat? Was she wearing a traditional wedding dress at all? What about the mother of the bride? She didn't seem to like the idea of an outdoor wedding in the snow. What was her thoughts at the wedding? ...Conversations of the guests? This is a great story, and I'm really glad that I stopped by to read it. *Smile*

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Review of CLICK HERE  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION:This is a 'just for fun' item by Wordsy.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Wordsy, you have always kept us entertained and inspired by your poetic thoughts and words for many years! It's people like you who make WDC special.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: You had me going with this one! I was curious to see what was in the 'box', and of course it was something designed to put a smile on my face. Thanks for always doing that. I can see why someone gave you a well deserved ribbon for your fun item. *Bigsmile*

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a group of all occasion cNotes.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Small world -- You stopped by my cNote shop, and now I happened upon yours! *Delight*

*Check2*ERRORS: No errors here.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I love your cNotes, and I will certainly be adding these to my favorites. I like the variety and the price.

I just sent the cup of smiles! I know the person I sent it to will love it as much as I did. *Smile*

I'll have to remember your collection. I think you covered just about everything...A cNote just to say hello...One for a birthday...One for the new member...There are so many to choose from!

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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWE...  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a love poem written in a unique way.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: You did a nice job putting this poem together. I could picture that stream in the background as the sweet conversation was going on...

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't see any errors. Great proof reading.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I enjoyed the structure of your poem, in which the second line was used to begin the following stanza.

You kept up with the configuration of the poem, while still presenting a smooth-flowing love poem. Very nice! *Delight*

The red font was a terrific finishing touch. Great job.

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Review of Fiery Red Hair  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a story about the dreams of a dying woman.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: What a wondrous story you wrote! I thought it was great right from the red hot title. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Your story is very enchanting. I enjoyed reading about Celtic settings and galloping horses. Very entertaining. Your reader's will feel that the dying woman left her life in tranquil peace. *Delight*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I loved your story, but I did have to read the first few paragraphs a couple of times. I thought the woman on the horse was the one who 'carried a baby in her belly', and her husband was killed. Then when I read that her daughter-in-law was expecting the baby, I was a bit confused. ...Especially since these were all the thoughts of a dying woman in a hospital bed. Of course it all comes together and makes sense by the end. I needed to know that it was the same woman thinking about the past through sort of flashbacks in the dream.

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Review of Mental Circus  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem full of emotion for relvelryssorrow's blog entry commentary.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Hello and congratulations on your blue promotion! *Bigsmile*

It was sweet of you to write this poem as a tribute to someone's blog.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors in your poem.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I really love the simplicity of this one. At first I thought it was a collection of haiku, but then I realized it's just written in a short and meaningful way. I like the way you succeeded in expressing thoughts of emotion and confusion in such a small place. Great work in putting this one together. *Smile*

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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a beautiful love poem.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS/RAMBLINGS: Hello from Ireland! I'm glad my husband gave me a laptop to use on this trip, or I would have missed out on this very special SP entry! Hey, this is my first review as a blue! (*Smirk* I should frame it...)

Someone needs to create 'post card' cNotes that we can send out when we're away! LOL

Sherri, I already knew you were very talented, but it seems that it must run in the family too! The both of you worked miracles with this one! Nice work! *Delight*

*Check2*ERRORS: No errors here.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: This whole poem could easily be very impressive wedding vows, especially the last stanza. Did you ever consider publishing song lyrics Sherri?

I loved the part in a middle stanza, too, about the open door to the heart of angels. ...How charming!

Your poem is so pretty, and I really enjoyed reading it.

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Review of The End of Summer  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWE...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a very pretty story about a lake and how one woman loved to go there.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: What a very touching story! I'll have to admit, you had me teary eyed at the end! *Blush*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors. Nice work. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I enjoyed reading your great descriptions. I could feel the nature all throughout your story.

You did a fantastic job in expressing the love that Lois felt for Swan Lake...Right through to the end. Your readers will really feel the emotions of the character.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I thought your story was beautiful. It's ironic, though, that the only paragraph I didn't really care for, was your opening paragraph! It makes sense that this paragraph should be the best one of all, to 'hook' your readers into reading on. There were three long sentences in it. The very first two were about birds eating fish in the water. The last one was: "The majestic Blue Herons and the pouch-billed Pink Pelicans, Pinkies Lois called them, filled the vista; their long graceful legs stalking through the shallow lake." To me, this read a bit choppy and seemed confusing as my first taste of the story. I think the first paragraph might also give a hint about what the story will be about...As in Lois and how she looked forward to her get-away summers at the enchanting lake. All in all, it's a very pretty...and touching...story. Nice work. *Smile*

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Review of Live It Up  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWE...  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem which suggests that we make the best of the bad situations.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Welcome to Writing.com, and thanks for sharing your inspirational poem. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: How many times have we all been 'cheated' out of what should have been ours. You succeeded in putting real truth and wisdom down in words. Your theme of Living it up, even though, leaves us all with hope. *Smile* Nice work!

I like the way your poem rhymes.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: In some places, you wrote words such as, cant and dont. I would change that to can't and don't...especially since you did write they're.

I understand that writing 'cuz' and 'playin' adds to the casual feel of your poem.

Writing 'god' with out a cap might offend some people here, so it's something to think about...

Your poem can be a big inspiration to our members by causing them to remember to 'live it up', so why not add 'inspiration' to your genre instead of 'other'. By doing that, more WDC members might see your poem. *Smile*

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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWE...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a very friendly poem. *Smile*

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Aw! I saw a tire swing just today, and I thought back to how much fun it used to be to swing away in my younger days. I think the idea of a porch swing sounds like just as much fun. *Delight*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't see any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Thanks for putting that smile on my face, as you mentioned in your fun to read poem. The scene you created, of friends laughing and talking while swinging on a porch swing, seems so tranquil and appealing. ...Bring on that coffee and cake! *Bigsmile*

Your rhyme doesn't seem to have a sequence, but I do love the gentleness of it. Keep writing these upbeat poems! *Smile*

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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a descriptive story about sights and textures.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: ...And I certainly painted my own story, as you say in your last line, filled with the visions of your beautiful imagery. Very nice! *Smile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't see any errors in your story.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I love how you awaken the senses of your readers, by causing them to imagine things like the heat of the sun, and the feel of the grains of sand.

I also enjoyed the how you made each color you named special...The blues, browns, grays, green...You made whatever color you mentioned come to life in your readers mind.

You really did a great job with your descriptive story. It's upbeat and inspirational too...I feel like going outside into the sun now. *Bigsmile*

Thanks for sharing. *Smile*

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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a great story about a family that came to the rescue of a little baby bunny.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Wow! What an experience! I guess these are the times when we say, "Never a dull moment..."

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors in your story.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: What! What! What! Gosh, you had me on the edge of my seat throughout the story, and then you ended it with a VERY suspenseful closing! What happened to the rabbit?

Great job in telling this story of the rabbit rescue. You wrote it so well, that it really held my interest right to the end. *Smile*

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Review of Hotly Scored  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a romantic bitter sweet love poem.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oooh this one is well done! I really felt you described the hurt of a lost love in a very unique way. *Smile*

*Check2*ERRORS: No errors here.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I loved the gentle rhyme of your poem. It flowed smoothly without seeming at all forced.

I could feel the tender emotion in your poem, of the desire for a love that we can not have...Like touching a flame and getting scored.

Thanks for sharing. It was a pleasure to read...And a perfect size too! *Smile*

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Review of crumby steps  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWE...  
Rated: E | (3.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a funny story about a day in the life...

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I found your story to be very humorous. It's unique and your creativity shows. Nice work.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I absolutely loved the punch line at the end of your story! *Laugh*

I also think the title is perfect! One simply needs to read the story to get it. *Smile*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: Your story is very humorous, but it deserves some polishing up.

First, I would suggest that you go back to edit the content rating of the item. You didn't choose anything in that place.

You might also want to choose a few genres. Right now, you picked 'other' a couple of times. Comedy, might be your best bet there. With so many genres to choose from, you might find at least three...Adventure maybe?

More WDC members will read your poem if they have a better idea of what it's about. The content rating and genres will be the hint they need.

Next, I would suggest to proof read your story again. There are a few typos that you might want to fix. You used the small letter i a lot for the word, I.
Also you wrote typos such as, "I madea friend of a...". 'Made' and 'a' should be separated.

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Review of Slow Rush  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWE...  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem about nature and the sea.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Your poem seemed to have a unique style of no rhyme or reason. ...Phrases randomly clumped together. I left me a little lost at times, but at the same time, it added to the poetic beauty.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: You used really creative descriptive words. I love the thought of orange-pink clouds and seagulls.

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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWE...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem about moving on after a bad relationship.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: What a very inspirational poem. I'm sure that others who have been in similar situations would find strength and new found hope after reading your poem.

*Check2*ERRORS:I didn't find any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART:You succeeded in putting down in words all of the thoughts, hopes and joys of moving on. Nice work. *Smile*

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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWE...  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION:This is a poem about thoughts of a dark soul.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: After reading the first two lines, I felt that this might have been a vampire poem. Then, your poem seemed to change. Words of blood spilling onto shoes, and wickedness within made me think that it's more of a poem about guilt and evil feelings.

You did a great job with creativity. Your dramatic poetic words leave your readers with deep thoughts. Nice work.

*Check2*ERRORS: Great proof reading! No errors here. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I found your poem to be very intense. The strong feelings of conflicting emotion flowed throughout the entire piece.

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a writing project about Vampires.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oooh! This story has the makings of a GREAT story! You are a very talented writer, and it certainly shows. I hope you plan on adding more because I think this is a fantastic introduction. *Delight*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Wow! This part is only an introduction, but already I can feel that it's going to be a chilling and captivating story.

Your introduction seems so exciting...An airplane crash...Dead bodies...And the talk of vampires!

You wrote with excitement and suspense. Great job in creativity. *Delight*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: Your brief description is the very first thing seen by our WDC members. You'll want that to be perfect. You left out an 'h' in wheter It should be whether.

One would say, "There was no sign of life." It's not necessary to say, "lifes."

I like the idea of waking up in the midnight. I think it adds something to the mystery of your story. I wake up sometimes, though, in the middle of the night.

Here you wrote: "Not the cold of the rain or the freezing wind that scared this 19 year old boy, but it was something..." -- This doesn't seem to flow smoothly to me. I think the word 'that' should be left out.

This sentence also seems to need a bit of help: "Something he could never imagine it do exists in this world." For one thing, 'do' could probably be left out.

This is a great story so far. I hope you will continue to write it. *Delight*


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Review of Dear God  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem prayer.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: What a sweet poem Wyn! I found it to be very touching and tender.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't notice any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I could feel the emotion in this sensitive and spiritual poem. Sometimes we get help and answers just by talking about it, don't we. You put such pretty thoughts down in words. Nice job. *Smile*

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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by Simply Positive


*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a short 'letter' story, written for a contest.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: How did you do in the contest? I hope you did well because I thought this one was really pretty. *Smile*

Gosh, I think my soul has attention deficit because it keeps distracting my mind a lot. LOL *Bigsmile*

*Check2*ERRORS: No errors here. Nice work. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: This certainly is a unique and creative idea for a story. What would ones mind say to it's soul...I think you answered that well. The mind is always busy, even at night, but the soul knows to take a moment here and there to 'think' about the little things that make life sweet. *Smile*

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Review of Pigeon Parade  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a nature poem about birds...Pigeons in particular.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oh Harry I really enjoyed your poem! I've always been fascinated with birds. I make my husband crazy by always asking him what type of bird we see. Lately he's been just making things up. On our last trip to Mexico, he called every bird above water a sea bird! LOL

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors in your beautiful poem story.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I thought you painted a picture well of the scenes in your backyard. I could picture all of the pretty birds you named happily eating their food. I loved the story about the pigeon guy! Thanks for sharing this entertaining poem. *Smile*

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Review of Golden Letters  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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by KC under the midnight sun


*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is the story about the dark and scary life of a young man.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I must say that your story left many unanswered questions in my mind. It almost seems like the introduction chapter of a novel, which teases the mind and leaves the reader with enough intrigue to read on. Where were these people? What was the book? What was this room John was thrown into? ...Solitary confinement?

Congratulations, btw, on having your story featured in the newsletter. *Smile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors. Nice work. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: You did an amazing job with 'flash backs' and such. That is not always an easy thing to do without causing confusion. I thought you succeeded in expressing different scenes from John's experiences.

Your descriptions were great, though as I mentioned earlier, I was left wanting more explanations.

Your story was intense enough so that the reader feels the fear and thoughts of the main character, as well as the hatred of the men kicking him...This example, of course, was from the panic scene when John sees the door to room 101.

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Review of Why I Write  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Thank you for posting your item on "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" 's review request page. As you also requested, I am first reading and reviewing your writing explanation.

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by KC under the midnight sun


*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: These are the thoughts about writing by one Writing.Com author.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Thank you for taking the time to write an explanation of your writing. I think you take a very unique approach in writing, as compared to much of what I come across on Writing.Com. I'm looking forward to reading your other work. *Smile*

I'll have to say, though, that I disagree with your statement that much work ends up in the "dust bin of history." How many so called 'chick flicks', sci-fi, or otherwise non-sense movies bring back fond memories of friends and fun? Sometimes we'll remember a book that we read at a special time in our life...During a hospital stay...During a beach trip...etc. Just because one doesn't change the world doesn't mean that one has no purpose or meaning. Each 'type' is important and needed to add variety in our vast world.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors in your well written work.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I'm much impressed with your writing background. You seem to be knowledgeable and talented far above many of your other WDC peers.

I liked that you name-dropped movies, books, writers, and philosophers that we're all familiar with, to make your points of explanation.

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Review of Promise Me  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: These are the song lyrics for a song of love.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oooh I could picture this one on the radio! Since it's summer and wedding time of the year, I could picture this one ending up as couples wedding songs too! *Delight*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: There are too many songs about dumb things that hardly make sense. It's refreshing to find a true love song. *Smile*

You did a good job with writing your expressions of love. I especially liked the thoughts of rewinding the clock to take it slow through all the best times. Great creativity.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I think it's time to change your brief descriptions. Instead of talking about how you think your work has grammar problems, I would write something like, "A song of love for R&B or Soft Rock."

In one verse you mentioned that it's a song for a person you loved all your life. Then, in another verse, you wrote, "... I was broken till I met you." I imagined a sweet love song from one childhood sweetheart to another, but then I was a little confused. Great writing though...I hope you do get your songs on the radio someday. *Delight*

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