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Review by Maryann Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a descriptive story about sights and textures.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: ...And I certainly painted my own story, as you say in your last line, filled with the visions of your beautiful imagery. Very nice! *Smile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't see any errors in your story.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I love how you awaken the senses of your readers, by causing them to imagine things like the heat of the sun, and the feel of the grains of sand.

I also enjoyed the how you made each color you named special...The blues, browns, grays, green...You made whatever color you mentioned come to life in your readers mind.

You really did a great job with your descriptive story. It's upbeat and inspirational too...I feel like going outside into the sun now. *Bigsmile*

Thanks for sharing. *Smile*

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Review by Maryann Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a great story about a family that came to the rescue of a little baby bunny.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Wow! What an experience! I guess these are the times when we say, "Never a dull moment..."

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors in your story.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: What! What! What! Gosh, you had me on the edge of my seat throughout the story, and then you ended it with a VERY suspenseful closing! What happened to the rabbit?

Great job in telling this story of the rabbit rescue. You wrote it so well, that it really held my interest right to the end. *Smile*

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Review of Hotly Scored  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a romantic bitter sweet love poem.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oooh this one is well done! I really felt you described the hurt of a lost love in a very unique way. *Smile*

*Check2*ERRORS: No errors here.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I loved the gentle rhyme of your poem. It flowed smoothly without seeming at all forced.

I could feel the tender emotion in your poem, of the desire for a love that we can not have...Like touching a flame and getting scored.

Thanks for sharing. It was a pleasure to read...And a perfect size too! *Smile*

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Review of crumby steps  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a funny story about a day in the life...

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I found your story to be very humorous. It's unique and your creativity shows. Nice work.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I absolutely loved the punch line at the end of your story! *Laugh*

I also think the title is perfect! One simply needs to read the story to get it. *Smile*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: Your story is very humorous, but it deserves some polishing up.

First, I would suggest that you go back to edit the content rating of the item. You didn't choose anything in that place.

You might also want to choose a few genres. Right now, you picked 'other' a couple of times. Comedy, might be your best bet there. With so many genres to choose from, you might find at least three...Adventure maybe?

More WDC members will read your poem if they have a better idea of what it's about. The content rating and genres will be the hint they need.

Next, I would suggest to proof read your story again. There are a few typos that you might want to fix. You used the small letter i a lot for the word, I.
Also you wrote typos such as, "I madea friend of a...". 'Made' and 'a' should be separated.

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Review of Slow Rush  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem about nature and the sea.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Your poem seemed to have a unique style of no rhyme or reason. ...Phrases randomly clumped together. I left me a little lost at times, but at the same time, it added to the poetic beauty.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: You used really creative descriptive words. I love the thought of orange-pink clouds and seagulls.

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Review by Maryann Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem about moving on after a bad relationship.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: What a very inspirational poem. I'm sure that others who have been in similar situations would find strength and new found hope after reading your poem.

*Check2*ERRORS:I didn't find any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART:You succeeded in putting down in words all of the thoughts, hopes and joys of moving on. Nice work. *Smile*

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION:This is a poem about thoughts of a dark soul.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: After reading the first two lines, I felt that this might have been a vampire poem. Then, your poem seemed to change. Words of blood spilling onto shoes, and wickedness within made me think that it's more of a poem about guilt and evil feelings.

You did a great job with creativity. Your dramatic poetic words leave your readers with deep thoughts. Nice work.

*Check2*ERRORS: Great proof reading! No errors here. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I found your poem to be very intense. The strong feelings of conflicting emotion flowed throughout the entire piece.

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a writing project about Vampires.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oooh! This story has the makings of a GREAT story! You are a very talented writer, and it certainly shows. I hope you plan on adding more because I think this is a fantastic introduction. *Delight*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Wow! This part is only an introduction, but already I can feel that it's going to be a chilling and captivating story.

Your introduction seems so exciting...An airplane crash...Dead bodies...And the talk of vampires!

You wrote with excitement and suspense. Great job in creativity. *Delight*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: Your brief description is the very first thing seen by our WDC members. You'll want that to be perfect. You left out an 'h' in wheter It should be whether.

One would say, "There was no sign of life." It's not necessary to say, "lifes."

I like the idea of waking up in the midnight. I think it adds something to the mystery of your story. I wake up sometimes, though, in the middle of the night.

Here you wrote: "Not the cold of the rain or the freezing wind that scared this 19 year old boy, but it was something..." -- This doesn't seem to flow smoothly to me. I think the word 'that' should be left out.

This sentence also seems to need a bit of help: "Something he could never imagine it do exists in this world." For one thing, 'do' could probably be left out.

This is a great story so far. I hope you will continue to write it. *Delight*


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Review of Dear God  Open in new Window.
Review by Maryann Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem prayer.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: What a sweet poem Wyn! I found it to be very touching and tender.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't notice any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I could feel the emotion in this sensitive and spiritual poem. Sometimes we get help and answers just by talking about it, don't we. You put such pretty thoughts down in words. Nice job. *Smile*

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Review by Maryann Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a short 'letter' story, written for a contest.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: How did you do in the contest? I hope you did well because I thought this one was really pretty. *Smile*

Gosh, I think my soul has attention deficit because it keeps distracting my mind a lot. LOL *Bigsmile*

*Check2*ERRORS: No errors here. Nice work. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: This certainly is a unique and creative idea for a story. What would ones mind say to it's soul...I think you answered that well. The mind is always busy, even at night, but the soul knows to take a moment here and there to 'think' about the little things that make life sweet. *Smile*

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Review of Pigeon Parade  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a nature poem about birds...Pigeons in particular.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oh Harry I really enjoyed your poem! I've always been fascinated with birds. I make my husband crazy by always asking him what type of bird we see. Lately he's been just making things up. On our last trip to Mexico, he called every bird above water a sea bird! LOL

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors in your beautiful poem story.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I thought you painted a picture well of the scenes in your backyard. I could picture all of the pretty birds you named happily eating their food. I loved the story about the pigeon guy! Thanks for sharing this entertaining poem. *Smile*

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Review of Golden Letters  Open in new Window.
Review by Maryann Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is the story about the dark and scary life of a young man.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I must say that your story left many unanswered questions in my mind. It almost seems like the introduction chapter of a novel, which teases the mind and leaves the reader with enough intrigue to read on. Where were these people? What was the book? What was this room John was thrown into? ...Solitary confinement?

Congratulations, btw, on having your story featured in the newsletter. *Smile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors. Nice work. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: You did an amazing job with 'flash backs' and such. That is not always an easy thing to do without causing confusion. I thought you succeeded in expressing different scenes from John's experiences.

Your descriptions were great, though as I mentioned earlier, I was left wanting more explanations.

Your story was intense enough so that the reader feels the fear and thoughts of the main character, as well as the hatred of the men kicking him...This example, of course, was from the panic scene when John sees the door to room 101.

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Review of Why I Write  Open in new Window.
Review by Maryann Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: These are the thoughts about writing by one Writing.Com author.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Thank you for taking the time to write an explanation of your writing. I think you take a very unique approach in writing, as compared to much of what I come across on Writing.Com. I'm looking forward to reading your other work. *Smile*

I'll have to say, though, that I disagree with your statement that much work ends up in the "dust bin of history." How many so called 'chick flicks', sci-fi, or otherwise non-sense movies bring back fond memories of friends and fun? Sometimes we'll remember a book that we read at a special time in our life...During a hospital stay...During a beach trip...etc. Just because one doesn't change the world doesn't mean that one has no purpose or meaning. Each 'type' is important and needed to add variety in our vast world.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors in your well written work.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I'm much impressed with your writing background. You seem to be knowledgeable and talented far above many of your other WDC peers.

I liked that you name-dropped movies, books, writers, and philosophers that we're all familiar with, to make your points of explanation.

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Review of Promise Me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: These are the song lyrics for a song of love.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oooh I could picture this one on the radio! Since it's summer and wedding time of the year, I could picture this one ending up as couples wedding songs too! *Delight*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: There are too many songs about dumb things that hardly make sense. It's refreshing to find a true love song. *Smile*

You did a good job with writing your expressions of love. I especially liked the thoughts of rewinding the clock to take it slow through all the best times. Great creativity.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I think it's time to change your brief descriptions. Instead of talking about how you think your work has grammar problems, I would write something like, "A song of love for R&B or Soft Rock."

In one verse you mentioned that it's a song for a person you loved all your life. Then, in another verse, you wrote, "... I was broken till I met you." I imagined a sweet love song from one childhood sweetheart to another, but then I was a little confused. Great writing though...I hope you do get your songs on the radio someday. *Delight*

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Review of Heaven On Earth  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem about making good choices.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I feel that this is a very inspirational poem. I like the way you began with descriptions, and had it lead somewhere...In this case, you were trying to express that it's better to not fight.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: You showed creativity with your descriptions, and upbeat mood. You expressed in several different ways that fighting is not a good choice.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: You used question marks here and there throughout your poem, but I think one was needed at the very end after, "So why don't we pick right/
And have heaven on earth?"

You chose 'other' as the type of poem this is. I think if you ever decide to polish this poem up a little, you might pick 'inspirational' while you're editing it.

Maybe you might change your brief description to something other than "I just kinda threw this together..." "Which would you choose..." or something like that...might strike more intrigue and get you more viewers in the future. You can always add the brief description you have now as an added introduction before the beginning of your poem. *Delight*

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Review of Don't Worry Mom  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem written for the love of ones mother.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I guess we never really know how our own mothers feel until we're mothers ourselves.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: You did a nice job in expressing the feelings that children understand when they grow and become parents themselves.

I really liked the ending...Now when the grown child says, "Don't worry mom" it's to say 'I love you'.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I don't think the 'but' is needed to start the sentence in the second paragraph. I would just leave it as, "The best has already been given by you."

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION:This is a terrific article about things we could do when we receive gift points along with a review.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Hi Anastasia! It's great to have you active again on our fun site. *Delight*

Your article caught my attention, and I really enjoyed reading it.

*Check2*ERRORS: Perfect five! It was fun to read, and I didn't see any errors. Nice work. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: This is really something that, I'm sure, we all think about. When someone gives me a review that really makes me smile, I always want to give them gift points. ...But what do we do when that reviewer already included gps with the review? It is a dilemma, but I think you gave a lot of helpful ideas.

We feel funny 'returning' the gift, so instead we can do some other nice thing in return. CNotes...Auction Donations...Etc.

So, here are some gift points for you along with this review. Like you final suggestion says, a simple "Thank You" is all that's needed here. *Bigsmile*

Very creative and helpful article. *Delight*

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem in an interesting, stream of consciousness, style.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Gosh, I didn't even realize that your poem was one sentence until I actually read the note at the bottom. I guess I was so entranced with how touching your poem was. I can't imagine that style of poetry is easy to write, but you made yours look easy with effortless flow. Nice work. *Smile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I could feel the emotion and sad atmosphere in the poem. It was very touching and a pleasure to read. Great job with that 'stream of consciousness' style! I'm impressed. *Smile*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is an inspirational poem about angels.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oh what a terrific poem Harry! I will always think of your poem whenever I hear a howl. *Delight*

*Check2*ERRORS: No errors in this well-written item.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I loved the story behind the meaning of the howl. This was pleasant to read, and now I think I'll be dreaming about wolves howling at the moon tonight. *Laugh*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: The story poem of a seven year old girl.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: No, I guess I'm not bright enough to figure it out, as it says in your brief description. I read it over twice, but I still feel that I'm missing something. It was entertaining and suspenseful though. *Smile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I did enjoy reading your poem. It was written well, and kept my attention from beginning to end. With that said, I found it hard to follow at times. There seemed to be a lot to guess. Did this all take place at a pool? Did the girl do things to try to get more attention? Did the nervous dad imagine the worst? Maybe another stanza added to clear up the questions...


*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: This was almost like a puzzle! Maybe a note at the bottom to explain the 'orange' part... It was fun to read. *Delight*

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Review of The Match  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is the story of an arranged marriage.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: What a sweet story! I found your story to be entertaining and enjoyable from the beginning to the end.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors in your story.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I just love stories that have happy endings. Who would have thought that things would work out well for 16 year old Kiran.

I like how I was able to feel for the main character. She seemed so sweet and helpless to be thrown into a marriage just to bring the two people's together. I'm glad you wrote your story so that it all worked out well. The guy was very nice, and Kiran actually liked him. *Smile*

You showed how these two people had different cultures, philosophy and backgrounds well. I especially liked reading about Kiran's first time sitting on a cushioned chair and listening to a radio.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: You're story is really terrific, but I would have liked to know more about how this marriage was going to benefit both communities. What did the communities get out of this.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a small poem, which I think is about peer pressure.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I'm not sure that I get the message in your poem. I'll assume that it's about bad peer pressure. The title didn't seem to make it clear because ambition should be a good thing rather than bad.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't see any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Great job in writing a sonnet! I remember how I used to love to read the sonnets from the master writers in literature. It's refreshing to read a sonnet on WDC. I hope you will write more of them. *Delight*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: Why not write a little information about your poem as a note under it. You might explain in brief the thoughts you tried to express in your poem.

You might also add a little bit about what a sonnet is, for members who are not so familiar with them. *Smile*

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Review of Scared Stiff  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION:This is a the intense story about a front porch pest.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oh gosh! Your poor wife! I think I would still be getting nightmares from it...And I would probably not leave the house without my bucket of water ever again! LOL *Laugh*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't see any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I liked the suspense of what might happen next. So, the skunk never actually sprayed? Right? It all happened so fast in your story, but I thought for sure he would...

You did a great job in keeping the action of the story going. How did you do in the Laugh contest?

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a terrific cooking story...

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oh gosh! What an experience! I like how calm you were and you thought fast to let it all fall into a cookie sheet! You showed a great sense of humor, and you really made the best of the situation. *Delight*

*Check2*ERRORS: This was written well. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Your story was lots of fun to read. ...Not because the cake didn't turn out well, but because you can laugh at it now and your good humor shows to your readers.

I actually caught some great ideas that I might use someday...The recipe for one thing...And to add foil around the side of the pan. I would have never thought of that. It all sounded really tasty. *Smile*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: You wrote that you made this on Mother's Day of this year. I know that people will enjoy this item for many years to come. I would change that to 'this Mother's Day, 2009,', or something like that. Otherwise, please remember to edit the item next year. *Bigsmile*

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Rated: E | (3.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem about vampires.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Great job in writing this thrilling poem about vampires.

*Check2*ERRORS: Here, you wrote, "No don't leave me i didn't mean it". It's best not to make the word 'i' a small letter.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: You succeeded in expressing darkness in your poem. I liked the idea of meshing the last line with the title.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: You have an 'E' rating for this poem. With lines like: "We want weed...
Lust is needed" and, "She's the perfect body to spread my seed, Quit hittin' me baby kiss me", I'm sure you didn't mean for an eight year old to read this poem. There are lots of kids on our site.

Also, you set your genre as 'other'. You will probably get more views for your poem, if you edit your item and add something like horror, mystery, supernatural, crime, or dark to your genre choices. *Smile*

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