Grand! Righteous! Wonderful!
OMG! You have an appreciable job. I liked your work of poem, a poem of love to parents, a poem about parents, a poem about roles of parents, a poem about love of parents, a poem about parental love, a poem of parental love, a poem of parental roles.
I enjoyed your poem, the free verse, the free and natural flow of thoughts, the generalized view about parents, memorable role of parents to children, the dimensional and contributory roles of parents, the concept, the story, the respectable taletelling, free style of expression, eternal roles of parents, ever memorable status of parents, and role of appreciation of parents, nature and status of parents, the imagery, the word visuals, and the read.
Title of the poem is appropriate, significant, generalized, traditional, complete, correct and common, if not catchy and comprehensive; as I expect a title of a poem may be catchy and compact also.
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Our parents
(Our Parents)
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Our parents
With their white hair,
A humble sight,
With their soft voice,
A shudder hand,
In our memories,
Are forever,
Our best friends,
Our parents.
Never tired,
Always waiting for us,
Never exhausted,
Always helping us,
Our soul mates,
Our precious gift in life,
Our parents.
And even if one day,
won't see them again,
In our, sometimes too quick,
adventurous life train,
In our memories,
There are forever,
Our parents.
(Our Parents)
(With their white hair,
a humble sight
with their soft voice,
a shudder hand
in our memories,
are forever,
our best friends,
our parents.
Never tired,
always waiting for us,
never exhausted,
always helping us,
our soul mates,
our precious gift in life,
our parents.
And even if one day,
won't see them again
in our, sometimes too quick,
adventurous life train
in our memories,
there are forever,
our parents.)
Please check, I have humbly offered some suggestions as edits, in the brackets, as above.
Well done; thank you for sharing this wonderful, righteous poem with us.
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