Be a positive thinker!
Build character!
OMG! You have done a nice job.
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I have enjoyed the story, the moral message, the ethical and rational message, the stand and state of positive living, the exemplification and showing the use of positive living, the discussion and lessons in positive thinking and living, the warning and limitations in living, the imagery, the word visuals, the dramatic appeal of the positive living in reality, the free and fair flow of thoughts, the rhymes, the rhythms in taletelling of the theme, and the read.
Title of the poem is appropriate and significant, if not catchy; the title is subjective, traditional, common, textual and informative; I expect a title of a poem maybe, in addition, comprehensive, comprehensible, correct, complete, compact and catchy. The title of the poem gives readers a view about a lesson to be taught, a lesson on positive thinking or positive living and you know, very few readers would be interested to learn one more lesson, but when anything is told in a catchy order and spirit with some newness, for we all run after learning, seeing, experiencing, reading and watching new, anything we think would be new, something new, newness of anything appeals and becomes catchy to readers, I think, feeling for newness, freshness is always catchy and can hook readers for the read of the work, because, I think, people (readers) do not feel interested to read and learn anything comes as a lesson as if a teacher teaches a subject and a learner loses interest freely, unless there is compulsion.
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One hopes to build a character of force,
By accepting much failure, as a matter of course.
Upon acceptance of the outcomes of failure,
One’s positive thoughts begin building one’s character.
(One hopes to build a character of force
by accepting much failure, as a matter of course.
Upon acceptance of the outcomes of failure
one’s positive thoughts begin building one’s character.)
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No single achievement is quite like success,
Nor a collection of efforts, under ample duress;
But to win and to lead, by stalwart example,
Is productive and pure, and can stomp any rival!
(No single achievement is quite like success
nor a collection of efforts, under ample duress
but, to win and to lead, by stalwart example
is productive and pure, and can stomp any rival!)
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The example of winning and leading pertain
To courage and hope, like a steaming freight train…
We must bravely lead that similar cast,
Armed with the glory and mistakes of the past…
(The example of winning and leading pertain
to courage and hope, like a steaming freight train.
We must bravely lead that similar cast
armed with the glory and mistakes of the past.)
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Positive thinking takes courage and hope;
One proudly says “Yep!” though the answer is “Nope.”
Failing, yet healthy, one can say “What the heck!” –
Bucking those broncos can sure break one’s neck!
(Positive thinking takes courage and hope
one proudly says, “Yep!”, though the answer is “Nope.”
Failing, yet healthy, one can say “What the heck!”
bucking those broncos can sure break one’s neck!)
Please check, I have humbly offered some suggestions as edits, for smoother read of the poem, in the brackets, as above.
Well done; thank you for sharing this poem with us.
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