First Impression: Rosa's statement in the first paragraph hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax surprised me without disappointing me.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.
First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the noises of the night battle. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.
What I liked: The definitions at the beginning of this story helped me understand what was going on in the battle.
Final Thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the active descriptions of the battle.
First Impression: The first stanza of this free verse poem establishes the speaker, theme, and subject. The rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while showing service to community from the speaker's point of view.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last stanza is my favorite. I like this stanza because it ask a question.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of its subject.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Dave watching for illegal aliens. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it was a surprise.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main characters.
First Impression: The poems follow the stated form and looks good on the page. The first poem establishes the theme and mood of the poem. The following poems carry thought in the first poem forward and give the reader something to think about.
dd Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last poem in this group is my favorite. I like this poem because it is inspiring.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this group of poem because of the New Year theme.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Dave not getting a speeding ticket. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Suzanne is my favorite character. I like her because she is an intriguing and sympathetic individual.
Final thoughts: The climax was a bit of a surprise. However, it was not disappointing.
First Impression: The quote at the beginning of this prose essay hooked me. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while showing how empathy can help a person's faith grow.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is a thought provoking essay encouraging readers to look for empathy in their own live.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because of the subject.
First Impression: Kate;s request hooked me. The conversation and interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Jasmine is my favorite character. I like her because she is sympathetic and intriguing.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with The brittle beauty of a bitter frost. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to make this story the beginning of a longer story or novel about the individual that Sophia spoke of.
I like: Reverend Timothy Clarridge is my favorite character. I like him because he is an intriguing and a sympathetic character.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the Reverend Timothy Clarridge.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker being out of the hospital. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while reminding the reader that faith in God is the answer to all of our problems.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is my favorite phrase, inside God's miraculous miracles are taking place, I like this phrase because it reminds us that there are always miracles occurring in our lives, even when we do not see them.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking essay a 5.0 because of its emphasis on faith.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of Sergeant Augustus Trenchfort. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it made me smile.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Sergeant Gus.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker accusing winter of being a malingerer. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while making the reader smile.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The way this letter uses comedy to express many people's feelings of winter.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this letter because of its subject.
First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, speaker, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other. The rhythm moves the narrative and humorous emotions forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last stanza is my favorite. I like this stanza because it made me smile.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the subject.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Ryan trudging through the snow. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is my favorite sentence, God will work in your hearts and draw you together again." I like this sentence because it is true.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the message about God working in our hearts.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with John unwrapping the painting and hanging it up. The interaction and conversation between the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like this part because it showed the love between the father and son.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the way it showed the love of father and son.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker going to a soup kitchen. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The similes used in this story are fresh and descriptive. This is my favorite simile, the hot smell of greasy fried ham hit me like a tsunami.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because it shows the spirit of Christmas.
First Impression: The first paragraph of this essay hooked me with gratitude being the center of positive reinforcement. The narrative moves the message of the importance of gratitude and a thank you note forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The the logical reason the author encourages a thank you note as part of positive reinforcement.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this inspiring essay because of its message.
First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the suggestion from the audience. The description are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: My favorite part of the story is the climax. I like the climax because it was the logical end to the story.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker watching her son dance around the Christmas tree. The description are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and inter action among the characters built the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: My favorite part of this story is the lesson that Jeffrey taught his mother. I like this part because it showed the true meaning of Christmas.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the lesson.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker running late. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the character builds the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: My favorite part of the story is the way the speaker's fear is revealed. I like that part because it was authentic.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the speaker.
First Impression: The first stanza establishes the speaker, form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other. The rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last stanza is my favorite. I like this stanza because it expresses the hope of every believer of becoming one with the Creator.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0, because it gave me something to think about concerning becoming one with the Creator.
First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the description of Nebula-9's clouds. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last paragraph is my favorite. I like this paragraph because it climaxed the stories plot with hope.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this well-written story because of the way it showed the emotion of hope.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the girl walking into the woods. The conversation among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: My favorite part is when the purple dragon appeared. I like this part because the dragon was benign.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this version of Little Red Riding Hoodl.
First Impression: The first stanza of this poem establishes the form, mood, theme, and speaker. The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of patience and hope forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: My favorite line is, Patience is mine. I like this line because it emphasizes the theme of the poem and its repetition gives the poem unity.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the message of patience.
First Impression: The first stanza of this free verse poem establishes its speaker, theme, and mood. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of hope forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, of america's promises. I suggest changing america's to America's, because it refers to the country.
I like: The last stanza is my favorite. I like this stanza because it closes the poem with the reason hope is renewed.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed hope.
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