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, I am reviewing "The 23 Enigma"

, because I discovered it under online authors.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other while the rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite, because it climaxes the poem with a question.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because it gave me something to thin about concerning the number 23.

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#4714523

Review of My Blinking Brother

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Hi, Malister

, I am reviewing "My Blinking Brother"

, because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"

forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's brother leering at her. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while showing the sibling rivalry through the actions of the characters.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it showed how much the siblings cared for each other.

Final thoughts:

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#4714403

Review of The Long Journey Home

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hi, Malister

, I am reviewing "The Long Journey Home"

, because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with death cannot stop the dance. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite sentence, Hope that life is always worth living. I like this sentence because it is true and it reveals that the speaker has changed in some way.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the lesson about life being worth living.

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#4714388

Review of God's Messenger

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, Weirdone-Back in the games

, I am reviewing "God's Messenger"

, because I discovered it on The Hub under recently awarded items.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker wanting to tell about Evelyn. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while revealing the relationship between him and his sister.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it showed a change in the speaker and his relationship with his sister.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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#4714272

Review of The Owl, The Best Day

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, Anna Marie Carlson

, I am reviewing "The Owl, The Best Day"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first stanza hooked me with the owl landing on the arm of a man. The rhythm and rhyming words complimented each other, while the rhythm moved the narrative and emotions of hope forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical probems.

I like: These are my favorite line, because of the rhyme on flight and delight

And peaceful was its flight, the
Genuine pureness of delight.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0, because of the interaction between the owl and the sailor.

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#4714246

Review of Magic Giant Bubble Gum

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, Weirdone-Back in the games

, I am reviewing "Magic Giant Bubble Gum"

, because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the theme, form, and mood. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and laughter forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, Now, there's chewing gum everywhere. I like this line because it brings back memories of my younger years, when I bought bubble gum.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the subject.

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#4714115

Review of The Dream that wasn't- Contest

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, John

, I am reviewing "The Dream that wasn't- Contest"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the question. The speaker moved the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this story. They revealed the main character as a sympathetic and intriguing person.

The climax is my favorite part of the story because the main character turned to God.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the speaker.

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#4713961

Review of No Way Out

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, Adherennium

, I am reviewing "No Way Out"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first stanza of this poem establishes the form, mood, and theme. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first stanza is my favorite because it hooked me with the gateless gate.

Final thoughts: This thought-provoking poem that causes the reader to think about eternal life.

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#4713873

Review of Girl with Child

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi, Weirdone-Back in the games

, I am reviewing "Girl with Child"

, because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "

forum page.

First Impression: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page. The rhythm moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: These are my favorite lines. I like this lines because they cause the reader to stop and think about the plot before continuing to read the poem.

Swelled with dwarf?
Swelled with goblin?

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because it was about The Hobbit.

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#4713855

Review of Oxygène

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi, Adherennium

, I am reviewing "Oxygène"

, because I discovered it in "Romance/Love Newsletter (September 27, 2023)"

.

First Impression: The first line of this poem hooked me, I wanted to know when the speaker visited the past. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of love forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The list line of this poem is my favorite, because it suggest that true love is timeless.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0, because of the way it showed the emotion of love.

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#4713753

Review of Reflection of my soul

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, igneel

, I am reviewing "Reflection of my soul"

, because I discovered it under Online Authors.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the poem's form, mood, speaker, and theme. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This poem does a good job of revealing the emotion of hopelessness. The second stanza contains the most emotion.

Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this poem, because they help reveal the emotions.

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#4713745

Review of The Paint Incident

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, Jacky

, I am reviewing "The Paint Incident"

, because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"

forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Billy being covered with paint. The conversation and interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part, because it revealed the father as being smarter than the boys thought.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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#4713743

Review of The Forever Dream

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi, billywilcox, I am Prosperous Snow celebrating

, I am reviewing "The Forever Dream"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the sleeping bag trying to strangle the speaker. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite simile, as if it were a living creature trying to get in and gobble me up. I like this simile because it it fresh and descriptive.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because the action kept me focused on the movement of the plot and the character.

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#4713552

Review of The Whole Truth

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Hi, THANKFUL SONALI Magical Days!

, I am reviewing "The Whole Truth"

, because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker adding to the blended families confusion for a week. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace while building toward the laughter.

Suggestions: A type in this word, thaoughtful, I suggest changing it to thoughtful.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story because it made me laugh.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this funny story because it made me laugh.

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#4713412

Review of Message in the Paper

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, QueenNormaJean Julyishereboom!

, I am reviewing "Message in the Paper"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the question. The conversation moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building toward the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part is John's reaction to the giant standing in front of him. I like this part because it made me laugh.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.

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#4713339

Review of How Can It Be?

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, Kenzie

, I am reviewing "How Can It Be?"

, because I discovered it on the spiritual genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with wars having religious undertones. This article gives the reader a great deal to think about concerning His Holiness Christ and His teachings.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because it ask important question about His Holiness Christ and what He taught. Christ teachings were an essential part of His revelation. His teaching came directly from God, the Creator, and cannot or should not be dismissed as those of merely a great teacher.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking article a 5.0 because it gave me something to think about.

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#4713192

Review of Schrödinger's Cat

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, Anni Pon

, I am reviewing "Schrödinger's Cat"

, because I discovered it under online authors.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, plot, and theme of this free verse poem. The rhythm moves the plot and emotions of wonder forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it gave me something to think about concerning faith.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking poem a 5.0 because it gave me some thing to think about.

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#4713189

Review of God's Way, God's Time

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, lbidler

, I am reviewing "God's Way, God's Time"

, because I discovered it under online authors .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the definition of devotional writing.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite phrase, Devotional writing needs to be inspired by God. I like this phrase because it is something everyone who writes about their spiritual path needs to remember.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this prose essay because it reminded me that writing about my spiritual path depend upon what God wants me to write.

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#4713188

Review of Through the Cracks

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Hi, billywilcox, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating

, I am reviewing "Through the Cracks"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Rachel Peck falling through the cracks. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: An issue with an indent, {indent{"Yes,.

I like: This is my favorite simile, set her ablaze as if her bones were made of kindling, I like this simile because it is fresh, descriptive, and shows the emotion of fear.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the descriptions. They kept me focused on the plot and the characters.

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#4713065

Review of Dawn

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi, DragonWrites~The Fire Faerie~

, I am reviewing "Dawn"

, because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (September 20, 2023)"

.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and plot of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, You're dying today. I like this line because it gives unity to the poem and expresses the emotion of sorrow.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the speaker.

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#4713063

Review of Proofreading Profit (Winer, Crmp! ;-))

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Hi, THANKFUL SONALI Magical Days!

, I am reviewing "Proofreading Profit (Winer, Crmp! ;-))"

, because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the live coverage from the Biggest Hotel. The dialogue moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building toward the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I enjoyed reading about the strawberry mousse covering the street.

Final thoughts: This story is a good example of why proofreading is important.

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#4712940

Review of A Day in Scarborough

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi, Christopher Roy Denton

, I am reviewing "A Day in Scarborough "

, because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (September 20, 2023)"

.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with it being the most depressing day of Bob's life. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story, because it was a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the happy ending.

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#4712913

Review of The Ancient Chest

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi, BlackAdder

, I am reviewing "The Ancient Chest"

, because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (September 20, 2023)"

.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Oliver being Cassandra's most trusted servant. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story because it was a surprise.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because the action kept me focused on the plot and the characters.

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#4712901

Review of Repetition

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi, Beholden

, I am reviewing "Repetition"

, because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (September 20, 2023)"

.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Konstanz Bleeg talking to the room. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Konstanz Bleeg is an intriguing and sympathetic characters.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because it made me smile.

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#4712801

Review of The Creators at the Pleasure Paradise

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Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

Hi, PureSciFi

, I am reviewing "The Creators at the Pleasure Paradise"

, because I discovered it on the Request Review page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with multi-colored liquid coming out of someone's mouth. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: A word choice in this phrase, monitors was behind him. I suggest changing was to were because there are multiple monitors.

I like: The descriptions of how the DeathBringer kill his victims is creative and well-written.

Final thoughts: This is a creative and intriguing story. The interaction among the characters held my focus.

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