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Review of The Fire Dragons  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, LightinMind , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Fire Dragons" , because I discovered it on the short story page.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with DNA changes. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The first half of the story reveals both Zhang Jin's personality and fears.

The best part of the story's second section is the description of the lab hidden in the Tibetan Himalayas. The description was detailed enough for readers to visualize it in their minds. This section also reveals that Zhang, despite his attempt to suppress it, has a conscience.

The climax of this story is the logical conclusion of Zhang's conscience coming realizing what could, and probably would, happen if the lab and everything associated with it weren't destroyed.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Zhang is an intriguing and sympathetic character, who is changed by the project he worked on.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Zhang and the lesson the story suggested.

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Review of The New Order  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, SizeFanDude79 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The New Order" , because I discovered it on the fiction page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Nora being dragged by a super mutant. The descriptions are part of the action and moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite simile, like one would snap a stalk of celery. I like this simile because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final thoughts: The description of the transformation of the women was well-written, with enough details on how it was done to satisfy any questions the reader may have.

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Review of The Smith  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Whiskersandhersisters , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Smith" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (August 23, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Coalie’s description and his profession. This is a good character description because it gives information about Coalie that arouses the reader's curiosity. The reader wants to know more about Coalie.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Coalie is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this character description because of the person it described.

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Review of Take a Hike  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, THANKFUL SONALI HAPPY WDC 24 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Take a Hike" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (August 23, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the number of people on the hiking team and their title. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, knew is team-mates, I suggest changing is to his.

I like: John is an intriguing and sympathetic character. I also like the end where everyone way praying.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of John.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, PastorJuan , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Beyond My Wildest Dreams" , because I discovered it in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (August 23, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the Tailless Runner entering the planet's atmosphere. The speaker moved the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it showed that each species jumped to the same conclusion.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the conclusion each species jumped to.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, LdyPhoenix , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Every Shut Eye Ain't Sleep" , because I discovered it in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (August 23, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Leah failing in her mission. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: In this phrase, she could not moved, I suggest changing moved to move because move sounds better in this context.

I like: Leah is an intriguing and sympathetic character, who is a strong woman.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Leah.

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Review of Contest Entries  
for entry "How is it possible?" 
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Angelica Weatherby-Fallishere , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Contest Entries"  "How is it possible?" , because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the volcano turning blue. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because the speaker knew why the volcano turned blue.

Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice are good choices for this story because they focused on the action.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Mahe , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Where I'm From (Warendorf Edition)" , because I discovered it in "Poetry Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are love and nostalgia.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite. I like this stanza because it closes the poem with love and mourning.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because I the way the author express the emotions through the memories.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, John Farley , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Knowledge of Nothing" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The second paragraph of this prose essay hooked me with the experience of infinite ignorance. The author describes his realization clearly, so that the reader can understand what happened.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because it reveals the change in the way the author live his life.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this well-written and thought-provoking essay because of the view of enlightenment it gave.

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Review of ZAZEN  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, ridinghhood-p.boutilier , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "ZAZEN" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and tranquil emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, of aspiration and inspiration. I like this line because of the internal rhyme.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it show tranquility.

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Review of My Prayer  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Becky Simpson , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "My Prayer" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions of love and hope forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first stanza is my favorite, I like the first stanza because of the rhyme on pray and stray.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this prayer-poem because of the way it showed the spiritual emotions.

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Review of Jack and Jill  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, QueenNormaJean gettinPomsready , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Jack and Jill" , because I discovered it on the folklore genre page.

First Impression: The question about the time warp hooked me. The conversation between Jack and Jill move the plot forward at a good pace. The questions build the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax was a surprise, while being the logical ending to the story.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this take on one of my favorite childhood stories.

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Review of Sol'ginok  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Jtpete 1986 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Sol'ginok" , because I discovered it on the mythology genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's statement in the first sentence. The descriptions are part of the action and moves the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Sol'ginok, Soul Stealer, is a name that will strike fear into anyone.

Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice are good choices, because they revealed Sol'ginok, as an intriguing and unsympathetic character.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Joey's So Hot He's Melting , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Music is it a poem" , because I discovered it in .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: These are my favorite lines, From the strings, cups, reeds, and skins pulled at various degrees of tension/Come harmonies to calm and cool our dissension. I like these lines because of the rhyme on tension and dissension.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem because of the subject.

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Review of Let It Grow  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Amethyst Angel🍂🧡 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Let It Grow" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Joseph pruning the rose bush. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Joseph is my favorite character. I like him because he is sympathetic, intriguing, and does not give up in his attempt to win Fiona back.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0, because the descriptions showed the beauty of the green house.

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Review of Thank You  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Chris Haines , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Thank You" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite, I like this stanza because it expresses hope.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful prayer-poem because of the way it expressed the speaker's gratitude.

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Review of Meditation  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Going Away For Two Months , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Meditation" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm of this free verse poem moves the narrative and tranquil emotions forward a a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The third stanza is my favorite because it tells the reader the results of meditation.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because it encourages the reader to meditate, while showing one of the methods of meditation.

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Review of My Prayer  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Chris Haines , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "My Prayer" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first line establishes the mood and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, Help so my future holds your face. I like this line because it makes an unselfish request.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful prayer-poem because of the way it expresses faith.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Kenzie , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Whisper Writings, Whisper Prayers" , because I discovered it on the spiritual genre page.

First Impression: The quote from Logan Pearsall Smith hooked me. It caused me to stop reading for a few seconds to think about the quote. The questions in the second paragraph made me smile, because sometimes, when I pause to read what I wrote, I wonder what is is I am attempting to convey to either the reader or myself.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite. I like this paragraph because when I transcribe items from a handwritten journal to a computer document the words do change. Until now I have referred to it as editing. Now I wonder if its my soul whispering to me.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking article a 5.0 because it gave me something to think about concerning my writing.

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Review of God be my Brother  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Spiritual Dawning , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "God be my Brother" , because I discovered it on the religious genre page.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the poem's form, mood, speaker, and theme. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the spiritual emotions of love and faith forward at a good ace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, In the name of love and the Holy spirit. I like this line because it establishes the poem as a prayer.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it showed the spiritual emotions.

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Review of Dead Man Walking  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Reviewed in association with The "Flights of Fantasy Group"  August Review Raid.

Hi, K Hawthorne , I read and reviewed "Dead Man Walking" , because the teaser, under the title, aroused my curiosity.

The first paragraph hooked me with Fracshon and Loti ascending the mountain pass. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like the similes and metaphors used in this story because they are fresh and descriptive. I especially like this simile, his words swirling around like withered old leaves, because it is visual.

I also like the way Fraschon is the focus of the story, because it suggest that Loti may not be following him.

Another thing I like about this story is the climax because it left the reader wondering what would happen when Fraschon found the cave. The reader also wonders if Loti is still behind his friend.

Fraschon is an intriguing character that can be either sympathetic or unsympathetic depending upon his actions.

I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to consider writing a longer story or novel about what Fraschon finds in the cave, if he ever reaches it.

I enjoyed reading this story because the descriptions kept me focused on the characters and the movement of the plot.

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Review of Who Do I Believe?  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Shadow Prowler-Spreading Love , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Who Do I Believe?" , because I discovered it on the relationship genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph of this essay hooked me with the questions. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while showing lessons she has learned on who to trust.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The fourth paragraph is my favorite, because it encourages the reader to listen to the Holy Spirit.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking essay a 5.0, because of the advice on learning who to trust.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Massive Friendly Derg , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Why I'm Useful As a Dragon" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The rhythm of this prose poem flows easily from line to line and encourages the reader to read it aloud.

Suggestions: In this line, I can fly them places or just for fun. I suggest removing or because it does not appear to fit the meaning of the line.

I like: This is my favorite line, I can heat up frozen pizza or waffles. I like this line because a dragon would make these jobs so much easier.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this prose poem because of the dragon.

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Review of Renewal  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, lbidler , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Renewal" , because I discovered it on the inspirational genre page.

First Impression: The quote from Jeremiah aroused my curiosity and drew me into this prose essay. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while revealing the strength of her faith.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because of the stated goal of looking for ways to bear fruit,

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because of its focus on studying the word of God.

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Review of The Final Journal  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Damon Nomad , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Final Journal" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the knock on Parker's door. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters built the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This simile caught my eye: like an altar in a sunlit church. I like it because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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