First Impression: The quote from Isaiah hooked me. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while revealing a good way to study the sacred scriptures.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: My favorite part were the questions: Who are You Lord? What do You want from me? I like the question because they are spoken directly to God. I also like them because they are good questions to ask when meditating.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay, because it revealed a different way to study the sacred scriptures.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the man walking on the side of the road carrying a gas can. The conversation and interaction among the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like David because he is an intriguing and sympathetic characters.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the conversation between the characters.
First Impression: The first paragraph of this article hooked me with navigating a world that blurred the lines between fiction and reality. Each paragraph give information about this intriguing and frightening alternate reality that causes the reader to want to know more.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last paragraph is my favorite. I especially like the last sentence that suggests true growth and transformation occur.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well written article a 5.0 because of its educational value and the description of the alternate reality.
The first paragraph hooked me with Emily's question. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.
One of the things I like about this story is the description of the market, because it used sight, sound, and smell to show what was going on.
I also like the way Matt show his love for his wife and daughter without mentioning the word love.
I like the climax because it was the logical conclusion to this story. It also left room to make this story the beginning chapter of a novel about Emily and her family as they flee the war.
I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters. The descriptions helped me to visualize each character in my mind.
First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions froward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: These are my favorite lines, A world of pain, of hurt and fear laid out for you to see./Conflicting with the sunshine dreams of how things ought to be. I like these line because they emphasize the difference between the way the world is and the way it should be.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way is showed the emotions of both sorrow and hope.
First Impression: The quotation from Jeremiah hooked me. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while giving personal examples that relate this prose piece to the quotation from Jeremiah.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is my favorite sentence, I created those wilderness periods by deliberately choosing not to obey and trust Him. I like this sentence because it is something that many believers know, but sometimes forget.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this prose piece because it is an item any believer can relate to.
First Impression: The first stanza establishes the poem's speaker, mood, theme, and plot. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narratives and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are fear and hope, both of which encourage spiritual transformation.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last stanza is my favorite, because it climaxes the poem's plot with hope.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because it showed spiritual transformation.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker being the class clown. The speaker moves the narrative and the plot forward at a good pace, while the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: These are my favorite sentences, Instead of praying formally, I talked to Him like you were talking to a close friend. I like these sentences because the show prayer can be in any form.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the lesson about faith that it shows.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker being a clumsy child. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while making this read smile and laugh.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is my favorite part of the monologue, ."Pass me my finger, please! It fell off while I was waving it at them"). I like this because it made me laugh.
Final thoughts: I am giving this funny story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the piano music. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I suggest beginning this phrase, pressing his ear with an upper case P.
I like: The best description in this story is of the woman playing the piano. It revealed her as an accomplished artist, who sought perfection in her craft.
The last sentence is my favorite because it climaxed the chapter's plot and revealed Azreal's talent.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker waking up with a hangover. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I enjoyed the way this story answers the question What could go wrong? I enjoyed the story because the question is on that usually has an unexpected answer.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the active descriptions.
First Impression: The second paragraph of this non-fiction essay hooked me with the people walking in a wooded area. The author describes the dream in detail, which keeps the reader's attention.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The author's mother's explanation was good because it show her love for her child by giving the dream an obvious interruption.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay, because I have had some dreams that have remained in my memory since childhood. I suspect that dreams like this indicate something important in the dreamer's life.
First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the emotions of encouragement, inspiration, and hope forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is my favorite line, If you can focus your mind enough to get in the perfect zone. I like this line because it reminds the reader that focus is necessary to achieve one's dreams.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this inspiring poem because of its encouragement.
First Impression: "Dreamer" The first paragraph hooked me with Adèle watching the good looking man. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
What I like: My favorite part is the surprise climax. I did not expect him to die suddenly
Final Remarks: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.
First Impression: "The Dream Recorder" The first paragraph hooked me with Jason Mellon pacing his room and talking to himself. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
What I like: My favorite part of this story is the ad Jason made for the Dream Recorder, because it would arouse people's curiosity about the item.
Final Remarks: The climax suggested hope for Jason's recovery.
First Impression: "Dreamer" The first paragraph hooked me with Rob expecting the unexpected on his brother's visits. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace while building the suspense.
What I like: I like climax because Rob's decision to get power of attorney over his brother show how much he loved him.
Final Remarks: I enjoyed reading this story because of the Rob.
First Impression: "Quake and the Curse of A Million Dreams" The first paragraph hooked me with the dreams keeping the dogs awake. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
What I like: I like Quake because he is an intriguing and sympathetic character.
Final Remarks: I enjoyed reading this story because of Quake.
First Impression: "A Million Dreams" The first paragraph hooked me with the problem with the propellant tank. The interaction among the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
What I like: I like the way this emphasized the title by using the song lyrics. It showed the disappointment of the commander and the crew.
Final Remarks: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this story because it showed the emotions of the speaker.
First Impression: "More Than A Million Dreams " The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the silence. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
What I like: I like the climax because of the suggestion that the digital memory was uploading to Lilia's brain.
Final Remarks: I enjoyed this story because of Lilia, who is a sympathetic and intriguing character.
First Impression: Mabel's question hooked me. The conversation between the couple moved the plot and the laughter forward at a good pace, while revealing a little about their relationship.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Both Mabel and Arthur are intriguing character. I like Mabel better than Arthur because she was somewhat more sympathetic.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this funny story because of the interaction between the couple.
First Impression: Bob the Milkman laying unconscious by his float hooked me. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the laughter.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like all of Bob's personalities because Bob is an intriguing and sympathetic character.
Final thoughts: I am giving this story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.
First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the death of Robbie. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is my favorite metaphor, a ghostly cloud that streams from her head in the chill breeze of the night. I like this metaphor because it is fresh and descriptive.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0, because of the active descriptions. The descriptions kept me focused on the plot.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with George liking to comb the beach. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the character builds the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The detectives went about solving the case in a logical way.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.
First Impression: The statement about the bullets hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: A possible typo in this word, Luis. Is it spelled Louis or Luis.
I like: The climax of this chapter aroused my curiosity about what would happen next.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction among the characters.
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