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Review of Brown Eyes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, strlcuckoo Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Brown Eyes" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the community newsfeed.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, speaker, theme, and mood of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the romantic emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it closes the poem with the most emotions.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0, because of the way it shows the emotion of love.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Vick Rolling 🏳️‍🌈 Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "A Stranger's Call (Contest Revision)" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (July 26, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the cell phone ringing. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the terror and the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, Blake's boy collapses. I suggest changing boy to body.

I like: This is my favorite metaphor, The thunder applauds the lightning as it dances across the night sky. I like this metaphor because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the terror it shows through the active descriptions.

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Review of Her Smile  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Serena Blade Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Her Smile " Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (July 26, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: Sarah's question hooked me. The conversation moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense and the terror.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax was the logical conclusion to this story.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this frightening story because of Sarah.

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Review of Time Bandit  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JustinRock Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Time Bandit" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (July 26, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the date 2247. The conversation and interaction between the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part is Arlo's motive for hijacking the time machine. Only a person who truly loves french fries would do that.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because of Arlo.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, brom21 Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "The Heart of Zealous" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (July 26, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with blame it on the moon. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite sentence, ‘God’s strength is made perfect in weakness.’” I like this sentence because it is true and it is something we need to be reminded of ever so often.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way it showed Touran's increase in faith.

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Review of The Changed Man  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Than Pence Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "The Changed Man" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (July 26, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the reason Polme Gra’taf hated his job. Polme's interaction with the customer moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Polme handled the difficult customer very well.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character.

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Review of Hot and Spicy!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, QueenNormaJean Junesun24hours Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Hot and Spicy!" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (July 26, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: Murry's statement about the contest hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the laughter and the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because it climaxed the plot and made me laugh.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because I enjoy eating spicy food.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jeffhans Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "The Hyperbaric Deep Underground Base" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the scientific genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the statistical anomalies of the deaths. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while giving information on why life spans increased.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to use this as background information to on longer story or novel about this subject.

I like: The last sentence is my favorite because it climaxed the story's plot, while suggesting the plot for another story.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the reasons for the longer life spans.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, WriterRick Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "The Clever Dragon of Neverbrook" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the fantasy genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Cinders being neurotic. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense and laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part was the fireworks display by Cinders.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful children's story because of the dragon.

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Review of the shifter  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi, emmittcarwell Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "the shifter" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the mythology genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the difficulty a shape shifter has fitting into society. This is a good character introduction because it focus on the character's ability and attempting to fit in.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to expand this character introduction to show more background and give the character a name. This character would make a good protagonist in a novel.

I like: My favorite part of this character introduction was the shape shifter needing an education.

Final thoughts: This story is a good beginning to a novel because it suggest a character and a plot.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, 👼intuey Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "The Voice On The Back Of The Wind" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the folklore genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Mildred's age. the speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite sentence, Sometimes, it's out of our hands and put into the good Lord's. I like this sentence because it is true and it is something we need reminded to remember.

I also like the lesson this story teaches about both healing and hurting.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the lesson it taught.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JCosmos Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "In an alien zoo Writers’ Cramp " Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, theme, plot, and mood of the poem. The rhythm moves the plot and emotions of curiosity forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last line of the poem is my favorite because it climaxes the poem's plot and left me wondering what Maria Lee was looking forward to.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of Sam Adams.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Laurie Razor Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Allen's Homecoming" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Drama Newsletter (July 19, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's son missing for seven years. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite simile, at times almost feeling as though slogging through some sort of alien dreamscape. I like this simile because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final thoughts: The unexpected climax fit the plot of the story.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Joan Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Just a little piece of trash" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (July 19, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the trash mocking the speaker. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense and the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this story because they made it funny.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because it made me laugh.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Write-fully Loti Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "The Boyfriend from France" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (July 19, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first line is my favorite because it hooked me and made me smile.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this funny poem because it made me both laugh and smile.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, dragonline (dragon online) Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "What Will the Neighbours Think?" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Drama Newsletter (July 19, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the killing needing to take place on a cloudy day. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it was unexpected.

Final thoughts: The first person point of view and vice were good choices for this story because the emphasized the motive for the murder.

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Review of Pinchopper Lanes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Bobby Lou Stevenson Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Pinchopper Lanes" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (July 19, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the Edith Duncan's nightmare. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it was the logical conclusion to the story.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the active descriptions, which kept me focused on the story.

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Review of Paying The Bill  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Dave Ryan Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Paying The Bill" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (July 19, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the price. The conversation between the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the title because it suggests a plot without giving anything away.

Final thoughts: The climax fitted the plot.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, WakeUpAndLive Author IconMail Icon}, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "The fortune teller" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (July 19, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the water in the oak beer keg. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the character build the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like Hecate because she is an intriguing and somewhat sympathetic character. I also like the climax because it was a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the description of the ritual Hecate performed.

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Review of Just Sayin'  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, Words Whirling 'Round Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Just Sayin'" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The question in the first stanza hooked me. The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and plot of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other. The rhythm moves the plot and narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite stanza is the last because it climaxed the poem's plot.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing poem because of it made me smile.

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Review of Overnight Snack  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, QueenNormaJean Junesun24hours Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Overnight Snack" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the alarm set on vibrate. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the conversation between the mouse and the cat because it made me smile.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because it made me smile.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, THANKFUL SONALI Magical Days! Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Some Things Just Don't Matter" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The sand castle being fun to build hooked me. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite. I like this paragraph because it stated the lesson of the story.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character.

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Review of Emilia and Sepet  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, John Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Emilia and Sepet" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Emilia's having doubts about her upcoming wedding. The conversation between Emilia and Sepet moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: A missing word in this phrase, she had spoken to him, I suggest adding not{/b{ after had.

A missing word in this sentence, You will become of us before you know it. I suggest adding one after become.

I like: Emilia is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the conversation between the characters.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, THANKFUL SONALI Magical Days! Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "A Story with a Moral" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The moral of the story hooked me and made me laugh. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while making the reader laugh.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like Toby because he is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Lone Cypress Workshop Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Ki and spirituality" Open in new Window., because I discovered it while port surfing.

First Impression: The question about spirituality at the beginning of this poem hooked me. The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and subject of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of discovery forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: These are my favorite lines. I like these lines because they show the importance of asking questions in relation to spirituality.
This thing that we call ‘spirituality’ is not something specific, but only
the personal investigation into the questions that we create and develop for ourselves.


Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking poem a 5.0, because it gave me something to think about concerning spirituality.

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