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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, PastorJuan Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Beyond My Wildest Dreams" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (August 23, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the Tailless Runner entering the planet's atmosphere. The speaker moved the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it showed that each species jumped to the same conclusion.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the conclusion each species jumped to.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, LdyPhoenix Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Every Shut Eye Ain't Sleep" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (August 23, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Leah failing in her mission. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: In this phrase, she could not moved, I suggest changing moved to move because move sounds better in this context.

I like: Leah is an intriguing and sympathetic character, who is a strong woman.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Leah.

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Review of Contest Entries  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Angelica Weatherby- July 4th Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Contest Entries" Open in new Window. "How is it possible?" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven " Open in new Window. forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the volcano turning blue. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because the speaker knew why the volcano turned blue.

Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice are good choices for this story because they focused on the action.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Mahe Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Where I'm From (Warendorf Edition)" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Poetry Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are love and nostalgia.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite. I like this stanza because it closes the poem with love and mourning.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because I the way the author express the emotions through the memories.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, John Farley Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Knowledge of Nothing" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The second paragraph of this prose essay hooked me with the experience of infinite ignorance. The author describes his realization clearly, so that the reader can understand what happened.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because it reveals the change in the way the author live his life.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this well-written and thought-provoking essay because of the view of enlightenment it gave.

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Review of ZAZEN  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, ridinghhood-p.boutilier Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "ZAZEN" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and tranquil emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, of aspiration and inspiration. I like this line because of the internal rhyme.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it show tranquility.

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Review of My Prayer  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Becky Simpson Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "My Prayer" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions of love and hope forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first stanza is my favorite, I like the first stanza because of the rhyme on pray and stray.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this prayer-poem because of the way it showed the spiritual emotions.

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Review of Jack and Jill  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, QueenNormaJean Junesun24hours Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Jack and Jill" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the folklore genre page.

First Impression: The question about the time warp hooked me. The conversation between Jack and Jill move the plot forward at a good pace. The questions build the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax was a surprise, while being the logical ending to the story.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this take on one of my favorite childhood stories.

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Review of Sol'ginok  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, John Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Sol'ginok" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the mythology genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's statement in the first sentence. The descriptions are part of the action and moves the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Sol'ginok, Soul Stealer, is a name that will strike fear into anyone.

Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice are good choices, because they revealed Sol'ginok, as an intriguing and unsympathetic character.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Joey's Summer Sparkle Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Music is it a poem" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: These are my favorite lines, From the strings, cups, reeds, and skins pulled at various degrees of tension/Come harmonies to calm and cool our dissension. I like these lines because of the rhyme on tension and dissension.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem because of the subject.

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Review of Let It Grow  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Amethyst Angel 🌼 Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Let It Grow" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Joseph pruning the rose bush. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Joseph is my favorite character. I like him because he is sympathetic, intriguing, and does not give up in his attempt to win Fiona back.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0, because the descriptions showed the beauty of the green house.

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Review of Thank You  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Chris Haines Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Thank You" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite, I like this stanza because it expresses hope.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful prayer-poem because of the way it expressed the speaker's gratitude.

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Review of Meditation  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Going Away For Two Months Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Meditation" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm of this free verse poem moves the narrative and tranquil emotions forward a a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The third stanza is my favorite because it tells the reader the results of meditation.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because it encourages the reader to meditate, while showing one of the methods of meditation.

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Review of My Prayer  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Chris Haines Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "My Prayer" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first line establishes the mood and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, Help so my future holds your face. I like this line because it makes an unselfish request.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful prayer-poem because of the way it expresses faith.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Kenzie Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Whisper Writings, Whisper Prayers" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the spiritual genre page.

First Impression: The quote from Logan Pearsall Smith hooked me. It caused me to stop reading for a few seconds to think about the quote. The questions in the second paragraph made me smile, because sometimes, when I pause to read what I wrote, I wonder what is is I am attempting to convey to either the reader or myself.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite. I like this paragraph because when I transcribe items from a handwritten journal to a computer document the words do change. Until now I have referred to it as editing. Now I wonder if its my soul whispering to me.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking article a 5.0 because it gave me something to think about concerning my writing.

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Review of God be my Brother  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, First Light Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "God be my Brother" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the religious genre page.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the poem's form, mood, speaker, and theme. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the spiritual emotions of love and faith forward at a good ace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, In the name of love and the Holy spirit. I like this line because it establishes the poem as a prayer.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it showed the spiritual emotions.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Friendly Neighborhood Derg Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Why I'm Useful As a Dragon" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The rhythm of this prose poem flows easily from line to line and encourages the reader to read it aloud.

Suggestions: In this line, I can fly them places or just for fun. I suggest removing or because it does not appear to fit the meaning of the line.

I like: This is my favorite line, I can heat up frozen pizza or waffles. I like this line because a dragon would make these jobs so much easier.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this prose poem because of the dragon.

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Review of Renewal  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, lbidler Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Renewal" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the inspirational genre page.

First Impression: The quote from Jeremiah aroused my curiosity and drew me into this prose essay. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while revealing the strength of her faith.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because of the stated goal of looking for ways to bear fruit,

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because of its focus on studying the word of God.

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Review of The Final Journal  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Damon Nomad Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "The Final Journal" Open in new Window., because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the knock on Parker's door. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters built the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This simile caught my eye: like an altar in a sunlit church. I like it because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, lbidler Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Walk With The Lord" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 9, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The quote from Isaiah hooked me. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while revealing a good way to study the sacred scriptures.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part were the questions: Who are You Lord? What do You want from me? I like the question because they are spoken directly to God. I also like them because they are good questions to ask when meditating.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay, because it revealed a different way to study the sacred scriptures.

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Review of Living Backwards  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Beholden Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Living Backwards" Open in new Window., because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 9, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the man walking on the side of the road carrying a gas can. The conversation and interaction among the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like David because he is an intriguing and sympathetic characters.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the conversation between the characters.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, WriterRick Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Bard's Alternate Reality" Open in new Window., because I discovered it while port surfing.

First Impression: The first paragraph of this article hooked me with navigating a world that blurred the lines between fiction and reality. Each paragraph give information about this intriguing and frightening alternate reality that causes the reader to want to know more.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite. I especially like the last sentence that suggests true growth and transformation occur.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well written article a 5.0 because of its educational value and the description of the alternate reality.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Gaby Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "A Gypsy Spins a Tale" Open in new Window. in response to the package you won from the "Flights of Fantasy Group" Open in new Window..

The first paragraph hooked me with Emily's question. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.


One of the things I like about this story is the description of the market, because it used sight, sound, and smell to show what was going on.

I also like the way Matt show his love for his wife and daughter without mentioning the word love.

I like the climax because it was the logical conclusion to this story. It also left room to make this story the beginning chapter of a novel about Emily and her family as they flee the war.

I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters. The descriptions helped me to visualize each character in my mind.
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Review of Looking Beyond  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, lostboy Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Looking Beyond" Open in new Window., because I discovered it under read a newbie .

First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions froward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: These are my favorite lines, A world of pain, of hurt and fear laid out for you to see./Conflicting with the sunshine dreams of how things ought to be. I like these line because they emphasize the difference between the way the world is and the way it should be.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way is showed the emotions of both sorrow and hope.

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Review of Autumn  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Priti Lowen Author IconMail Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author IconMail Icon, I am reviewing "Autumn" Open in new Window., because I discovered it under read a newbie.

First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the emotions of sorrow and hope forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last two line are my favorite because of the rhyme on lost and frost.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed the emotions of grief and hope.

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