First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Emilia's having doubts about her upcoming wedding. The conversation between Emilia and Sepet moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: A missing word in this phrase, she had spoken to him, I suggest adding not{/b{ after had.
A missing word in this sentence, You will become of us before you know it. I suggest adding one after become.
I like: Emilia is an intriguing and sympathetic character.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the conversation between the characters.
First Impression: The moral of the story hooked me and made me laugh. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while making the reader laugh.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like Toby because he is an intriguing and sympathetic character.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the author wondering about the purpose of her life. Each paragraph of this articles gives the reader something to think about concerning their purpose in life.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is my favorite sentence, Maybe my presence alone is all that's needed. I like this sentence because it is thought-provoking.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written article a 5.0 because it gave me several things to think about concerning my purpose in life.
First Impression: The question about spirituality at the beginning of this poem hooked me. The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and subject of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of discovery forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: These are my favorite lines. I like these lines because they show the importance of asking questions in relation to spirituality.
This thing that we call ‘spirituality’ is not something specific, but only
the personal investigation into the questions that we create and develop for ourselves.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking poem a 5.0, because it gave me something to think about concerning spirituality.
First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it closed the poem and made me smile.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing poem because of the subject.
First Impression: The poem teaches a lesson and looks good on the page. The rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace, and the narrative gives the reader something to think about.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like the lesson this poem teaches.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because of the lesson it teaches.
First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: A typo in this word unviverse, I suggest changing the spelling to universe.
I like: These are my favorite lines, I like these lines because the sum up the sum up the mystical experience.
}And knew that the unviverse
Was alive
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the mystical experience.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker seeing a squirrel. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like the climax because it gave the lesson the speaker learned.
Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this story because the helped the reader under stand the lesson.
First Impression: The first paragraph of this monologue hooked me with the author's confession. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while speculating on truth and faith.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like the author's logical approach to this subject because it lets the reader consider truth as related to faith.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this monologue because it gave me something to think about concerning truth.
First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with Santa being drunk. the conversation moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building toward the climax and the laghter.
What I Like: The last sentence is my favorite because it made me laugh.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
Final Thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.
First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the city. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.
What I Like: I like the lesson this story taught about giving. I also liked the climax because it was a happy ending.
Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, brown forelock of her air, I suggest changing air to hair.
A typo in this phrase, as he held it tight, I suggest changing he to she.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the lesson about giving.
First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming words of this beautiful poem compliment each other. The rhythm moves t he spiritual emotions of faith, certitude, and hope forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like the way this line, The forever sweet bye and bye, is repeated through out the poem because it emphasizes the emotions of faith and certitude.
Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this poem because they expressed emotions.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the happiness of the people. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while describing The Front Porch Ministries through the action in the story.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like the way the speaker told about The Front Porch Ministries.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this inspirational story because of the way it showed people being helped.
First Impression: The poem follows the free verse form and looks good on the page. The rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it reveals the emotions of hope and love.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem because of the subject.
First Impression: The third paragraph hooked me with Paul cupping his hand over his daughter's mouth. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters build the suspense.
Suggestions: A possible typo in this phrase, John held his hand out toward her. Who is John?
I like: I like this simile, feeling like he was on an escalator walking the wrong way, because it is fresh and descriptive.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the action, which revealed the characters fears. I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the way the descriptions kept my focus on the plot and the characters.
First Impression: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page. The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and speaker. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it made me think about solutions for the problems facing humanity today.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this well-written poem because it made me think.
First Impression: Charlie's statement in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation between the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building toward the laughter.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like Charlies because he is an intriguing and sympathetic character.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed this amusing story because of Charlie.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Matt's statement. The conversation between the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like the climax because it aroused my curiosity about the rest of the story.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Matt and Delia.
First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the description of Dr. Shaw. The speaker moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like Mack because he is an intriguing and sympathetic character.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character.
First Impression: The third paragraph hooked me with the speaker wanting to be anyplace except Alcatraz. The narrator moves the plot forward while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like the description of how the prisoner went about making their escape.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the three men escaped.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the Pastor's blessing. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The first person point of view and voice are good choices for this story because they help reveal emotions.
Final thoughts: The note at the end was a good addition to the story because it helps the reader understand the story's background.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's opinion of why the magpies were clustering at the garden. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The first person point of view and voice are good choices for the this story because they reveal the speaker emotions and fears.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this chilling story because of the speaker.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Jean waking up next to Madame Michelle de la Lyonesse Dupont. The descriptions are part of the action and moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building toward the laughter.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last line is my favorite because it made me smile.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because of the main character.
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