Prosperous Snow celebrating's (nfdarbe) Reviews

, I am reviewing "A Fireside Tale"

, because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the old man's inquiry. The conversation among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way the story teller's ancestor received fire.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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#4699027

Review of A Long, Boring Day

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi, Dave Ryan

, I am reviewing "A Long, Boring Day"

, because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Louis's question. The conversation and interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the repetition of a long, boring day, because it helped build the laughter.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.

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#4699013

Review of Star Voyagers: "THE GREY CONSPIRACY"

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, jonblair

, I am reviewing "Star Voyagers: "THE GREY CONSPIRACY""

, because I discovered it under online authors.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Ensign Lindsey's request. The conversation and interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it was a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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#4698893

Review of The Real Origins of Memorial Day

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, Grateful Jess

, I am reviewing "The Real Origins of Memorial Day"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph of this essay hooked me with the original name for Memorial Day, because I remember my Grandparents always call it Decoration Day.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way the history of Memorial Day is presented because it shows unity in commemorating soldiers who passed in way.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because of its subject.

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#4698827

Review of Shep-herd

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, QueenNormaJean Junesun24hours

, I am reviewing "Shep-herd"

, because I discovered it on the mythology genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Jordie playing a handmade flute. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it was a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Jordie and Shep-herd.

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#4698807

Review of Humans

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi, PiriPica

, I am reviewing "Humans"

, because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Impression: The questions in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this word, wan't, I suggest changing it to want.

I like: The conversation between the werewolf and the vampire made me smile.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because of the characters.

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#4698793

Review of Dismantle (CH 1 un - edited)

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, Anna

, I am reviewing "Dismantle (CH 1 un - edited)"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The third paragraph hooked me with the call from the unknown number. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like Peyton because she is a sympathetic and intriguing character. I also like the way this chapter ended because it aroused my curiosity about what was going to happen next.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this chapter because of the Peyton.

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#4698683

Review of Night and Day

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi, Mara ♣ McBain

, I am reviewing "Night and Day"

, because I discovered it in "For Authors Newsletter (May 24, 2023)"

.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker looking forward to seeing horses. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first person point of view and voice were a good choice for this story because they emphasized the emotions and the relationship between the characters.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way it showed true friendship.

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#4698672

Review of Alea iacta est

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi, Soldier_Mike

, I am reviewing "Alea iacta est"

, because I discovered it in "For Authors Newsletter (May 24, 2023)"

.

First Impression: The question in the first paragraph hooked me. I wanted to know who was dead and why it was important that Caesar knew. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it answered any questions the first paragraph raised in my mind.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of its historical connection.

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#4698658

Review of Gunsmoke and Rose Petals

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, Bearclaw

, I am reviewing "Gunsmoke and Rose Petals"

, because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (May 24, 2023)"

.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker still feeling the pen in his right hand. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to continue this exciting story.

I like: I like the climax of this chapter, because it aroused my curiosity about the events in the next chapter.

Final thoughts: This chapter does a good job of establishing the plot and arousing the reader's curiosity about upcoming chapters.

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#4698575

Review of A Family of Their Own Making

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi, PureSciFi

, I am reviewing "A Family of Their Own Making"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Palvon's statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the interaction and conversation among the characters because it revealed their relationship.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the action.

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#4698573

Review of Getting Too Tall to Be a Giant Too

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi, PureSciFi

, I am reviewing "Getting Too Tall to Be a Giant Too"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Jazon pushing YaVoni away from him. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, off his next to, I suggest changing next to neck.

I like: I like the climax, because it was the logical ending to the story .

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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#4698572

Review of A Private Professional

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi, PureSciFi

, I am reviewing "A Private Professional"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Helona grabbing Bracim by the collar. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, when he lied to be, I suggest changing be to me.

A typo in this phrase, could of weeks, I suggest changing could to couple.

I like: I like Helona because she is a strong woman who knows what she wants.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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#4698391

Review of Do Aliens Live Among Us?

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi, Dr Gonzo

, I am reviewing "Do Aliens Live Among Us?"

, because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (May 24, 2023)"

.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the question. The descriptions are part of the action and move the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the description of the alien hand, because it reminded me of some of the description I have read on the subject.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the evidence was presented.

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#4698373

Review of Midnight Shivaree

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi, Words Whirling 'Round

, I am reviewing "Midnight Shivaree"

, because I discovered it in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (May 24, 2023)"

.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and plot of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other while the rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the poem plot.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the plot and the rhythm.

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#4698297

Review of The Cabin on Lake Arrowhead WC 245

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, jackiesmuse

, I am reviewing "The Cabin on Lake Arrowhead WC 245"

, because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"

forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker and her husband being alone in their cabin. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the couple builds the suspense and emphasizes Carl's memory problems.

Suggestions: I found no technical issues.

I like: I like the way this story shows how devastating Alzheimer's can be.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0, because of the way it educates people about Alzheimer's.

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#4698280

Review of Poems for Weekly Challenge

for entry "Left-wing Moon Bats vs. Right-wing Wingnuts"

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, JCosmos

, I am reviewing "Poems for Weekly Challenge "

"Left-wing Moon Bats vs. Right-wing Wingnuts"

, because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2024-2025)"

forum page.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it closes the poem with a message.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of its message.

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543

#4698089

Review of A Quiet Little Man

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi, Damon Nomad

, I am reviewing "A Quiet Little Man"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: Phil's statement in the first paragraph hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters build the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0, because of the lesson about not assuming the worst about people.

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#4697937

Review of Full Moon

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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Hi, Serena Blade

, I am reviewing "Full Moon"

because I discovered it on the "May SuperPowers Review Raid"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker feeling the moon's magnetic pulse. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: I like the description of the transformation because it was part of the action.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

}Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the description of the transformation.

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#4697932

Review of MediEvils

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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Hi, Beholden

, I am reviewing "MediEvils"

because I discovered it on the "May SuperPowers Review Raid"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the time the story occurred. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: I like the climax because it was a surprsie.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

}Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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#4697928

Review of Mistakes

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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Hi, Beholden

, I am reviewing "Mistakes"

because I discovered it on the "May SuperPowers Review Raid"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The managers statement hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: I like Falcon Durridge because he is an intriguing and somewhat sympathetic character.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

}Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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#4697910

Review of Memory Calls

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

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Hi, Beholden

, I am reviewing "Memory Calls"

because I discovered it on the "May SuperPowers Review Raid"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Gaston driving through the rain. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: I like this simile, giant rocks scattered like sentinels along its length, because it is fresh, descriptive, and visual.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of its active descriptions.

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#4697548

Review of Marks on Spencer

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi, lezismore-moreislez

, I am reviewing "Marks on Spencer"

, because I discovered it in "Drama Newsletter (May 17, 2023)"

.

First Impression: The first paragraph of Part One hooked me. In Part One: The interaction and conversation between the charter establishes their relationship and personalities, while setting up the plot.

Part Two moves the plot forward while giving the reader more information on Spenser and his relationship with the Diaz family.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like Spenser because he is a sympathetic and intriguing character.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading Part One and Part Two of this story because of Spenser.

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#4697472

Review of I Must Love You

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi, Weirdone-Back in the games

, I'm reviewing "I Must Love You"

because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "

forum page.

First Thoughts: The fourth paragraph hooked me with the murder on the night of the full moon. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way the first person point of view and voice are used in this story. This point of view helps the reader understand the motives of the main character.

Final Thought: This is an intriguing story with a sympathetic main character.

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#4697441

Review of The Fool's Reign

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Hi, brom21

, I'm reviewing "The Fool's Reign "

because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (May 17, 2023)"

.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Nimrod liking to take things to the extreme. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Nimrod because he was an intriguing characters who was both sympathetic and unsympathetic.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Nimrod.

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