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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, Words Whirling 'Round , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Cosmic Contrapunto" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and subject of the poem, while hooking the reader with the first line. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The third stanza is my favorite, because it ask a question that requires me to think about.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking poem a 5.0 because it requires me to think.

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Review of Even Prompter  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Even Prompter"  "Brevette" , because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2024-2025)"  forum page.

First Impression: The poem follows the form, looks good on the page, and makes me hungry for a butter sandwich.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way the middle line is longer then the first and second line. It reminds me of a sandwich.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the subject.

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Review of The Messenger  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Messenger" , because I discovered it on the cultural genre page.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the sphere of prophecy. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like Fern because she is a sympathetic and intriguing character.

Final thoughts: I like the lesson this story told about God being interested in humanity.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Finder101 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Love Story of My GrandParents" , because I discovered it under Online Authors.

First Impression: The second paragraph of this non-fiction essay hooked me with Mary escaping an unwanted marriage. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while giving the reader enough information to answer any questions.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like both Mary and Adam because they are intriguing people.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this love story because of Mary and Adam.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Dawn Embers , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "tools of confusion" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (May 31, 2023)" .

First Impression: Jason's question in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation between Jason and Nick move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last sentence is my favorite because it made me smile.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, brom21 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Garden of Manna" , because I discovered it in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (May 31, 2023)" .

First Impression: Melony's question hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters built the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, else weeing simple one color tunics. I suggest changing weeing to wearing.

A typo in this phrase, out them in the bag, I suggest changing out to put.

I like: I like Nithos because he is a sympathetic and intriguing character.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of A Fireside Tale  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, OnlyMagicInkGlows , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Fireside Tale" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the old man's inquiry. The conversation among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way the story teller's ancestor received fire.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Dave Ryan , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Long, Boring Day" , because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Louis's question. The conversation and interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the repetition of a long, boring day, because it helped build the laughter.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, jonblair , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Star Voyagers: "THE GREY CONSPIRACY"" , because I discovered it under online authors.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Ensign Lindsey's request. The conversation and interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it was a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Future Mrs. B celebrates WDC , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Real Origins of Memorial Day" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph of this essay hooked me with the original name for Memorial Day, because I remember my Grandparents always call it Decoration Day.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way the history of Memorial Day is presented because it shows unity in commemorating soldiers who passed in way.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because of its subject.

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Review of Shep-herd  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, QueenNormaJean gettinPomsready , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Shep-herd" , because I discovered it on the mythology genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Jordie playing a handmade flute. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it was a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Jordie and Shep-herd.

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Review of Humans  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, PiriPica , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Humans" , because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Impression: The questions in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this word, wan't, I suggest changing it to want.

I like: The conversation between the werewolf and the vampire made me smile.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Anna , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Dismantle (CH 1 un - edited)" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The third paragraph hooked me with the call from the unknown number. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like Peyton because she is a sympathetic and intriguing character. I also like the way this chapter ended because it aroused my curiosity about what was going to happen next.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this chapter because of the Peyton.

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Review of Night and Day  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Mara ♣ McBain , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Night and Day" , because I discovered it in "For Authors Newsletter (May 24, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker looking forward to seeing horses. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first person point of view and voice were a good choice for this story because they emphasized the emotions and the relationship between the characters.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way it showed true friendship.

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Review of Alea iacta est  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Writer_Mike , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Alea iacta est" , because I discovered it in "For Authors Newsletter (May 24, 2023)" .

First Impression: The question in the first paragraph hooked me. I wanted to know who was dead and why it was important that Caesar knew. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it answered any questions the first paragraph raised in my mind.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of its historical connection.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Bearclaw , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Gunsmoke and Rose Petals" , because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (May 24, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker still feeling the pen in his right hand. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to continue this exciting story.

I like: I like the climax of this chapter, because it aroused my curiosity about the events in the next chapter.

Final thoughts: This chapter does a good job of establishing the plot and arousing the reader's curiosity about upcoming chapters.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, PureSciFi , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Family of Their Own Making" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Palvon's statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the interaction and conversation among the characters because it revealed their relationship.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the action.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, PureSciFi , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Getting Too Tall to Be a Giant Too" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Jazon pushing YaVoni away from him. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, off his next to, I suggest changing next to neck.

I like: I like the climax, because it was the logical ending to the story .

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, PureSciFi , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Private Professional" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Helona grabbing Bracim by the collar. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, when he lied to be, I suggest changing be to me.

A typo in this phrase, could of weeks, I suggest changing could to couple.

I like: I like Helona because she is a strong woman who knows what she wants.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Dr Gonzo , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Do Aliens Live Among Us" , because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (May 24, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the question. The descriptions are part of the action and move the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the description of the alien hand, because it reminded me of some of the description I have read on the subject.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the evidence was presented.

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Review of Midnight Shivaree  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Words Whirling 'Round , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Midnight Shivaree" , because I discovered it in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (May 24, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and plot of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other while the rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the poem plot.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the plot and the rhythm.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, jackiesmuse , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Cabin on Lake Arrowhead WC 245" , because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker and her husband being alone in their cabin. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the couple builds the suspense and emphasizes Carl's memory problems.

Suggestions: I found no technical issues.

I like: I like the way this story shows how devastating Alzheimer's can be.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0, because of the way it educates people about Alzheimer's.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JCosmos , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Poems for Weekly Challenge "  "Left-wing Moon Bats vs. Right-wing Wingnuts" , because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2024-2025)"  forum page.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it closes the poem with a message.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of its message.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Damon Nomad , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Quiet Little Man" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: Phil's statement in the first paragraph hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters build the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0, because of the lesson about not assuming the worst about people.

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Review of Full Moon  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi, Serena Blade , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Full Moon"  because I discovered it on the "May SuperPowers Review Raid"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker feeling the moon's magnetic pulse. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: I like the description of the transformation because it was part of the action.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

}Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the description of the transformation.

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