First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with Mr. Jasper's question. The conversation and interaction among the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax because it was the logical conclusion to the story.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Derek's statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Derek's reaction to the spider. As a person who suffers from arachnophobia, I know it was authentic.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Derek's reaction to the spider.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's excitement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like the similes used in this story because they are fresh and descriptive. This is my favorite simile, Rory's voice carries like cannon fire in a cavern.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this exciting story because of the speaker.
First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the Devil's bounty hunter. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax was the logical conclusion to the story and suggested that justice always wins.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character getting what he deserved.
First Impression: The second paragraph of this non-fiction essay hooked me with the description of the rainbow. The author moves the narrative forward giving logical evidence of why she believes in God.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Paragraph seven is my favorite because it shows that understanding how a rainbow is created in nature does not prevent one from believing in God.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking essay a 5.0, because it gives the reader something to think about concerning belief in God.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the man working. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between Gabe and Kastin build the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only question is who is Albertus?
I like: My favorite part is the description of the Sage Gem and the way it was set in the ring.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Gabe and Kastin.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the DeathBringers. The descriptions of the Deathbringers and the way they kill GeOn move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only question is what did the GeOn look like.
I like: Paragraph four is my favorite because it described the DeathBringers in detail.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing story because of the DeatheBringers.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the soldiers walking the police officers down the street. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is my favorite part of the story was the mother's answer to her son. I like the answer because it was thought-provoking,
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because it gave me something to think about concerning safety.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the Hermes launch reminding people of the importance of the Lunar colony. The description of the technology used kept the reader focused on the plot. The interaction of the characters built the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is a well-written and fresh simile, looked like an inverted candle flame in the inky vacuum surrounding the moon. It is visual and descriptive, letting the reader visualize it in their mind.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the descriptions of the technology was made part of the action.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Shamus power-walking. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical difficulties.
I like: I like the climax because it was a happy ending and the logical conclusion to the story.
Final thoughts: Detective Anderson is right about dog people and cat people they can both be just as crazy.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the way Sophia discovered the library. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
In the first section Sophia's talent, personality, and fears are revealed. This helps readers to sympathize with her. The second section reveals Sophia as an unselfish person, who is willing to help her village advance no matter what difficulties she has to face. The third section help readers understand why Sophia and John are a good match.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: My favorite part of the story is the climax, because it suggested that Sophia and John would live contented and happy lives.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Sophia, which is a sympathetic and intriguing character.
First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with DNA changes. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The first half of the story reveals both Zhang Jin's personality and fears.
The best part of the story's second section is the description of the lab hidden in the Tibetan Himalayas. The description was detailed enough for readers to visualize it in their minds. This section also reveals that Zhang, despite his attempt to suppress it, has a conscience.
The climax of this story is the logical conclusion of Zhang's conscience coming realizing what could, and probably would, happen if the lab and everything associated with it weren't destroyed.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Zhang is an intriguing and sympathetic character, who is changed by the project he worked on.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Zhang and the lesson the story suggested.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Nora being dragged by a super mutant. The descriptions are part of the action and moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is my favorite simile, like one would snap a stalk of celery. I like this simile because it is fresh and descriptive.
Final thoughts: The description of the transformation of the women was well-written, with enough details on how it was done to satisfy any questions the reader may have.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Coalie’s description and his profession. This is a good character description because it gives information about Coalie that arouses the reader's curiosity. The reader wants to know more about Coalie.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Coalie is an intriguing and sympathetic character.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this character description because of the person it described.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the number of people on the hiking team and their title. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, knew is team-mates, I suggest changing is to his.
I like: John is an intriguing and sympathetic character. I also like the end where everyone way praying.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of John.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the Tailless Runner entering the planet's atmosphere. The speaker moved the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it showed that each species jumped to the same conclusion.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the conclusion each species jumped to.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Leah failing in her mission. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: In this phrase, she could not moved, I suggest changing moved to move because move sounds better in this context.
I like: Leah is an intriguing and sympathetic character, who is a strong woman.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Leah.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the volcano turning blue. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like the climax because the speaker knew why the volcano turned blue.
Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice are good choices for this story because they focused on the action.
First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are love and nostalgia.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last stanza is my favorite. I like this stanza because it closes the poem with love and mourning.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because I the way the author express the emotions through the memories.
First Impression: The second paragraph of this prose essay hooked me with the experience of infinite ignorance. The author describes his realization clearly, so that the reader can understand what happened.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because it reveals the change in the way the author live his life.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this well-written and thought-provoking essay because of the view of enlightenment it gave.
First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and tranquil emotions forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is my favorite line, of aspiration and inspiration. I like this line because of the internal rhyme.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it show tranquility.
First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions of love and hope forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The first stanza is my favorite, I like the first stanza because of the rhyme on pray and stray.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this prayer-poem because of the way it showed the spiritual emotions.
First Impression: The question about the time warp hooked me. The conversation between Jack and Jill move the plot forward at a good pace. The questions build the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax was a surprise, while being the logical ending to the story.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this take on one of my favorite childhood stories.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's statement in the first sentence. The descriptions are part of the action and moves the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Sol'ginok, Soul Stealer, is a name that will strike fear into anyone.
Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice are good choices, because they revealed Sol'ginok, as an intriguing and unsympathetic character.
First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: These are my favorite lines, From the strings, cups, reeds, and skins pulled at various degrees of tension/Come harmonies to calm and cool our dissension. I like these lines because of the rhyme on tension and dissension.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem because of the subject.
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