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Review of Dark Start 2  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
There are a lot of minor grammar errors and typos. One sentence that caught me as particularly wrong was. "I feel guilty beeing the guy that make her so sad." it should be "being" and "made". There are a lot more minor things like this scattered throughout the piece. I would recommend running it through Grammarly because it usually picks things like those up for me. It is the more egregious stuff that it misses and that I don't know about that people correct me on. It is worth the time to add Grammarly to your browser though.

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The link at the end is no longer valid. I would have liked to read more but... The story is wonderful. The main character is clearly a very focused researcher. I wonder about the world this takes place in, and about the races involved. Wings on the main character? I can see her getting ink all over her face and clothing. I can imagine the servants getting upset over the stains. Maybe she should just break out and reinvent tie-dyeing. Then the splotches of ink wouldn't look so strange. Or put random splotches all over her clothes in a pattern...

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This whole adventure is an absolute blast. If they ever offer a round two I know I am signing up! The graphics for each level are beautiful. The trinkets are all beautiful and this is a visually superior activity. A lot of activities are fun but I don't think I have seen another activity that has gone to the effort this one has to illustrate the challenge.

The writing of the activity is awesome too. Each of the fairy helpers has its own personality. The story is awesome and it lives up to the visual promise. The various tasks stick to the themes of the levels really well and the review requirements broadened my reading variety, possibly permanently.
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Review of Mount Vesuvius  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a well thought out poem. It builds to a conclusion that the rest of the poem makes obvious and satisfying. This is an excellent expression of faith and the contrast between your life before and your life after finding Jesus Christ. Everyone comes to a point in their lives where all they can see is the mistakes of their past. They can be consumed by guilt and fall into depression, drugs or other addictions. Their best hope is to find something like this poem to point them into the direction to go to get out of this hole in their lives.

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Review of Even Prompter  
for entry "Damp" 
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It fits the form nicely. It doesn't act as a single sentence in my mind so perhaps you should remove the single capitalized word and the punctuation just to smooth out the style. I love the words and the images it makes in my mind are soothing in the hot weather. I took the same theme in my poem I wrote about a soothing rainstorm.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a delightfully thorough paper about tricksters. It goes into the historical instances and compares these ancient tricksters with modern examples. I hadn't thought of wile e coyote as an evolution of the Cherokee Coyote myth but just mentioning the connection was enough to highlight it brightly in my mind. I also liked that the author compared Bugs bunny with the trickster rabbit of the Cherokee and Briar Rabbit of African American traditions. I really hadn't thought of trickster myths as still being a current thing until I read this paper but now I can't help but see examples in a lot of the places I look.

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It can be really hard to live with neurodivergence and for the longest time, the sufferers have been blamed for being generally bad, disruptive, or worthless. I appreciate the time and effort you have put into writing this piece. It is important that sufferers and caregivers tell their stories so that the truth about the Spectrum disorders gets to the dense-minded who don't keep up with modern research. Spreading the word is the only way to get rid of the stigma and the knee-jerk reactions of the past.

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Review of Indiana  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Even Nebraska has photo ops. I have trouble believing Indiana has none. Surely the people are capable of winding or building a "world's largest" something. Or like Nebraska, they could build a museum on a bridge across the highway as an attraction. Nebraska boasts of being the location of the creation of Kool-Aid too. Is there really nothing at least as interesting as these attractions located in Indiana? You have almost tempted me to google it. Maybe there are some new ones that sprang up since you last traveled the highway. If it is true that there are no attractions in Indiana then I think it should claim the title of the most boring State in the union.

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an interesting story. I did have a little trouble following who was speaking when, I don't know why. At second glance you seem to be following the appropriate forms to separate the speakers. The confusion for me began with this line "Jennifer stopped to breathe for a moment, leaving Doris with a small window, so she fired out a question." It ties both characters up in a sentence that connects two pieces of dialog. It read like the paragraph before and the paragraph after were connected by it. I am not quite sure how you would edit it for clarity or even if you need to.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a lovely poem, though most of yours are. I am glad you were so inspired by all of our well wishes. Keep writing! And whatever you do try not to deprive us of all of your inspirational writing and posts. I appreciate seeing you on the news feed.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an interesting story. I couldn't help but think Jackpot! meteorites are worth big money. Make sure the characters get paid and don't forget to have them take pictures for the insurance claim. The press would probably show up too. It isn't every day that a meteor hits a house.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Yipes this is twisted. This main character did a very bad thing. The interaction with the dog had me fooled until the mention that the light behind them is not dawn but the light from a massive fire. That escalates the whole thing a level beyond on the creep factor. I thought at first maybe a bar fight or a little bitty murder of someone. The fire makes it sound like he painted an entire town red with their own blood and then burned it to the ground. I can't see anything that could have made someone think that the actions were justified.

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a cool concept. I like that even Satan has rules he has to follow. I like the idea of a cosmic do-over for soulmates. It is something precious of great value clearly even to Satan. That Satan can still recognize the beauty of it; that he hadn't lost that when he fell from grace when he lost the inherent beauty that God created in him. Beauty is a thing beyond good beyond evil it is a pure state of perfection and that is what soulmates are. I like to think I met my soulmate. I would also like to think that I do not have to call in that do over when the time comes.

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Review of Let it be  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This really is a dark piece of prose. I found some of the musings interesting. The contrast of two states actually being one and the same is quite satisfying - Drowning and rebirth -destruction and creation. All be it a dark contrast but satisfying none the less. The main piece of structure I found off was the spelling of Jin- gin the drink is spelled with a "g". I liked the idea that you only discover the true nature of a thing if you are willing to accept that part of that nature can destroy you.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a nice piece of poetic prose and I think it is highly tantalizing. It teases that there is a lot more story behind it. I would definitely continue it to see where it went. I want to know more about this character and their world. Your genres offer little to know clues to it. I would recommend changing the writing and reference genres to something more descriptive of what you're trying to accomplish. Those two genres aren't judged in the Quills which is the WDC equivalent of the Emmys. Not saying I would nominate you as it is supposed to be anonymous, and I just read a little bit.
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Review of Alone  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Ouch. I feel the struggle. My mom was a single parent and I know it got rough for her. Just know that despite the fact that none of your kids are ever likely to thank you for all that you have done and will do for them, they all have a sense of gratitude for it. And who knows, maybe you will be that lucky parent that has an insightful child that manages to think to thank you for everything. Then again you chose Parenting, Sports, and Emotional as your genre's not fantasy... Anyway great piece, definitely made me feel for you.


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Review of First drum set  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is secretly a poem about bravery- but seriously they were brave parents to buy a drum set for their own toddler! Far braver than I am. They have their ear plugs but are they ever really enough. I can totally hear this child, a budding drummer, practicing day and night happily. Was this written before noise-canceling headphones? I think that invention might have made me brave enough to buy my kid drums. NO, I will just be the cool auntie that buys drums for the nephews because I can do so without repercussions- no kids of my own!


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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is an exercise in frustration. You try to elect the right people to do the right things for the country, but who is the right person for the job. You can't ask them, they lie. You don't have time or resources to do background checks on all the choices. Democracy is difficult if not impossible to get right but all the alternatives are at least as wrong. Why should the people in charge be able to shake the world enough that babies aren't able to get formula to survive in a first-world country?


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Review by Sox and Sandals
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That was a cool story it would have freaked me out a bit to have someone answer when I knew I hadn't dialed enough numbers especially if a man answered. This is a well written piece an it was very gripping. I barely remember when you could get a call to go through with only seven numbers but I grew up in major metropolitan areas.
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Review of The Darkest Storm  
Review by Sox and Sandals
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Good grief. Killing his whole family then committing suicide? All of that for what? You did some head hopping in the beginning it was a little confusing. It is best to stick to a single pov in a story this short.
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Review of Breathing  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This poem is the epitome of a tragedy. To have to watch a loved one struggle with so many addictions is hard. Having to watch them dying slowly from those addictions is even harder. I went through it with my mom. She died of Copd, and alcoholism. It is tough to say for sure what ultimately took my mom.

I sympathize with the torture your sister is putting you through. Just know that at some point it will get easier. She will pass, you will go through hell. On the other side you will realize that she has found peace, finally and you will move on. It will always ache but it will get better.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is such a sad poem. I am terribly sorry for your loss. I love the structure it contributes to the flow of the poem and the flow of the poem somehow enhances the sadness of the subject matter. It is a real tear-jerker.

The internal conflict of both wishing not to remember the pain and having no escape from the grief because the memory is a burned-in scar on your heart. Everybody has them and I think this poem has all the parts needed to resonate with those painful moments to allow people into your headspace at the moment it describes.


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Review of Trust Me  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (4.5)
So my first suggestion is that you link these on the feed when you post them so that it is easier for people to turn around and review you. I like these stories but I find your recycling of characters and plots a little off-putting. I would like it if these characters actually had completely new adventures rather than the same adventures over and over just with different endings. You have the talent. Use it.

In terms of improvements to this particular iteration, you could do with less telling and more showing. Get us in their heads more by showing us their reactions to things rather than just a bunch of dialog. I could use more description of the Cosmos bar. I can't really see it except vaguely. I enjoy these little stories but with a little more meat to them you could really develop a wider reader base.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a good message concealed in a poorly formatted form. Breaking it into paragraphs with an extra space in between would make it an easier read as would capitalizing the sentences properly. Better organization and formatting would definitely put more power behind your arguments.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this poem. It followed the form well, not a single strained rhyme as far as I can see. I like the message and theme of the poem the images are brilliant. I especially like the last stanza. It wouldn't be complete without it. It rounds out the poem perfectly
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