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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Challenge accepted! Ahem. I found this to be a really ironic prompt. It expands upon the prompt for this prompt, with what I consider to be an acceptable use of the two-sentence limit placed on this entry. It is a creative use of the prompt word "newspaper." There are just so many directions the author could have gone with the prompt for their prompt. I like the Western, time-travel potentials that their entry offers. Only one real character is offered by their prompt, the ambiguous first-person narrator. It suggests that any response to this prompt would in fact be a first-person narrative. I wonder if it will be possible to smoothly add in another point of view to this mix, perhaps an unreliable narrator that is in fact the main character's foil? The possibilities for good fiction to come of this prompt make me miss the days when this contest alternated between prompt rounds and the round where you would write a story based on the last round's winning prompt. To me this prompt is a real winner whether it wins the contest or not.


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Review of The Hunter  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I like this start. The characters are revealed my the showing of their relationship. They are both good though perhaps only reluctantly so. They are trapped in the battle between salvation and damnation and it sounds as though neither of them qualifies fully for either state. I like the hunter character it is clear how weary she is of the war. It is also clear that she suffered a painful loss in her most recent battle. Basically her life sucks and she has little control over it. She is forced to be an unconnected wanderer and she wishes it would end even if it meant her end.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a clear and well-defined essay on the structure of a monster in the house story. It deals with the two major variations and certain elements that are common to them it defines the story type. It describes the structure of both variations.this structure ties a wide variety of individuals stories into this type, from jaws, to nightmare on elm Street, to alien. I hadn't thought about those movies being so similar until I read this essay. It makes me want to read the original book that this information references.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Been in a state like this before. Desperate indefinable apathy. The words and meanings of this prose poem flow together like watercolor storyboards. There is just enough ill-defined reality to this to carry a character through to the end. The setting is like you are looking at things through a silk scarf. The character too is unfocused. You really can't catch an image of them in your mind but the piece left me thinking they were someone I knew or had at one time been. The whole thing is unethusiastically moving right back into the state where it began. It reminds me of an artistic version of a tiktok reel.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The punctuation of this poem is lacking as in even lacking apostrophes where they should go. Usually I can ignore punctuation inadequacies in poetry but apostrophes in possessives and conjunctions are a must for a proper read.

That said I sympathize with the poet on the way some just want to shove a pill at any inconvenient emotion. How is it that other people think they have the right to value or devalue another person's emotions in that way. Sometimes there is a benefit to letting a pensive mood flow through you.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Awesome I don't know if the last paragraph about guy means he wasn't an angel or what but I love the last glimpse of him. I am so glad that they found each other and fell in love. I am happy about Brian and Stan's improved relationship. I just love the whole story. I am not accustomed to reading scripts but it read just fine to me it was longer than I expected it to be but I wouldn't have left out a bit to make it shorter. The part where Stan practically hijacked the bus after stopping the robbery was a bit extreme but it was a necessary breaking point for Stan.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It is a lovely story. I see how it could be extended into a wonderful book. It practically outlines itself. But what keeps people from chopping down the tree homes an massacreing the gnomes with garden tools accidentally without knowing they are even there. I mean humans aren't known for letting nature remain free and beautiful. We like putting in sidewalks and fences and new developments instead of scenic forests. Making it so we can't see them doesn't guarantee their safety. Humans eff things up to regularly.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an interesting premise. I would have love to have read an expanded version. I would have thought when he sat to have a bowel movement he would have noticed the pajamas and his lack of frontal companionship down there. He would have had to drop the pajama pants and most likely panties because women rarely go commando. We tend to wear underwear as a line of defense against staining everything when our monthly visitor arrives off schedule. Basically he would have noticed something was up before he pooped not waking till he heard a man.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a really good begining, it introduces the two characters fast but thoroughly. The uncle sounds mostly like a quack until we learn he isn't a tinfoil hat type but a scientist on the threshold of discovering or rediscovering a new technology.

The direct line between his experiments and ancient Egypt needs to be drawn. Did he Google the effects he was seeing or remember a pseudoscience article about Egypt or what? It doesn't matter much. I just want to see more story and find out. The next scene could be the uncle returning to his lab and telling his colleagues that he didn't have the luck they needed and he gets an update...
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I totally agree with the groundhog. I have one living under my porch and I couldn't help but see that little guy as the one talking to the reporter. Why does it take a rodent to point out just how pathologically stupid the human race is. I think if God wanted to end the world they would just let us to continue to put the same kind of complete idiots in charge as we have been the last hundred and fifty years. We have pretty much ruined the neighborhood ever since we decided to invent World Wars. Now we are so cute just waiting for the next one to start rather than putting in the necessary social, psychological, and scientific maintenance we need to prevent it.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh, what a sad story. That poor cat was abandoned. Those people care about it they should take it home. I feel like I am missing something about this poem but I am stuck on what horrible people would just abandon their cat like that. The poor thing watching the whole world go by when their whole world is gone. I wanted so much for them to take it home before the poem ended.it would have been a happier ending. This leaves is sadder and I just don't like the way it felt when it ended. But things don't always end well in life and to have an unhappy poem is a harder thing to do.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love it, I want more please! What is going on? Will Hannah still be there when her friend gets back? Did her friend even really go back to America? Or did the staff do something hinky with her too. It is the best start to a story I have read in a while. Please write more! everything flows so well. There is plenty of foreshadowing and none of it is too revealing. though at the beginning where you say it was not to be that is to harsh a bit of foreshadowing, I'd take it out and leave it to the more subtle foreshadowing in the rest of the story.
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Review of The Kiss  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Whoa steamy. THat is quite the story. I am impressed with the setup being so nonchalant about the guests though I think the two of them being thick as thieves kind of foreshadowed the kiss. THe description of the kiss is definitely arousing. This revealed a passion and I am impressed that there wasn't any jealousy. and I am glad you didn't sink to the low spot of suggesting a threesome. though from how you ended it it sounds like your love life from that point on was an intellectual threesome. All you're missing is the PHYSICAL presence.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the excitement, optimism and energy of this first proper entry for the wonderland challenge. I love the overall organization of the book for this challenge. It is wonderful the way that the author has decided to flip end over end the order of entries in this book. It follows a lot more logical a path that way than the books of those of us that left it in the standard format. It sounds like the author's first trip into wonderland and I do have to kind of laugh at the naivete of the author it seems they don't quite understand what they have signed up for... muah ha ha...
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This book is as beautifully done as I have come to expect from this author. It is well-organized and structured. Each of the entries so far is detailed and displays a great deal of effort on the author's part. The author made different choices so far in the entries than I did and that just goes to show all of the wild directions the wonderland challenge can take you in. You can do it ten times and each time some new understanding of yourself can be reached and a whole new creation will have been born into our world.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
THis was a sweet and honest summary of your journey through wonderland. I have done many of the things you have and been more honest with myself than I have in quite a while. It encouraged me that I am doing this right to read you had some of the same joys and pains in these prompts. I did this once before too and I think I am getting more out of it this time because I am putting in more effort. Thank you for sharing this all with us. I know from experience that sharing this stuff openly is hard, but sharing it with yourself can be harder.
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for entry "~ Learning Spanish ~" 
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This was an amazingly detailed story. It flowed from one attempt to learn to the next. My the middle of the story I felt certain that the author would be successful in their quest to learn Spanish. THere were highs and lows, accomplishments and disappointments. It was a very compelling read considering the subject itself is not given to much excitement. I believe the enthusiasm for the subject possessed by the author pulls the reader along through the tale.

I was disappointed every time one of the attempts to learn failed or was lost. I heartily hope that this is not the end of the story. I hope that one day the author manages to succeed at their goal to become a fluent Spanish speaker. I think a lot of the strategies used by the author were novel and excellent ideas. I would also suggest that the author could seek out bilingual or ESL preschools or kindergartens to volunteer. The author could learn Spanish while helping the children learn English and I don't know an early education center that couldn't use more help.


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Review of Ol' Fat Charlie  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Twisted. I love it. Poor Jack, poor Charlie, poor dogs. The writing is smooth and solid.it was a predictable outcome written in an unpredictable way.i love the details. I wish Jack was a little smarter and had left but I guess things happen as they should. His death by dog was postponed not thwarted.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That is a dark ending to a fairly dark and depressing story. I feel really bad for kicky and not a bit bad about the guard. I wish I couldn't see the reality of this story. I wish something like this was pure fantasy. The writing was as good as I have come to expect from this author. I feel the choice of first person point of view was perfect and the only way to deliver the impact of that ending.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Intriguing story. There were a couple places where the word choices weren't as smooth as they could have been, but it wasn't anything bad enough that it drug me from the story enough to make a special note of them. This was fairly topical for a scifi story. It rang heavily of trump and his reelection campaign. I hope Trump gets his just deserts like Thantia does. Unfortunately we don't yet have the tech to catch him in his blatant lies. One can hope though. The story does make me wonder just what Thantia did that was so horrible.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very entertaining. I loved the substitutions, Zeta, Lunk, Morons. I love the game andrelly like the parallels to it. It isn't a literary piece, but it makes you remember the good ol days when rescuing princesses an kingdoms were the important things. Before grocery shopping, mortgages, and parking spots. Thank you for a fun read
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love this story. It sounds like a beautiful peaceful land. the pace of the story was good. I loved the characters. It is well built tale. My favorite part was where her music changed the dragon into a cute little pet. The music soothing the savage beast was really predictable I knew from the first that it would tame the dragon, but didn't expect it to transform it completely. Though it used a lot of common fantasy elements this story was pleasantly surprising. The traitor shocked me like the devious princes betrayal in Frozen. This was a nice little twist. I do think that the princesses should rule the kingdom jointly since they each have their own type of wisdom and both types together make a good ruler like king Arthur. My one question is how the traitor ordered the dragon to attack from the center of the kingdom. Was the dragon intelligent enough to understand and follow a plan. Also why didn't he just ride the dragon into the castle and declare himself king. Then the princesses would have been too scared to act.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nice story. I like the superhero aspect of it. I am a sucker for superhero stories. The world building is simple but clear. Your establishment of the character as a superhero is excellent. It felt all show not tell. I think you could expand this story with more active action you got a little tell not show there. It seemed awfully short for its potential. Give me more characters, show me more about the commissioner. Does The Derg have a Derg lair? Or a really large apartment. Where do they go during the day when they aren't as badly needed?

Give us more.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is great and for me expands the character of Scarlet far more than what I have read before. I think you have captured the essence of an empath in her character. SHe makes you feel for her but also for each character that crosses her path. Her endless mission, her endless burden could feel heavy for a weaker character. It bends her over backwards but she is just strong and flexible enough to handle it. SHe is strong with skill and knowledge but doesn't hit me as a Mary Sue type. She isn't perfect or automatically exactly what is needed to fix every situation. SHe struggles with her abilities and mission realistically. She feels the pain of loss as much as the machines within her allow. I think Caleb was more there to heal her than for her to heal him. I feel like she need his insight to the afterlife. THat said the connection to the ghost should be developed a little more. THe ending was abrubt too. I wasn't clear what he died of, OLd age? the first half of the story flows well but the second half doesn't draw you to understanding how the story got to where it ended up.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The subject of the poem is clear and focused. It is a thank you to the people on the Internet that make it a community. I like that the poem ignores the existence of trolls and other negative people. The poem flows well for me and read really smooth for me. I didn't find any elements that jarred me loose from enjoying the poem. A couple of places the rhymes weren't perfect but they read well together. All together this poem was a positive experience for me. To be honest though the subject reminds me of sites like WDC as opposed to the Internet as a whole. Places where there are supportive caring members with a sense of community. If I had written it I would have chosen one of those sites as the subject of the poem, but I applaud the poet for choosing to generalize to the whole Internet. It takes a positive view to write a poem like this.


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