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Review of Longing.  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)


Hello William T Paine Author Icon. Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Longing." Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — yearning for something missing in your life — while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love short poetry and this is a fine example of it. A good write about your feelings, what you yearn for that is missing from your life. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Nice use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of your longing, your ardent desire for a special person that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor; nice descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and pacing. Deep expression of emotion. Heartfelt and introspective. Your need is palpable in this piece. There’s feelings of desolation and anguish, almost despondency that permeates your poem.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“I long to be released from this cage.
Held captive by my choices.” — powerful; vivid descriptive of how powerless you feel in this circumstance you wish to be freed from.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove some of the periods (end stops that seem abrupt in the movement of your poem) and exchange them with commas which allow for the continuation of a thought and will smooth out the flow and rhythm of your piece.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, a good write about your deep emotion, longing for a special love that is expressed with power from beginning to end of your poem. Well penned and a good read. Write on.



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Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello JM Jr. Author Icon. Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Tick-Tock goes the Clock" Open in new Window. in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable for the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent — what or who controls one’s life — while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as your imagination’s doorway to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I’m a rhymer and love rhyme and this is a fine example of it. A very good write and message about life and time (which are interwoven), as well as what is its meaning and who ultimately is in control of it. Clever. Well crafted rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are its descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your words that promote and evoke emotion. Yo paint a vivid picture of life and how time affects it as to who is calling the shots in one’s life that any reader can appreciate. I like your use of contrast. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of simile about life - “ Fluid and graceful like notes from a fife”. Good descriptive/comparison.

**{ u}Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good rhythm and pacing. Nice use of enjambment. Good depth of feeling; introspective. Thought provoking. I like the subtle sense of inquisitiveness in living life and the power behind it. Earnest. There’s a sense of time running out on one’s life, so we need to live it to the fullest, something any reader can relate to.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of onomatopoeia- (tick-tock). Nice use of alliteration, assonance with good consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“ If fluid and graceful life is not
Do the best with what you got” — I like these two lines, a truism that all of us need to accept. Life and time are forever connected and these lines complement the theme of the affect of time on life.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at a natural pause will give emphasis to each thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a good write and thought provoking piece. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!



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Review of Just Image  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello Yoyo Author Icon. Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Just Image" Open in new Window. in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — an image of the future — while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. (I’m just wondering... did you mean for your title to be “Just Imagine”?)

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. This is a good write about expectations of the future of a relationship. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shading in your words that promote and evoke emotion. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of a relationship that deepens, to try to excel in it in a different way, enhance it in the future that any reader can appreciate and relate to. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor. Nice use of descriptive/comparisons.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm, pacing and use of enjambment. Lovely depth of feeling; there seems to be a subtle sense of change in the relationship, the light of it may not be as bright as it once was, (though it’s still there), but you want to dig deeper and have a fuller relationship, more than before — better, yet different in essentials... stir it up to draw even closer. Heartfelt, introspective and earnest. Hopeful with a bit of whimsy.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyming is not applicable in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, consonance with good assonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“Hearts on silenced
Pride on demand
But let’s try one more time
This time for the sentiment, desire and adulation” — I really like these lines, the power in them; they’re uplifting and hopeful with the expectation for more, better than before... a healthy and growing relationship that is still fresh with a splash of excitement. Nicely done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to each thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a good write about your special relationship, the promise of it and how you’d like to make it even better in the future which as a reader I can relate to. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!



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Review of The Faiths  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello Cara Author Icon. Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "The Faiths" Open in new Window. in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — the power and hope in faith — while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. Your title drew me in to read your poem and I was not disappointed. This is a good write about faith, the power and hopefulness of “The Faiths”. Well crafted rhyming verse which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Nice use of poetic device. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your heart you paint a vivid picture of the power of faith — through “The Faiths” that any reader can appreciate and relate to. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor and personification. Good use of descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and pacing. Nice use of enjambment. Good depth of feeling; you express faith’s power, its essence for good, how it can be locked up and still do good because each person (heart) holds their own key to faith that will shine through. Uplifting and encouraging. Heartfelt. An earnest and thought provoking message. Well done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyming is done well. Nice use of internal rhyme.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Strong use of alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“Faiths never give up with wings full of strength
Faiths never tire with no distance too great
No land too far
No mountain too high
No heart too hard” — Powerful, uplifting and encouraging. Hopeful. These lines capture just how important faith is to the heart in which it resides. Well said.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to each thought expressed as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a very good write. An uplifting message that is hopeful and packed with encouragement. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!



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Review of question?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)


Hello jen10 Author Icon. Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "question?" Open in new Window. in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — a query about relationship — while at the same time captures the essence of your poem that acts as a doorway into which you invite readers to walk through it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. Your title drew me in to read it; to see what the question was. I was not disappointed. I love minimalistic poetry and this is a fine example of it. A good write about the difficulty of relationship. A well crafted free write that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Nice imagery and descriptives. Nice color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your heart, you paint a picture about the difficulty in defining a relationship, what kind it is that and reader can appreciate and relate to. I know that I can. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Not applicable in this piece.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and pacing. Nice use of enjambment. Lovely depth of feeling. Personal, heartfelt and introspective. You express your confusion on how to define a relationship and the loss from the error in interpreting it, which resulted in the end of a possible friendship. Concerned and earnest. There’s a subtle sense of disappointment and discouragement as well as a feeling of being perplexed. I can relate.

**Rhyme**:
Nice use of end line rhyme in the first two lines of your poem.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines: because this poem is so short, I like all of the lines. They contribute to the theme and subject in this learning experience in regards to relationships, and the confusion that can be brought into it. Nicely done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to add a semi-colon at the end of line two and to add a comma at the end of line four. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion as well as express the different thoughts that brought you to your conclusion. This is your poem, use what you may have found helpful in my review, ignore the rest.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a good write. It is heartfelt and expresses your feeling about a particular relationship that didn’t end as you would have liked. This is something all of us can relate to. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!


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Review of Dragon Poem  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello Beholden Author Icon. Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Dragon Poem" Open in new Window. in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A nice title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — a master’s opinion of his pet dragon — while at the same time captures the essence of this dragon pet as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like story poems about dragons and this is a fine one. A good write and take on the picture prompt. I really like “Cat”. I think I would have titled the poem that if I’d written it. Imaginative. Clever word play. Well crafted rhyming quatrains which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shading in your words that promote and evoke emotion. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of your pet dragon, his personality, looks and characteristics that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: I like your use of contrast and descriptive/comparisons. Nicely done.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good rhythm and pacing. Nice use of enjambment. Lovely depth of feeling; I like the humor. Nicely done. You express the fondness of master for pet beautifully in this piece. Playful, yet earnest. Unique. Good punch line at the end of your poem. Nicely done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme (aabb/ccdd/eeff/gghh). A nice mix of near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good; nice use of inversion. Nice use of repetition for emphasis on your pet. Nice use of onomatopoeia (meow). Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“ ‘cept life is never pat like that;
I have a dragon whose name is Cat.‘ — I love these lines; I love the humor and the dragon’s name “Cat”. Good use of contrast. You follow through with humor to the end of the poem. Nicely done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling errors; there is a typo in line eight (“his” should be ‘is’). No grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a good write and take on the picture prompt. You did a good job with the poetry form. I enjoyed your poem from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Review of My Little Friend  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


Hello Mastiff Author Icon. Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "My Little Friend" Open in new Window. in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent — life with your pet dragon — while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.


**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. Your title drew me into it because of the picture prompt and I wasn’t disappointed. A good write and take on the picture prompt. Imaginative. Well crafted rhyming quatrains which I enjoy. Good form.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shading in your words that promotes and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of your life with your very special pet that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Not applicable. I like your use of descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and pacing. Lovely depth of feeling; I like the humor of this piece. Playful and animating. I like the friskiness of your pet dragon and the affection you have for him. Very nicely done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme (aabb/ccdd/eeff/gghh). A nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme. Well done.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, assonance with nice use consonance. Nice use of repetition that gives emphasis to the character of your pet dragon.

I especially like the following lines: there are so many lines that I really like, but here are my favorite —
“ From tip to tail within my hand,
Your stature is still very grand.” — I don’t know why, but these two lines resonated with me. I love how you characterize your pet dragon’s personality. Well done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, you did a very good job with the picture prompt and the story that went along with it. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!



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Review of I rise  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello freespirit Author Icon. Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "I rise" Open in new Window. in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — overcoming adversity — while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal that prepares the reader for what’s to come and to invite them in to it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love short poetry and this is a fine example of it. A very good write and message about what you could change in yourself. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion from your personal observation (the sense of sight). Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of renewal of spirit, from rising from the ashes of the life you could change to become someone new, someone stronger, a better you that any reader can appreciate and relate to. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Very nice extended metaphor that is followed through to the end of your poem. Good descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good rhythm and pacing. Deep expression of emotion; powerful, passionate, heartfelt and introspective. Confident, courageous, liberated and spirited. Change is a powerful thing, and you picture this throughout your poem.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“I fly, but not like a cloud
I'm the eagle that soars in the skies.” — Beautiful, powerful. You express that you are now in control of your destiny. I sense the fearlessness you have gained through your experience and you are now your own person and will call all the shots pertaining to yourself. Well said.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, in line four to add a comma after “form”; at the end of line five add a period and at the end of line six change the period to a comma. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Remember, this is your poem, use what you may have found helpful in my review, ignore the rest.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is powerful, inspirational, and uplifting piece which we can learn from. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Review of Taste  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello BirdSeedSteve Author Icon. Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Taste" Open in new Window. in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent — the sense of taste — which at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love short poetry and this is a fine example of it. A good write about your favorite sense, taste, and the things that your palate savors. Well crafted free style rhyming poetry that I enjoy that is short, concise and succinct. Nicely done.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shading in your words that promotes and evokes emotion through the sense of taste. You paint a vivid picture of how intense taste can be especially when eating your favorite foods that any reader can appreciate and relate to. I like your use of contrasts. Nicely done.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm, pacing and use of enjambment. Good depth of feeling in regards to your love of eating. Earnest, heartfelt and introspective. Playful. You express your joy and satisfaction with the different tastes, how you’re drawn to them, how intense they can be and is a sense that everyone should practice regularly because if one doesn’t, they won’t truly understand what they are missing. I can relate.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyming is well done as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is your use of alliteration with nice assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“I need a lollipop to lick,
A chip to chomp
What a romp
Salty sweet,
Quite a treat.” — I really like the contrasts of the different tastes you describe in these lines as well as the playfulness. It makes one’s tastebuds salivate.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a good write and a fun read. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!


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Review of AUTUMN IS NEAR  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)


Hello Monty Author Icon. Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "AUTUMN IS NEAR" Open in new Window. in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A lovely title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - endings in seasons and life - while at the same time it captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I was drawn in by your title and was not disappointed. It is a very good write that has several meanings/levels (Double Entendre) and I like that about your poem. Skillfully crafted rhyming quatrains which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion by sight (observation) and the need for touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of the autumn beauty around you as well as the sadness of grieving that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor and descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and pacing. Deep expression of emotion. Heartfelt and introspective. Mournful and grieving. There’s a subtle sense of loss that permeates this piece; yet there is also a glimmer of hope which comes from your faith in God. Poignant.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme (abab/cdcd/efef). A nice mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Very good word choice as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Strong use of alliteration, nice assonance and good consonance.

I especially like the following lines: there are so many lines in this poem that I love (they complement each other), but these are my favorite —
“Autumn is just one of four fine seasons
that by Gods grace is given from above
and is just one more of many reasons
why I wish to rush to the one I love.” — your feelings are expressed so beautifully in these lines, the subtle sense of sadness/loss and the wish to be reunited with your love can be felt and this touches my heart.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is an excellent write, deep with emotion, heartfelt expression of your feelings. It kept by attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!


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Rated: E | (4.5)


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I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "A Blade of Grass" Open in new Window. in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It is the door to the imagination of the poet who writes it and sets the stage for it (the title) in its reflection of the theme’s intent - how one defines beauty, in this case a blade of grass - while at the same time captures the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. Your title drew me to your poem and I wanted to see what you’d present in regards to this blade of grass and I was not disappointed. A very good write about one’s perspective, in the way you see something, in this case a blade of grass in early morning dew... how one can look at it. Clever word play. Well crafted Quatrains that I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation). Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of how to see the beauty of morning dew on blades of grass, a great start to one’s day. I like the whimsy expressed at the perspective of the person viewing the scene that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: nice use of metaphor and simile. Good use descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and pacing. Lovely depth of feeling; earnest, heartfelt and inspiring. Intriguing and thought provoking. There’s a sense of fascination on how one chooses to ‘see’ this grass. I like how one’s “point of view” comes into contention. Nicely done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Nice use of free style metered rhyming. Every second/fourth line of each stanza is a nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme. Lyrical.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines: there are sol many lines that I like, but I think my favorite is—
“Our meadow glitters on and on
as far as we can see,
Like dazzling knights and maidens
in their splendid finery.” — I really like these lines; they’re vivid, poetic, whimsical and uplifting. There’s a feeling of joy implied in these lines that touches my heart. Nicely done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar of punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, I really enjoyed this write. To me it was magical and a positive/inspirational message. It is engaging. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


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I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Harbor Watch" Open in new Window. in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable for the subject of the poem, a spark of the poet’s imagination. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — a life at sea — which captures the essence of your poem while at the same time acts as a portal inviting readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love form poetry that rhymes and is short (thus keeps my attention). This poem is a fine example of it. A very good write about a man’s life at sea that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Heroic Rispetto which I enjoy. Perfect form.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation) and sound. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of what he sees and hears. You show what kind of life the seamen lives that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye Metaphor/Personification/Simile: nice use of metaphor — “cacaphonic choir of gulls compete”; nice use of personification — the pelican “attitude so quaintly cavalier.” Good descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very good rhythm and pacing. Well executed iambic pentameter. Lovely depth of feeling. You express beautifully his reflection of his life at sea; memories he love’s and cherishes as he look back on his life. I like the meditative feel expressed by the aged seaman. He’s immersed in the sounds and movement of the sea, a major part of his life. I like the feeling of contentment he exudes. Nicely done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme (a-b-a-b / c-c-d-d). Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Lyrical.

**Word Choice**:
Excellent word choice. Good use of alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.
I especially like the following lines:
“while cacaphonic choir of gulls compete
for smorgasbord of whelks and crabs to eat,” — I love these lines. They’re so vivid and expressive of what occurs when one’s out at sea. I love the sound of them when read out loud. I like this ‘music’ that is part of the nature of the sea. Well done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, the is an excellent write and story of this seasoned seaman that is pictured vividly in this piece and the surroundings that he is still in awe of. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


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**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of this poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - murders most heinous - while at the same time capturing your poem’s essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. This is a very good write about a historical event most heinous. I like your use of third person narrative in this piece. Well done. A skillfully crafted Decuain which I enjoy. Perfect form.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through the sense of sight (observation). You paint a vivid picture of this dark moment in time that any reader can see in their mind’s eye.
Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor. Nice use of personification “swirling mists tread softly” — vivid descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good rhythm and pacing. Well executed iambic pentameter. Well done. Good depth of feeling; powerful. Dark, alarming, scary and threatening. Menacing. Fine storytelling.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Well done.

**Word Choice**:
Excellent word choice. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance.
I especially like the following lines:.
“A shadow moves. A faceless man retreats
in silence from the scene his blade has drawn;
the signature of hell's own evil spawn.” — beautifully dark and eerie. Vivid descriptions with its scary tones. Well done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a very good dark write about the Whitechapel murders that kept my attention from beginning to end. An excellent story poem about this historical event that is well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Rated: E | (5.0)


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**Title**:
This is a beautiful and creative title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - your heartfelt faith - while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Well done.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love short form poetry and this is a lovely example of it. This is a very good write about your faith in God. A well crafted Choka which I enjoy. Near perfect form - see syllable count in line one (spiritual is four syllables).

**Imagery**:
Good imagery and descriptives. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. You paint a picture of your relationship with God that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: nice use of metaphor. Good descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Lovely pacing. Deep expression of emotion. Your faith shines in this poem. Earnest, heartfelt and introspective. Your praise, love and thankfulness to God permeates this piece. I love the sense of inspiration and worship that you exude throughout this piece. Well done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is not applicable in this form of poetry.

**Word Choice**:
Excellent word choice. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice assonance and consonance.
I especially like the following lines: This is a short form of poetry and I love all the lines, but I think my favorites are -
“Spiritual echoes
reverberate through my soul
as I chant God’s name
in the shadows of morning;”. - Powerful. Simply beautiful expression of worship and love for God that touches my heart and soul. ‘Sigh’

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or punctuation errors are found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a beautiful write. I wouldn’t change a thing. For me it is a wonderful, uplifting piece. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!



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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a review for poetry written by Scott Steven Author Icon for the poem "Death Came Knocking" Open in new Window. for the group "The WDC Angel Army" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent - a conversation with the grim reaper - while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I’m partial to short poetry and rhyme in particular. This is a very good write about a conversation that is short, concise and succinct. It continues the connection expressed in your title’s theme which is followed through to the end of your poem. Nicely done. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation) and sound (hearing/understanding). Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of your ‘visit’ with Death that any reader can relate to and see in their mind’s eye.
Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Good use of personification of ‘Death’. Well expressed descriptive/comparison which complements your theme beautifully in this piece.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition. Very good rhythm and pacing. It gives a lyrical feel to your poem. It sounds beautiful when read out loud. Lovely depth of feeling. I like the humor in this piece. Clever word play; Hospitable. I like the sense of playfulness in this ‘unique’ conversation. Well done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme. Your meter is tight. Good job.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good; I like the tongue in cheek moment “You looked like Death.” - well played. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Nice use of dialogue.
I especially like the following lines: there are so many, but I think these are my favorite—
““Why ever did you let me in? Most folks keep me at bay."
I looked him in his hollow eyes to leave in him no doubt,
"You looked like Death." I told him flat. We laughed as he walked out.” — this was for me a perfect ending to the conversation (deadpan humor). I love it.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling errors found. Grammar and punctuation are fine.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a very good write and an entertaining piece. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi jaya Author Icon. This is a very good write and skillfully crafted Acrostic. A lovely tribute to Jane Austen. You capture the essence of this writer and the strong characters and subjects that she writes about in her books. I have read nearly all her books, and Pride and Prejudice is my favorite.

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and enjambment. Lovely depth of feeling and I like how you describe this author... her strengths and creative spirit.

Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found.
I especially like the following lines:
“Universally acclaimed for her style of
Showing the two main strong elements
That rule us all, namely pride and prejudice.” — love it! Well said and so true are these words of wisdom.

Overall, this is a delightful write. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

Shelley

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for entry "Blogging and Learning" Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Princess Megan Snow Rose Author Icon. You have expressed beautifully and succinctly the importance of blogging that I can appreciate and learn from. Your answer to today’s prompt is heartfelt and is also good advice for those of us who are still trying to get comfortable with this form of writing. Blogging is hard for me yet I know it is worthwhile. I especially like this line that you wrote:
“I find new things about me about blogging that I didn’t know was there before.” Well said, and for me this is a teaching moment. A much enjoyed read. Thanks for sharing.
Shelley

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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by SarraB Author Icon for the poem "As the tide goes out" Open in new Window. for the group "The WDC Angel Army" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - peace found at the sea - while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. A beautiful, calming write about being at peace by the sea. Good utilization of the first person narrative. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation) and the sense of touch. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of how the sea calms your spirit as it washes away your worries that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye.

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm, pacing and enjambment.
Good use of descriptive/comparison.
Rhyming is not applicable in this piece.

Lovely depth of feeling. Heartfelt and introspective. The peacefulness and calm permeates this piece from beginning to end. I like the sense of contentment and ease of spirit that is described so beautifully in this piece. Nicely done.

Word choice is good. I love your use of repeating lines in each verse. It gives emphasis to your feelings. Nice use of alliteration in line fourteen. Nice use of consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses (change in thought) will give emphasis to it as well as make the rhythm and flow even better in my opinion.
I especially like the following lines:
“As the tide goes out
My worries wash away
Peace washes over me” — for me these lines sums up how powerful the sea can be as a calming influence that you express throughout your poem. Well done.

**Overall**

I love the peacefulness, calmness and meditative feelings I get when reading this poem. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of Stallion  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by Jatog the Green Author Icon for the poem "Stallion" Open in new Window. for the group "The WDC Angel Army" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

A very good title that is suitable to the subject to your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - one’s innate nature - while at the same time capturing your poem’s essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love this. It is a beautiful write that teaches one about themselves in life— through God’s creation. Skillfully crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. God use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation). Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of “the magnificence of life” God had given us as seen through nature that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye.

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good rhythm, pacing and use of enjambment. I love your metaphor - “Authority is stallion” and “nature breeds storms” nice use of personification. Good use of descriptive/comparison. Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

Deep expression of emotion. Heartfelt and introspective. Thought provoking about the power of ones inner self. A beautiful message about life that we can see through nature. Earnest, encouraging and inspiring with a subtle sense of fascination. Deep thoughts that touch the heart.

Word choice is very good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration and consonance with strong assonance. No spelling errors found.
I especially like the following lines that sums up what life is:
“Still, such composition
of equine might
is symphony and
exclamation--it is
reason to relieve us
from our soft breathing.” — Simply beautiful... powerful. Lyrical. Yes, it is the music of life. (I love this metaphor.) Well done.

**Overall**

A beautiful write, thought provoking and touches the heart. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of The Golden Rule  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by Tim Chiu Author Icon for the poem "The Golden Rule" Open in new Window. for the group "The WDC Angel Army" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent - how children should treat each other - while at the same time capturing the essence of it as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. A very good write and message. Skillfully crafted rhyming quatrains that I really enjoy.

Imagery and descriptives are good. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of how children should treat each other on a daily basis that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye.

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. Good pacing. Rhyming is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme.

Lovely depth of feeling. Earnest. A beautiful teaching moment for readers of all ages. Encouraging and inspiring. There is certainty in this wisdom that I relate to. Well spoken.

Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, consonance with good assonance. No spelling errors found.
I especially like the following lines:
“Treat folks like you would be treated,
Then you'll never be defeated. ” — these are wise words to live by... this is good advice for everyday living. Effective.

**Overall**

This is a very good write and message. It is helpful and full of wisdom. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by Joy Author Icon for the poem ""America! America!"" Open in new Window. for the group "The WDC Angel Army" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable for the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - love for country and fellow man - while capturing the poem’s essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nice use of repetition in the title for emphasis of feeling. For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. This is a beautiful write and message. Inspirational. Well crafted rhyming quatrains which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Nice use of poetic device. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. You paint a picture of patriotism, praising God and country that any reader can relate to, appreciate and see in their mind’s eye. Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good rhythm and pacing. Good use of metaphor, personification - “hate is howling” and descriptive/comparison. Rhyming is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme.

Deep expression of emotion; heartfelt and earnest. Passionate, comforting, inspiring and hopeful. I can relate. Word choice is good; nice use of inversion. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found.

I especially like these lines:
“On thee” “God shed his grace,”
We praise Him through our woes.” — powerful sense of thankfulness for His gift to each one of us. These words touch my soul.

**Overall**

This is a very good write and message. It is uplifting to the spirit. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of One  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by Merry IE Author Icon for the poem "One" Open in new Window. for the group "The WDC Angel Army" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

Your title is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your poem’s theme which captures the essence of it. This is a lovely poem about relationship. You express the spiritual connection between two people who are one in their love.For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like minimalist poetry and this one is a good example of it. It is heartfelt and introspective. It is also poetry that is short, concise and succinct, which I always enjoy. Nice imagery. Nice color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. You paint a picture of a loving relationship that any reader can relate to. Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Lovely depth of feeling. I like the sense (or implication) of tender devotion expressed by the descriptive “tightly knitted harmony” which I can relate to. Nicely done. Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found.

**Overall**

This is a well crafted love poem which I enjoyed from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of Spider Food  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for reflecting the theme’s intent. It also captures your poem’s essence while at the same time acting as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

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For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love short poetry and this one tells a delightful story geared for children. Good use of monologue. It works effectively in this piece. Well done. Well crafted rhyming quatrains that are concise and succinct which I enjoy.

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Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Nice use of poetic device. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation). You paint a vivid word picture that any child can understand, relate to, enjoy and see in their mind’s eye. Adult readers enjoy it too!

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Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm; nice enjambment.

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Nice use of the literary device Zoomorphism; good descriptive/comparison.

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Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

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Lovely depth of feeling. I love the humor; you express the inquisitive nature of the little girl’s fascination in a humorous way. Well done.

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Word choice is good; nice use of repetition. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found.

I especially like the following lines: I love all the lines of this poem. They complement each other in building up of suspense. But my favorite lines are the second stanza —
“She's acting awful funny
I think she wants some food.
Good grief! Keep her in the garden
​She can eat our friend Gertrude.” — delightful and fun.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
This is very good write and story poem. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello ajw708. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Gang's Monthly Review Board" Open in new Window.. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "What is Hope" Open in new Window.

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A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - defining its power - while at the same time capturing your poem’s essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

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For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. This is a beautiful poem that is heartfelt and uplifting. Well crafted rhyming quatrains which I enjoy. Perfect form.

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Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic devices. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. You paint a vivid picture of hope that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye.

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Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

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Good use of personification “keep its stance” and simile “mysterious by nature
Like an unknown force”. Good descriptive/comparison.

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Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Well done.

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Lovely depth of feeling; you define and express hope as powerful, encouraging, and the importance and satisfaction that it brings to a person throughout your poem that army reader can relate to. Well done.

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Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to remove the comma after “For” in line nine. Also, adding strategically placed comma’s at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the rhythm and flow even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
“It is mysterious by nature
Like an unknown force
It can be big like a glacier
It can be a great source” - this really states how powerful hope can be in a persons life. I can relate. Well said.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
This is a very good write. It is heartfelt and there’s much wisdom expressed in this piece. It kept my attention from beginning to end. A much enjoyed read. Well penned. Write on!

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Review of My Grouse Country  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Laurie Razor Author Icon. Good day to you.
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A very good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in reflecting the theme’s intent - your love for your home country - and at the same time captures its essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. This poem is a very good write. You express your fondness for your home with warmth. Well crafted rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy very much.

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Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. You paint a vivid word picture of your home that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye.

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Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

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Nice use of metaphor and descriptive/comparison.

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Rhyming is well done as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece.

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Lovely depth of feeling; you express your pride in your home country with an earnestness and sincerity as well as subtle humor. Well done.

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Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found.

I especially like the following lines: I do like all of your lines and each stanza complements each other, but I’m partial to these lines -
“Lush red sands,
these ancient lands
give life to cure what ails ya.” - vivid descriptive and deep expression of emotion. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
This is a delightful short poem about your home country that is heartfelt, powerful and a most enjoyable read. Well penned. Write on!

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