I am reviewing this for: Anniversary Reviews. This is a nice and interesting title and poem and identifies with lot of readers who have similar past. From the title, the reader got the impression that it would be something like a freefall poem with lot of ups and down. After reading your poem, I can say that the title was perfect for your poem and suited it. It's a freefall with events to follow but the reader can sense the poet's personal feelings, the hits and misses in it as he watches the time go. You have poured so much emotion in it that although I am not a huge fan of turbulent life, even I feel a bit not finished. The vocabulary you had used in your poem was very effective and strong in conveying this emotions to the reader. Other than the conveyed emotions, your vocabulary painted a very beautiful and vivid image in the reader's mind about man wishing his life had been different. That was perfect and my favorite aspect from your poem. Beautiful!
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The Phantom
I am reviewing this for: Anniversary Reviews. I was impressed with the opening sentence and this short story with style of dialogue and movement of events did leave a deep impression.This was a great read! You accomplish a lot of content with such few words. It also gives lots of opportunity for thought between each sentence. So, many different scenarios that could take place between. Nicely done..Sindbad
This is a nice and short story I enjoyed reading the same. I was thrilled and excited the way your paced your short story. You were able to relate to childhood memories concurrently with your current feeling. I was impressed with your creative grasp on the topic. Wow. A good style with a nice word flow and a good scenario. A nice play on words and I haven't seen explosion of emotion in so few a word in years. Well written details that were given special attention and good descriptions. Creative, good presentation and great writing. A pleasure to read this...Sindbad
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Blackjynx
This is a nice and moving poem with lot of emotions.Overall, I found this to be another well-done and very strong poem. You have a way with words that I really enjoy what you've written and what I've read so far. I hope this little review of mine is helpful. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! Sindbad
This is nice and mesmerizing poem you have written on a blue eye beauty. A good style with nicely written details and good descriptions. Colorful and fantassy plays a big part here specially-
And she wears her skates to glide over the frozen water some how
She hides her blue eyes behind her eyelids.
Good selection of words and I can see the scenery. Easy to follow with a nice flair. A neat hidden rhyme pattern gives this the right texture and sets the scene. A good imagination at work. Creative with a nice presentation. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure..Sindbad
This is a nice and elegant take on future of constant connection.A good style with well defined details that you gave special attention to. Good descriptions and you did a good job with 7 steps. I think the 5th step is indeed unique i.e. Access only the suggested services. The words flow well and the message is clear. Good play on words. Good and bad reflections. Colorful and beautifully stated like - Mod. Grant me, the read rights to the content that I can not change, the authority to edit the content I can access, hereby agreeing to the terms of service.. Excellent writing with a good presentation. Thank you for allowing me to view your work. It has been my pleasure...Sindbad
This is a nice and short poem on the wire, with beautiful punch stand of at line.A good style with nicely written details. They got special attention. I like the rhyme pattern in some of these lines. They give them a nice flair and a nice bounce like -
When the hammer-coach passes, can I say
I have once again chosen life?
Creative, good presentation and excellent writing..Sindbad
This is a nice and elegant take on effects of a dream-catcher. You have captured the crux with Art that dulls erratic behavior.A good style with nicely written and defined details. Special attention was given to these. Easy to follow. Nice word flow and lovely reflections. No errors. Creative with a nice presentation. Excellent writing. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure..Sindbad
This is a nice and creative take on old and pristine history. As a reader I did appreciate and learn your creative talent in creating an interesting read with lot of research to maintain readers interest as well. A good style with this and you said a lot in a few words. A neat rhyme pattern sews the words together and gives this a nice bounce. A good presentation and a pleasure to read..Sindbad
This was a pleasure and correct occasion to explore your interesting and informative portfolio. Wish you a very happy and eventful 16th anniversary with WDC. You have distinguished yourself and have made a role model with your contribution and involvement. The poem has left deep impression with nice and strong yearning and subtle nuances like
Eyes closed, what's she dreaming about,
these feelings, make me shout,
above the clouds, above the rain
"Does she feel the same?"
Easy to follow. A nice tone and a beautiful play on words. Nice romantic sentiments, and wonderful imagination. Creative with an excellent impression to one and all readers...Sindbad
This is a nice and touching poem on your exploration and final self actualization. As a reader certain words did leave deep impression specially,
That the heart of stone has softened...
that the icy facade has melted..
I got a boost and inspiration with the last line to finally live. No errors as you wrote from the heart. Excellent impression, with all the best for the sixteenth anniversary with WDC...Sindbad
This is a nice title and story of Bobby was intriguing. I found this to be very engaging. I really loved the plot, but of course as with many stories I read here, I want to know more. It sounds like a great plot for an extended story or novella. I enjoyed it, but also not surprised at your talent for writing. It's so engaging and easy to read. Exactly what I love. Awesome job..Sindbad
This is a nice and elegant piece I did feel like expressing my take on the same. Candle as we all are familiar with has so many different uses, you have chosen and written this poem in such a way that as a reader I will fall in love with a candle. If not, a reader will certainly place a candle in a high esteem. I did like your style of explaining the nitty gritty- a fuel source, heat, and oxygen indeed. This enhances the reading quotient. However from another standpoint you have expressed all different facet of candle and its usability, so omitting the above words will maintain crispiness in your poem. Overall an excellent and creative take on candles..Sindbad
As an introductory comment on this prose, I have been a great fan of your poem. Like other poem this poem reflects and highlights the main nuance. Natures lack of precipitation and its consequence has been expressed in a unique and vibrant manner with strong words like -
Harboring ill will on its wild denizens -
An unbroken pattern soon to wreak havoc
On beleaguered, malnourished herds
Of the now ghostly and sickened land.
This makes the reader aware of distinctive and populous realm. I did notice the connection between precipitation and its unique structure with the rest of the poem, however I will appreciate some short background synopsis as that will ignite the true meaning and creative unfolding of your poem. Overall this is a nice and bold step towards addressing the Unholy...Sindbad
This is a nice and divine idea you have penned in a creative and joyful manner. I have been a great fan of your poem and the way you address certain deep or lighter topic hits certain nuances. Your poem in short leaves a radiance memories. Good job in the chosen words to be the title, and using it to describe chorus of angel, it gives a good reflection to the reader and creates a good imagery...Sindbad
This like your other works, is no less a master piece. A good style with well defined in depth details this has good imagery and gives one a peaceful feeling. Easy to follow with a nice tone. Good word flow. A neat rhyme pattern gives this a nice texture and a good flair. Creative with a good presentation. No errors. Excellent writing. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure...Sindbad
I am so loving reading your work! You have reposited my interest and inclination to explore more of the creative vibes in your poem.
This poem was amazing and I can easily see why it was worth the read for people enjoying vacations in Las Vegas. This tells the tale of truth and the reader can easily fall right into the scene that you have pulled them into. Your expressive words are so soothing and lulling, the reader gets lost like - Saving some dimes while not having to scoff.. I love that as I was reading it. I could almost feel my involvement here...could feel quick burst, that bubble....you write from the heart and soul and you can feel it when you read it.
This is a nice and short take on a sleepless night and we beat on.I really liked this poem...in a matter of a few lines you flood the reader with memories of their with bug eyes and probing antennae. Great job and so very well written!!
The snapshot you have posted did bring those warm and vibrant memories with fizzy crackle. This poem is beautiful...written to make the reader reflect...think...ponder and feel the sleepless moments in so few a word. Once again....great job!!~
Hello again! Decided to read another of your poems since I liked the first and second one so much.
This is a beautiful story of a very intimate relationship and bond between your past and the present confession. You used words that made the reader feel and understand them and what message you were getting across through your words like - August dalliance, for a truth that could absolve.
Good Job!
Hello Again! Once again I found myself wanting to read more of your work....that is what we as writer's want...to leave our readers wanting more! You do it and you do it well!!
I always love reading your work...it is easy to follow along with because they are so well written and the words flow smoothly. ALWAYS in a matter of a few lines you come across with such powerful words. It instantly pulls the reader in and they find themselves lost within your words.
Well written, flows smoothly and is an easy to follow poem.
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C.O
This is a beautiful take on a topic that brings deep and iconic memories to readers. I connected to it on so many levels. The reader can feel the emotions as they read your expressive words...telling a story that is such a special one! like - I know as much as his greying face, more aged now than before when we skipped class at cedar shoals high..
Well written, powerful story that catches the readers attention and tugs at their heart as they read along...your words flow smoothly and it is a nice piece. Write on with such zeal...Sindbad
This is a nice and interesting poem on siren and its subtle and deadly effect at sea. This was well written with a even flow to your words.....my only suggestion is that maybe you try to center it, add text color and change font style....it will really pull it together and enhance the effect!
These choice and their well rehearsed adventures and indeed creative and exciting. As a participant I did feel the freedom to express my story in a creative manner is achieved effortlessly. Overall a nice and smooth set up that does excite and involve readers and participants in large numbers..Sindbad
A good style, nice tone and a bouncy poem that is cute and creative. Guess a perfect and brief note of caution on promiscuity like But that wild, instinctive passion
And incessant yearning Take complete command. A nice rhyme pattern gives this the right flair and sews the words together. Well written details with special attention. Good job of writing on a difficult topic...Sindbad
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