The writing reflects thoughtfullness of the author that how he sees and observes the conversion of a metal sheet into a gun and then the shot at aim:
"The machine takes the metal sheets and wham they become a gun. That is some kind of wonderful. And they shoot real darts."
I think very true expression about this kind of moment has been made. It is an interesting read, infact!
Very unusual, unique but interesting writings, writings of this writer create interest and are based on perhaps sociological and philosophical concepts. There seems to be the presence of multiple hypothesis within single article and till end the hypothesis tend to become a theory too in the need of further enhancement of analysis and application.
THE POEM IS A COMPARISON OF IRON, ORE AND LIFE IN AN INTERESTING MANNER THAT TOO POETIC. SOME WORDS REFLECT POETS SENSITIVITY AND OBSERVATION:-
"Trailing the tracks
where grandpa died,"
LIKEWISE
"I'll have to wait
for this locomotive to pass."
NICE PHILOSOPHICAL, COMPARATIVE AND ANALYTICAL EXPRESSION!
THE POEM IS UNIQUE IN IT'S CONCEPT BUT AT THE SAME TIME STRANGE TOO THAT IN THE DAYLIGHT A PERSON IS HATED AND AT THE SAME TIME DURING DARK IT BECOMES LOVABLE!
SPEAKS OF PERHAPS CONFUSED AND SELFISH MIND, WORDS ARE PERFECTLY CHOSEN TO EXPRESS THE UNUSUAL SITUATION AND SCENARIO!
"I’ll stop to look back…time to time"
yes, this is the spirit that might help the person concerned!
nice poem with a deep emotion embedded in it, full of hope and love!
but the end also shows a little light of reality to bring writer out of the hypothetical mud of false hope!
BEAUTIFUL POEM WITH A STRONG EXPRESSION!
THE WORDS ARE SO BEAUTIFULLY ARRANGED THAT A PICTURE IS FORMED WHILE READING THROUGH THE POEM, AND THE WRITER JUST GETS DIPPED INTO ITS LURE!
"Had I legs
I would run away
But the light has won
It envelopes me
A new eternity is upon me now."
PERHAPS EVERY READER,
WONDERFUL WORDS, WONDERFUL FORMAT
SHORT LINES
BUT LONG PHILOSOPHY
DEEP MESSAGE
"Have you found yourself in darkness
because you missed a sunny smile?
Have you ever wanted to pick up that phone
but stopped short of the dial?"
the poem seems to be
perfect
philosophical
analytical
beautiful
but I find that in this line:-
"The vine weave its pattern" it sholud be weaves rather than weave, however it doesn't mattter when the poem comes with a soul in it.
Soul is live!
THESE LINES ARE TRUE TO THE EXTENT OF TRUTH:-
"salvation's seeds were planted
by that favor in disguise."
WISE WORDS, NICE KNIT, STIMULATING WRITING WITH LOTS OF PHILOSOPHY, DEPTH AND CONCEPT. THIS WRITER WRITES WONDERFULLY!
THESE LINES MAKE THE READER THINK WITH THOUGHTFUL THOUGHTS:-
"If the search leads somewhere fresh,
the best of those tested
unearth treasures earned and not."
WELL WRITTEN AND EXPRESSED!
THE POEM SEEMS TO BE FULL OF BLEEDS AND SCREAMS BECAUSE OF THE ACHING EMOTIONS. THE WRITER HAS SUCCESSFULLY DESCRIBED THE FEAR OF HIS HEART AND MIND IN WORDS THAT MAKE THE READER TREMBLE WITH THE FLOW OF POEM:-
"Can ever I leave this dark place?
I hold my hand over my face.
ABOVE WORDS ARE THE REFLECTION OF REPETITIVE FRUSTRATIONS AND SORROWS THAT MIGHT BE COMING IN THE WAY.
NICE SWEET POEM WITH A KNIT OF WORDS THAT SPEAKS A LOVELY STORY OF EMOTIONS. SHORT SENTENCES MAKE IT AN EASY READ AND THE MESSAGE HIDDEN INSIDE MAKES THE POEM VERY INTERESTING. THE WRITER SEEMS TO HAVE THE ABILITY OF ANALYSIS OF CONCEPTS AND EXPRESSING THE THINGS IN A CLEAR-CUT MANNER!
A BEAUTIFUL AND UNUSUAL IMAGINATION ABOUT THE SKY. IT IS INTERESTING AND TICKLING READ AND ENJOYABLE!
WORDS ARE SIMPLE BUT EFFECTIVE!
CAN BE GOOD SONG TOO!
"He sleeps in a blanket of stars;
the moon, his night light."
VERY THOUGHTFUL WRITING !
TOO EMOTIONAL
BUT DEPICTS STRENGTHENING PSHYCHOLOGY!
SIMPLE WORDS TELLING A COMPLEX MENTAL STATE
SHORT IN LENGTH BUT DISPLAYING A BIG EMOTIONAL SITUATION!
"Four, He loves me not
Five, He loves me
Six, He loves me not
IT IS AN ENLIHGTENING PIECE OF WRITITNG, THAT NOURISHES THE MIND AND SOUL. IT IS INSPIRATIONAL, POSITIVE AND IN SOME SENSE EDUCATIONAL TOO, LIKE THE WAYS TO LIVE LIFE.
THESE WORDS ARE THE CORE OF THE POEM AND AN EVERLASTING IMPACT TO THE POEM.
"Hope is a seed left in the ground to sow.
Love is the sunlight seedlings need to grow."
VERY CLEAR PICTURE OF THE FEELINGS OF BEING HOME-SICK HAS BEEN MENTIONED IN THE FORM OF A POEM. RIGHTLY CHOSEN AND WEAVING OF WORDS' STYLE IS MAKING THE POEM MORE EXPRESSIVE AND BEAUTIFUL! OF COURSE THE MEMORIES OF OUR OWN HOME ARE SO TOUCHING!
"To see my family once again,
my tears will flow freely, my heart will race.
Memories are drilled into my head,"
----- FULL OF LOVE
------- ATTRACTION
----- HONEST FEELINGS
-----DREAMS
----- POSITIVE THINKING FOR HAPPY FUTURE
----- SIMPLE
---EASILY UNDERSTABILITY
--- PERFECTLY CHOSEN WORDS
---"I dont know what to do
It's only you...........
ONLY YOU................"
AND ALSO
DEDICATION!
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