Such an unique and emotional qiestion has been raised in it? But rating is so low, don't understand why. The poem impresses at the start itself.
"is death."
and these words tickle everyone's mind perhaps:-
"We each are certain,
and in certainty have killed."
Oh my God!The words in this emotional poem just tremble the reader. So much of truth, emotion and pain is dripping out of these words. The poem seems to be written with a heart filled with pain and eyes filled with tears.
"Please make a sound.
Your body feels too heavy in my arms.
It shouldn’t have to be this way."
A piece that should not be allowed rating because it is beyond that.
A perfect inspirational poems with lots of analysis, and postitvity in it. Overall it seems to be a writing that desreves appreciation and that's why I am appreciaiting it.
I call it a poem with meaning and message too.
"Maybe, that the meaning is not such a really big deal
It’s the little things, and faults that make us real"
The poem reflects the extent to which the person mentioned has been hurt. One can very easily make out the damage hidden inside the words:-
"my soul is dying and I see not the light. Oh love how could you do this to me?"
These lines also depict tremendous pain in sufferer]s heart
" Love you are to cruel and I will never fall for you again. I will love no more!"
Very nice!
(At one place beauty -spell check, you have written beuty)
This one is a very emotional pieces especially with these words:-
"No longer hiding from life, fearful, hopeful
Hiding from myself and what others might say"
The poem seems to be filled with lots of respect, liking and perhaps love too for the person concerned. Very nice knit of words and successful expression!
Wow! This is a very impressive composition. A poem with the soul. The words are filled with characteristics and joys of each season. A graceful, meaningful and soulful writing.
Beautiful expression:-
"It’s time.
My heart dormant,
I cast my eyes
through the patient window
and wait for snow."
"We’re each trying to change our own little world
But we can’t change anything on our own"
Yes, the society must help the youth if they want to do something positive. I feel the writing will put an impact on everyone's mind whosoever reads it.
"We’ve got to learn to get over ourselves"
Above words indicate a strong desire and will to do good deeds.
striking words of the poem make every reader think about the message hidden in the conclusion. every word seems to be the truth of most peoples' lives. Nice emotional as well as philosophical writing that makes an impression of poet's thinking and writing.
YEs, very true words have been written in this poem with an excellent command over the matter, concept, words and justification. Only few people are among such people who can successfully justify, analyse and express this way in their writings. This writer seems to be one of them.
Wonderful simple beginning.
This line creates curiosity:-
"All of a sudden, there was a knock at the door. Mr. Wilson, the principal escorted a new girl into the room."
The word knit is very nice and at the same time philosophical too.
And the End is a analytical twist, like the twists in life and age.
In my opinion this is a sweet little poem based on the concepts of life on earth. The examples mentioned in it relate very much to the rises and falls of life. It also shows the positive sprout out of negative situations like in these words:-
" From the ink coloured sky a ray shines through
As the storm dies down, tranquility comes into effect
As the clear sunset gives the garden time to rejuvenate"
Like light comes out in the morning after piercing the dark night.
VEry emotional poem that starts with a kind of frustrating reflection but ends with the positive feelings. This is how the words go magical, magic of taking away one from frustarion and illusion upto the door of optimism and happiness. This writing has very light words but very vast enlightenment.
THis poem speaks of the true and loving emotion of a person towards his/her love knowing the fact that the other party may not be sincere like him/her.
These words:-
"I'm sorry that I ever loved you,
I'm sorry that I still do."
Interesting writing. There are many people who enjoy writing poetry but are not interested in rading others or even themselves. It is the human nature.These lines:-
Of course you can see that a problem exists.
Poetry’s something I just can’t resist.
Add a touch of humour as well as reality to this poem
The poem on the stormy morning seems sweet.
This line:-
"Yet the birds won’t sing their song"
creates interest for the reader in the beginning itself.
THis one:-
"The wind let out a dreadful sigh
Not a good day to play in the park"
puts an emotional touch to the writing.
and this one:-
"The house’s roof gave a terrible groan
I hope all those birds have warm dry nests. "
tells about the extent of storm and nice heart of the writer.
It is nice and stylish poem telling a message that perfection is never complete. To get something more, another thing is to be compromised. Better we keep a balance between the things which holds very true for nature.
"True nature and skyscrapers can’t coexist.
A false horizon flaunts each spring sunrise.
All senses seek the flaws they’ve missed"
OH this is a piece beyond rating as it expresses so much of the attachment for Cecil who has detached away from his brother like friend. The writing is a painful emotional expression and a symbol of unbearable loss.
Grammatically perhaps
"you were to young to die"
it should have been you were too young to die
It brings tears into reader's eyes.
"I don't know exactly how to feel,
he took my mom, now you."
But one has to gain strength to live life against the odds of life.
THis is a wondeful poem that reflects the childhood memories of not only the writer but perhaps belongs to many others too in the same way. Every reader will view it as his own memories in some way. An execellent bunch of words to show the childhood picture as a sweet poem.
This is a beautiful short poem that takes no time to read but leaves a mark on mind that lasts long. Unique style of writing in short but delievering massive message that is indeed endless;_
"I thank above,
For what no one could have known.
The endless sky,"
The poem speaks of so much of pain and frustration of a person. The writer has been successful in knitting the words in a suitable format that expresses the painful emotions so nicely and stimulates reader's mind.
These words:-
"He has been brought into a world so cruel,
When grown up he will be everyone's fool."
are most painful
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