it is such a sweet, flowing poem. I don't understand, why it has been rated so low. These words:-
"I'm not used to feeling this version of pain.
It's a new kind of hurt that I cannot explain.
I often think real hard about our times through the years,
and I want to share them with you but you're not here"
so nicely explain the pain of writer's heart. well written, infact.
It is a meaningful and lovely writing and very nicely expressing the situation of this girl.
The following words:-
"The young girl felt awkward, out of place,
As she always had before body and soul had separated.
and
"Thus proving their confusion to her,
Their inability to reconcile such sadness in such a joyous place"
It is infact a very touching and guiding writing that actually will guide many others.
These words:-
"At night, she would often cry herself to sleep but she would not let Anna see her like that for fear that Anna might lose hope seeing her sister's doubt and fear."
show a very nice & practical management on the part of one sister for the suffering one. I pray for the complete healing of Anna so that cancer is not able to return.
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I don't know why this poem has been rated average. In my opinion it is such a sweet poem, rather a beautiful song the children can even sing it. So cool, light, and chraming. These words are just heart blowing:-
"Smiles are not as fragile
And love is much more great,
Hugs are in abundance
With a total absence of hate".
Excellent lyrics !
An awareness effort to speak for someone who can't speak herself (a weekly poetry prism contest winner)
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Nice and interesting poem with very few words expressing lots of emotions and thinking. A Poem on a different concept makes it more interesting read.
Very true and logical words infact:-
"I would not want to plan
My last activities or meals
The surprises of life are what make
Life worth living"
An awareness effort to speak for someone who can't speak herself
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Nice rythmic poem for children. Children will love singing and reciting it. It is so nice to see someone who writes for children. These lines are very-very beautiful. "Little fish, little fish, wide eye open clear,
In the fish tank to swim and peer."
An awareness effort to speak for someone who can't speak herself (A WEEKLY POETRY PRISM CONTEST WINNER)
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This is really a great and true expression and depicts kind and pure heart felt emotions of the writer for someone.
These are the lines that infact generate will power to live life:-
"And if we put our trust in God
Our loved ones in his hands
We too will someday join them
And together we’ll all stand"
very few people are there who can actually express properly what they mean to say. Writer seems to be one out of them.
An awareness effort to speak for someone who can't speak herself (WEEKLY POETRY PRISM CONTEST WINNER)
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It is a very emotional, touching poem that reminds everybody of his/her mom while reading. The writer has very nicely expressed the emotions that most of the people feel for their mothers.
These lines:-
"Seated by my Angel, and wrapped snugly in her wings,
my head resting upon her shoulder as a lullabye she sings.
God blessed me with a miracle when he sent her to sit by me",
are an excellent expression and honour for the mothers.
An awareness effort to speak for someone who can't speak herself
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It is a very touching writing infact.
These lines:-
"But now my thoughts are dead
Emotion is hiding far in a corner
With all the words Ive ever said,
Never to be seen again"
are so heart touching and also pierce into the mind while reading. Very good emotional expression, infact.
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the poem expresses painful emotions of a mother who had lost her baby before birth. The poem successfully expresses such emotions and it does not seem to be just a writing but something coming from the heart of such a mom. These lines are most touching:-
"But my daughter came unbreathing from me,
Unwashed, unseen, unloved, away.
I couldn't kiss Emily and can't
Spend time with her today."
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These lines show extreme pain in author's sentences.
"The person you will never meet
Who would have grown up to be better than us
Separated from my aching body that shakes with grief
If only this had been a part of you too
A part you would never forget"
The pain perhaps only a mother can feel. Excellent expression.
An awareness effort to speak for the child who can't speak herself.
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yes, ofcourse plastic is day by day becoming a problem and a pollution that is polluting mother earth and infact harming life on mother Earth.
These lines are most impressive:-
"My Underworld – taste my poison.
And like it, simply because they do not.
Take my hand, and bleed with me."
An awareness effort to speak for a child who can't herself speak
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These lines are heart blowing.
"I never got to say goodbye.
I never heard her cry.
I lived a hell, but I loved today.
I feel her spirit on those
special day, especially
when a baby cries".
We can see and judge the image and dedication of our parents when we see and raise a child. A mother is more than perhaps God for the children.
An awareness effort to speak for for a child who herself can't speak
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These lines make the most appealing part of poem.
"As twisted as it seems,
I even fear love when it's in my dreams.
Let in the darkness,
and let the sunlight fade away".
These one reflect the postive attitude and impact.
"and give me hope that I'll have a tomorrow.
If only they were red.
If only I was dead.
If only"
overall a very good read.
An effort to speak for the pain of a child who can't herself speak
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The last two lines
"I know you sit and wonder who could this person be
The one I lost so long ago, that someone was just me"
are the most interesting and add a wonderful meaning to the poem. The poems seems to be good in the beginning but becomes excellent with the last two lines.
An awareness effort to speak for a child who can't speak for herself
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It seems to be very good effort of the poet for speaking for the silent. And this shows even silence also has an impact that can be judged from writer's words. This stanza is most clear and impactful. Vety good emotions and only some people are blessed to be sensitive enough to them.
"Silenced by material poverty.
Silenced by fear.
Silenced by worry.
Silenced by guilt.
Silenced by survival"
An effort to create an awareness on the pain of somebody who can't speak.
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The lines exhibit deep pain and emotion. The lines do not seem to be a writing only but seems to be coming from the heart of a mother longing for motherhood. My heart really cried while reading this poem. Same things happen to many people in the world but few are sensitive to the emotion embedded in them and only these are the few individuals who keep love and peace live on earth. The author seems to be one of them.
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Oh! this is a very beautiful expression of love for our kids. The love seems to be dripping out of the poem. Eyes get filled with emotions while reading it.
" BE THEY EBON, OLIVE, YELLOW WHITE OR TAN
YOUR HOLDING A RAINBOW THAT GOD HAS PLACED IN YOUR HAND
THEIR BEAUTIFUL EYES, EARS, NOSE AND LIPS SO NEAT
THEIR TINY LITTLE FINGERS AND TOES SO SWEET "
TEARS (E) The emotions that tears cause. #1268898 by spaul
These lines of the poem express that his strong faith in god and prayer healed his friend.
"Did you realize that it was God's love that
Had cured you then, and miraculously brought you
to your feet and me to my knees.
Then I breathed another prayer of sweet relief
Thanking God for sending his son just
...In the nick of time!!!
Nice expression and seems to be true.
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The author has very emotionally and rightly expressed the situation of his uncle who lived with cancer rather than "die of cancer".
Very nice expression in these lines of the uncle's patience and tolerance is described:-
"Then when he left he seemed so still,
So lifeless, so peaceful, so restive.
He left this life without saying goodbye
For he knows he is only gone to be with God".
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The poem shows great love toward's husband (of author)perhaps. An emotional and love filled writing.These lines
" I love you with all my heart,
I will never let you go away,
you're the meaning in my life,
in my life you'll always stay".
show that how the writer feels her existence co-existing with her husband's. may your life be filled with love and affection always.
Overall the poem seems good and the lines in the end
"I will never hurt you,
The way I have in the past,
I swear to you my darling,
The love I give to you will last"
express deep love for her husband. Nice words.
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