VERY GOOD, WELL THOUGHT AND PERHAPS ALSO WELL RESEARCHED SHORT , SIMPLE AND ANALYTICAL WRITING ABOUT PHILOSOPHY OF LIFE. IT IS TRUE THAT MANY TIMES A PERSON KEEPS ON THINKING AND DOING THE THINGS IN VAIN, BUT THAT IS THE PART AND PARCEL OF LIFE!
VERY REAL LOOKING SCENARIO:-
"Chasing after a false image of perfection."
THE POEMS SEEMS TO BE FULL OF LOVE AND DEDICATION FOR SOMEONE SPECIAL, THE AUTHOR CORRECTLY FEELS THAT TIME IS SHORT, AS IS SAID BY SOMEONE(I DON'T KNOW NAME)
I DON'T HOW PEOPLE FIND TIME TO HATE WHEN TIME IS TOO SHORT TO LOVE.
"I wish I could remember
if I told you I loved you this morning. "
very logical, true piece reflecting the philosophy of life. Beautiful expressiona and knitting of words.
WONDERFUL!
THESE WORDS ARE MOST IMPRESSIVE AND SOULFUL:-
"The need does repeat itself,
new youth starts as the old stops.
Old thoughts are stored on a shelf,
as the young show us what they've got!"
A HEART TOUCHING TRIBUTE FOR THE PET WHICH HAD TO BE EUTHANISED. THE PIECE IS BEYOND RATING AS FAR AS VALUABLE EMOTIONS AND LOVE IS CONCERNED.THE POEM EXPRESSES TRUE EMOTIONAL SCENARIO OF THAT MOMENT.
THIS SEEMS TO BE BEAUTIFUL IMAGINATION OF THE WRITER ABOUT HEAVEN. THERE ARE PEOPLE WHO SAY THE HELL AS WELL AS HEAVEN, EVERYTHING IS THERE ON PLANET EARTH AND WE ALL SEE IT AND EXPERIENCE IT DURING OUR LIFETIME WHILE SOME BELIEVE, WE GO THEIR AFTER DEATH. wHO IS CORRECT? IT IS A SUSPENSE.
very unique and beautiful way to describe the passage and importance of time. Everything changes, anything may happen, but there is no change in passage of time. It will pass and pass and so on:-
I am grateful to be alive,
I try not to have regrets,
I do the best I can -
There is no going back,
The future is uncertain,
There is only the moment, Time passes.
Above lines express understability of writer of life's concepts.
THE EXPRESSION IS
- TOUCHING
--TOO EMOTIONAL
---- HEART-BREAKING
--------- MIND-SHAKING
-------------- THE BABY DESCRIBED SEEMS TO BE AN ANGEL
------------------ AFTER READING EYES GET FILLED WITH TEARS
"In Heaven's watch we leave you now to sing and praise and play;
So some Spring when we meet you there, you'll show us Heaven's ways."
THE BEAUTY OF THIS POEM LIES IN ITS
---------- SWEETNESS
-- -------- SIMPLICITY
----------- EASE OF UNDERSTANDING
------------- EMOTIONAL TOUCH
-------------- WRITE LESS SAY MORE STYLE
--------------- HONEST EXPRESSION
---------------- FORMAT
----------------- SUBJECT!
THE THINGS THOSE IMPRESSED ME IN THIS POEM ARE THE
- FLOW IN POEM
- EASY WORDS
- SIMPLICITY OF WRITING
- UNIQUE CONCEPT
- RHYMING WORDS
-CHOICE OF WIRDS
- END OF THE PEOM:-
"In August sun I stride the road, inspired,
recalling moments freshly in my past.
I dream of cities, lovers, things required
to feed a soul and life starved after fast."
"THIS IS A HIGHLY UNIQUE WRITING THAT AT THE END OFFERS SO MUCH OF INSPIRATION, COURAGE AND STRENGTH TO DEAL WITH LIFE IN TOUGHEST OF CIRCUMSTANCES.
i.e. "WORST OF WORST"
"Because there is not a darkness. Not to me. Not in front, not behind. I'm surrounded by light on this side and there. Those who love me are in both places."
ABOVE LINES ARE SO TOUCHING AND RELIEVING TOO, INFACT.
I SALUTE EVERYONE'S COURAGE AND INTELLIGENCE MENTIONED HERE FROM HEART TO LIVE A POSITIVE LIFE DESPITE OF ALL ODDS.
The most beautiful part of this sweet writing is it's end, the para at the last:-
"Is she the smile I try every morning?
Or is she the tears I shed every night?
Is he the deep laugh I feel in my throat?
Or is he the solemn frown that burns into me"
These words are very impressive and form the soul and message in the poem:-
"Of the union that is found,
For joy cannot by words be bound."
These ones are so true and heart-touching:-
"Neither can words illustrate the breath of our spirituality,
For that reason life can't be paraphrased so easily"
over all the poem is a very good piece with no errors, however if sentences could be shortened a
little, it will add to the flow and glow of words.
These words in the poem describe the extreme frustrating and hurting situation:-
" lost a lot today...
I sit down and cry,
I lose evryone i care about,
No matter how hard i try."
It seems as if the sufferer falls prey to the circumstances inspite of his all efforts. But this is the part and parcel of life's game and one thing should be kept in mind:- sometimes some bad instances come out as long-term benefits.
VEry sweet emotional wrirting and these words at end put a smile on every reader's face perhaps:-
"Words of love and affection,
we shared in a rush.
These are the things,
that make me blush!"
Unique in the sense to choose a concept"Blush" and then write on it. Well written.
"we are still the best of friends
and will be until we die"
Above words show show much of sweetness, emotionality and dedication on the part of writer.
Yes, very true, true friends are always the friends for life, the misunderstandings may come in between but that is also a part and parcel of life.
The poem begins with a stimulating question:-
"I'm screaming, but can you hear?" and this very line creates interest and makes the reader read whole of the poem.
And then the end:-
"Stop, Listen, I'm Screaming, but can you Hear?"
is so commanding that one has to hear. So effective expression.
In this line:-"you see me vaquely" perhaps it is vaguely?
A mind tickiling question:-
"why do we care
when you do not"
Perhaps it is the nature or attention or different concerns and interests of the people because of which they do so.
These lines show the indifferent nature of the person concerned.
"your life is important
and not just to me
but to everyone around you
cant you see?"
This is a very unique, very emotional, very philosophical piece, infact piece beyond rating.
The writer has so brilliantly put the whole concept in a new light that whosoever will read this poem, will stop for a while and sat:- "wonderful"
Everything is Ok, but I think it should be change their ways rather than:-
"change there ways"
But spells don't matter, when poem contains such an excellent MATTER.
The kind of feelings expressed by the writer in this emotional poetic piece are indeed very painful. But one must have the power to analyse things in the light of reality, so that wise decisions could be taken to carry out life smoothly. Everyone who will read this poem, will perhaps be able to understand the sufferings and longings expressed. So overall it is a sucessful expression of heart on paper.
excellent expression,
thoughtful emotions
analytical views
Lines with effect:-
"Crowded rooms of empty people,
Quiet minds of loud thought.
Busy with too much time,
Dreams that are never sought.
Life that rings out death,
All yet nothing left."
I rated it five stars because the writer has chosen an unusual subject for the poem. Those who themselves or their family memebers suffer from frequent allergies will feel this poem near to their heart.
Well written and explained the symptoms of allergy.
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