This is an unique writing with a very nice message about the analysis of things in one's life. On one hand it expressee the different aspects of life in contrast and on the other hand also teaches to see deeply into the perspectives and situations and tackle accordingly.
"I don't know what else to do
Here are we on the edge"
This is a great small magical piece. Big philosophy expressed with so few words. it is both enriching as well as enlighetening.
"My problem doesn't leave with the racing tide
But for a while it gives me a place to run and hide"
Above words create a strength on reader's mind. The poem in itself is a healing agent.
Very emotional and expressive writing indeed.
These words:-
"The world closes in
Gripping ever tighter
Choking the breath from my soul"
make the reader feel as he himself is getting choked.
The writer has been successful in creating a magic effect of sorrow follwed by relaxing feeling at the end of the poem.
In this poem the words are doing the same effect on reader that might have been the with feeling of the sufferer.
THis is a n excellent writing and comparison. The importance of colours and their qualities compared to the marriage in a very unusual but very very creative way. I liked the whole writing and agree to it. This Line in the article is most effective one:-
"When the colors of yellow and blue combine to make green, the colors are mixed forever and cannot be undone."
What I understood that this is a sweet poem that described a brave dog who sniffed and indicated about the presence of a bomb but in the entire process, he got killed himself. It is very wise of the writer to describe about this pet in such a beautiful way.
"And the world lost an 'ero,
When Old Taffy got killed"
along with emotions of ocean, emotions of writer has also been exhibited in the poem in an interesting way.This one is the coolest paragraph of lovely song:-
"tourists
and snowbirds
pack up kids, coolers, blankets
cram cars to make their reluctant way back
to their inland homes
or flee with the sweet-throated songbirds
to southern states of perpetual sun..."
IT is a beautifully written poem that reflects a very postive message and also the grasping power of the writer to find something so important in ringing bells. Lovely poem with a great message that heals minds.These lines are just wonderful:-
"A ray of hope from God descends.
The brutal scars begin to mend.
I see the babe upon the throne.
I know I'll never be alone."
I like this style of poetry, saying big messages in just few words. This is the talent that lies with very limited number of writers. It is a philosophy :-
"What does it mean to be me?"
And everybody must ask this question from his heart and mind.
This poem reflects such a sweet thinking on the part of author. It is very wise of the poet to select three wishes, the wishes that are above any financial gain. may all three wishes come true.
These lines in the poem show the special talent of the author to convey complicated matters in a very simple way:-
"If I ever had the power
For even just one hour
I would order world peace
Then all crimes and war would cease"
This poem is just great, showing the understanding of love. Yes, very true, each word written it, seems to not come only from writer's mind but also from the heart. The heart touching poetry is the original poetry in my opinion. Nice words:-
"When I want to cry.
You give me strength
When I can no longer try.
You hold me so close
You hold me so tight."
It is a beautifully written poem about pain and it's significance. The words have been knitted in an interesting manner one after the other. The writer deserves appreciation and applause. These lines form the soul of the poem:-
"When I spoke of that, I felt it more
So there I sat, Knew why so sore.
The pain was there, For me to take
Not to share, For my own sake"
It is best as original, no need to change or modify on other's review.
Beautifully written poem that shows writers honest realisation of facts after undergoing a relatioship. Very few words, much matter expressed. light and nice.These words are most meaningful and expressive:-
"You Are The Keeper
Who Never Keeps
And The Creeper
Who Always Creeps"
well done.
Nice emotional expression of the writer and hiding of feelings from her boyfriend. The words knitted in an interesting and honest way.
These are mind tickiling words in the peom:-
"The feelings that have been replaced
You might even notice how much I think about him,
You might know that I miss
Kissing him
I berry these feelings so deep
To the point I can’t sleep"
It is a nice emotional poem with a suffering as well as relieving soul in it. I find the emotional poetry to be the petry with soul. There is reflection of experience, pain as well as relief and lessons in it.
These words are most effective:-
"I have no friends,
I have no money.
I live day by day begging for food.
I'm covered in dirty rags that I found"
I think, I have already written a review on this poem but I am not sure.I particularly like the writings on animals and those which deal with emotional aspects. This one also comes in the category of my likings. These words are especially most impressive:-
"Moonlight adrift dappled backs
velvet muzzles pressed to pungent Earth"
An impressive emotional expression that tells the feelings of this girl. The thoughts of "wall talking"
provoke mind to think more.
These words express deep pain and sorrow:-
"They would tell of her as a whole
Her struggles,heartaches, and pain
Her loves,hates, and cries
And her being her and no one else"
The poem expresses deep emotional pain and the pain and emptiness that is prevailing in writer's mind because of this loss. The author has clearly put into words, the thoughts and memories going on in his lonely mind.
These words:-
"I FEEL YOU HERE, YOU'RE STILL WITH ME
YOU EASE MY THOUGHTS YOU COMFORT MY SLEEP
I DREAM OF YOU AND IT SEEMS REAL"
express firm attachment of the writer with departed personality.
So perfect expression, specially in the words:-
"When I opened the closet door and saw my son terrified,
And crying in the corner; that’s when I realized,
That I was leading my father’s troubled life.
Kneeling on the floor, I looked in his eyes; crying."
I will say it is just heart-touching. Well written.
Nice sweet poem about the wolves, expressing observation at an emotinal and also gross level. the author seems to be thinking right from the angle of the wolves as well his own point of view.
Yes, the eyes of animal glow in shining colours during the night because of tapetum of their eyes.
Well said:-
"feelings for the world to know
We could not possibly begin to understand all you do and say
As the shadows lengthen and the light fades away to dark,
you leap out to run and play, yellow, blue, and gray eyes shining like the moon
Whispering wind wisps through your fur"
It seems to be a nice and successful expression of depressed mind. This is how perhaps the depressed people think, that is why they take extreme steps.
These words clearly express the prevailing frustraration of such suffering people:-
"with it all happening the right way,
I'm dysfunctional now
and I feel that I lose
this battle we fight"
But they must come out of depression by somehow adopting positive thoughts and live a fuller life.
This is an inspiring emotional poem giving and conveying so many hopeful words.
The author seems to awakening all those who live in despair and frustrations.
These words are the soul of the poem:-
"Angels are all around us,
Even though they just can't stand us,
So come on dear,
It's time to here,"
A very philosophical and sweet writing. It tickles the mind to think about the various faces of personalities, those at dispaly and those hidden ones too. Nice attempt.
These words are most impressive:-
"That performs each and every task.
No one will know,
Cause no one can see,
That she’s not her,
And I’m not me."
Yes, ofcourse she will be fine. This is what a reader would say after reading this heart-blowing writing. Nice expression of emotions and blend of flow, continuity can be seen within it for a baby perhaps born pre-mature? I suppose. If the reader wishes happy life for the child, the writer is ofcourse successful in his/her writing. Keep writing, as you have abiltiy to express.
An awareness effort to speak for someone who can't speak herself
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