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Review of Antheraea  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Words Whirling 'Round
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our April, Original Photo and Haiku contest! *Bigsmile*

The Photo:

Ahh, this one got me! I so enjoy watching nature and the surprises that may result. Here, the moth gets caught between the window and the screen. It seemed quite unbothered by your removing of the screen and using the tape measure to make that moth pop for the viewer's mind's eye. It brings it to life more because both nature and man-made items blend together in an odd, yet serene way. I really like that! *Delight*

The Haiku:

*InLove2* Loved these descriptive words:

Midnight wind
Heart pounding
Trapped

These are strong, well chosen words to fit within the total picture of the scene.

Form:

Traditional 5-7-5 syllabic count Haiku. *CheckY*

*Yinyang* Perfectly complementing the photo. They are companions of the creative juices of the muse brought to life.

Lovely imagery produced by the combination of the two! *Infinity*

Well done! *Butterfly2O*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Schnujo's in the Falklands
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

This is too, funny, Jody. I'm really trying to picture you on the route doing the job. Did you watch "Dirty Jobs" years ago? Although I must admit I was quite close to a garbage pickup person many years ago. The hours were great, he stated as the job was completed early enough in the day to head to a bar. *Rolleyes* Ah, youth! That relationship did not last long. Not because of the garbage man stuff but because of the bar stuff. *Laugh*

I read your author's note that this profession did not come true, but rather, it was desired throughout childhood. You were a tomboy, too, I take it? So was I -- I think I still am! *Rolling*

*Rabbit2* Your story was well-written, and filled with imagery. You made it real as if it were indeed a non-fiction. I admire your spunk and independent choice of professions from a young age. My daughter wanted to be a mortician. Hey, some-body has got to do it!


Observation:

I remember them talking to be to me about various jobs--Didn't I want to be a teacher?

This was a fun read, and neither one of us had to get our hands dirty. *Ha*

Good job!*Trash*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Dew Drop  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

First Impressions:

*LeafG* Falling drops of water and leaves make a glorious backdrop for poetry. So much can be visualized through this image that it reminiscent of one's life and times.

Further Impressions:

*GemV* The metaphor of the water drop collects into another drop merging as one, and love relationships make it meld beautifully. You brought the reader up close and personal by bringing fond memories of days of youth.

Parting Thoughts:

*PaintBrush* Lovely imagery with well-woven words that fit together perfectly into the tapestry of this poem. It is nature and love, beginning and end. It is life itself.

Well-done! *Leaf2G*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Once More Now  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our dialogue with an invisible entity prompt in March. *Shamrock*

Initial Thoughts:

The plot was set up quickly as the reader is taken to the Irish pub on St. Patrick's day. One patron seeks an empty stool at a table where another patron sat. He was told the seat was saved for a friend. That patron found a seat another spot over and began hearing a dialogue between that patron and , well, nobody visible! *Ha*

Further Thoughts:

The patrons were quite curious about the disembodied voice being heard at a table where only one patron was sitting. It became a full pub curiosity as others wondered if the strange voice was from the seat-saving friend, Dylan, who may have been a ventriloquists. By then the drinks were flowing pretty quickly on this special night.
Annie the barmaid, delivered drinks to that table and heard the disembodied voice speak of her loveliness, and that she'll have men lined up outside the door awaiting a date with her.

Odd Happenings:

Magic happens as what the invisible voice predicted was happening to Annie right at that moment. Annie began to sense he was something quite special, but wondered why he could not be seen if he's so magical.

Mystery Solved:

Annie, is told by his friend Dylan, the story of the beginning of the end of his friend's visibility. *Ghost*

Parting Thoughts:

Humorous!!! I loved the conclusion that wrapped that night up at the Irish pub with fun and a big "Aha!" moment. *Laugh* It only took a hundred years to figure it out. But then, all good things come to those who wait! *Rolling*

Conclusion:

One or two quotation mishaps, but otherwise a fun, quick and very quirky story. You followed the tough prompt easily and made it your own. You added the humor and it fit with the substance of the tale.

Fine entertainment! *Glass3*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


Hello there Schnujo's in the Falklands
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

Initial Thoughts:

I knew I was entering a world, another world, a world where trees glow.

Further Thoughts:

I enjoyed the slow build-up of the mystery as the trees were being examined by taking a bit of bark scrapings. Nothing could be found out as each new vial was used to gather information. Seth was a fine partner in the paranormal experience as he did his best to control his nervousness while Jim did the bark-scrapings. The trees glowed, but nothing gave them a hint of where the glow was coming from. Until ... *BareTree2*


Observation:

Seth's is simply wondering if the trees are going to suddenly come to life and eat them. [Seth is OR Seth's simply wondering]

Loved this Part!

"And warmth can mean life and the last thing he wanted was to make a tree angry by copping a feel without asking."
*Rolling*! I loved that unexpected bit of humor amid the tense moments.


Parting Thoughts:

Just as the reader felt secure to go back into the forest ... *Shock2*

*Mountains* Yes, this was a cliffhanger. It would have been unexpected had it not been stated in the brief description. But then, nothing says paranormal better than trees all aglow and the picture of Jim's eyes growing wide. Poor Seth, hope he decided the right option.

Well done, and a fun read! *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Festive and Green  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Don Two
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review!

I am also reviewing your item because I found it while perusing the Comedy Genre page looking for an amusing piece that would fit within my Comedy Newsletter theme. Since the Newsletter is due out tomorrow, 3/17, I wanted a couple St Paddy's day items to highlight. Yours will be one. *Ha*

Initial Impressions:

Someone is going to explain what St. Patrick's Day is all about to aliens. Now I knew it would be amusing, and anxiously read on! *Shamrock*

Further Thoughts:

O'Sullivan actually blasted off to outer space to land on another planet and bring all of his knowledge about St. Patrick, Christianity, parades, and all things green to the inhabitants. He did a fine job in the explaining department.

Parting Thoughts:

Your poem flowed smoothly and rhymed just right. *Rolling* I enjoyed the transformation of the aliens. They really got the St. Patrick's Day spirit and even began to dance arm in arm while turning from their alien-grey skin color to bright green! *AlienG*

Conclusion:

Well done! And ,lots of fun to picture in my mind's eye. Yup, it will be highlighted on the 3/17 Comedy Newsletter. *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item because I found it while perusing the Comedy Genre page. *Bigsmile*

*Rolling* Oh, my, this is so funny! I could picture the whole baby delivery drama with a husband who let's just say, has a weak stomach around blood.

Birthing is not without some messy stuff happening. And, yes, years ago the husband always remained outside the delivery room process and anxiously waited in a room with other dads wondering if they would be the dad of a girl or a boy. Yeah, they weren't doing sonograms back then! It truly was a mystery until the actual birth.

I congratulate your hubby for lasting it out and even being convinced to cut the cord. *Laugh*

*BabyGirl* I am highlighting this story in the 3/17 Comedy Newsletter. It falls with the theme of deliveries -- although not quite the same type of delivery, but humorous enough to have its spot in the newsletter. *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Prosperous Snow celebrating
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your it because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

The Hands of Time:

Your title and brief description made me want to read the poem and see just where time would take me.

Minutes Pass:

You hit an interesting topic about clock watching. I know it's easy to feel like time has seemed to slow down or even stop momentarily. It seems we can drift off into a world totally unrelated to the clock. It's as if the digits turn and we are lost in thoughts and surprised to find that ten minutes have already passed. I get tuned into time when it's close to 11:11. I am always reminded of my mother at that time. She loved 11:11! I try to watch for it and spend a minute talking to her
 and remembering beautiful times. Then I realize that 11:09 is now 11:13 and I totally missed her favorite time. It makes me a little upset that I drifted away in my mind rather than spending that special minute with her memory. Then I realize that I was already thinking about her and enjoying fond memories while the minutes rolled on.

Time's Gears:

Gears of time keep moving forward. Your poem brought in the sense of time from a clock watcher's point of view. Your free verse poem moved along as rhythmically as hands on a clock. I found no gear-grinding nor batter hiccup along the way. It is a poem that makes one stop and think and realize others do look at time but sometimes don't see that which is right in the face of the clock. Whatever the reason there is a time loss, time stops for no one.

Wake Up:

In the end, time is infinite. It is both calming and nerve-wracking depending on what is to be done at a certain time. The fact is, whether time is forgotten or set to an alarm, it continues whether we watch it or not.

I'm Off the Clock:

I do enjoy your poetry. Some really make me stop and think. They have a philosophical feel about them. *Thinker*

So all I can say is ... Well done! *Clock*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, ♥Hooves♥
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because I was perusing the Comedy Genre to find some goodies for an upcoming Comedy Newsletter. *Bigsmile*

My Initial Impressions:

The title caught my attention, immediately! Being an expert in Amazon ordering, I was convinced this read would be right up my alley. However, since I don't have an alley cat, I was going to be heading into deep Amazon secret deliveries! *Ha*

Further Impressions:

Oh, my, this is going to be some treat to read! I hadn't decided yet if it was going to be about "cat treats" or "dog treats." Simply put, it was a treat to read! *Laugh* Did I mention my love for 2-day Prime delivery? *Delight*

This poem painted some pictures in my mind's eye. The couple walking their Basset Hound lazily through the picturesque are with cobblestone paths. The dog sniffing along, picking up a familiar doggy-treat scent that makes her tail wag in joy as the UPS truck comes into view. *Dog1**Cat*

Heart Stopping Moment:

"Kitty cat with a present
Giving us a bit of fright!"

*Mouse* When I think of a cat with a present, I assume it is something of the rodent variety. *Sick* However, I was proven wrong to my delight. *Delight*

Parting Thoughts:

This was such an amusing poem especially when one reads between the lines and can actually picture both animal and human characters. I like that it had hidden surprises that led to a sweet and satisfying ending.

Good job! In fact, it will be highlighted in next week's Comedy Newsletter. It does fit into the Amazon delivery theme of it! *Laugh*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Jeff
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because I found it while perusing the Comedy Genre pages. The title drew me in because it fell with the theme of my upcoming Comedy Newsletter. *Bigsmile*

First Impression:

This would be a fast, and humorous piece. It's a limerick, this prone to a bit of quirky comedy. I like that!

Further Impressions:

I wasn't disappointed as it pulled in one of my favorite ways of shopping -- Amazon! Ordering an item from Timbuktu, could be quite difficult for Prime shoppers in the States, to get their item within two days. *Laugh*

Loved the package's travel path and the wit.

Naturally, traveling such distances via plane, train and canoe, could result in a delivery being "overdue."

Lesson learned!

If you need it fast, order close-by!

I am highlighting this little poem in next week's Comedy Newsletter. It will fit well with the newsletter's subject matter. *Bigsmile*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Masquerade  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Angel&Witch

Hello there, Jacky
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review! *Delight*

What I liked:

I liked the dialogue between Joe and Angie. She was trying to convince him to go to their friend's masquerade party. He was not interested, but she had baited him to go convincing him he'd never be able to find her in her costume. He bit and left before her to attend the party.

Further Observations:

You get your readers wondering if Joe will really figure out which guest is his wife. We, of course were led to a twisted, surprising ending!


Observations:

By eleven thirty, though[,] Joe has [had] guessed all of his friends,


Further Observations:

"having been convicted of her murder since she was never found,"

Hmmm, My mystery brain just kicked-in. I do get that this was a Flash Fiction and had to be wrapped up quickly, but there's things to be considered in order to jump to the conclusion of murder. *Shock2*

Since there was no body found when the wife went missing, there had to be some incriminating evidence of a crime, such as her blood, on some weapon with his fingerprints, etc. It needn't be a huge explanation, but just some clues to make it more convincing.

Otherwise, this was a fine little story with a big twist at the end. It just needs a few more facts to answer a reader's questions about his conviction.

Poor Joe!!! *Laugh*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there 💙 Carly
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering February's Slam Cupid, Intentionally bad poetry. The object of this contest is to write the worst poetry possible to get the coveted 1-star rating. *Bigsmile*


My First Impression:

I liked the title, "Conjured Heartbreak." I entered the poem with visions of some really horrible Cupid Slamming about to happen. *Shock2*

Further Impressions:

I couldn't help myself. I had to read and reread this poem trying to find something to sink my teeth into that would grab me in a way to deal out a one-star. This is the purpose of the contest. However, I found there was so much saving grace, so well-penned and filled with imagery, I just didn't have the heart to down-rate this poem.

It really is a good poem! Dark, as love can have a darker side that doesn't involve the Cupid arrow. It shows many points (not arrows) about the disappointment of love and the heartbreak.

Did I miss something? This poem is well crafted and rather deep. Much more so than Cupid deserves.

My Dilemma:

I know the object of this contest is to find the baddest of the bad out of available 1-star ratings, but I think this poem deserves better ratings. If it were to be covered with 1-star ratings, it would have a difficult time recovering. And I repeat, it's much better than a 1-star rating. The ratings you have brought it up to 3-stars, far removed from the needed 1-star. I think it's better than 3 stars (average), so my rating should get it lifted a bit for you.

So, not to pull down your ratings any more, I am giving this a 5-star rating for being a fine poem that allows the reader to actually feel the emotions that come through woven within the lines. It did not truly "Slam" Cupid as it took a more serious path. It is dark, but well-written. Cupid does make a showing but merely as a character for whom one blames when love turns bad, not the sickly-sweet character we imagine during this contest. *HeartBroken*

Thank you again for entering the contest. We Slam Cupid annually in February. Do join in, again. *Smile*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Cupid Plucks  
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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Words Whirling 'Round
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Bigsmile*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our February SLAM CUPID, 1-STAR Poetry Month prompt!

Initial Impressions:

Loved the first lines with the rhythmic rhyme and use of alliteration. I knew at that moment the rest of the poem would be a fun read. Good way to hook a reader! *Bigsmile*

Further Thoughts:

This poem was quick and quirky and totally falls within giving Cupid the old Slam! It was a humorous read all the way until the end.

Parting Thoughts:

Got a kick out of this:
"Candy, gifts, and banjo muse all failed to impress her
but still his urges Rose again, Beau wanted to undress her." *Rolling*

Conclusion:

Your intentionally bad poem did what it intended to do -- it was awfully bad, yet terribly good at producing images in the mind of the reader about Cupid and Rose. The one with the thorns beats the one with an arrow who can't put his hands on his thorny love interest! *Laugh*

As you might guess, it is a difficult job for the judges to pore through the pits of Hades to find the best of the worst. Yup, it's a tough job, but somebody's got to do it!

Good luck with the contest!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of A letter to Cupid  
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Rated: E | (1.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Sumojo
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thanks for entering February's Slam Cupid, intentionally bad poetry contest, where one-star is coveted. *Bigsmile*

Initial Impression?

*Rolling**Rolling*

Further Thoughts:

Okay, this was a cleverly crafted version of bad-poetry, whereas the reader seems to be lulled into the warmth of lovely rhyming couplets only to be smacked alongside the sleeping mind and pulled into reality.

It takes a trained bad-poetry mind to sift through the smoke screen and see the BAD! *Shock2*

This is a bad-poetry contest prompt. Despite the cute couplets about modern day dating online, which should be a real lesson for Cupid to learn, the one-star rating wormed its way through to my brain. I mean, that is the purpose of the Slam Cupid, contest, right? *Smirk*

Parting Thoughts:

So, although I hate to have to break apart the lovely shiny stars you got ... I just can't resist giving this the coveted badge of honor ... 1-Star! *Star* This is why the contest exists, is it not? *Smirk2*

As you might realize, it's difficult for us judges to find the baddest of the bad that is also soooooo good in its badness. *Ha*

Good Luck!

Until next time--Slam On! *Smirk2*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Prosperous Snow celebrating
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thanks for entering our Slam Cupid contest in February! *Bigsmile*

What I loved:

I loved the various rhyme schemes within the lines of the poem. It is great to think outside the box, yet try to keep the flow and rhyme captivating! *Think*

Also Loved:

The horribleness of being caught up within intentionally bad poetry!

This was fun to read and also let out an audible Groan.

Observation:
A little typo? Perhaps part of the being bad, but in case not I highlighted it. *Wink*
"Go ahead a[nd] sue me, if you must."

Parting Thoughts:

You had me hooked at this line:

"I know your love interest isn't a dog!
Lady, it isn't my fault you kissed a frog!"

Good one! *Laugh*

This poem is bad, really bad. I'm surprised it got such high ratings! *Shock2*

As you know, it is a difficult job for us judges to pore through the bottom of the pit to choose the very worst of the worst. *Headbang*

Good luck with the contest! *Rabbit2*

Until next time -- Slam On ... or not. Must save up some more bad stuff for next February, too! *Ha*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Swinging Fairy  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello there, Princess Megan Rose 22 Years
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review.*Smile*

I love the magical quality of your prose-poem. You describe the fairy and the little creatures sitting on her lap on the swing. They are good friends and love nature and the beauty of their surroundings.

The cat and the bunny get along just fine in this fairy's world. They can share a space on her lap without fighting.

You filled the reader's mind with fantasy of a perfect world. The colors and gardens and trees all come to life with the swing on the tree and the red-haired fairy and her friends.

Loved the images at the bottom of the poem. They fit beautifully within your descriptive lines.

Well done! *Fairy*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello there brom21
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our January Photo Prompt. *Bigsmile*

Initial Impressions:

You opted for the short story rather than poetry based on the prompt. Your story would lead your reader to someplace frosty yet magical!

Further Impressions:

The characters could be pictured in the mind's eye because the descriptions made it easy to do so.

Observation:

Griselda tried to reach out but she could [not] move.

Suggestion:

I know there was a 2000 Word Count limit. However, I think this story could have been tightened-up a bit. There was a lot of busyness surrounding the story. I know Griselda was compelled to find her brother and save him. I think the beginning of the story needed to move on quicker. Introduce her father and that Nathan's missing and it would be futile to go after him. Get her on her journey sooner, perhaps add more layers to the travels and develop more of the magic involved, the locket and Sulta.

Further Thoughts:

One little photo brought action, adventure and love of family and specifically, Griselda's love for her brother and his safety. She had an ability to hear his cries for help after he disappeared, and knew she had to save him no matter how dangerous it would be.

She's a likeable character who put her life on the line for her family. Her brother Nathan? Not such a person of good integrity. He was willing to sell-out for fortune and power. Nevertheless, he saw the mess he was in and had to face the consequences. Of course, his sister protected him and family's good name.

Parting Thoughts:

This was quite an interesting take on the prompt. In the end, it is a story about one sibling's loyalty to the other, and great bravery.

Well done! *CastleRight*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Winter Impact  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, jaya

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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our January picture prompt contest! *Bigsmile*

Initial Impressions:

I love the vision you painted in my mind of one looking outside the window while the cold snap of winter made its presence known.

Further Impressions:

I love how you twist it up a bit by describing palm trees in the Caribbean, the ultimate picture of warmth and sunshine, its beckoning beauty calling out to visitors to come join in the fun. However, the reader is reminded it is winter's frosty chill that really exists at the moment of looking outside that window."


Observation:

"a pictures of palm fringed-"


Parting Thoughts:

"a vista of reposing beauty"
"ensconced in the warm interior"
"not ostentatious, nor flaunted"

Beautifully penned words that weave the scenario together effortlessly. The home is warm and cozy and the exterior is icy and hazardous, symbolizing two totally different states of being from one side of the glass to the other.


Well done! *SuitDiamond*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Redtowrite
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering the January picture prompt contest. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

The reader can glean by the title and brief description that this poem would fall into the darker side of life as 2021 approached. It brings about questions of whether there would be a more joyful year ahead, or would the discontent linger through another year. "Deathly quiet" sends chills up the spine. When thoughts of the past year flash back to being locked down and missing out on friendly, human contact due to the Corona Virus, one can't help but interpret it as a deathly quiet that can strike anytime and change the lives of families forever.


Loved these lines:

"Memories hang in icy air.
One last cold breath."

Very strong descriptions. They have impact adding to the depth of darkness and despair of the loss of so much.


Observations:

Green grass is gone to stay. A little confusing "gone to stay" I think you mean it won't return but it does make me pause. *Think* [Perhaps "green grass is gone away?"]

"Lost loved one by one." [lost loves? or lost lovers?]

Parting Thoughts:

Your poem hit on the icy image that was the prompt and magnified the darkness and chills, left behind of those hiding within the confines of their homes.

Much to ponder from these lines!

Well done! *PenP*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of A Place to Hide  
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Angel&Witch

Hello there Angel
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our January Picture Prompt contest! *Bigsmile*

Initial Impressions:

Your title and brief description alert the reader to be prepared for something mysterious and perhaps horror-filled nightmare involving a child and the need to escape and hide.

Good hook! *Hook*


Observations:

"but wit[h] so few places to hide,"

"the girl crouched behind a Bush,"["bush" not capitalized, unless she was crouched behind a former president *Laugh*]

"gagged a[n]d tied before she had a clue what was happening."


"She had no idea who had done this but there was no way she was hanging around to find out. Also, the girl needed a hospital urgently before she succumbed to hypothermia, or her injuries."

This paragraph is a bit wordy. Try condensing it to bring forth the most important parts first, such as the need to be hospitalized. The way it's written, it almost downplays the urgency of medical help. *Sob*

Further Thoughts:

*Pencil* There were some interesting ideas being played out in this story. The thing that I believe needed more attention was descriptions of character and development of plot including more fleshing out of the mysterious kidnapper, and how and why she was allowed to escape. Is he toying with her? These are things that add to the reader's ability to visualize the characters.

*Paperdoll* The tone of the story did jump out, however, that only keeps the reader's attention for so long. Without more development of characters and scenes, it leaves the reader with too many questions.

*Thought* There was definitely more room in the word count to fill in some of the missing parts of the story line. And several more days before the deadline to do some editing.

Parting Thoughts:

This story has a great deal of potential. It just needs a little more time spent on editing and taking into consideration some of the suggestions above.

The ending is especially interesting as a reader knows there is more to fright out there should the story be continued. *Smirk*


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of The Ballroom  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there SeanFear
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review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review.

Initial Impressions:

I loved the feeling of ebb and flow in the rhythm of your poem. Talk about holding a woman within his heart and carrying that torch forward for many years! He just felt the time wasn't right to settle down, just yet.

Further Thoughts:

I simply adored the refrain. It kept the poetic ties connected and reminded the reader about the girl left behind.

Observation:

I had to change the content rating on your item. The use of the phrase "the drunk men" is a non-E phrase due to the reference to alcohol inebriation .. No mention of the act of drinking/getting drunk on alcoholic beverages can be in "E" rating. It cannot be ASR either, thus 13+.

Parting Thoughts:

I loved your choice of words, the rhythm of the poem and the huge picture painted within the verses for the reader to enjoy. I could put a face to the characters and you did a fabulous job setting the tone along with a bit of wit!

Good job! *Bigsmile*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Mirror, Mirror  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Anni Pon
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review! *Smile*

Initital Thoughts:

I was convinced by the "mirror" in the title and the opening lines of the poem that this was an introduction of a vampire character. Boy was I on the wrong path! It just goes to show you that although vampires don't see their reflections in a mirror, and commonly despise garlic, doesn't mean all beginnings of mirrors and garlic lead to a vampire! *Ha*

Further Thoughts:

I enjoyed the building up of the philosophical look at narcissism, and how much time of one's life can be devoted to "self-love." Pride is one of the deadly sins, after all. *Devilish*

Observations:

I saw the poem get stronger as it went on. Thus, even though I thought the opening stanza was a little weak at pulling-in the reader, the unfolding of the truth as being described through the looking glass gave it much more depth. *GemBL*

Suggestion:

Perhaps another opening line-word other than "Sometimes" being repeated would be a plus. *Wink*

Parting Thoughts:

I loved the comparisons of envy of one actress' perfection of certain body parts and the person finding flaws with their own body. It clearly shows an obsession to become that which they feel is ultimate beauty. They look only skin deep with aid of the mirror. *Mask3*

Conclusion:

Wise words from a worn-out mirror, used for purposes of selfish obsession. However, the things that have been shown to the mirror are a truth that the user could not bear to accept.

Well done! *HotBalloon3*

Welcome to WDC! *Books2*




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Review of Lazy Larry  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am reviewing your story as a judge for
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The Character:

And what a character he is -- Larry, the lazy elf.
He is the unkempt elf who hated to work and tried remaining behind in his bed when all the other elves at Santa's workshop went off to work.

He had been warned that his laziness would not be tolerated. When he finally arrived to work he was given a couple jobs working with toy trains. He did a lazy job of that and was finally reported to Mrs. Claus. *Laugh*

I like that the Missus knew exactly how to teach Larry a lesson never to be forgotten. Larry was sent to the stalls to upkeep and feed the reindeer.

Larry tried to shirk his duties there, but got a "kick-start" so-to-speak, by the head reindeer himself, Rudolph.

Further Impressions:

This was a cute read. It has a wonderful message woven within about doing one's job and maintaining cleanliness and good character.

Parting Thoughts:

Larry was prevented from ruining the toys that would go to children that Christmas. He learned his lesson with the help of a very demanding reindeer with a swift kick. He also worked his way back into Mrs. Claus' good graces.

Christmas was saved! *Bigsmile*

Well done!


Until next time--write on! And, good luck with the contest! *Bigsmile*

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello there, Mulungi
I am reviewing your story as a judge for
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Create a memorable character using the given prompt for huge prizes!
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The Character:

Charlie, a precocious youngster who was street-wise and jaded about life following the death of his parents and his being placed in multiple foster homes, the most recent domicile had alcoholic foster parents.

Charlie was teased due to his constant change in foster homes, and inability to attain good grades no matter how hard he tried.

Nevertheless, Charlie is a lovable character, and although he didn't believe in Christmas, he didn't want other children to suffer from its attempted sabotage by a couple of Christmas thieves, so he went after them to put a stop to it.


Observations:

it was mid night[midnight, one word]. It was time for Santa to pick the good kids’ gifts.

"As for Charlie’s former parents, they celebrated Christmas like they always did; they got DRANK." [DRUNK]Unless someone made a smoothie out of them. *Laugh*

Parting Thoughts:

What a great adventure for this young man. He deserved it! *Bigsmile* I loved how Charlie got the convincing of his life in the most special way from Santa himself.And, that he found a true home to be happy and enjoy his childhood with Christmas being believed in again.

Good job!

Until next time--write on! And, good luck with the contest! *Bigsmile*

This is "The WDC Angel Army"  Review!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello there, Roari ∞
I am reviewing your story as a judge for
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#1679316 by Writing.Com Support
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The Character:

What a character Elfenezer is! *Laugh*

He portrays a disgruntled elf who believes he should have been chosen over Kringle to be Santa.

Partners in Crime:

Doug and Noble, agreed to conspire with Elfenezer to sabotage Santa's route to deliver all the nice list names and replace the route with the naughty, thus putting a mess into the whole marketing success of Christmas, and, putting the blame for the mess-up on Santa, himself.

Happy Days Again!

A several reindeer clued Santa in on the destructive plan, and Elfenezer and partners were sentences to five years behind candy cane bar imprisonment! *CandycaneR*

Parting Thoughts:

You followed the prompt, well with your Elfenezer character, and the planned threat of a very serious crime at Santa's workshop.


Well done!


Until next time--write on! And, good luck with the contest! *Bigsmile*

This is "The WDC Angel Army"  Review!
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