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Review of Dear Me 2024  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there! Sorji

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You have a great recipe for achieving the goals you have set forth.

*PaintG* Finishing books and ready for publishing

*PaintO* Adding audio, a tedious job to say the least.
Getting finances in order

*PaintP* Eating healthier with focus on health rather than fast results
more reading and artistic work.

*PaintY* Enjoying a favorite pastime of your love for gaming.

Keeping it real and manageable.

These are the things that jumped out at me. *Dolphin*


Observations:

It's time to list of this year's goals. It's time to list this year's goals.

Conclusion:

Nicely laid out outline for a successful year of accomplishing goals you have set.

Good luck with your 2024 goals! *Boat*

Regards,
Web~Witch



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Review of Dearest Me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there! GERVIC - Saving for Premium

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First Impressions:

The layout is very attractive to the eyes. It pulled me right into your goals for this year.

Further Impressions:

Your well-thought out goals include being kinder to yourself as well as others. Also being forgiving, showing more care and love to family, and learning how to say "no" when it's necessary.

I like the way the goals a re broken down. They have clarity and are concise. Nothing added that appears to be far out as far as reaching those goals.

Parting Thoughts:

You did a wonderful job giving yourself goals that are definable, can be adjusted when needed but not completely tossed out of consideration. Your goals touch upon a faith you have in your abilities that just need a little nudge and a bit of dedication.

Conclusion:

You tackled this Dear Me prompt with a true passion! Good luck with all of your goals for 2024! *Karate2*



Regards,
Web~Witch



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Review of Dear Me 2024  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there! SpookyBee

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First Impression:

On first gaze, I love the eye appeal of the layout. The image is beautiful with the birds in the nest hiding in the bush. The breakdown of the goals is clear and well presented.

Further Thoughts:

The Dragons and Dust Bunnies and jungle are a creative edition. It made it a fun read.

The diary of goals set in 2023 and how they rated to be used as a comparison to 2024 when the years is up is an excellent approach.

Parting Thoughts:

You've listed reading and writing goals. Editing a book for release on Amazon, working on a new novel, and investing the needed time for marketing shows a clear path to success in publishing. Lots of work!

Conclusion:

It's wonderful to see your The Bee Hive activities come to life.

Great job! Good luck with your 2024 goals!



Regards,
Web~Witch



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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there! Kåre เลียม Enga

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Initial Thoughts:

I really enjoyed the unique presentation! It was fun to read and I enjoyed the added humor. I know, you don't believe you are humorous, but you certainly can be as I've seen in a couple reviews I've done for you in the past.

Further Thoughts:

You're keeping it real!

You choose five goals for 2024. That is the first step to success. Don't stack too many plans all together and expect that time will wait for you to finish them. There's always unplanned circumstances in life that tend to throw a monkey wrench right smack into our best laid plans.

Taking care of yourself is part of it. Taking care of physical and emotional roadblocks by being more proactive about it.

Trying not to stress out id another key to your reaching your goals. Keeping it real and not being too hard on yourself. That always leads to negative results.

Positive Changes are part of the plan.

Write/blog more.

Stay away from bad habits and use the tools available to keep the good attitude going each day.

Parting Thoughts:


Now, I have to go back to #1 Talk about starting the letter with shock treatment...this was brilliant!

I like the refrain of going back to #1 each time you'd find an excuse not to do something working toward healthier goals. This added humor to the shock the reader got on first glimpse!

Conclusion:

You've got this! Good luck with your 2024 goals. *TeaR*




Regards,
Web~Witch



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Review of DEAR ME!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello there! Ja-Ja-JINX

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Initial Thoughts:

Oh my gosh! Two muses pestering you?!!! *Laugh*

I guess three minds are better than two when you have goals to complete.

Further Thoughts:

I like the layout of your letter to self. I also like the humor threaded into it.

Goals:

Writing Goals

Stories and essays: "I Write in 2024"
Write and collate my memoires [memoirs]for family members: "Roots & Wings Contest"
Publish a Noticing Newbies newsletter every four weeks.

Reviewing Goals: 50 quality reviews each month.

Anniversary-Reviews
Super Tower Review Room
& Angel Army (*Smile*)

WDC Support:

Maintain a daily presence on both the Newsfeed and Help forums.
Operate my contest: "WDC L'il Helper Contest"
Continually update and organize How To references: "The File Cabinet"

Parting Thoughts:

Yes, it is an ambitious list of goals you have set for yourself and the other two muses, but I believe you've got this! Your plans will become goals completed in 2024.

Conclusion:

I wish you all the best of luck in your endeavors.




Regards,
Web~Witch



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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello there! Elisa, Stik-or-Treat

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Initial Thoughts:

You want to go back to your roots, focus on the skills and traits that are foundational to you. Refocus on your career and have time for the thing you love, photography.

Further Thoughts:

How to accomplish the goals you want for 2024:

Civic Involvement

Reductions to your civic commitments to free up space to complete your other goals.

Focus on your subcommittee chair responsibilities and discussing your jargon-related concerns in counseling.

Photography:

Enhance your photography interests with the space you free up from civic involvement.

Job:

Finding a job in cybersecurity, IT and troubleshooting skills.

Emotional Health:

Don't get caught up in all the stresses going on these days. Focus on the things that allow your mind to settle down for a little while.

Getting out of your comfort zone is your key to success for 2024.

Conclusion:

I think your goals are well set, doable and incorporate love of photography as well as your preparedness for a career as mentioned above will bring you close to what you need and beyond, in 2024.

I wish you the very best of luck in your endeavors.






Regards,
Web~Witch



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Review of Dear Me.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hello there! PureSciFi

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Initial Thoughts:

You have many accomplishments having to do with your love for Sci-Fi. It's a very industrious workload you have, indeed. Script writing and a novel or two will definitely keep you busy this year.

Further Thoughts:

One thing that made me pause. I found it difficult to get through all the back story in the beginning of the letter which reads more like a short story before goals are listed. It was a bit confusing.

The Goals Stated:

"Once I finish transcribing these scripts, I will start working on my Outlines"
This is expected be a reached goal by the middle of the year. *Thumbsup*

Also, additional scripts: Starting SpaceHorrors scriptwriting project.

-Start writing short stories about DeathBringers.

- A novel introduction to my SpaceHorrors television series.

I believe those are the goals set for 2024. I may have missed something but it happens when there's not a clear list for the reader to see right away. Which is why it's a good idea to simplify the layout of your current year's goals rather than losing them in the past history. It's very clear that you have a love for Sci-Fi. I think more time could have been spent clarifying your current goals.

Conclusion:

These are all industrious goals. I wish you all the best in your endeavors and successes for 2024. *Wand*



Regards,
Web~Witch



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Review of " CLAP HANDS "  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random, Read & Review. *Smile*

My Thoughts:

This is a beautiful expression of faith. I love how the images of people clapping their hands to give glory to the Lord come into my mind.

It's quite lyrical and I wondered if it were meant to be a singing prayer. I could imagine little children singing this with their sweet, enthusiastic voices along with their parents. *HeartT*

If indeed these words are song lyrics perhaps add lyrics along Spiritual with the Genres.

Parting Thoughts:

The words flowed smoothly. They wove in the spiritual richness of faith. It's a prayer for each reader who comes across this.

I found no errors that took away from this simple expression of love and praise of Our Lord. *Pray*

Great job!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch



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Review!

I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the random Read & Review.

First Thoughts:

The title and brief description gave me a glimpse into the tone of the poem. Reaching the age of 50 and finding strength and confidence in a half century of life and going forward is a beautiful thing. *Rose*

Further Thoughts:

The poem was quite expressive as the confident woman breaks through the follies of youth and games played and all those things women feel are their lot in life. No longer dancing through hoops trying to please others is what I gleaned from this poem. *Vine1*

Parting Thoughts:

I loved the flow and the emotions evoked from reading this poem. The lines spoke a clarity to me along with the folksy tone. It was appreciated the definition of "caul" and the Bread of shame from ingratitude given to God. Interesting!

Conclusion:

The lines flowed easily one line after another. It made images form in my mind that last long after reading this poem.

I found nothing that looks out of place ...Perfection! *TeaV*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Cold  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering January's picture prompt dialogue contest. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

The Brief Description states, "A man searches for a lost ring as his thoughts rage." The reader expects to find out what kind of ring it is and what's causing his distress.

Further Thoughts:

A man sits on a park bench trying to figure out if his girlfriend took something from his drawer when he stepped away from the room. He started blaming her through his internal dialogue because he couldn't find the missing item/s anywhere and she was the last to be close by his drawer. *Gavel*


Observations:

Yes, the brief description states it was a lost ring. However, nowhere in the body of the entry does mention it's a ring missing.

Also, ring or rings? "...the last place I saw them was the nook in my nightstand." Them implies more than one. A little confusing, here.

Parting Thoughts:

I did like the ending when after bashing her for the theft, and humming a tune with lyrics convincing to leave her, he states: "Best get going. I don't want her to worry. *Laugh* I guess he got all that other crap off his chest and was ready to go see her. Ain't love strange?!! *Rolling*

Conclusion:

Prompt was followed, internal dialogue, and the word count given. *CheckO*

Just a little clarification needed of the above mentioned observations about the article/s missing.

Thanks again for entering! *PaintG*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there, HollisFrances
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering our January Picture Prompt Dialogue contest! *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

The reader is introduce to this character's internal struggle especially with his faith. He works through his thoughts which are very negative in the beginning as he begins to blame God for all his losses. He feels spiritually abandoned. *Frown*

Further Thoughts:

Loneliness is prevalent as those closest to him who have known him all his life are no longer alive. Again, tremendous abandonment issues are plaguing his thoughts.

Parting Thoughts:

He finally faces his demons at the end and realizes that blaming God for all his problems is not what he knows is true deep down inside. He lightens his burden and sees the light of his spiritual existence and faith. It's a beautiful thing! *Bird*

Rules were all followed. Internal dialogue based on the picture prompt. Word count was included.

Conclusion:

Good job! *PaintO*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering our January Picture Prompt dialogue contest.

First Thoughts:

A man is waiting on a bench for the bus to arrive. The bus is late and his thoughts seem to run amok on him. *Laugh*

Further Thoughts:

This is one unlikable person. *Rolleyes* He is battling reasons why his girlfriend canceled there date at their favorite restaurant at the last minute to tend to a sick aunt. He has all the negative reasons aimed at her. Then the reader discovers that he's the jerk who has not treated her very well. He's super critical about her hair and eye color and other things he needs to make up in his mind as he continues thinking it's all her fault. But then, he faces the fact that it could possibly be him who has turned her away from their relationship. *Ha*


Observation:

This part caught my eye:
"Couldn't be just because I forgot her birthday once.Or twice. I apologized both times. What more did she want?" How did this guy fail to remember her birthday twice if they were a couple for six months? *EyesLeft*

Parting Thoughts:

You followed the rules using the picture prompt to write the man's internal dialogue. You gave the word count, however it was not within the entry it was on the post. I had to check back because I didn't see it. That's why we ask for word count with item, not with post. Easy to slip by us. *Wink*

Your story had a bit of tongue-in-cheek humor as the reader gets to this man's head as his thoughts unfold. Speaking of watch--did he seriously throw the watch she gave him as a gift, at the wall, breaking it?!!! *Rolling* Oh, yeah, mister, it's all her fault. I hope she runs as far and fast as she can out of his life. *Sneaker2*

Conclusion:

Nice job! *Vine2*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*





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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window.

Thank you for entering January's picture prompt dialogue contest. *Bigsmile*

First Impression:

"Touch an ancient, shiny, artifact glowing with freaking magic and next thing you know you’re sucked into a painting of a barren landscape, sitting on your frozen ass for all eternity."

Need I say more? *Laugh* Talk about pulling the reader in. Great opening to pique that curiosity! *Cool*

Further Thoughts:

An artifact, a friend Jerry, who may be smarter than the poor wrong-wisher frozen into a painting, and no way out! Gramps' legacy fell into the wrong hands that's for sure.

Moral of his predicament? Think long and hard before making such grand wishes. You might get what you asked for but the results not as expected. Being stuck alone forever can't be any fun. Magic has a way of out foxing the fox sometimes. *Fox*

Parting Thoughts:

Prompt followed, internal dialogue, word count given, not modified after contest closed.

It was a fun and sadly-humorous story. But humor is humor.

Conclusion:

Interesting and unique use of the picture prompt. *DartB*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering our January picture prompt dialogue contest. *Bigsmile*

First Thoughts:

You move your reader from the comfort of home right onto that bench in the harsh cold of winter. The dialogue brought that picture to life.

Further Thoughts:

I see under Genre it includes Biographical. It describes a very sad, lonely and tough time after Frank passed away. All the comfort of a home and warmth and friendship --gone. Life of a homeless person started and winter bit through the body relentlessly. *Tempcold*

Parting Thoughts:

You used the picture prompt to show the truth behind having so much one day, and nothing the next--except of course Frank's coat. It may not have been warm enough on a frigid day, but it was a way to be wrapped up in memories and warmth from the past. *Vine1*

The rules were followed using the picture to apply internal thoughts/dialogue of the man sitting on a park bench. Word count was included.

Conclusion:

Very gripping dialogue, indeed.

Good job! *DartG*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering January's Picture Prompt Dialogue contest. *Bigsmile*

First Thoughts:

This guy had me going in many different directions. Poor guy! He had many fears and dislikes surrounding him.

Further Thoughts:

You followed the rules. It was his internal dialogue and word count was given.

He strikes me as a man who has no joy in his daily life. However, there was someone or more than one person he was supposed to meet at that spot on the bench in the park on Wednesday.

He internalized different concoctions of what to expect, good or bad and was quite disturbed by the terrible possibilities it could be about. He got to where he feared for his life.


Observation:

"looked like Trappist Monk." [Monks, plural].

Suggestion:

Unanswered questions: There were more words of the word count you could have added to bring more depth to the character. What was his job?
Why did he worry so much about who would show up after agreeing to the meeting?

Perhaps some hint of why he is waiting, what did he expect by agreeing to meet those strangers at the park. If he thought it could be a trap for him, I guess it was better he showed up at the wrong time. *Thought2*


Parting Thoughts:

I like the added humor about wondering which Wednesday in fact they meant for him to be there. The following day or the following week? Even the reader was wondering! *Laugh*


Conclusion:

I guess he can take all his allergies out of the park and head home and shut his blinds and find something else to worry or complain about. *Rolling*


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering our January Picture prompt Dialogue, contest. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

I just pictured this man wrapped up in his thoughts and his sweet memories of his times with his family at the park. It was his deceased wife's favorite place, so he enjoys feeling close to Mary when he sits on the park bench and thinks about their wonderful years together. *Flowerw*

Further Thoughts:

I love how he notices children sledding and throwing snowballs and it reminds him of his child doing the same some 60 years ago. Very sweet addition having the background become"animated" by those scenes of a dad and his kids playing. *Vine2*

Observation:

A quick read is suggested for punctuation.


Parting Thoughts:

This was a heartwarming story to read. You followed the directions making it internal dialogue. Word count given. *Tackg*

Conclusion:

Good job with the picture prompt! *CupidArrowL*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random Read & Review. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

This was about to be a fun read about the certain charms of feminine wiles. And indeed it was that!

Further Thoughts:

Your descriptive verses with melodious rhyme was as well endowed as the woman's assets described. You painted vivid pictures. But not just that ... as a woman with my own assets, I could picture this from the point of view of the lady catching the glimpses of her male friends enjoyment of her company. *Laugh*

Parting Thoughts:

Good job with the rhythm and rhyme and the expertise of men's minds at work when a lady has got their attention in a most beguiling way.


Well done! *Heel*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random Read & Review, where you never know when what you have buried deep in your port will come back to haunt you. *Ghost*

Initial Thoughts:

Well, you wrote it so I was sure to get a giggle out of it. Yup --*Laugh*

Further Thoughts:

I guess this was a contest based on the music by The Verve and you had to write it in 100 words. It's not an easy task to do a story in 100 words. You handled this one well.

Parting Thoughts:

We have a king, we have a queen and a bottle of blue pills.

Now we get to the meat of the problem here that "The Drugs Don't Work."

Actually from the ending It stood to do a royal job indeed. *Rolling*

Conclusion:

100 words story witha humorous ending!

Good job! *Web2*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there, Beholden
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Review!

First Impressions:

Your item popped up on the Random Review click.

I knew I was about to read a clever take on Mary Had a Little Lamb. Now, I can't get that nursery rhyme out of my head. Oh, gee, thanks for that --I think! *Laugh*

Further Thoughts:

This was crisp, humorous, well-rhymed and impeccable rhythm. That's a whole lot of good stuff rolled into that one statement! *Laugh*

Parting Thoughts:

I enjoyed the images that popped up in my mind as I read through the lines. I think I like your version over the original.

Conclusion:

Good job! I found nothing that distracted me from the flow. It was melodious as it should be.

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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Hello there jaya
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering the December Holiday Rush, Cherished Gift prompt. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

You used the gift prompt well. It wasn't a tangible item wrapped in pretty paper and bows. It was a spark of love and caring and traveling to where that would continue. This special gift brought you back to your full healthy lifestyle both physically and emotionally.

Further Thoughts:

What a beautiful, loving family along with your son who convinced you to come stay with them for a while. He went to India to bring you to his home in Georgia.

The fresh air, the sightseeing the doting grandchildren ...wonderful gifts!

Parting Thoughts:

You've hit the message that some people can't see in their own lives. A gift does not have to be wrapped and handed over to one. It is truly a gift when one cannot put their hands on it but enjoy healing benefits that are life changing. *GemV*

Conclusion:

Lovely story. It fit handily within the prompt. *TeapotB*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there, 👀intu the Darkness
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering the Holiday Rush's A Cherished Gift prompt in December. *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

I felt the joy of Christmas as told through the eyes of a youthful you all those many years ago.

I see how beautiful the family celebration of Christmas was at your home. Your father was a generous man who loved to see his kids eyes shine on Christmas Eve and Christmas morning. What a lovely idea of separating the family gifts on the Eve and the gifts from "Santa" on the morning of Christmas. I imagine there was a lot of excitement amongst the children at that time.

Further Impressions:

The story explains what the special gift is. The gift did not have to be something tangible, merely a gift that would be a part of one's life from then on. This lesson learned was indeed life changing. It was character building and it brought humility that was lacking in a nine year old's perception of self importance.

Parting Thoughts:

It is a bittersweet story as the lesson was only learned after loved ones were hurt and saddened by a youth's reactions. I wonder if your aunt made you the Ralphie pink bunny costume the following year to make you cringe in embarrassment. *Laugh* (Christmas Story of course.)

My heart felt your regret at causing so much disappointment that Christmas morning. However, a lasting impression was made by your dad's reaction to your being such a rude brat. *Scared*

Conclusion:

A fine interpretation of a cherished gift. It made you who you are today. Indeed this is a lesson shared in life from a loved one. It was a tough lesson to learn, but one that lasted a lifetime molding who you now are.
*Hug1**Smile**Hug2*

Thank you for sharing! *Biking*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there, Zehzeh
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering the Holiday Rush's A Cherished Gift prompt in December. *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

This is a beautiful story about a cherished gift of a well-used and bruised and baked-in stained tin pie plate that brought many years of happy cooking and food enjoyed with its multi-purpose baking magic. Whether it be lemon meringue pie or a version of Mac and Cheese or Cottage Pie, you received the love through these meals made in that tin.

Further Impressions:

Rules were followed. You wrote a story about a cherished gift. The word count was given.*CheckP*

I enjoyed your narrating about why this gift is so special to you and all the memories it holds. You now are now the caretaker of this lovely memory of your mom. May many wonderful baking creations be enjoyed with the next generation.

Observations:

"When my mum died, she did not leave behind much. Just enough money to cover her funeral costs and buy a momento [memento]

One memorable week dad's wages had a big bite taken out of them, something to do with taxes, and were were skint.*

Apparently dad [did] not like kidneys.

Parting Thoughts:

This is a lovely story of how this cherished gift passed on to you after your mom's death keeps these precious memories alive.

Your story brings in the sacrifices made all those years ago as well as the cooking/baking blunders that shows the true human side of life that things don't always turn out the way they were planned.

Conclusion:

That wonderful tin will have stories accompanying it for generations to come.

Good job! *Blueberries*

Until Next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there, Munchomonster- Octoprep
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering December's Holiday Rush Contest, Special Gift prompt.

Initial Thoughts:

This was a brief entry yet right to the point. Although a little more building up of the story could have given a better image in a reader's mind of the family member and why it was so beloved to an author at that particular time in life. Was it a special birthday? Was it Christmas? However the favorite colored paper was unforgettable, so which special occasion didn't really matter. *Smile*

Further Thoughts:

It is about a gift you received that made such an impression on you. It is a writer's joy to have a beautiful journal to be able to record thoughts and events and amazing travels. The muse is quite occupied with it. Also, the special cover of the journal's pages showed the universe and planets, and is a reminder of who created all of this beauty.

Parting Thoughts:

It is lovely that this journal keeps the thoughts and memories of receiving that special gift from a beloved family member. She may live half a country away, but her gift has been a precious keepsake to you.

Conclusion:

Well done! *Writer*






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Hello there, HollisFrances
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Review. *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering December's Holiday Rush contest, "Special Gift" prompt.

Initial Thoughts:

Your brief description states biographical. The reader knows it will be Non-fiction, a life experience that made a huge impression on the writer.

Further Thoughts:

It was quite interesting reading about the missile launchers and the workings of it and what happens when the system has a break-down in smooth and expected results from the mechanics involved. It could have been a disaster if not handled properly.

I found your character to be amusing and very clever and intelligent. Perfect match for this kind of work.

Observations:

It's now about 6PM, 1800, and the last two missiles are assemble[d] but stuck on their hosts!

Parting Thoughts:

This was quite a gift given back with back pay, but mostly with the respect of the others aboard who were grateful and relieved by the success of finding the missile launcher's problems.

Conclusion:

Thank you for your service to our country.
Quite a success story. Bravo!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there, The Puppet Master
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Review. *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering December's Holiday Rush contest, "Special Gift" prompt.

Initial Thoughts:

This story is Non-fiction as shown above the brief description and as per the rules.

Further Thoughts:

This was a heartwarming story about a puppeteer who received a cherished gift of a favorite handmade fox hand puppet, that was dubbed "Franky" to use in shows and entertain children.

Enid was the person who created the cat and the fox puppets custom made for the entertainer's hands. The fox was the one puppet that would always be special and favored over all the other puppets.

Parting Thoughts:

This was a quick read. There was enough to let the reader know how the gift became so cherished. The story could have been fleshed out a little more, but then, the prompt was pretty flexible about the cherished gift and why. It appears you covered that.

Conclusion:

The conclusion had it's sadness as Enid died from a battle with cancer. However, it is also sweet that part of Enid's handiwork remains used for years of joy in her memory.

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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