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*Sun*
A rhythmic piece of poetry written in rhyming couplets to deliver a message of faith.
This shows the rebirth of a faith and how it can turn life around.

*Star*
I didn't notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors. I wasn't convinced that faith is vital for happiness as the subtext for the title declares. I saw this as more a personal piece were faith was restored and that lead to happiness.

*Moon*
Overall a good piece of poetry. The couplets flowed smoothly down the page with ease of read. The message of faith and happiness comes across, just not to the degree of faith being vital for happiness to exist.

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*Sun*
The title is catchy, and with the subtext below, I was captured and lured within the compound. Here inside I found a refuge of peace and tranquility as only one coming from a large family would know. The events which are described give a tale of growth and maturity beyond years.

*Star*
No grammar, spelling or punctuation errors were noted. I would have liked to see at least one incident or event which stands out, to be brought forward as a personal note. Do not just tell us of conflict, show us the brutality of living with so many woman under one roof, and then deliver us the family out of the feud. In other words, give us a personal example, and then show us the incident when the girls have all bonded together once more to make things right.

By giving an example, you are making the writing more of a personal experience for the reader.

*Moon*
Overall a good writing, I simply felt a more intimate accounting was necessary in order to deliver a mastered piece.


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*Sun*
Just when you think you have read it all, go back, for there is bound to be something you have missed. I sure did. Tonight, or rather, this morning, I found two items in my dear friend's port that I had not yet reviewed.

*Star*
Per request of others we are given more of an insight into you the person, the author and friend. Mere words, though we are writer's , sometimes fails to grasp the full picture of what we are describing.

*Moon*
This writing is from the heart. It paints a picture of a woman with low tolerance for games, and a huge heart for helping those around her.

Well written and to the point, this sends out a message to all, and a special thank you to those who persuaded you to follow another path... great job on the published works. You lead by example, and we all love you for it!

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*Sun*
Wow, I simply can not believe I have never stopped in and did a review on this group before. This is a wonderful group that offers a service to the WDC community. Review packages of varying styles and prices are put on display. For a fee, the service can be requested, gifted, given to a recipient of choice.

This group also strives to help within the community in great ways. Through emails group members are notified of upcoming events. Through reviewing, members are given a review credit when affiliating reviews.

Through auction and raffle donations this group is continuously striving to help raise gps and recognition for other groups as well.

*Star*
A forum is set up for the group for others to request packages, and for group members to communicate so that package fulfillment is not duplicated.

This group is run by a very wonderful person who has a big heart. Her dedication to helping others shows through her many activities around this community.

*Moon*
Overall, I can say that I feel I am a better person having known the author. Through this group, she offers a chance for us to help others, as well as meeting new people. Now you may say, well this was a book report, tell me something that as the author I didn't know, but I say this in response, now everyone reading the public reviews page will know what I know about this wonderful group.

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*Sun*
With an upscale beat and an alternate rhyme, the rhythm of this poem dances to the tune of love, down the page, where it slows up with the breaking of the heart. A great visual this creates of true life and the hardships that we sometimes must face.

*Star*TO CONSIDER:
Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion.

*Moon*
~Some will tell you that punctuation is needed in poetry. Others will argue that it is not needed and makes no difference. Still, there will be those who say it is up to the particular poet and the poem itself. Personally I feel that the way the verses flow down the page, that punctuation is necessary for this piece. Though without it, the message is still there, it just isn't as strong.

For me, I use to write poetry without any punctuation. Somewhere down the line someone gave me sound advice and it made sense to me. The punctuation, or lack thereof in a poem, is the direction of the writer, guiding the reader. The punctuation is where the author wishes the reader to take a breath; to contemplate; to pause for dramatic effect. The lack of punctuation says the same thing, "Read in one breath, whether slow, or fast, down the page". To me, punctuation is direction from the author to the reader. Use it, or don't , to your heart's desire and don't let anyone persuade you otherwise. However, if using it, be consistent throughout the piece. My personal opinion, this poem would benefit from punctuation.

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*Sun*
Full of emotion and pain, this free-style poem tumbles down the page giving us a tapestry of emptiness, but not despair.

*Star*
ALIGNMENT
Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. I feel this poem, with the emotional turmoil, would best benefit from a centered format. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal opinion, I am but a novice when it comes to poetry and its teachings.

*Moon*
PUNCTUATION
~Some will tell you that punctuation is needed in poetry. Others will argue that it is not needed and makes no difference. Still, there will be those who say it is up to the particular poet and the poem itself. Personally I feel that the way the verses flow down the page, that punctuation is necessary for this piece. Though without it, the message is still there, it just isn't as strong.

For me, I use to write poetry without any punctuation. Somewhere down the line someone gave me sound advice and it made sense to me. The punctuation, or lack thereof in a poem, is the direction of the writer, guiding the reader. The punctuation is where the author wishes the reader to take a breath; to contemplate; to pause for dramatic effect. The lack of punctuation says the same thing, "Read in one breath, whether slow, or fast, down the page". To me, punctuation is direction from the author to the reader. Use it, or don't , to your heart's desire and don't let anyone persuade you otherwise. However, if using it, be consistent throughout the piece. My personal opinion, this poem would benefit from punctuation.

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*Sun*
An interesting little poem. The premise of the poem as self described is women allowing men to be the man. I am not sure I was able to follow that throughout the poem. Nothing here, in my eyes, showcased that we were talking of men and women. This is however a piece on partnership. A requisition to be as equals, walking hand in hand together. (what I got of this)

*Star*
~then mine should be than mine.

~ Always capitalize I. You are important. The one exception is if you are trying to show lack of self esteem or self respect through visuals with your poetry.

~run spell-check

~Leanshould be capitalized to start out the next to last line.

~ALIGNMENT
Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal opinion, I am but a novice when it comes to poetry and its teachings.

*Moon*
Overall an poem of partners who have traveled the road together, one leading the other, and now, the one following is requesting the leader to stop and open their eyes to what has been happening, and suggesting a change in course.

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*Sun*
Written from the heart, this short paragraph is a dedication to a friend who is so close that the term "Brother from another mother", is fit and appropriate. This piece details the brotherhood shared between two friends.

*Star*
~Starting a sentence with a conjunction, but or and, creates an incomplete sentence for the reader. This can be changed by adding a comma and joining the sentence with the previous one, since they are of the same subject. That, or drop the conjunction and open strong for the next sentence. Though the use of conjunctions to start sentences is becoming more of a norm in today's writings, it is still frowned upon in many writing circles. When used with slang terminology, the use of conjunctions to start sentences is a commonality. I have found that the younger the audience, the more the use of conjunctions starting sentences.

*Moon*
Overall the great sentiment and emotions pour fourth with good detail and demonstration.

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*Sun*
Requesting help in the title was a very good way to grab a reader's attention. Right away I read the subtext of the title and new I could help find some reviewers who would gladly add their input.

Upon opening this to read, I found a rough draft for a storyline. The outline with a background of basic events is given, with very poor spelling. The request is made to help start out the story, given the background information. Here is my solution:

Start the story out with her seeing Zak off to school. She is already packed herself and heading out in about an hour, for she has a few last minute details to wrap up... she gets a phone call from her doctor. She had gone in for a quick check up and the dr's office calls to tell her she is pregnant....
You take it from here... fill in the details... is her tuition paid for, can she get a refund? Will a year off be long enough? Who will help watch her son?

*Star*
~My first suggestion is to always use spell-check. Reading an item full of spelling errors is often distracting and a major turn-off for readers. Even though this is in it's early stages, take the time to do the basic, capitalize when needed, use proper punctuation, and use spell-check. Without doing the above, a reviewer feels they are becoming your editor and that fully detracts from the story.

~Starting a sentence with a conjunction, but or and, creates an incomplete sentence for the reader. This can be changed by adding a comma and joining the sentence with the previous one, since they are of the same subject. That, or drop the conjunction and open strong for the next sentence. Though the use of conjunctions to start sentences is becoming more of a norm in today's writings, it is still frowned upon in many writing circles. When used with slang terminology, the use of conjunctions to start sentences is a commonality. I have found that the younger the audience, the more the use of conjunctions starting sentences.

*Moon*
I hope some of these suggestions help you along the way. I would gladly return to re-rate and re-review this item upon completion.

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*Sun*
A great tapestry of color is created as we witness the life cycle of the last snowflake. This creative piece breaths life into some of Nature's Beauties, and gives us a full circle piece.

*Star*
I didn't notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors to note upon. I did feel that the centering of this item best reflects and compliments the life cycle, and here is why:

Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal opinion, I am but a novice when it comes to poetry and its teachings.

*Moon*
Overall a great poem. I could find nothing to add to further advance the piece, it is well written and creatively displayed.


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*Sun*
I sit here awake reading, still no sleep in sight. I could not resist another look through your port. Each stop I make, I get distracted with another link or two, and I end up another hour or three. It is now half past seven in the morning. I have been here and there through your port and spent the better part of the evening.

I have grinned, I have smiled, and now after reading this, the dogs are jumping about looking to find what the ruckus is all about, for I am hysterical with laughter as I picture the final critique with the bare soul in enemy territory.

*Star*
I wonder what your thoughts are on an alternate last line, not the whole sentence, just part of it to read something like "and they left a bare man behind enemy lines in an exposed position." *Wink*

*Moon*
NO CONJUNCTION NOTES *Laugh* This was one amazing little tale. I find myself asking, fact or fiction, yet the subheading category for items/genres is EXPERIENCE. My only other thought would be that I hope the one left behind was not you. Though as an afterthought, if it were you left behind, I would think another fun tale will follow.

Sorry this review is so short. I again applaud the use of the contest link as well as a notation on the awarded placing of this item. GREAT JOB!


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Brief Summary:
In continuing my search for that elusive item hiding in your port, I happened upon another title that caught my attention, so I had to stop and investigate just what this court action was all about.

I must admit, I have never really stopped to read many of the other entries, when entering contests myself. As I can see now, this has been my loss. A mistake I won't make again.

This is a contest entry for one of the official site contests. It was an entry for the "Dear Me: Official WDC Contest" Open in new Window. [E], a contest on personal goals for the year. I must say, I see this as a winning entry. This took a whole new approach to what I was expecting to see. In fact, I do think this is an original approach to something so literal. A humorous answer to a contest query.

Editing Comments:
As for the grammar, spelling and punctuation, I noticed no errors to point out. For content and subject matter, I feel everything is in order with nothing amiss. So therefore, there is nothing I may add to help with the editing of this piece.

Suggestions:
Again with this writing, I see that both conjunctions, AND and BUT ARE used to start sentences. Having already given my standard comment for this in the last review, I feel the mere mentioning of it here will allow you to see my point and view as before expressed. *Wink*

What I liked about this piece:
I liked the humor and wit that seem to have punctuated this contest entry through actual serious proceedings. The creativity shines through in this answering contest piece with your Dear Me official entry.

I was pleased to see that this did place second.

Something else that was impressive to me is that the contest link was displayed and left intact along with the information on how the contest placed. It always serves the reader or reviewer if they know what limitations were put on a writing, when reading a contest submission. Therefore including the link to the contest is always a benefit to both reader and author.

Thank you for sharing your creative writing. I encourage you to do more.

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*Shamrock*TITLE*Shamrock*
This is exactly the type of title that would lure me in. It is also a strong title that seems to sum up the emotions of each member who partook in this wonderful journey of friendship.

*Shamrock*FORMAT/STYLE*Shamrock*
Starting off with the emoticons kept this light and uplifting. Next, bringing the photo image centered with an order of who is who, gave us the feeling of a party or celebration that was to be remembered. Adding the limerick next kept this light hearted and fun. The spirit of the trip shines through well with the format. Last but not least, the links to the other writings inspired by this trip as well as other personal pieces you have residing at your port.

*Shamrock*RHYTHM/RHYME*Shamrock*
The rhythm and rhyme of the small bit of poetry was uplifting and humorous. It helped to maintain the party like atmosphere.

*Shamrock*OVERALL IMPRESSION*Shamrock*
My overall impression was that everyone had fun. The pictures and writings of each of you all show a fun time had by all. The experience will be one memories have been made and will be forever cherished. A once in a lifetime journey!

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*Shamrock*TITLE*Shamrock*
The title describes exactly what this is, though it encompasses a small group of the larger picture. When I first read the title, I was expecting a list, a picture, a forum, all of a much larger group. Personally I feel the name is too encompassing, and those of us who think of you as a friend here on writing.com are a group so large that the title becomes deceiving. We open the static and perhaps have preconceived ideas as to what may lay inside.

Now refer back, I did say that the title is dead on for what is here inside. I do however think something a little more intimate would work better. I will have to go get some coffee and think on this though, so let us move on to the next part of the review *Wink*...on a side note, I got to clicking on each of the links and had all of them open, read them all, then I couldn't remember which one I had started reviewing *Blush*.

*Shamrock*FORMAT/STYLE*Shamrock*
The format chosen for this piece was one of rhythm and rhyme, setting the stage for the pictures and information to come behind. A great opener, leading in with a poem like that. One thing to consider though would be the placement of the poem. Does it compliment the story more if it is centered, or aligned?


Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Personally, I feel that either centering or aligned left both work for this piece. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal opinion, I am but a novice when it comes to poetry and its teachings.

*Shamrock*RHYTHM/RHYME*Shamrock*
The rhyme was written in alternating rhyming couplets that compliment each other down the page. I found the rhythm a bit off, probably that coffee thing I spoke of earlier, but that is because I haven't read it out loud yet to quite find the voice.

*Shamrock*SUGGESTIONS*Shamrock*
Other than perhaps centering the poem, and MAYBE, altering the name, I would leave it as is. After all, my suggestions are merely personal opinion, and after all, it is the author's opinion that matters most.


*Shamrock*OVERALL IMPRESSION*Shamrock*
Overall, I felt this was a well written piece. Friends sharing their adventures together. This looks like you all had fun. The spirit of friendship truly shines forth here. Friends and family, as it should be... GREAT JOB!
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*Shamrock*TITLE*Shamrock*
A complimentary title which serves to enhance the poem, by not only telling us what the story is about, but delivers a message as well.

*Shamrock*FORMAT/STYLE*Shamrock*
Rhyming couplets paired together forming a thirty four line verse of lyrical yet bard like tale.

*Shamrock*RHYTHM/RHYME*Shamrock*
The focus of the rhythm and rhyme was smooth. It gave the voice of the poem some cadence as it marched down the page. It helped to bring forward the emotions of the poem.

*Shamrock*SUGGESTIONS*Shamrock*
The rhythm and rhyme are present, the tempo is off a bit in places do to syllable length of some of the lines. Not all of the couplets contain the same amount of syllables in each line. Though this isn't necessary, it sometimes helps with the voice and rhythm of the poem.

*Shamrock*POINTS TO PONDER*Shamrock*
ALIGNMENT
Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. With the ups and downs of emotions in this piece, I think centering this would help compliment the emotion and may smooth out the rhythm for some readers. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal opinion, I am but a novice when it comes to poetry and its teachings.

*Shamrock*OVERALL IMPRESSION*Shamrock*
Overall, I didn't notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. This is well written and a wonderful learning tool in so much that it teaches lessons of morality and educates on action and reaction.

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Daizy my dear,
I have missed you so,
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Once here I found
this fabulous piece,
my admiration for you,
just never does cease.

Your poetry skills
and creativity too
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while thinking of you.


*Star*
Sorry, got carried away. This is a most fabulous poem. Very creative and tasteful. None of the rhymes feel forced. The rhythm is concise and the voice of the poem is light-hearted and fun.

*Moon*
I am quite taken with this very creative poem. It is brilliantly executed.

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It is not everyday you come across a piece of writing that in such a short period of time will have goose bumps on your arms and tears trickling down your cheeks. The written word is a powerful tool. Books have a magical power in so that they can transport you to another world. Whether it be to the world of mathematics, the jungles of the islands, or to another planet, the attraction of books is powerful. Tricia and Kasey have formed a bond of friendship through books, and their friendship is about to embark on a whole new journey. This is a short story which details the turning events in their friendship at the same time bringing Tricia full circle.

*Star*
This was a most moving piece. I found myself wishing to read the whole story, and not the shortened version. Though in fact there is no longer piece, this is a story that very well could sustain a novel in and of itself, based on this short story alone.

*Moon*
The emotions and actions of this story are as real as you and me. These are events that could transpire in any city, to any person. The deep felt connection between the characters has a strong pull and really captures your attention.


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A wonderful activity for the adults of the community. This exercise in writing really gets the juices flowing. This is an on-going event that has been running for several years now.

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The layout of the rules for the contest are easy to read and follow. The detailed instructions for the writers leave no mistake as to how to submit, where to do so , and what is expected.
It is my understanding that a new round will be out in January, so this contest will be listed in the next Contest and Activities newsletter I submit.

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Overall this was a good stop. I checked out a few of the entries and I must say that judging will be tough. Good luck to the judges and the entrants.

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For some it is the simple things in life that are important, to others the here and now, or the future. There are even those who choose to live in the past. This is a short story of a simple treasure of time and what is important in life. To Annie, this is a moment in time to be treasured, and though times are tough and the future looking grim, she chooses to brighten the day for Isobel anyway.

*Star*
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The word in red is not in the original text, but should be for grammatical continuity.

*Moon*
Overall this is a well written story. I found myself caught in a moment, sharing a treasure with Isobel and Annie. What a delight for us all!

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A letter between friends discussing the perfect mate, and what expectations should be met. This is a first hand accounting from Davena to Betsy on just exactly what she thinks a man should be like in a relationship. She refers several times to her age as being something these choices have been based upon, and I wonder if instead of age, it is wisdom she is actually referring to?

*Star*
Free of grammar, spelling or punctuation error, I found this a delight to read.

*Moon*
Overall a fantastic short piece that all can benefit from viewing. The same could be said for either gender.

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*Sun*
This was very eloquently written. I have read this over and over several times now and am captivated by the beauty of this poem.

*Star*
At first glance I thought that the verses were free from punctuation, and was about ready to insert a standby reply concerning such. However, after reading this two or three times, I finally found the voice. Sometimes it takes reading an item several times. Sometimes silently, sometimes out loud, before we truly find the voice of the poem. I can see after many visits that the punctuation was there all along behind the words, I just failed to see them, for I was wrapped in the beauty of the poem.

*Moon*
Overall, I could find no errors in this poem. The structure is sound, the rhythm and voice easy to follow, and the grammar, punctuation and spelling, are all in order. Great Work!


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*Sun*
This was very eloquently written. I have read this over and over several times now and am captivated by the beauty of this poem.

*Star*
At first glance I thought that the verses were free from punctuation, and was about ready to insert a standby reply concerning such. However, after reading this two or three times, I finally found the voice. Sometimes it takes reading an item several times. Sometimes silently, sometimes out loud, before we truly find the voice of the poem. I can see after many visits that the punctuation was there all along behind the words, I just failed to see them, for I was wrapped in the beauty of the poem.

*Moon*
Overall, I could find no errors in this poem. The structure is sound, the rhythm and voice easy to follow, and the grammar, punctuation and spelling, are all in order. Great Work!

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I chose this group of yours to review, because I know how special and dear it is to you. This is a group you created over a year ago to help others, and it has flourished and grown.

*Star*
Along with reviewing this for the package, I have included it in the next newsletter I edit under the contest and activities newsletter, so that anyone else wishing to join may contact you. There may be a few newbies out there looking for such a group as this.

*Moon*
This is a dedicated group that gives to others in a such a way that no other can compare.

The group page is well lain out with clear and concise details on what is expected. There were no grammar, spelling or punctuation errors notated.

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This is a short and sweet love poem. Written with an alternate rhyming patterbn, this love story is about the circle of love and how the power of love can sustain all.

*Star*
~Starting a sentence or verse with a conjunction, but or and, creates an incomplete sentence or thought for the reader. This can be changed by adding a comma and joining the sentence with the previous one, since they are of the same subject. That, or drop the conjunction and open strong for the next sentence, or if in verse, simply omit the conjunction or substitute another word. Though the use of conjunctions to start sentences is becoming more of a norm in today's writings, it is still frowned upon in many writing circles. When used with slang terminology, the use of conjunctions to start sentences is a commonality. I have found that the younger the audience, the more the use of conjunctions starting sentences. Therefore, I would suggest omitting the conjunction for starting out the second verse.


The rhyming pattern is clearly evident that it is meant as an alternate rhyme, however the pattern is a bit rough in places. Using hand to again as a rhyme is a bit of a stretch even using different dialects.

*Moon*
Overall a quaint little love poem, with a bit of work needed in a few small places.

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An inside look at the feelings and inner thoughts of an inmate.

*Star*
~Some will tell you that punctuation is needed in poetry. Others will argue that it is not needed and makes no difference. Still, there will be those who say it is up to the particular poet and the poem itself. Personally I feel that the way the verses flow down the page, that punctuation is necessary for this piece. Though without it, the message is still there, it just isn't as strong.

For me, I use to write poetry without any punctuation. Somewhere down the line someone gave me sound advice and it made sense to me. The punctuation, or lack thereof in a poem, is the direction of the writer, guiding the reader. The punctuation is where the author wishes the reader to take a breath; to contemplate; to pause for dramatic effect. The lack of punctuation says the same thing, "Read in one breath, whether slow, or fast, down the page". To me, punctuation is direction from the author to the reader. Use it, or don't , to your heart's desire and don't let anyone persuade you otherwise. However, if using it, be consistent throughout the piece. My personal opinion, this poem would benefit from punctuation.

*Moon*
Overall a well written piece. I do not feel the lack of punctuation detracts from the poem, though I feel it would be improved with it, only as in direction for the reader. Do you want this read as a rant, all in one angry breath, or slower and sad? Dictate through punctuation how to read this poem.

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