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I've dreamt in my life dreams that have stayed with me ever after.
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To begin with, the opening sentence was one that caught my attention as I strolled through your port opening various folders and such. It sets the scene with perfection for the tale that quickly follows.
The story illustrated several things to me. One, times back then weren't so different than they are now, in some aspects anyway. Here you have what appears to be a person full of life and experience attempting to teach the youth about geography. She is energetic and witty, yet she fails to see that her choice of words and wits are beyond the level her students are comprehending at. Thus, she loses her students attention as they fail to follow her meandering mind.
I found this tale to be humorous and fun. I feel that if perhaps the students had been a bit older, the idioms and cliches would have actually entertained the students a bit more. A student who is entertained is not always confused, and more likely to ask for help.
Secondly the teaching methods of the grandfather were both age appropriate, and done so in a manner of which the child could follow along and make her own conclusion. This is important with learning. Being able to comprehend AND apply what is learned helps to retain the information.
Overall I felt this is a well written piece. This short story appears to be free of spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors. This was a joy to read and I have done so several times over now.
POINT TO PONDER:
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towards~ represents directional movement or action of time. In speech many people like to take the action words and give them an added syllable "s" to help propel them forward. Already being a word of action, this effort is unnecessary and leads to creating a slang term. This terminology then transfers into our writing. Now, if the piece of writing already contains slang terminology throughout the piece, then this would be acceptable, if not, then I would alter the word to the proper form, as I suggest with this instance. This also happens with forward, afterward, inward, downward, backward, outward, beside, to name a few.