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#3481355

Review of Innocence is Bliss?

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"Innocence is Bliss?"

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I think you did a good job with this free-style poem. The message comes through clearly. One thing that bothered me personally was the lack of punctuation throughout the poem. There was punctuation at the end of each verse, but I felt it was also needed in other lines as well to direct the reader, at least a comma or two.

Some will tell you that punctuation is needed in poetry. Others will argue that it is not needed and makes no difference. Still, there will be those who say it is up to the particular poet and the poem itself. Personally I feel that the way the verses flow down the page, that punctuation is necessary for this piece. Though without it, the message is still there, it just isn't as strong.

For me, I use to write poetry without any punctuation. Somewhere down the line someone gave me sound advice and it made sense to me. The punctuation, or lack thereof in a poem, is the direction of the writer, guiding the reader. The punctuation is where the author wishes the reader to take a breath; to contemplate; to pause for dramatic effect. The lack of punctuation says the same thing, "Read in one breath, whether slow, or fast, down the page". To me, punctuation is direction from the author to the reader. Use it, or don't , to your heart's desire and don't let anyone persuade you otherwise. However, if using it, be consistent throughout the piece. My personal opinion, this poem would benefit from punctuation.

Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal opinion, I am but a novice when it comes to poetry and its teachings.

My favorite line:
There is bliss in virtue, but it tends to smolder.

Of course, the punctuation was my addition, but this is how I read it.

Overall a good poem. The emotions it evoked were strong and passionate.

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Review of Summer In Bellingham

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"Summer In Bellingham"

Wilshire

A night out on the town amidst friends can be fun. The personality of the group is given a lot of attention. Emphasis is given as to the character development and description.

~work out and had a stunning,
She had a stunning what? This is an incomplete thought and or sentence.

~In the first paragraph, the word niceis used multiple times. I would suggest altering it with another choice.

~Jeanette and Lucille, to come by I think
a comma is needed after byto separate its clauses and improve clarity.

~while still trying to have some what of a social
somewhat is one word.

~somewhat of a social life, it's really not as hard
life. It's

~in the third paragraph it's should be its

~when speaking of her hair, there should be a comma after the word shoulders.

~makeup is one word not make up.

These are just a few of the items I noticed in the beginning. I didn't want to do a full edit, but merely to give you an idea of some of the areas that could use some help.

Overall I feel this is a decent rough draft, but it could use some good polishing and editing. I would gladly return at a later date to re-rate and review upon changes.

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Review of Two Mimes

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"Two Mimes"

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To me, this is a poem of behind the scenes, the masks that we often wear. Nobody knows who we are or what we do under our masks. When out and about we can become someone totally different. How many of you take the time to get to know the real me? Am I a mime, or is this the person I truly am? These are the thoughts and questions evoked upon reading this great poem.

The rhythm and rhyme flow down the page with ease. All of the couplets shared an ease as they rolled off the tongue. Nothing was forced or awkward.

I didn't notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors to comment upon. This is well written and a joy to read.

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#3481186

Review of Meet Yoda...Superdog, Star Wars Wannabe

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"Meet Yoda...Superdog, Star Wars Wannabe"

Kathleen

Some wonderful pictures and anecdotes you share of your two additions to the family, I am able to relate in the same number of terms. I have Fred and Cocoa, and they are similar to Holly and Yoda...

Fred is three and the younger more vivacious one. He loves to play and knows no bounds or limits. Cocoa is the thief, the hoarder, the bully. She has to have all of the toys and attention, and doesn't like to share anything with Fred. She is ten years old and very protective of anything she feels is hers, including us. She isn't aggressive in pushing him away unless she has stolen his ball and he is sniffing to close, then she snaps at him. If she gets too close or out of hand, he puts her in her place and we usually end up cleaning up something they have knocked over, since they always seem to do this next to the living room coffee table, right in front of us.

Just as Yoda has, both of our dogs have me wrapped around their paws. Cocoa, a mix of yellow lab and ??? will wait for me when going from downstairs to the top. She knows I have an active imagination and don't like being the last one to shut the basement door or be left alone in the dark. She makes sure she is right there watching me the whole way.

Fred will snuggle, and cuddle up to you, even when you do not want him to...did I mention he talks back? He snaps his jaw shut as if he is saying something in return...especially when you are scolding him... I think he is not only part Australian Shepard/ Collie, but also shows human traits as well...they both do...

I found it a joy to read about Holly and Yoda. It gave me some insight into you the writer, and also brought on fond memories of my two four-legged children (the only children I personally have).

Overall a great short piece I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing, this insight into this part of your life.

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#3481183

Review of The End is the Beginning

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"The End is the Beginning"

Jeff

A well written short essay, this wonderful piece is a true testament and record of defining moments in time that have helped to mold you into the person we know today.

~being eighteen in is the ability to vote

In looking back at the year, you have dredged up memories to share that may not have been so evident in the role they played, but now have manifested themselves so as to be no misunderstanding between then and now. A great bit of information is shared, and we the reader get to know just a small glimpse behind the writer today. Thank you for sharing.

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#3481164

Review of And, nothing but ...

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~ First Impression:
I liked how this gets to the heart of the problem in a rhythmical way without bringing the emotion of others into the poem. This disease could effect everyone around through hurt feelings and more, this poem kept the focus on the disease itself and not the other human elements that could have been brought into play.

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~Any editing comments:
I didn't notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors to comment upon. This was well written and a joy to read.

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~Dialog:
The poem speaks to me of a husband, caught up with this new found disease. He ventured out for fear he will hurt someone with his words, so he stays at home. His comments around the house lead the wife to surmise that he has turned grouchy in his old age. Her solution is to send him out among the very ones he is trying to protect with his self induced isolation.

Now to ponder this a moment...this could be what happens with old age...we lose the bs meter and life begins to take on more shades of black and white with less gray. (except in the hair)

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#3481141

Review of SOMETHING IN THE WATER

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~ First Impression:
I found this to be a sad piece. The laughter died fast as each person was hurt by the brutal honesty of the disease. The poem illustrates this with great eloquence used in the verse with an alternate rhyme.

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~ Characterization:
The voice of the poem is remorseful at hurting the one's loved.

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~Any editing comments:

~third stanza, a comma after the word laugh

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~Placement:
I feel that centering this poem is one of the best ways to showcase it. Doing show helps to create the illusion or set the scene for not everything is right or as it should be. By centering it the lines are all askew to showcase the metaphor. Great job!

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~Description and Setting:
Overall this is a good poem. I enjoyed reading it. It fits the prompt very well.

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#3481086

Review of Dear Me

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I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Dear Me: Official WDC Contest" . Read and judged in January, this review has been a bit delayed, I apologize for that.
Thanks for entering!

"Dear Me"

donna

Some wonderful goals have been set forth. Selflessly putting others before yourself, you have chosen to make your main goal finding relief and help for your child. It is never easy for a parent to see a child suffer and your goal is to end this suffering as soon as possible. Having to battle so many hurdles to reach your goal, often coming up against hurdles and objects out of your control, you have dedicated this year to making as much progress in this area as possible.

I like that you have included and emphasized family in this year's goals. Commendable as well as remarkably influential.

I didn't notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors to notate.

Overall some great goals, I commend you on your progress and wish you well with your endeavors.

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Review of Dear Me

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I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Dear Me: Official WDC Contest" .Read and judged in January, this review has been a bit delayed. Thanks for entering!

"Dear Me"

ChrisDaltro-Chasing Moonbeams

Persevere. Stand up be tall and proud. This letter speaks volumes on emotional trappings and limitations we allow others to pigeonhole us with. Christina, this letter to yourself is an eye opener and one that shows you have found an inner strength you have, but need to tap into in order to fulfill yourself.

Many contests are listed here for venues you wish to search out in order to submit your work. I would suggest going back through and listing the item link so as to have easier referencing, that or bookmarking them.

I didn't notice any spelling, punctuation or grammar errors. This is well written and a good use of the prompt.

I commend you for seeing the trees from the forest and for your continued writing. Fulfill your destiny of word and continue with your dreams of writing. You seem to find fulfillment with it, so why stop.

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Review of Dear Me

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I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Dear Me: Official WDC Contest" .Read and judged in January, this review has been much delayed. Thanks for entering!

"Dear Me"

Jordan Richelle

Some very detailed and emotionally trying times have lead to goals of self discovery and perseverance. I commend you on writing goals of such a personal nature.

Goals consisting of physical, mental and writing nature, they are all backed by substantial reasoning and steps to enlist your help in completing them.

I didn't notice any spelling, punctuation or grammar errors. This is well written and a good use of the prompt.

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#3480696

Review of Dear Me '11

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I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Dear Me: Official WDC Contest" . Your story was read and judged in January, the review is a bit long in coming. Sorry for that. Thanks for entering!

"Dear Me '11"

Zureili

This is the year of achievements as you set forth to accomplish many goals, through smaller steps. Having always been distracted by life and smaller sidesteps in the past, this year you have set some baby steps to help you achieve the greater goal.

The one goal I didn't understand was the wearing of the corset. I didn't see the point or what the result would be of wearing it for 500 hours.

The spelling, punctuation and grammar all appear to be in order. These are some well outlined goals and I agree and am similarly trying to implement several of them myself, such as the water intake and the lessening of soda.

Overall some great goals. I am curious, with three months in the year now gone, how are you doing? Are you still on track?

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Review of What To Do With A Basketball That's Flat

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"What To Do With A Basketball That's Flat"

Daizy May

Up and out the door in fifteen minutes, I couldn't resist a quick check on things. Then I got a wild hair to visit your port. As I sit here typing, the minutes are clicking by that will determine whether or not I get that latte...

I loved this rhythmical poem it had me smiling and smiling as I could picture each use of the basketball. Not only have you created a great children's poem, but you also have challenged everyone to recycle...find new uses for old items...waste not, re-use...

I didn't notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors.

This is well written and worthy of five stars...just enough time left for that lattte...ttfn coffee here I come

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#3477073

Review of Dear Me, Myself and I

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"Dear Me, Myself and I"

JACE

A unique approach to the contest, I half expected the three voices to be me, myself, and I as so many others have done. Instead I got to be the fly on the wall listening in on the conversation between three different case colors

I loved this.

We share some of the same goals, though I have yet to put a deadline on some of my own. We both belong to that great poetry group taking and learning a new poetry format each week. Where I had only thought to expand the lessons into a book, you have declared the goal so.

Overall I didn't notice any spelling, grammar or punctuation errors. This is well written and an asset to itself.

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Review of Dear Me

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"Dear Me"

Grin 'n Bear It!

An interesting approach to the new year, setting goals, by net setting anything specifically. Though that isn't quite correct now is it? The goal set here is to treat yourself as if you are a unique individual worthy of much more than you give yourself credit. Remember we are all our worst critic.

This is well lined out, simple and sincere. The spelling, grammar, and punctuation all appear to be in order.

With two months almost into the year, how are you coming along with this goal?

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Review of Dear Me ~ 2011

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"Dear Me ~ 2011"

NickiD89

A wonderful and well thought out piece. These great goals come with a map and compass as well. I am pretty sure that if this is any indicator of the kind of writer you are, then you should have no problem breaking into the market and seeing your goals and dreams become a reality.

I didn't notice a single flaw with this item. The grammar, spelling and punctuation all appear to be in order. This has a great checks and balances system to help guide you to your destination.

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Review of "Dear Me"

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BEAR

A wonderful letter is written with some very realistic and emotional goals. Upon reading this I teared up with emotion as I am reminded just how precious time is and can be. We never know if we will be given a second chance, or just when our time is up. That being said, I can see no better goal than to live life as you have described.

In about three different places the word then is used, when it should be than. Though I can't site the rule for this, I know it to be true and just. Now if you were to tell that to me, this stubborn gal would fight it. You can't give me information and tell me it is so, simply by your word. Show me. Give me reason. Tell me the ins and outs, what to's and have not's. Then and only then will I understand the correct way to do it and why. Please forgive me if I put you in the same spot I myself would not want to be in. A quick internet search gave me this response: Than is used only in comparisons, so if you're comparing something use than. If not, then you have to use then.

Overall some good goals that are lifestyle changes all should adhere to, as well as some great writing goals too. The grammar, spelling and punctuation errors were without mention except for the one above. All others if they existed failed to show themselves to me.

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Review of Dear Me

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"Dear Me"

Janet Nimoy

Some fun and concrete goals for the new year. Though the goals are reachable and firm, there are no checks and balances nor timetables to help with follow through. The question I find myself asking then is how long until this is forgotten due to life interfering? Or will this be hung on a mirror so that each day a reminder is viewed to help you stay the course?

~towards/backwards~ represents directional movement or action of time. In speech many people like to take the action words and give them an added syllable "s" to help propel them forward. Already being a word of action, this effort is unnecessary and leads to creating a slang term. This terminology then transfers into our writing. Now, if the piece of writing already contains slang terminology throughout the piece, then this would be acceptable, if not, then I would alter the word to the proper form, as I suggest with this instance. This also happens with forward, afterward, inward, downward, backward, outward, and beside, to name a few. The exception to this is that the British do add the "s" and in so doing are correct for their proper language. So if this is a British writing, then please disregard the comments as coming from this ignorant American

I wish you well in these endeavors. Some fun filled goals for the year, good luck my friend.

Overall well written. The prompt is used with ease and I didn't notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors to comment upon other than the one possibility mentioned above.

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Review of Never Loose Hope

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"Never Loose Hope"

Parishrut Pandey

I found this poem to be a metaphor of life and how if we keep our faith or hope, all things will come in due time. This is as much about patience as it is about hope.

Some will tell you that punctuation is needed in poetry. Others will argue that it is not needed and makes no difference. Still, there will be those who say it is up to the particular poet and the poem itself. Personally I feel that the way the verses flow down the page, that punctuation is necessary for this piece. Though without it, the message is still there, it just isn't as strong.

For me, I use to write poetry without any punctuation. Somewhere down the line someone gave me sound advice and it made sense to me. The punctuation, or lack thereof in a poem, is the direction of the writer, guiding the reader. The punctuation is where the author wishes the reader to take a breath; to contemplate; to pause for dramatic effect. The lack of punctuation says the same thing, "Read in one breath, whether slow, or fast, down the page". To me, punctuation is direction from the author to the reader. Use it, or don't , to your heart's desire and don't let anyone persuade you otherwise. However, if using it, be consistent throughout the piece. My personal opinion, this poem would benefit from punctuation.

Overall a good poem. I could offer no editing or grammar suggestions to improve upon the poem.

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Review of As I Fought

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Thirty small words creating a two verse poem that hugs the left side of the page. This brief poem is about contrast and contradiction, reminding us to stop and think before we react, for every action has an equal or greater reaction.

ALIGNMENT
Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal opinion, I am but a novice when it comes to poetry and its teachings.

Though I have not editing, grammar or punctuation comments, I did feel centering this would add some extra depth to the poem itself.

Overall a thought provoking piece.

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Review of Insolvent

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"Insolvent"

Clevinger Oswald

The mind is a scary place to delve into. It can play tricks on the psyche, hiding and maneuvering so as to disguise and mislead you as to what has really transpired. This is a very, very, clever writing illustrating just that.

After reading this I feel this is a dark and sinister piece, yet while reading it that was not the impression at all. I find that odd.

While reading this I could tell that something was amiss, I was just not able to quite put my finger on what was hiding in the shadows. Reading this completely chills you to the bone in such a way that true horror is realized.

This is a very well put together piece. The punctuation, grammar and spelling all appear to be in order. I could not find anything to edit, comment or suggest as far as improvements go.

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Review of My Guardian Angel

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"My Guardian Angel"

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A guardian angel has forsaken it's post and left the romantic vulnerable and alone. This is a poetic piece with great potential. Written with a plea to return, this urgent request is the voice of one who has fallen from the graces of one who watches out for them. This could be a metaphoric piece as well.

Starting a sentence with a conjunction, but or and , creates an incomplete sentence for the reader. These two words are coordinate conjunctions used to join sentences or part of sentences that have the same grammatical status. Though the use of conjunctions to start sentences is becoming more of a norm in today's writings, it is still frowned upon in many writing circles. When used with slang terminology, the use of conjunctions to start sentences is a commonality. I have now come across two main circumstances where this happens repeatedly. The first is when the writer is putting to print exactly as they speak, and the other is with addressing or speaking to or for a younger audience.

Something else I noticed with the coordinate conjunctions in this short prose was that they were used incorrectly within the sentence, in several pieces.
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this and that, and this, and that.... is used,
this, that, this and that...is how it should be

The last thing that distracted me from full appreciating this great poetic piece was the added spacing. There seemed to be too much air between lines and verse. This allows for wandering eyes and thought.

Overall a decent prose that with some editing would be a very poetic piece I could enjoy over and over.

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Review of ANGEL OF THE APOCALYPSE

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"ANGEL OF THE APOCALYPSE"

Philip Roberts

A poem of rhythm and rhyme that runs down the page as the coming of the wrath of God and his avenging Angel of the Apocalypse are foretold.

To me there was too much added space distracting the reader from the poem. I would suggest taking all space out of each verse and only allowing one space in between verses.

The second verse has on rhyme. This was different from the rest and made me re-read it a few times to try and figure out what was wrong.

Overall a good poem that needs some formatting work.

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Review of Tai

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"Tai"

Mo

This is a very well written poem. I was able to follow this ballad with ease and comfort. Tears of sadness cascade down my face as I picture the image of the mother in labor unable to deliver her bundles of joy.

Tai is a cat that is well loved. This is evident in each line and verse. This poem is of sadness and tears.

Normally I would comment here about the punctuation or lack of consistency with the punctuation, but I found in this instance the punctuation it has is perfectly displaying the emotion and voice of the poem. To me punctuation is nothing more than the wand of the conductor. The punctuation in poetry is the author telling the reader where to pause for one reason or another, whether to reflect or simply breathe, at least in my opinion...sorry got off on a tangent...

Overall this is a wonderful poem. Sad, yet beautifully written.

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Review of chasing ranbows

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Rated: 18+

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"chasing ranbows"

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A fun filled story on getting to know your neighbor. I tried to look up what a Kombi was, but could not find it listed anywhere. Perhaps it is the late hour and my lack of coffee, so forgive for this. What I do picture is it is either a VW minivan or a small motor home.

Something else I wasn't too sure of was the clothing. What is a singlet? Could you send me a description?

I find the curiosity of children to be fascinating, teenagers especially. Sometimes their curiosity holds no boundaries as they often neglect common sense in the innocuous nature.

I noticed there are quite a few sentences that begin with a conjunction and or but. Conjunctions are words used to join two sentences of like matter. I have seen recently where this often happens in writing in two different types of writings. One would be when the author is typing as he or she speaks, using the conjunctions as to start a new sentence. The other use is with the younger generation not adhering to grammar rules, and writing in slang as if that were the norm and considered acceptable in all circles. I just wanted to point this out, and give you the information to do with as you see fit.

~towards~ in speech, action words often have an "s" added to them which turns them into slang terminology. The "s" is not needed to propel the action forward or back. This often happens with many other action words; forward, backward, upward, onward, and beside, to name a few. I would suggest removing the "s" off of the word.

~Breaking this up into paragraphs would make this a more professional writing. As it stands this is written as a one paragraph story, only it doesn't fit the format of a paragraph. Each paragraph should have it's own subject of like ideas, or separated dialogue.

~The title isn't capitalized, though this is no big deal, what is however is the misspelling of the title. In the subtext the word storey is also spelled wrong unless perhaps using another language, what I mean by that is for example your spelling of colorful is British as in colourful.

Overall the premise of the story is a good one. There were just many small details that need ironed out to make this a five star story. I will gladly return at a later date if and when editing is done, to re-rate this for you. Remember, a review is simply an opinion, meant to help. Take what you can and deem important and use it, disregard the rest.

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Review of Cricket is overrated in India

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Rated: E

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"Cricket is overrated in India "

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~ First Impression:
A well thought out article, this subject appears to be one dear to the heart. I see this happening here in the U.S. as well, but with other sports... and many sports, since there doesn't appear to be one focus...

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~ Characterization:
The character of the author shines through in this article. This isn't a complaint, merely an observation on what is going on around the community.

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~Any editing comments:
This is well written. The spelling, grammar and punctuation all appear to be in order. There wasn't anything I saw that needed any adjustments. The prompt is well used in this short article and does the contest a compliment to have it entered.

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