~~A superb tale. Divine intervention, destiny, or fate? Who can tell. But a great story this is.
~~I got to the last two paragraphs of this wonderful short story, and broke out with goose bumps and tears. The emotions of being caught up in the moment of the story were sensory overload for me.
{:exclaim}Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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~~A very fine short story on betrayal and innocence. ~~The part I liked best about this short story is the fact that the main character kept patting his pocket to make sure the blue pill was in place. Needing security that a mistake hadn't been made.
~~There doesn't seem to be any real connection between the main character and his offspring. No remorse for what has been done, is being done, and will be done.
~~I feel this would be a stronger piece with more detail behind what is the driving force in this harsh conclusion of actions.
~~My favorite part is the ending. Innocence of youth, and the eagerness to please, foils the evil. Great Job! Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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~~The poem begins with rhyming couplets, then changes to every other rhyme. For being a short piece, I found this confusing. If written in a different layout, I feel this could work.
~~As the darkness
Closes in
The places where
I have been
Become different,
Strange,
Did they,
Really change?
By changing just this much of the rhythm, you have a fluid piece where the rhyming format is true throughout.
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Hello Ann Ticipation ~~A personal piece of love, dedication, appreciation and dancing. ~~A love poem written for that special someone with that personal message of love. ~~Rhythmic and rhyming with flow of ease, this poem is sentimental and a great anniversary momentum. ~~This beautiful love poem speaks for itself with the dancing and the loving unity. This poet writes of many different topics, often using stanzas of double couplets. I enjoy reading the works of this artist. Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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~~A sad break in communication resulting in the end of a union of two souls connected through love.
~~Another really good rhythmical, rhyming poem by a great artist.
This poet writes many rhyming pieces in stanzas of couplets. There is always a great theme, moral, or message involved. I enjoy reading the works of this great artist.
Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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~~A wonderful, rhythmical and rhyming piece delivering a message within.
~~Found one forced rhyme in stanza two, door and raw seems forced to me. Perhaps substituting sore for raw.
~~An inner look into the mind of the door to door salesman.
This rhyming poem tells a story of a man and his struggle day to day. The only thing I found missing was the driving force for him to continue with what he does. Maybe that wasn't necessary to this tale, then again, maybe it would add strength.
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This is the first few chapters of a greatly anticipated novel. A few comments below, no harm intended:
~~and the thought of what came next horrified him.(and the thought of what was to come next horrified him.)
~~His hand shot up her underneath her blouse causing her to sigh, as she bit down on his ear.
~~The professor inquires into the significance of the year 2007, the answer is replied using 2008.
~~he nodded and exit exited the vehicle
~~ A man glared at the those in his group and they immediately knelt and assumed a prayerful posture;"A man from the group glared at the others, and they immediately knelt and assumed a prayerful posture" ~~-WhoWhose family didn't?
~~He scrolled back thought through the code, inspecting it for errors, tweaking it here and there. almost as ifit were in a foreign language.
I am left awaiting the rest of this fabulous novel.
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~~ An interesting response to a 24 hour prompt contest. I appreciated the fact that you listed a link to the prompt contest, as well as an explanation for the piece. It adds insight into the work, as well as promotes another's piece here on site. For that I thank you. It gave me extra information as to help in my review of the subject.
~~One comment for the content. If the main character is so drunk he is seeing the twin waitress and not knowing what he is drinking, wouldn't his speech be more slurred?
~~The humorous twist at the end is what got the laugh for me, as well as the understanding of the main character.
Thank you for the laughs!
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~~Rhythmic and rhyming, this quaint little tale, had me laughing and crying at all it did entail.
~~Creatively imagined. Professionally written. This fun story holds the attention of the reader with not only the choice of wording, but the rhythm as which it is read.
This is a great piece of artwork.
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~~This piece hit so close to home, that I had to leave it and come back at a later time. So many feel the same way as you. Writing here publicly can be a nightmare, or a ray of sunshine.
~~Here you share a personal glimpse of how you came to be here on this site. An awakening of the hidden emotions you had kept bottled up inside.
~~This is your adventure. Your journey through your work, that you share here with us. We now know, when and how it came to be that we were blessed with you stopping here to join us.
I especially like the fact that you have included links in this piece to aid the reader in better understanding.
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~~This beautiful piece, once again speaking of the bond shared between George and May, illustrates how strong the bond is.
~~This bond of love transcends time and space, carrying on without an end.
I especially liked the flow and rhythm of this piece. I liked the way the author brings you from the main characters here and now, to being dead and remembered. The poem is stating, that even though they are gone, they are remembered here with us. This bench is here as a reminder.
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Hello Ann Ticipation ~~A beautiful rhyming love poem. Full of rhythmical flow and ease of read.
~~The love that pours forth through each verse transcends time with the participants of the poem.
~~I feel this a special piece, dedicated to the one you love. Written in love for the one you love.
I especially like how this piece starts out talking of the dream to be together, then the reality of the dream taking shape. Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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Hello Ann Ticipation ~~This was my first real experience with a blog site. I was unaware of what its function was. I see this as a sort of journal of discovery.
~~Being of a personal nature, it is hard to critique this piece. I will mention, that I did find a few typo errors in here, but only 2 or 3. I did not let that sway my judging, for how do you judge a persons life and thoughts?
~~Once moved to tears, then to rivers flowing from my eyes. I read this from top to bottom, therefore going backwards in time. When I hit the part on alzheimers and dimentia, the flood gates poured forth due to the personal chord that had been plucked.
Thank you for sharing so much of your time and personal experience here. Although it is 3 days of writing, I feel I have learned more from that, than I have in any of your other work.
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Hello Ann Ticipation ~~ A rhythmic and rhyming abba poem. Read with ease.
~~ With the first stanza we are introduced to shadows as being the "scary" of the poem. The change from child with innocence, to now knowing better, show a time transition and leave us wondering what happened in between.
~~ Now we are given a new thought provoking piece with the next stanza. The shadows are given a living quality, and bringing us closer to the danger. ~~ The third stanza brings a threatening quality to this poem. "Beware, I lure you with a false sense of security."
~~ For the fourth stanza, we get the attack. Vicious and brutal, leaving no doubt the danger the shadow is.
~~ In this last stanza we are forewarned of a predatory presence returning for another victim. In this we are told that the danger continues to exist. This is a warning.
I really think you did a great job with this piece. I liked the way the poem had a linear aspect of showing us the danger. Going from fun in the sun to dark and sinister, then warning of more to come. You have accomplished your scary poem goal!
Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills.
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Hello Pogacsas
This is an interesting space sci-fi you have created. In this first chapter you bring us up to date on the history and background of all creatures involved.
You set the scene with prescision and style, keeping it simple to follow for those of us without the imagination to create these creatures and foreign weapons, instruments and universe.
One editing comment noted below, no harm intended:
-seemed designdesigned for aggresssion,
Thank you for sharine your creative writing skils.
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Hello Ann Ticipation
This is a very moving piece of work. The education of the youth, the sharing of wealth, the helping a stranger, all are wonderful human interests that need to be addressed.
Good luck with matching the music to this powerful verse.
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What a wonderful idea. The information contained here in is a tool of value for all here involved in the site. The additional links provided add extra information making this detailed enough for the newest of members and those unfamiliar with the internet to use.
Thank you for sharing this information, and suggestions.
Hello Pass it on
This is a wonderful group you have set up. A group that gives back to the community. The creativity and time you have put into this is of great magnitude. Your generosity is appreciated. Thank you for helping to support the many groups out here.
Hello RadioShea
This is a cute rhythmical rhyming poem. The content reading like a fable of old. The meter for the most part was in sync, although there were a few rough places.
The author paints a vivid canvas for the reader. The poem was easy to follow, and humorous to read.
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A weeks worth of journal entries and then they stop. Sometimes up and sometimes down from the goal stated. This reminds me so much of myself. As stated in the last entry, it seems life tends to put up obstacles in front of our goals. Little things to slow the process. The longest I ever lasted is 2 weeks. But that is my story.
Here we have a definite goal plan to achieve what the author deems necessary. A personal log of progress.
Thank you for sharing such a personal piece.
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A contest entry, how did it place? This is an interesting piece you have hear. I view this as a therapeutic piece. A short letter on looking back on life and what you could change if possible.
- due to being a contest piece, an included side note as to what the contest was would have been helpful.
Not knowing the specifics on the contest, one could only ask, would this piece benefit with more information on things of relevance other than personal relationships and moving, or are those the main purpose of the writing.?
A good entry as it stands. I hope it placed well in the contest. Thank you for sharing your creativity.
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"What Works For Me", is a wonderful instrument for helping others with their dietary plans. It is instructive in both dietary and exercising.
I did find the lack of vegetables eaten, under the foods you could eat, somewhat limiting. Are these the only veggies, or just the ones you like and work for you?
~~ I did appreciate the fact that this was an informative piece as to what helps you. Not only did you include the price for the club you were currently liked to , but you also included a goal and as to why.
Thank you for sharing this personal, informative piece.
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The author paints a vivid canvas for the reader. The poem was easy to follow, and humorous to read.
- due to being a contest piece, an included side note as to what the contest was would have been helpful.