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Review of The Demonic Door.  Open in new Window.
Review by ~WhoMe???~ Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :
A ghastly look at the other side.

~*Balloon2*~Interpretation:
Demonic dealings here within. A piece of horror or a choice in religion or practice?

~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:
Although I do not personally agree with the content and ideas explained within this piece, I do feel that this is a well written piece, and am reviewing and rating accordingly.

~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:
I could find no editing comments to make.

~*Balloon5*~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :
A drama packed piece, full of adventure and near disaster. A kidnapping of a child from a train.

~*Balloon2*~Interpretation:
A child is kidnapped, and tries to find a way to escape. Can she make it to safety, and who can she now trust?

~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:
Overall, I think this is a well thought out story. The dialog and action flow good together.

~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:
*Star*
He smiled and turned to talk to a woman and boy.


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Review of Inside His Mind  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :
~*Heart*~A humorous piece looking inside his mind.

~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:
~*Heart*~To me, this is a comedy piece with slight fantasy involved. The wife gets her wishes fulfilled, finally, due to a contest entry*Laugh*

~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:
~*Heart*~Overall, I think this is humorous and fun. An interesting look inside the head of your husband. This piece is both descriptive and detailed. The imagination of the writer comes clear with the interesting avenues the main character takes in this story. From halitosis to gray matter, this adventure holds the imagination of the reader. Clear and precise imagery is put in place.

~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:
~*Heart*~frontal lope of (lope or lobe?)

~*Heart*~ I pushed maymy face up to the next window.

~*Heart*~swinging formfrom a hair

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Review by ~WhoMe???~ Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :The great asteroid, a life force of destruction, on its trajectory toward earth. The ramifications are predictable, the outcome, not so very.

~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:This piece represented reality. Trying to escape something that is inevitable ,is what I see many trying to do in a situation like this. The chance to start over and rebuild anew sparks humans to re-think current society, and hopefully learn from their mistakes.

~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:I enjoyed this realistic piece. From the death and tragedy to the re-birth and renewal, I found this a wonderful story.

~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:No editing comments for this piece.

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Review of Extremes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :A very patriotic poem.
~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:This piece represents a nation with a short attentions span. A memory full of wholes. Veterans and heroes left forgotten, when they should be honored and recognized.
~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:This piece hit close to home. Too many outcries for change, but not enough willing to stand up and take action.
Overall it was a great poem that was very thought provoking.
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Review of I Was Waiting  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :Having been in the same predicament, this brings tears to my eyes. A sad poetic piece concerning children. The raw emotions running deep.
~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:This piece represents heartache and torment for all involved. Suffering for the children and for those in care of the children. For as a care provider, how do you take the ache away, you simply can't.
~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:A well written piece. I am not mentioning meter for this one, for it would detract from the subject material.
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Review of A Heartbeat Away.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :A wonderful poem written in friendship.
~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:This is a therapeutic piece. A voice from the past letting loved one's know that all is well, and they are with them in spirit and memory.
~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:Now, bear with me here. Normally I would rate as above and leave at that. I myself write many rhythmical pieces like this. I have since been shown an added feature to help readers, and to get my point across more smoothly. The words you have chosen show a pattern. The pattern is what you are trying to say in the piece, but also to rhyme. However there is a meter to the poem as well.
For the most part each line of your stanzas start out with nine syllables, with the exception of the fifth and the seventh stanza. I will list the syllable counts below for each stanza. My suggestion, even them out so that they are the same, all following one pattern. This makes the poem more enjoyable to read, for it glides off the tongue . Now please don't take offense, this is merely a suggestion. In fact, you could raid my port and give all of my pieces the same suggestion, with the exception of the 1, which was pointed out to me yesterday, and modified. So here goes:

Stanza 1- 9,9,8,7
Stanza 2- 9,9,9,7
Stanza 3- 9,9,8,9
Stanza 4- 9,11,10,9
Stanza 5- 8,7,9,8
Stanza 6- 9,9,9,8
Stanza 7- 10,10,10,12

By adjusting just one or two syllables, you will have a smooth pattern. Most of your lines center around 9 as it is.
~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:Just the one suggested above with syllable count for rhythm.
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Review by ~WhoMe???~ Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
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~*Heart*~Written in a combination of rhyming couplets, this rhythmical poem takes the reader on a continued journey.

~*Heart*~4th stanza second rhyming scheme is a bit forced. Displayed and gate a hard stretch for rhyming.

with a pentacle displayed,
In silver on the first gate.
with a pentacle displayed
in silver on the first gate arrayed
just one idea no harm intended

~*Heart*~5th stanza rhyming scheme a bit forced as well
Sensing no danger-
They boldly entered.
Into what now appeared-
To be an upward sphere.


Sensing no threat
They boldly onset
Entering what now did appear
To be an upward of sphere
just one idea, no harm intended.

~*Heart*~For the most part the rhyming runs free and smooth with a lyrical tranquility.

~*Heart*~I enjoyed the visual this piece creates. A tapestry of color and action in the mind.

I will be happy to re-read and re-rate this any time.
*Exclaim*Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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Review by ~WhoMe???~ Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :Four articles describing in detail various aspects of the google search engine, and how to navigate your way through it.

~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:I found this to be a very comprehnesive guide to better understanding how to insert the data needed so as to maximize the material sent back to me.
~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:I have no editing comments to add for this was great as it was. Thank you for taking the time.
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Review by ~WhoMe???~ Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :A helpful tool into the inner workings of google advanced tools features.
~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:A comprehensive look into how to narrow the search fields to find the information pertinent to what you are looking for.
~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:Once again, a very helpful item this author has researched and chooses to share the information.
~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:No editing comments for this piece.
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Review by ~WhoMe???~ Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :A lesson in advanced features of google. Oh Goody!
~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:Added information on how to narrow my searching abilities on the google search engine.
~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:I found this to be very useful. Having not been on-line all that long, any and all helpful information is considered gold.
~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:No editing comments for this piece. It is helpful and great as it is.
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Review by ~WhoMe???~ Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :A selection of information showing how to use the language section and preference section of google.
~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:Information I did not know. I was unaware that I could get foreign sites translated through google.
~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:I found this to be very informative and well thought out. The author took the time and patience to gather this information to share with others.
~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:No editing comments for this piece, it is great as it stands.
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Review by ~WhoMe???~ Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a wonderful storage facililty for your on-going novel. Each chapter is listed seperately, making it easy for readers to digest each chapter one at a time. This also adds to the ease of taking the survey and poll attached.
I can't wait to see future chapters added.
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Review by ~WhoMe???~ Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :Dream or reality? Perhaps a combination of both. Ellie awakens with tell tale signs of her dreams still inflicted on her body.

~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:Puzzlement. I have never read anything similar, and am intrigued enough to continue on.

~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:I am not sure what to make of this piece and must head on to the next chapter to search for answers. A few editing comments were made, once those are cleared, I will gladly come back and re-rate this item.

~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:

~*Heart*~ There was a sneaking suspecion suspicion

~*Heart*~overwhelming so overwhelmingly close


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Review by ~WhoMe???~ Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :A rhythmical and rhyming sad piece. The dissolution of a marriage piece by piece always tears at the heart.
~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:An end. A sad and lonely end. The tears no longer can fall from eyes that hurt from all night crying. The title leads me to think the main character is begging for a second chance, crying to be heard.
~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:I thought this was a good piece, depicting the sadness and the grasping for another chance.
~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:No comments to add for this piece.
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Review by ~WhoMe???~ Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :A humoristic endearment written in honor of a very clever little boy.

~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:A bit of family fun and loving. The warmth and enjoyment spread around. A mother's love spread out in writing for all to enjoy.

~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:I think this was a very special piece written with love. The humor shown inside is both heartwarming and hilarious. Makes one stop to look behind doors a little more often.

~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:
-elevatores elevators
-comfortable comfortably reading
- flushered flushed face
- cushions in ispriceless
- it to too much to care


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Review by ~WhoMe???~ Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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~*Heart*~Chapter one brings us into the modern world of this amnesia wondering person. She is possibly hiding from someone or something, and hasn't gone in seek of help. Strong, life-like dreams have her waking to extreme bruising and cuts each morning.


~*Heart*~This first chapter brings us a few mysteries. We don't know what has caused the amnesia. And we are sure that Ellie is frightened of something from the past, therefore not seeking a cure.
We also have these cuts and bruising appearing after dreams, which cause some concern, although this chapter only mentions this fact and doesn't dwell on it. Ellie is getting tired of the solitude she is experiencing, and has made a new friend.



~*Heart*~Reference to old addictions isn't clear? Are the thoughts, or the actual grand scale thievery the addiction?

~*Heart*~What is it that makes the follower think that Ellie lives in the woods. Also, what makes her think that Ellie needs a healer? I feel more in-depth thoughts from this character are needed to clarify her thoughts and actions. We learn that the follower thinks Ellie needs help because she is shoplifting. But what about that calls to the stranger to take action to help? What makes Samantha thing Ellie is homeless?



~*Heart*~no plumbing or electircity electricity

~*Heart*~ notit doesn't look like anything most people have seen.”

~*Heart*~until she drifting drifted into sleep.

~*Heart*~I think this is a pretty good first chapter. It has many different angles for other chapters to decipher and investigate further. This is captivating and helps me to want to learn more.


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :A prologue of a book. The telling of the beginning, introducing the main character. A look from a different perspective.

~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:To me for the most part, this had tell tale signs of neglect and harm to a child. On further contemplation, this could also represent adoption.

~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:I am enjoying the new outlook this story represents. At times it is unclear as to what point in "time" we are viewing, but then from the character's perspective time holds no relevance as of yet. I am intrigued by this story line and will continue along with it as it progresses.

~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:
*Paragraph*4~ To me this paragraph holds some confusion. I picture the first wall, as slipping as in birth. The second wall has me unsure if I am getting the picture correctly. Maybe a little more information could be added. Although, it seems as if the "being" is confused as well, so maybe that is how this should be portrayed.

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Review by ~WhoMe???~ Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :A resourceful tool in helping others to give more insightful and encouraging reviews. Added links give further information for those that wish to really utilize reviewing to their maximum potential.

~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:To me this was a reminder. A refresher course on keeping reviews up beat, encouraging and informative.

~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:I think this is a useful tool. It has given me pause and thought on my reviewing style, and whether or not my reviews contain too much writingML. Something simplistic, yet with a little color for flair perhaps is in order.

~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:I found no need for editing in this piece. It is well written with much thought and consideration going in to the detail.

~*Balloon5*~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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~*Heart*~Let's see," {b]shehe said, putting his hands on his hips.

~*Heart*~ had kept it in there in for.


~*Heart*~ babbling again, aren't it I?"

~*Heart*~forearm to blowblock the blow,
~*Heart*~ he lowered herself himself down

~*Heart*~He could the pulse in his arms fluctuate, due to the two boys' steady grips on him. {can't make sense of what this sentence is supposed to be.}

~*Heart*~the two boys holding thenhim

~*Heart*~and smash a right cross across his opponents,(across his opponents what?)

~*Heart*~ He then focused noon Justin, who

~*Heart*~ A soldier was it exactly(a soldier it was exactly?)

~*Heart*~"How can't you can't do all that for me?!"


I found this to be a very fun story to read. I was enthralled with the complexity of the relationship and how it was worked.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :Looking back in time, in memory of a horrific event.

~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:The sharing of personal feelings and how the horrible event of September 11, 2001, affected a family

~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:This is a piece of consoling reaching out to others letting them know, the author hasn't forgotten the tragic events, and all the sacrifices that were made.

~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:No comments for editing on this piece.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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~*Balloon1*~ Brief summary :Savoring pure exctasy, as it envelops the senses. A realistic look into someone enjoying that special gift.


~*Balloon2*~What did this piece represent to me:This reminds me of Valentines day, for that is really the only time I get boxes of chocolate. The one at a time, agonizing over which piece to eat and what it will contain are true to life. I especially liked the piece that was put aside. We all do this, come on, admit it.


~*Balloon3*~Over all view point:Overall I thought this a pleasantly refreshing piece. Nothing fancy or disturbing. It actually brought back memories of eating a Whitman's box of chocolates.


~*Balloon4*~Any editing comments:No editing comments for this piece.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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~*Heart*~A sheep of the flock has lost its way and then finds its way once again.

~*Heart*~A religious piece speaking of doubt and turning of the back from what is known to be true.

~*Heart*~As a spiritual piece, this is very good. The message comes across plain and clear without having to look for hidden meaning.

~*Heart*~I do feel this piece is brief. I feel a few more verses would make this even more powerful than it already is. *Exclaim*Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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~*Heart*~This descriptive piece is a breathtaking beauty. The author paints a tapestry of color for the reader's enjoyment.

~*Heart*~This could be turned into a poem or left simply as it is. I think this would make a great subject for a poem, all the foundation is laid out in this piece.

~*Heart*~I feel the author could expand in the descriptions a little. What kind of white-snow white, earthy brown. Other than that I feel the rest of this piece is great as it is.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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~*Heart*~A rhythmical rhyming piece speaking out for peace for all. This is what the author wishes for.

~*Heart*~I could find no grammatical errors or typos .

~*Heart*~I feel this could be a longer piece. Although strong enough to stand alone as is, I feel it needs more body. No harm intended with these comments.


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