StaiNed-:D ~~ Brief summary : -A poem written for a contest using a title prompt. This is said to be a "Pi" poem. But this reader has no reference as to what that is, so can not base any judgement on style or form.
~~Interpretation: -It appears that we possibly have many different things happening at once with this piece.
-1- Angels are listening
-2- Some one is crying (but not the angels)
-3- The angels are privy to destruction. Silent witnesses.
-4- Sadness from those in line 2
-5- The tears of the angels are filled with blood.
-6- Those from line two seek help and answer from above where angels reside.
-7- Angels listen
-8 & 9- Here it gets confusing, not sure who is hearing the sounds of death. If we are following the pattern, then the line 2 inhabitants are, but this line seems to be (to me) the angels are hearing.
-10-Here we are back to those in line 2. They once again look up for answer.
-11- Angels are frightened now? Why? What makes them shudder? Are the angels responsible?
-12 & 13- Seem to go together. If so, then the angels listen (silent crimes has me baffled) to crimes then speak out in heaven (spoke a scream is also confusing to me)
-14- A new character is introduced
-15 & 16- The angels and the line 2 inhabitants now combined as one (tears now flowed as one with the dead, is this a river of death?)
~~Over all view point:
I feel this has a good start. After there I was confused as to who and what was speaking, and as to what the topic was. Maybe the poem format (Pi) holds the secret . I would gladly come back and re-rate and re-review this once changes are made. There is a strong piece in here, I just feel it needs some work.
~~Any editing comments: -upwards upward
- put some information in here as to what the "Pi" format is. A description allowing readers to better identify with the poem.
No harm is intended with this review. ~~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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J. A. Buxton ~~ Brief summary :
Another addition into the "The Writer's Cramp" A fun contest that inspires writer's to write.
~~What did this piece represent to me:
A lesson in reading comprehension.
~~Over all view point:
Over all, I think this is a humorous piece. A road trip full of tension and stress due to heat exhaustion, tight confines of the vehicle, and hot temperatures. A superb ending.
~~Any editing comments:
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~~Interpretation: Stanza 1-I Love You- three words. The unspoken love between the child and mother. I say mother for I see this as coming from a mother. I don't see this as told through the point of view of the father.
Stanza2- The mystery behind autism is still challenging. The notations and movements, can be described, but not as to what is being felt inside.
Stanza3- The emotions and yearning to express them are often difficult for a person suffering from autism. The tranquil lake with a raging ocean beneath it's mirrored surface.
Stanza4- Two watch him, sitting silently staring off, you would not remember the torrents of frustration screaming off of him as he tries so desperately to communicate with you.
Stanza5- Questioning the life he will live.
Stanza 6-7 -Love
~~Over all view point:
~~Any editing comments:
YES, GET THIS IN PRINT SOON! ~~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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StaiNed-:D ~~ Brief summary :
I believe this should be an entry into
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. It is in the final round of competition, and this would be a great entry.
~~Interpretation:
A hilarious picture described here. Embarrassing no doubt.
~~Over all view point:
I feel this is a well written short story with one small editing address to be made.
~~Any editing comments: Line 1 :change from:This happened on an ordinary beautiful day to me and my big sister when we were in our early teens to:This happened on an ordinary, beautiful day to my sister and I, when we werein our early teens.
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StaiNed-:D ~~ Brief summary :
A ghastly look at the other side.
~~Interpretation:
Demonic dealings here within. A piece of horror or a choice in religion or practice?
~~Over all view point:
Although I do not personally agree with the content and ideas explained within this piece, I do feel that this is a well written piece, and am reviewing and rating accordingly.
~~Any editing comments:
I could find no editing comments to make.
~~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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~~What did this piece represent to me: ~~To me, this is a comedy piece with slight fantasy involved. The wife gets her wishes fulfilled, finally, due to a contest entry
~~Over all view point: ~~Overall, I think this is humorous and fun. An interesting look inside the head of your husband. This piece is both descriptive and detailed. The imagination of the writer comes clear with the interesting avenues the main character takes in this story. From halitosis to gray matter, this adventure holds the imagination of the reader. Clear and precise imagery is put in place.
~~Any editing comments: ~~frontal lope of (lope or lobe?)
~~ I pushed maymy face up to the next window.
~~swinging formfrom a hair
~~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
Rolph Darren ~~ Brief summary :The great asteroid, a life force of destruction, on its trajectory toward earth. The ramifications are predictable, the outcome, not so very.
~~What did this piece represent to me:This piece represented reality. Trying to escape something that is inevitable ,is what I see many trying to do in a situation like this. The chance to start over and rebuild anew sparks humans to re-think current society, and hopefully learn from their mistakes.
~~Over all view point:I enjoyed this realistic piece. From the death and tragedy to the re-birth and renewal, I found this a wonderful story.
~~Any editing comments:No editing comments for this piece.
~~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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J. A. Buxton ~~ Brief summary :Four articles describing in detail various aspects of the google search engine, and how to navigate your way through it.
~~Over all view point:I found this to be a very comprehnesive guide to better understanding how to insert the data needed so as to maximize the material sent back to me. ~~Any editing comments:I have no editing comments to add for this was great as it was. Thank you for taking the time. ~~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills"Invalid Item"
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J. A. Buxton ~~ Brief summary :A helpful tool into the inner workings of google advanced tools features. ~~What did this piece represent to me:A comprehensive look into how to narrow the search fields to find the information pertinent to what you are looking for. ~~Over all view point:Once again, a very helpful item this author has researched and chooses to share the information. ~~Any editing comments:No editing comments for this piece. ~~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills"Invalid Item"
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J. A. Buxton ~~ Brief summary :A lesson in advanced features of google. Oh Goody! ~~What did this piece represent to me:Added information on how to narrow my searching abilities on the google search engine. ~~Over all view point:I found this to be very useful. Having not been on-line all that long, any and all helpful information is considered gold. ~~Any editing comments:No editing comments for this piece. It is helpful and great as it is. ~~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills"Invalid Item"
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This is in connection with {b:item:1129030} J. A. Buxton ~~ Brief summary :A selection of information showing how to use the language section and preference section of google. ~~What did this piece represent to me:Information I did not know. I was unaware that I could get foreign sites translated through google. ~~Over all view point:I found this to be very informative and well thought out. The author took the time and patience to gather this information to share with others. ~~Any editing comments:No editing comments for this piece, it is great as it stands. ~~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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This is a wonderful storage facililty for your on-going novel. Each chapter is listed seperately, making it easy for readers to digest each chapter one at a time. This also adds to the ease of taking the survey and poll attached.
I can't wait to see future chapters added.
Momo M. ~~ Brief summary :Dream or reality? Perhaps a combination of both. Ellie awakens with tell tale signs of her dreams still inflicted on her body.
~~What did this piece represent to me:Puzzlement. I have never read anything similar, and am intrigued enough to continue on.
~~Over all view point:I am not sure what to make of this piece and must head on to the next chapter to search for answers. A few editing comments were made, once those are cleared, I will gladly come back and re-rate this item.
~~Any editing comments:
~~ There was a sneaking suspecion suspicion
~~overwhelming so overwhelmingly close
~~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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StaiNed-:D ~~ Brief summary :A humoristic endearment written in honor of a very clever little boy.
~~What did this piece represent to me:A bit of family fun and loving. The warmth and enjoyment spread around. A mother's love spread out in writing for all to enjoy.
~~Over all view point:I think this was a very special piece written with love. The humor shown inside is both heartwarming and hilarious. Makes one stop to look behind doors a little more often.
~~Any editing comments:
-elevatores elevators
-comfortable comfortably reading
- flushered flushed face
- cushions in ispriceless
- it to too much to care
~~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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~~Chapter one brings us into the modern world of this amnesia wondering person. She is possibly hiding from someone or something, and hasn't gone in seek of help. Strong, life-like dreams have her waking to extreme bruising and cuts each morning.
~~This first chapter brings us a few mysteries. We don't know what has caused the amnesia. And we are sure that Ellie is frightened of something from the past, therefore not seeking a cure.
We also have these cuts and bruising appearing after dreams, which cause some concern, although this chapter only mentions this fact and doesn't dwell on it. Ellie is getting tired of the solitude she is experiencing, and has made a new friend.
~~Reference to old addictions isn't clear? Are the thoughts, or the actual grand scale thievery the addiction?
~~What is it that makes the follower think that Ellie lives in the woods. Also, what makes her think that Ellie needs a healer? I feel more in-depth thoughts from this character are needed to clarify her thoughts and actions. We learn that the follower thinks Ellie needs help because she is shoplifting. But what about that calls to the stranger to take action to help? What makes Samantha thing Ellie is homeless?
~~no plumbing or electircity electricity
~~notit doesn't look like anything most people have seen.”
~~until she driftingdrifted into sleep.
~~I think this is a pretty good first chapter. It has many different angles for other chapters to decipher and investigate further. This is captivating and helps me to want to learn more.
Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
Momo M. ~~ Brief summary :A prologue of a book. The telling of the beginning, introducing the main character. A look from a different perspective.
~~What did this piece represent to me:To me for the most part, this had tell tale signs of neglect and harm to a child. On further contemplation, this could also represent adoption.
~~Over all view point:I am enjoying the new outlook this story represents. At times it is unclear as to what point in "time" we are viewing, but then from the character's perspective time holds no relevance as of yet. I am intrigued by this story line and will continue along with it as it progresses.
~~Any editing comments: 4~ To me this paragraph holds some confusion. I picture the first wall, as slipping as in birth. The second wall has me unsure if I am getting the picture correctly. Maybe a little more information could be added. Although, it seems as if the "being" is confused as well, so maybe that is how this should be portrayed.
~~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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The StoryMaster ~~ Brief summary :A resourceful tool in helping others to give more insightful and encouraging reviews. Added links give further information for those that wish to really utilize reviewing to their maximum potential.
~~What did this piece represent to me:To me this was a reminder. A refresher course on keeping reviews up beat, encouraging and informative.
~~Over all view point:I think this is a useful tool. It has given me pause and thought on my reviewing style, and whether or not my reviews contain too much writingML. Something simplistic, yet with a little color for flair perhaps is in order.
~~Any editing comments:I found no need for editing in this piece. It is well written with much thought and consideration going in to the detail.
~~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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~~Let's see," {b]shehe said, putting his hands on his hips.
~~ had kept it in there in for.
~~ babbling again, aren't it I?"
~~forearm to blowblock the blow, ~~ he lowered herselfhimself down
~~He could the pulse in his arms fluctuate, due to the two boys' steady grips on him. {can't make sense of what this sentence is supposed to be.}
~~the two boys holding thenhim
~~and smash a right cross across his opponents,(across his opponents what?)
~~ He then focused noon Justin, who
~~ A soldier was it exactly(a soldier it was exactly?)
~~"How can't you can't do all that for me?!"
I found this to be a very fun story to read. I was enthralled with the complexity of the relationship and how it was worked. Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
~~ Brief summary :Savoring pure exctasy, as it envelops the senses. A realistic look into someone enjoying that special gift.
~~What did this piece represent to me:This reminds me of Valentines day, for that is really the only time I get boxes of chocolate. The one at a time, agonizing over which piece to eat and what it will contain are true to life. I especially liked the piece that was put aside. We all do this, come on, admit it.
~~Over all view point:Overall I thought this a pleasantly refreshing piece. Nothing fancy or disturbing. It actually brought back memories of eating a Whitman's box of chocolates.
~~Any editing comments:No editing comments for this piece.
~~This descriptive piece is a breathtaking beauty. The author paints a tapestry of color for the reader's enjoyment.
~~This could be turned into a poem or left simply as it is. I think this would make a great subject for a poem, all the foundation is laid out in this piece.
~~I feel the author could expand in the descriptions a little. What kind of white-snow white, earthy brown. Other than that I feel the rest of this piece is great as it is.
Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
~~A superb tale. Divine intervention, destiny, or fate? Who can tell. But a great story this is.
~~I got to the last two paragraphs of this wonderful short story, and broke out with goose bumps and tears. The emotions of being caught up in the moment of the story were sensory overload for me.
{:exclaim}Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
~~A very fine short story on betrayal and innocence. ~~The part I liked best about this short story is the fact that the main character kept patting his pocket to make sure the blue pill was in place. Needing security that a mistake hadn't been made.
~~There doesn't seem to be any real connection between the main character and his offspring. No remorse for what has been done, is being done, and will be done.
~~I feel this would be a stronger piece with more detail behind what is the driving force in this harsh conclusion of actions.
~~My favorite part is the ending. Innocence of youth, and the eagerness to please, foils the evil. Great Job! Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
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~ Brief summary :
-A poem written for a contest using a title prompt. This is said to be a "Pi" poem. But this reader has no reference as to what that is, so can not base any judgement on style or form.
~Interpretation:
~Over all view point:
~Any editing comments:
~Thank you for sharing your creative writing skills
4~ To me this paragraph holds some confusion. I picture the first wall, as slipping as in birth. The second wall has me unsure if I am getting the picture correctly. Maybe a little more information could be added. Although, it seems as if the "being" is confused as well, so maybe that is how this should be portrayed.
