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Review of Consequences  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good afternoon to you!

I read your poem "Consequences", and I will do a review for you. Although I am not a review professional, I can offer my perspective on how your poem impacted me.

Your poem reads as follows:

A star exploded a million point six years ago
in a galaxy we've yet to know exists.
Today the energy
reached us,
And your smile was brighter,
although you had no clue why.
But because of this,
I smiled too.
And a day that was dark and heavy, --
pressure flattening us like
an unrelieved argument we didn't know
we were having
turned around.
The dark side was enveloped in light,
and we loved, giggled about stupid stuff
no one but us could understand,
and somewhere
deep inside that impossibly faraway place,
a new star shimmered into being.

I made some corrections that I thought would make your poem flow better. Read it over and see what you think.

Your poem brought me back into a time when we could laugh over stupid silly things. I was invited over to stay overnight at a friends' house, and we laughed and giggled all night. Those were good times. Thanks for bringing me back to that. Sometimes they were called pajama parties.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. I had fun reading it, and I am looking forward to reading more poetry from you.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness always. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Lines (Revised)  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good evening to you!

I read your poem "Lines (Revised)", and I will give you a review. Although I am now a review professional, I can give you my perspective on how I perceived your poem to be.

Your poem is well written. I recommend you get an editor to look over your work. They can help you to make your poem even better.

The end of your poem reads as follows:

He runs to me now at the end of his day
A little boy with his picture.
A Masterpiece of hues, and tones,
All mixed and straying.

"Teacher said it was a mess." He moaned, looking up at me.
"Said I was hardheaded and did not care. But this is how I wanted it."

I smile at him and pat his head,
And tell him it is beautiful.
I explained to him that it was fine with me.
Wherever, however, he places his colors.

It's important to give people praise and encouragement for what they do. Teachers are there to help you learn, not spoil your work. I don't understand why teachers must be so cruel to students. This is the thing that can discourage a writer from writing. It's so sad when this happens. Just because a teacher doesn't like something, doesn't mean that they have to ruin what someone else is thinking.

I enjoyed reading your poem. I am looking forward to reading more of your poetry.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. Don't let anyone discourage you from that.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good thoughts, friendships, love, and happiness to last forever. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Who i am i  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good morning to you!

Your poem showed up in the read and review section. I read your poem "Who I Am I", and will be doing a review for you. Although I am not a review professional, I can give you my perspective on how your poetry has impacted me.

Your poem was well-written. You expressed a lot of emotion. I am happy you talked to God about heaven. After you've gone to hell and back many times, you can find relaxation and comfort by talking with God. He understands you better than anyone else. He created you. You are unique and special in His eyes.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. Writing helps to get things out. It takes courage to share with others how you feel about different things. I admire you for expressing your thoughts to the public.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, and good morning to you!

I read your short story "Nightmare in the Road." I will be giving you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can give you my perspective on how your short story has impacted me.

First, I would suggest getting an editor to help clarify your story even better. An editor helps me by giving me suggestions on how to improve my writing or if it's good the way it is. This is how I learn.

Your story reminded me of being a teenager old enough to drive. When I was driving at night, it got to be scary at times. I remember my parents would worry about me when I was out at night and came back late. At first, I couldn't understand why they would worry so much about me. When I got older, I understood. When I start to worry about something, I go out of my mind. I tend to think about the worst-case scenario, meaning I believe something bad has happened.

You have described the situation very well in your story. I encourage you to keep up with your writing.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good evening to you!

First, I'd like to congratulate you on your first anniversary to Writing.Com! Welcome to the family! I am so honored to have you here with us. You are a nice added addition to this family. I am 67 years old and most of my family members have passed away. Writing.Com is like an extended family to me. I have been a member for over five years now. I love the support they've given me. One good thing I've learned here is that the more we write, the better we get. I hope you have many more years here.

I thank you for the support you've given me. Your reviews have been very much appreciated.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Sleigh Ride  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, and good evening to you!

I read your poem "Sleigh Ride", and I will give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can give you my perspective on how your poetry has impacted me.

This is a historical poem worth remembering. This sleigh held a special memory for the grandma. When she went on the sleigh ride, she received a marriage proposal. What a beautiful way to be engaged! Grandma turned a salesman down when he offered a nice sum of money to buy it. Good for her! When they tore down the old place, someone wondered about the sleigh. It rusted to pieces years ago said the driver. The driver laughed when he said, "Who cared about that old sleigh, anyway? It must have been heartbreaking to hear this. This sleigh was special; it wasn't just an antique; it was a treasure; it had a beautiful love story to go along with it.

I can relate to your story when I heard the house I grew up in burned up. I had a lot of good memories in that house. I cried when I heard that it burned down. All I could see were the ashes left over after the fire. My dad built that place. Back in the day, he had to get a permit to build a chicken coop rather than a regular building permit. This was the funniest thing I ever heard of. The phrase "There's nobody here except us chickens" became a common saying. I still say that today.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. I look forward to reading more of your stories.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of All Things New  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, and good afternoon to you!

I read your monologue "All Things New", and I will give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can give you my perspective on how this monologue has impacted me.

Your monologue reads as follows:

I would tell you God never saw you different than you were before, and that the stain was washed away before it even happened.

I would show you that it was only a projection, a play of darkness that didn't banish light, but merely blocked your eyes.

I would speak to our Heavenly Father, and ask him to give you a vision of the imputed righteousness of Messiah with which you are adorned.

While raiment pure and holy, was
Chosen before the foundation of the world

And the bottle where he captured every single one of those tears

I would ask Him to come to you in your dreams once again, so you could, once again, know you are precious to Hlm.,

He knows your love is sincere. He heard every prayer, and felt every wound in your heart,
And He will make all things news.

I made a few minor corrections to your monologue. Read it and check it over to see if you like it.

Our Heavenly Father is the One to turn to when we need to feel his presence. He is a loving God who loves what he created. He doesn't like what we do, but He has unconditional love for us.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. You have reminded us how important it is, to have God in our lives.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of First Grade  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good evening to you!

I read Chapter #8 of your Children's novel "First Grade." Although I am not a review professional, I can give you feedback on how this novel has impacted me.

Wow! What a beautiful story this is! I can relate wholeheartedly to this story. In your story, Qwest was told he needed glasses in the first grade. For myself, it was the eighth grade. It happened to me the same way it happened to him. I was sitting in the back of the classroom and couldn't read what was on the blackboard. Finally, when I did get my glasses, the other students made fun of me by calling me four eyes. I came up with a response. I said, "I'd rather have four eyes than two eyes that couldn't see." That did the trick. No one seemed to bother me as much after that.

It was nice when Mrs. Dickerson noticed that Quest couldn't read what was on the blackboard. When Quest started looking over the shoulder of one of the other classmates. she thought of doing a little experiment. She wanted to know whether he could read the writing on the blackboard. When she found he was having trouble, she asked Quest why he didn't come to her sooner, if he couldn't see the numbers on the blackboard. Quest replied, "I thought I was doing well. It was then that she could get help for him. She set up an appointment with an eye doctor for him. What a difference the glasses made in Quest's life! Mrs. Dickerson did a terrific job in getting help for Quest. It showed how much the teacher cared.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. This novel would be great reading for children as well as the adults. I look forward to reading more of your material.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness lasting throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I read your lyrics of art "Many Roses and Rainbows". I will give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can give you my perspective on how the lyrics impacted me.

I enjoyed reading the lyrics you wrote, especially in the last stanza which reads as follows:

Refrain;
Many roses and rainbows
Clouds in the sky
Reminds me of you
As my days...
Pass on by...
Time spent dreaming
With love in my heart
So I could frame you
With love through my art.

I noticed one thing for you to correct in your lyrics. Instead of Remind me of you, it should read Reminds me of you.

I could feel the emotions as I read through the lyrics. I could tell there was a lot of love in your heart.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. More people should learn about what love is about.

I hope you have blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.

Have a great day! I hope my review put a smile on your face today.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good morning to you!

I read your poem "Dear Mommy, Dear Daddy", and I will give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your poem impacted me.

Your poem reads as follows:

Dear Mommy, Dear Daddy,
Who broke the Earth?
How come we now
hate for all we're worth?
Why do we try and grind
others to the dirt?
Hide behind our walls
of anger and our hurt?
Can you please tell me,
Who broke the Earth?
Dear child,
I hate to admit this
But we're all at fault for the way
this place exists.
We've all shouted over the fence
at the ones we're told to hate
instead of greeting others with
a smile and a handshake.
We've all taken pleasure
in stabbing in the back
Those who vote or think differently
or just because of where they are.
We've all taken glee in the policy of scorched Earth.
We're all to blame,
We're the ones who broke the Earth.

I have made some corrections to make your story sound better. Please read it over and let me know what you think.

Your poem is well-written. I could feel the emotions behind it as I was reading. Sadly, all of us have broken the Earth. Perhaps one day we can all mend the Earth together. The world would be a nice place to live. I am an optimistic person. It's nice to have a glimmer of hope. This is what it takes. I keep thinking one day we'll all wake up and experience a whole new Earth.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. Your words express wisdom toward this generation and future generations.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Foresight  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, and good evening to you!

I read your short sci-fi story "Foresight" and I will give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your story impacted me.

Here's how the ending of your story goes:

Well, there it is. The Daddy she's known is his thirty-year-old past self who has run to the clearing to shout her name right now. Yet, isn't this why the Norman who cradles her in one arm and the umbrella remnant in the other obsessed over the quest in the first place? Prevention? He has to get her back to his past self and ten years of pain will vanish like old Del had. Norman kisses her forehead. "Let's get you home."

He sprints for the clearing, closer to his past self's calls. She calls back, and seeing him looking in the direction of the younger voice, the older Norman smiles. "Don't worry baby". There's nothing to worry about; she doesn't have to disappear. He will fight time and win because the clearing is only feet away. Happiness is only a few steps in front of him.

Ariel buzzes in his ear. "Departure imminent". The handle chimes. And when he steps into where the clearing should be, there are only trees.

"Ariel?".

"Date undetermined." Static. Silence.

Leira's arms curl around his shoulders. "Where are we, Daddy?"

Though the air is thick in his lungs and a thunderclap resonates in his ears, he cradles her head and says, "Safe." Even as the rain falls and the wind blows, he has her, and she has him.

Whenever they are, tomorrow is.

What a wonderful feeling to know that your daughter is safe! This is what any parent would want for their kids.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. I enjoyed reading your story.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Surreal  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good evening to you!

I have read your poem "Surreal", and I will give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your poem has impacted me.

It appears to me that you may have been depressed when you wrote this poem. You were dreaming of a well-dressed man with a pocket watch. You feared the pocket watch was a dream also. It sounded like something wasn't right. It must have been a dark or cloudy night since you mentioned dark clouds filling the leaden sky. It wasn't just a dream, it was a nightmare. Black crows were also hovering there.

You weren't clear of the meaning of this dream, but, sometimes it takes a while before it becomes clear to you. I suggest you write down your dreams as soon as you have them since they will go away, soon to be forgotten. You can write a story about it. Once you have done this, you will see the dark clouds lifting, meaning you will have a better day. You can become a writer for enjoyment. It will be helpful to other people. I commend you for the courage to bring your writing to the public. This is a huge step and I am proud of you for taking it.

I encourage you to keep writing. You expressed your words well.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Visine  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I read your poem "Visine", and I will give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide you with feedback on how your poetry has impacted me.

You described the fact you hide behind your tears by applying a bit of makeup.

Your poem reads as follows:

I need the tears to fall in my eyes
instead of falling out
So I can stop the burning
and hide all my doubts.
I'll apply a little makeup
and since I don't want it to smear
I know my secret is safe
Because I will not shed a tear
a few eyedrops
I'm as good as new

I'm sure others can read your poem and can relate to it. It is very well-written.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. Sometimes, you can get away from your pain by covering it up with makeup. Even though your tears are hidden, the pain is still there.

I made a few corrections to your poem. Read it over and see what you think.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Parents  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I read your poem "Parents" and I will give you a review. I know I am not a review professional, but I can provide feedback on how your poem has impacted me.

Your poem is a wonderful tribute to parents. My parents have passed away. They were eighteen years different in age. They taught me to have good values, and I am thankful that I learned this from them. My dad always encouraged me by saying I could accomplish anything I set my heart out to do. I miss them a whole lot. I am truly grateful I had them all through my growing-up years.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. I'm sure others would enjoy what you have written. Your poem is very relatable. You did a wonderful job paying tribute to your parents.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Phantom Echoes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good afternoon to you!

I have read your poem "Phantom Echoes", and I will do a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your poem had an impact on me.

The last stanza of your poem reads as follows:

With dawn's first light, the crimson field lies bare,
The ghostly chorus vanished into the air.
Thier echoes linger, intertwined with pain,
Where heroes fought, and spirits rose again.

You wrote your story with great emotion. I could feel the emotions as I read every word. War is a terrible thing. Your writing here feels like the dead are still and pain, and the heroes rose again. Saying that the heroes rose again brings hope to those who have to fight in this war. They will see the heroes who have so bravely fought.

The first stanza reads as follows:

A pall of dread hangs heavy in the air,
The ramparts creak, a fortress in despair.
The churchyard stirs, where weathered tombstones weep,
Disturbed from rest, forgotten spirits creep.

It sounds like the forgotten spirits are still creeping in the churchyard where weathered tombstones weep. It feels like the pain of the forgotten ones are wanting to be remembered. They've seen terrible things, and the tombstones don't stop crying.

I was in silent tears as I read your poem. My hope is that we will never have to go to war again. This is wishful thinking, but, it a miracle were to happen, this would be it.

I want to encourage you in your writing. You have brought out the emotions of the heroes and the forgotten ones. You did well.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone is deserving of this.

I want to say that I had four uncles who served in the military. When I asked them about the war, they said they couldn't talk about it.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Question  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I read your flash fiction story "Question". I will give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your story made me feel.

I enjoyed your story. As I was reading your story, it took me back to the time I was going to school. Everyone, it seemed had their hand raised when the teacher asked if someone knew the answer to the question we were asked, I was embarrassed, because, even when I knew the answer, I was too shy to raise my hand. I didn't feel I was as smart as the rest of my classmates. I was afraid of getting the answer wrong. One day I answered a question and nearly all the students were laughing. I was even more shy after the incident happened. I remember feeling sad when that happened.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. Your story was well-written. Your story was one that everyone reading it could relate to.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, and good morning to you!

I read your story "Lillian at Fourteen (1908 - 1922)", and I will do a review for you. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your story impacted me.

This was fourteen days of rough travel and a cold day during April. I heard life stories about how life was during the Depression Era. I was told it was the farm that saved our family from the depression. I had older parents. My dad was 56, almost 57, and my mom was 39 when I was born. It was the hardest birth for my mom when I was born, and the doctors told her that I wasn't expected to live. She had a tumor in her uterus throughout her whole pregnancy and I was a breech baby.

Back in the year when people were traveling in wagons, it was tough for the women, especially if they were pregnant. I don't know how they did it. Many lost their lives or the lives of their baby.

Lillian had doctors pray for her. Lillian didn't have a long life. Her struggles were many. It was an undecided April.

Part of your story read as follows:

The night whistled with frosty breath and dropped icy tears. My horse snorted disapproval, but I was glad of an excuse for the water trail on my check.

I became full-grown the year that the cold crawled into Daddy's lungs. And I became the man, the farmer, the father to Lillian and the little ones. But at seventeen, to have her life in my hands?

Mama, I prayed every prayer and every word I could remember from Sunday services. The doctor prayed too. Though I couldn't understand the words, I saw his hands making the cross.

Skilled hands, but too late; the poisoned organ burst before it could be excised - precious time the road had taken from us.

It was hard to travel, fourteen miles through the snow that, ashamed of herself, April had thrown down to cover what she'd done. Fourteen miles back alone, back to the farm, back to the little ones.

Fourteen miles back to plowing and planning, with Lillian already gone home.

When I typed your story, I made a few corrections. Please take a look at it and tell me what you think.

I enjoyed reading your true story. I encourage you to keep up with your writing. The stories from the past need to be told to the future generations.

I hope you are filled with blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Dear Electra  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am giving you a review for your poem "Dear Electra". I am not a review professional. I can provide feedback on how your poem impacted me.

Your poem reads as follows:

Well
you see
your ethics
cause a problem
for all moral men
as you do desire to
conquer them in such a way
that renders those men senseless and
euphoric from what you'd do to them
at which point I would say I don't know you.


You have an interesting pattern here. This looks like a poem I submitted to the Busy Bee Contest. This is where you have ten lines and the first line you start with has one syllable, the second line has two syllables, and so on down the line with the 10th line having ten syllables. It was easy for me to do. I came up with something almost right away when I did it.

I encourage you to write. Don't give up. Keep on trucking. It was sad at the end of your poem when you said you didn't know that person anymore.

I hope you have blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, and good evening to you!

I read your letter Dear Me "Miles and Miles of Naught". I am giving you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your letter has impacted me.

It was interesting how you portrayed having a bucket list. I admire your views on this subject. I am 67 years old. Things are beginning to change for the better for me. Writing is a passion of mine, and it's starting to come around. I am feeling more confident about my writing.

You said you want to make new friends and keep your old ones. I hope I can be one of your friends.

I wasn't concerned about aging until I heard that people don't seem to care about you any longer when you're older. My parents have passed away, as well as most of my relatives. I don't know who would stand up for me if I had to go to the hospital. I have to confess; this is scary to me. My relatives didn't think I amounted to anything since I don't work. I have been there and done that. It has been difficult having a mental disability. I have a schizoaffective disorder. I hear people saying constantly "Get to Work". I hope to self-publish a book or books. I believe I can help people to accept a disability of this nature. I want them to believe in themself. It has been a long road for me, and am still have some trouble dealing with the day-to-day realities of life. I want to be remembered for doing something good. I have overcome a lot of obstacles. My parents encouraged me a lot, however, my relatives did not encourage me that much.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. I am glad your roommate/boyfriend is good for you. I wish you well in your future.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Delta  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I read your poem "Delta". I will do a review for you. Although I am not a professional reviewer, I can provide feedback on how your poem impacted me.

Your poem reads as follows:

to participate in life


We were mere droplets
brought together in clouds
that shrouded mountains.
We fell from grace,
gaining speed in rivulets,
joining to cascade
in waterfalls and rapids.
We became complacent
as land flattened out,
meandering as if --
as if there were no tomorrow.
Now we have entered the delta,
spread apart by time and distance,
still yearning for each other.
Soon our journey ends,
united again by the water's edge,
perhaps to rejoin the clouds.


Your poem sounds like you had a good relationship with this person. It is a nice remembrance of a life that no longer is, but both of you will be reunited again in the clouds. I could feel the emotions behind your writing. I could picture you having a wonderful life together.

Your poem was beautifully written. I encourage you to keep up with your writing. You have a beautiful way with words.

I look forward to reading more of your poetry.

I hope you have blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Trading Races  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good morning to you!

I read your fictitious story "Trading Races", and I am ready to give you a review. Even though I am not a review professional, I can give feedback on how your story has impacted me.

This is a fictitious story. The story sounded like it could have been based on a true story. Your story was well-written. I could feel the emotions, as Cordaravius wanted the best for his wife and daughter. Although I haven't had any kids, I know the pain when it comes to seeing your daughter turn a different color as well as his wife. It's quite a shock when they see someone change before their eyes. There is a feeling of hopelessness when you feel there's nothing you can do about the situation. I know the feeling. When my mother had to go into the hospital for surgery, it seemed like ages before I was able to see her. I prayed for her recovery. My mother is no longer with me, but the way things are now, I don't believe that she would've been able to handle the tension and pressure that comes with it.

It takes a great deal of dedication to write a story. I admire your courage. I encourage you to keep up with your writing. I learned something from reading it.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I read your writing "Mystery Science Theatre 3000 anagramtime", and am excited about giving you a review. Even through I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your writing has impacted me.

I was intrigued by your writing where it said 0 and o is a sign of perfection and the Center of God is perfection. That is an interesting way to go about it. There is 3 letters in Yoda and to stay neutral allows one to smile and see some light. God has 3 letters and there can be only one choice, therefore 2 is "He" and only one choice. We've now covered our abc's now O is perfection, as 1 is far too many when making mistakes thru life's journey's of 1, 2, and 3. h2o - something valuable for life as well as oxygen, so why ask why and "who" is "thou" as "thou" shall "not" and I was referring to all as a unit.

Everyone has a method of doing things, and if this works for you, then why not do it. Life is a learning experience, and I have learned something today. Even though it was a bit confusing, I do get it.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. Writing gives meaning from its author, therefore, it is meaningful to you, and that is all that matters.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


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Hello, and good afternoon to you!

I read your short story "The New Neighbors WC 276", and I am writing you a review. Even through I am not a review professional, I can provide you feedback on how your short story has impacted me.

Your story managed to give me a chuckle and a laugh today. I needed this today. It's amazing how someone could want somebody watched for doing something that they weren't doing, just by the tone of their voice. It might have been a good thing that you didn't listen to your wife. You would have called the police on your new neighbors for nothing. This would have been a disaster.

Oh! you gave your wife some sarsaparilla. I won't tell anybody. That is your secret. Your wife was much calmer after that I believe.

Being married for forty-seven years is quite an accomplishment. My parents were married for 46 years. You learn to adapt to each other's little quirks being married that long. I love the fact that you're sticking with her.

I encourage you to continue on with your writing. I feel it will make others laugh too. They could relate to your story.

I hope your days are filled with blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime. Everyone is deserving of this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Hello, and good morning to you!

I read your poem "The Home Sampler" and am giving you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your poem has impacted me.

Your poem accurately portrays someone who is affected by Bipolar Disorder. I can relate, from my own experience, having been married to someone with a mental disorder. When he was on medication, he was doing great. When he was off of his medication, it seemed like everything was going haywire. He would do a lot of gibberish talking, yelling, and door slamming. I have a schizoaffective disorder, and I do well by keeping on my medications. I take Aripiprazole (Generic for Abilify) and Bupropion (Generic for Wellbutrin). Abilify is like a miracle drug for me. After exhausting all the medications I was taking beforehand, a friend mentioned a new drug at the time that worked wonders for him. I decided to give it a try, and it worked!

My ex-husband, who had passed away, had three bad addictions. He took alcohol, and drugs, and was a chain smoker. It was difficult to live with him having these addictions. I finally had to leave him because of the verbal abuse that took place. We were married for nineteen years before my divorce.

It would be great if the person you're living with would take their medication.

I appreciate the courage it took you to share your story. I encourage you to keep up with your writing. Sharing your story can help others dealing with the same situation.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone is deserving of this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Hello, and good evening to you!

I read your story "Hero from the Void" Full Chapter One, and I am going to give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your story has impacted me.

I enjoyed reading your story from beginning to end. I would highly recommend that other people would read it too.

Anti was a evil-minded person who wanted nothing more than to destroy the world. It makes me happy that I'm not stuck in the void.

The characters were well-developed; it must have taken you a long time to think of the names for the characters. Sometimes, it takes me a while longer to think up a name for a character, and, at other times it will come to me faster.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.

Keep up with your writing. You are an excellent writer. Your story was easy to read. I didn't see any mistakes of spelling or grammar.


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