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Review of How many sorries?  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I am doing a review of "How Many Sorries?" I am not a professional reviewer, but am thrilled to give you feedback on how your story impacted me.

I am impressed with the way you expressed yourself politically. To do this in the right way takes courage. I think it would be good to share this with the public. I admire your strength in writing something controversial such as this. What you said I agree with. It seems like the politicians just don't get it when they make mistakes, they do it repeatedly over and over again.

I encourage you to keep on writing. I am getting brave enough to write something that gets my point across without offending anyone. I'm getting there one day at a time. It's challenging for me to do something like this, but I am working on it. I wrote "The White House Against Minorities
 The White House Against Minorities  (E)
This is what I wrote and hope that it's not considered too controversial.
#2222426 by Anna Marie Carlson
. This was my attempt to write something controversial. I invite you to read it if you have the time.

I hope you are blessed with good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last you throughout your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Marriage for love  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good evening to you!

I am doing a review of "Marriage for Love". I am not a professional reviewer, but I can give you feedback, which I will gladly do, on how your story impacted me.

I can relate to what you've said about love and marriage. "Why would you marry someone you didn't like?" In the beginning, a woman can be treated like royalty. You were happy with the conversations the two of you had, and the closeness of your times together. You didn't fight much and were confident things were working out fine. Then you discovered that something wasn't quite right. Suddenly you weren't communicating anymore, and the affection toward one another was gone. You didn't understand why. When this happens, you ask yourself questions; "Is there someone he likes better than me?" Is he having an affair? Am I not pretty enough anymore? These questions can drive a woman crazy.

This has happened to me. I saw other women and men getting more attention than I was getting. Naturally, I would get jealous, which is understandable. I believe women can get too close sometimes. I feel like I'm invisible; I'm there, but, not really there. It's an uncomfortable feeling that gets tiring. It's a bit embarrassing, too. I tend to feel like I don't matter anymore. The confidence I once had is diminishing. I have a saying; I may get knocked down three times, but I get up four, meaning I don't let it get the best of me. It's not an easy thing to do. You can't blame it on all men or all women, there are nice ones out there who will try to work things out with you. This is the way it should be.

I agree that it doesn't matter if the special person in your life is good-looking or ugly, it's how you get along. It's the character of the person that matters. I like to think that your problems can be worked out. It takes both of you to do that. Being one-sided doesn't work. How does someone break the ice in a caring way? Being patient for a while is nice, but, when you've made several attempts to try and make it right and it still isn't working, Do you give up the ship or continue to hang on?

I encourage you to keep on with your writing. This was a good article.

I hope you are blessed with good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good evening to you!

I am reviewing your story "Through the Eyes of a Cat". I am not a professional reviewer, but happily, I will provide feedback on how your story impacted me.

I have a gentler approach to what a cat's eyes do. They have their moments when they will put up a snarl to get their way. They have a particular meow for everything. You can tell when they want your attention; when they're hungry, when they cry, and when they're happy. They have the cutest meow when they tell you how much they love you. Their purr is sweet enough to make me want to melt; I am happy to give them a stroke down their back. They love this.

I agree to disagree with your interpretation of a cat's eyes. I do believe they are not afraid to tell you when they're displeased with you. In no uncertain terms, they want to be left alone for a while. They forgive unconditionally. When they purr, it sends shivers of warmth throughout your body. They give you comfort when you are stressed.

I suggest looking for an editor to go over your story. With the correct punctuation, spelling, and grammar, your story will flow better, making it easier to understand.

I encourage you to keep on writing. It is an interesting story. I can understand how people get a different interpretation from cats; they can get temperamental when they want attention.

I hope blessings of good health, friendships, love, and happiness will surround you throughout your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Heartbreak  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good evening to you!

I am writing you a review of "Heartbreak". I am not a professional reviewer, but I can offer you feedback on how your story has impacted me.

The following stanzas read as follows:

Alas, it was in vain to the king,
For he refused to hear.
For opening his heart to king
was the same as deathly fear.

Alas, it was in vain to the king,
For he heard not when bells did ring,
And cursed siege depart,
For he had lost his will to hear with culling of his heart.

And thus the shards of secrets fade,
As memories soldiers fast degrade.
Kingdoms gates to close forever,
Key of light to return never.

Truth is blind, in heart, not mind
And facts ne'er support another kind;
And facts to cancel would be clear,
Are warped to the king while siege is near.

And facts of peace, not acts of war;
Are sealed behind the golden door.
By kind in earnest pain.

Your heart sounded heavy during your heartbreak Behind that golden door was a king in earnest pain. I remember that I felt a lot of pain in my heart when the boy I went on a date with didn't show up I felt heartbroken. I was trying to put the pieces together, trying to figure out what I did wrong. I was in tears.

I wrote a story about "Crying Capsules of Tears"
 Crying Capsules of Tears  (E)
On readability on Thewriter.com, I scored 24.5, equivalent to the Harvard Law Review
#2191477 by Anna Marie Carlson
. This is the most popular writing I have. If you have the time, you can read it.

Your story was heartfelt. I could feel the emotion behind it.

I would suggest that you make the following corrections to your poem:

Alas, it was in vain to the king,
For he refused to hear.
For opening his heart to the king,
It was the same as deathly fear.

Alas, it was in vain to the king,

As memories soldiers degrade fast,

Are warped to the king while the siege is near.

I hope these suggestions were of help to you. These corrections will make it sound better.

I hope you are blessed with good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. I hope you have no heartbreaks to deal with.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Walk with me...  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am reviewing your poem "Walk with Me..." I am not a professional reviewer, but I am delighted to give you feedback on how your poem has impacted me.

Wow! I learned a new word today, Alchemist. That is what I am. Your poem was nice. I wasn't clear on what you were trying to say in your poem. If you wouldn't mind, I am truly interested in understanding your poem better.

I encourage you to keep writing. You are off to a good start.

I hope you have blessings of good health, friendships, hope, love, and happiness to surround you throughout your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am reviewing your poem "Everything is You!" for you. I am not a professional reviewer, but I am happy to give you feedback on how your poem has impacted me.

Your poem is beautiful. It touched my heart in a good way. It reminded me always to have hope no matter what we're going through.

I encourage you to keep writing. You gave me hope today to keep writing.

I hope blessings of hope, good health, friendships, love, and happiness will surround you throughout your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good afternoon to you!

I am doing you a review on your poem "The Light in the Forest". I am not a professional reviewer, but I will gladly do my best in offering you feedback on how your poem impacted me.

I will comment on the following stanzas:

I should never have agreed,
To come to the forest in the night.
My legs ache as I run with all my speed,
Powered by my fright.

The darkness passes past the barrier to my mind,
I hyperventilate and lie against a tree.
The sky grows darker and I become blind,
No longer able to see.

I drift into the darkness
Letting it engulf my soul.
I have lost my sharpness,
And I am no longer in control.

But hope is a fire,
In the darkness of people's minds,
It has traits that you admire,
Extinguishing the doubt it finds.

I focus on the hope in the dark,
I remember the sun will rise.
I see a light spark,
And gasp in surprise.

The sunrise was amazing.
Auroras of purple and pink,
And after a few minutes of gazing,
I could barely even think.

Even in total pitch black,
Do not mope.
Remember that the sun will be back,
And never lose your hope.

Your poem is inspiring to me. It reminds me that it doesn't matter if we are in total darkness, that we still can have hope. The days we suffer from depression, we must remember that there's always a light. Hope is important for us to have. When we come out of the darkness, we see the hope emerge. We get new energy. We remember what we've come out of, and can start anew with a new light glowing.

I encourage you to keep on writing. Your poem will be an inspiration to others.

I hope you have many blessings of good health, friendships, love, and happiness to surround you throughout your lifetime. Let your smile bring joy to those going through a dark time.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Across the street  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I read your story "Across the Street" and I will give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer, but I will do my best to give my input on how your story has impacted me.

I enjoyed hearing your story. It reminds me of my story. My nephew was very young when he started singing a song entitled, "Whistle Punk Peter" by Buzz Martin. It didn't take long before the family would give him a quarter every time he would sing that song. He retired from the Army and now, is in the music business.

I started singing at a young age to different genres of music. I was in the high school choir for four years. I never did any solos. Singing, dancing, and writing were my true loves. The year 1974 was a year of going through three major traumas in my life. When the third one hit, I had a breakdown. From the age of 18 to the age of 50, I felt like I was 100 years old. During the year 2019, I sang karaoke in Bakersfield, California at a Learning Center. I am now working on writing some books. I still love to sing and dance. It's hard for me to dance now because my knees are hurting. I have the vision to be able to sing on the television program "The Voice". I used the app "Star Maker" to sing karaoke and was surprised to learn that people enjoyed hearing me sing.

Are you thinking along the lines of singing again? It would be awesome if you did.

I encourage you to keep on writing. Your story was interesting.

I hope you are blessed with good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Genesis  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I reviewed your adventure story "Genesis". I am not a professional reviewer, but, what I can do is give you feedback on how your story made me feel.

Even though fighting isn't one of my interest areas, I thought your story was interesting how a brainiac and a delinquent could become good friends. Teresa wasn't very nice to Jason either, even though she knew him for years. Jason and his brother almost got into a real fight once. When someone acts differently than most people, they are genuinely picked on. It shouldn't be that way. I'm interested in what your new character, Ty is up to?

I encourage you to keep writing. I enjoyed reading your story. I feel you are off to a good beginning to a story.

I hope you have blessings of good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. You are deserving of this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I am doing a review on "Discover Who You Arre". I am not a professional reviewer, but I can give you feedback on how your poem has impacted me.

It's hard to thank people when you're going through struggles life's battles have put you in. When someone has wronged you, it's hard to forgive someone. The Bible says we are to Love our Enemies.

I am a person who tries to see the good in everybody. I have gone through many struggles in life where I have been hurt, laughed at, and cruel games were played on me. When I've dated, most of the dates were no-shows. When I find myself in these situations, I pray to God asking him for help. His Son Jesus gave his life so we could be saved. We are all sinners. Jesus, thank God, loves us all unconditionally. It doesn't matter what we have done, when we come to Him, he will forgive us.

Jesus is what keeps me together. I am glad that he's been patient with me. He is my best friend; he will never let me down.

I have moments of anxiety when someone doesn't treat me right. I am more in control since I have the Lord in my life.

I enjoyed reading your poem. I have shared what has helped me. I couldn't have done it on my own. I like the part in your poem that reads as follows:

Every struggle in your life has shaped you into who you are today GOD'S CHILD
And you will always remain that.

I hope you have blessings of good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of LIFE  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I read the beginning of your novel "Life", and will give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer, but I can begin by giving you feedback on how your novel has impressed me by giving you feedback.

Your novel is off to a great start. I enjoyed reading it and hope to continue reading more of it. I don't know exactly what God has in store for me, but helping people to cope with their disabilities and continue to live is my mission in life.

I hope you are blessed with good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves this. Even though it's not likely for everyone to have this in life, it is my compassion that everyone has friends to confide in and laugh with. Loneliness is sad when you're all alone. We all need to be loved. Without love, we end up without hope. When we have God, we have everything we could want.

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Review of For giveness  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I read your poetry "For Giveness", and am happy to give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer, but I can offer feedback on how your poem affected me.

It was interesting how you separated the word Forgiveness into two parts (For Giveness). I learn something new everything. Life is a learning experience. I love to learn new things.

I enjoyed reading your poem. It was a true inspiration. When a person can forgive somebody else, it lifts a big weight off your shoulders. It gives you freedom from guilt. I forgave someone for doing a terrible thing. He murdered his wife, a teenage boy almost lost his life for defending her, and two other teenage boys were nicked in the shoulder by a bullet. I hated what he did, but when I finally decided to forgive the man who had committed this crime, I could get my life back together. It was a freeing experience. Even though this incident isn't completely erased from my mind, I can find it in my heart to continue going on with my life.

I encourage you to keep writing. Keep up the good work.

I hope you are blessed with good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I read "I Love Now as a Man Should Love", and will gladly do a review for you. I am not a professional reviewer, but I can give you feedback on how your poetry has affected me.

It is touching how you have found everlasting love, whether dead or alive. You have learned to love the things you enjoy, regardless. I hope you find someone special who will love you back the same way.

I encourage you to keep writing. It's good to express your feelings to the public. It takes courage to do it. Writing is good therapy.

I hope you are blessed with good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime. You deserve this. Life is full of ups and downs but I truly want the best for you. Whenever life throws you a punch, it's important to get back up and try again, after all, the thing holding you down is usually temporary. Having the right attitude is the key. Don't get discouraged. Rise above the difficulties. You can do it. I know it works from my own experiences.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I read your story "A Summer of Lost Connections" and will write a review for you. I am not a professional reviewer, but I can give you feedback on how your story has left an impression on me.

I enjoyed reading your story about Myra (Monkey) and Nautica's relationship. It was nice how they were able to get together with the help of their friends. It was sad how a miscommunication had broken them up. Myra was heartbroken. She knew something was wrong, but never got an answer as to why this was happening. Nautica truly liked her but thought girls didn't like it if the boy was too clingy.

I have experienced this in my personal life. I was too clingy and was clueless the guy in my relationship didn't like that. Life is full of ups and downs. In my case, I finally got the courage to ask why he was pulling away. When he told me, I didn't quite understand but I did, however, become less clingy. He said he couldn't get his work done around the house when I kept wanting more and more hugs from him.

I encourage you to write. I hope your story will have a happier ending. I hope they can find their way back together. I hope they found it in their hearts to come together. Love hurts. I found this to be true many times in my life.

I hope your story will continue.

I hope you are blessed with good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of This is my love  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I read your poem "This is My Love", and I will do a review for you. I am not a professional reviewer, but I can give you feedback on how your poem has impacted me.

I enjoyed reading your poem, but I didn't quite get the meaning of the following:

Sweets don't turn brine.

Can you let me know what you meant by that? This is interesting to me.

Your poem was beautifully written. I can tell you are very much in love. S It's nice to know someone is devoted to the love of your life like you are.

I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime.

I encourage you to keep writing.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Twenty-Four Years  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good evening to you!

I have read your story "Twenty-Four Years", and I will give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer, but I can provide feedback on how your story has left an impression on me.

I admire your courage to share your personal story with the public. Your bravery is to be commendable.

I can relate to your story. You mentioned about wearing the same coat every day. As long as it's kept clean, there shouldn't be a problem with doing that. I wear the same clothes pretty much all the time. I don't blame you for wanting to put on a coat while you're in the hospital, especially when it's cold inside. Being homeless is not fun. Some people only want to judge and criticize those who are different than they are. They should walk a mile in your shoes. They lack understanding. I feel for those people. If they could take the time to get to know someone, perhaps they would gain some empathy.

I applaud your efforts to be who you are. It would be best if you weren't harshly criticized; you are what you are.

I encourage you to keep writing. I enjoyed reading your story. Give yourself a hug and a pat on the back.

Let the blessings of friendships, good health, love, and happiness surround you daily.

Put a smile on your face, it helps you to believe in yourself.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I read "Forevermore and Nevermore III", and I am doing a review for you. I am not a professional reviewer, but I can give you feedback on how your story has impacted me.

Your story started out sad but ended up with a happy ending. Lily lost her beloved rabbit, Snowflake. She didn't feel the need to go on after that. Pets are like having your own child, you love them with all your heart. I can relate to this story. I have lost animals that I truly loved. I would cry for days over the loss of my pet. Pets are understanding; they love unconditionally. They bring joy to your life.

It made me happy when Lily was introduced to Neverland. She found warmth and love at this place. The sadness she felt after losing Snowflake was not to be remembered again. She found solace where she found pain.

I encourage you to keep writing. I love the kind of stories where a hardship can be turned into joy.

I hope you have many blessings of friendships, good health, love, and happiness to last your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Summer Storm  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I am doing a review on your story "Summer Storm". I am not a professional reviewer, but I can offer feedback on how your story has impacted me.

Your story reads as follows:

Lightning strikes and thunder cracks
Rain pours down flooding low lying ground
The wind like the wolf it'd blow down the shacks
Leaving the poor piggies fleeing all around.

The storm is gone as fast as it came in
Leaving all the destruction visible to our eyes
Knocked down trees, road blocked by a big limb
I look around in shock as the neighbors child cries.

Making the necessary corrections may be helpful to you:

Lightening strikes and thunder cracks
Rain pours down flooding low-lying ground
The wind was like the wolf, blowing down the shacks
Leaving the poor piggies fleeing all around.

The storm is gone as fast as it came in
Leaving all the destruction visible to our eyes
Knocked down trees, road blocked by a big limb
I look around in shock as the neighbor's child cries.

I enjoyed reading your story. You described the scene well. When any storm happens, destruction usually follows. It's sad when we go outside and see what damage a storm has done, and it's sad, especially when we see a child cry.

You can use more words to describe the situation, such as using more action or color to get in to how you feel.

I encourage you to write. People can relate to what you have written.

Have a great day. I hope you are blessed with many friendships, good health, love, and happiness to last your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Not All Men  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I am doing a review on your poem "Not All Men". I am not a professional reviewer, but I can give you feedback on how your poem has impacted me.

I agree and disagree with your poem. The Osmond Brothers did a song entitled "One Bad Apple". Part of the lyrics to this song is "One bad apple don't spoil the whole bunch girl. My addition to this song would be as follows:

You can have one bad apple, ten bad apples, 50 bad apples or more, but there's always one good apple.

Most women say all men are bad, but I believe there are good men in this world and
Many men say all women are bad, but I also think there are good women in this world.

I encourage you to write. Not everyone agrees with my opinion. I believe there is good and bad in everything. We should all get together and become good. Our world would be a better place to live in if we could do that.

I hope you're surrounded with blessings of friendships, good health, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of My partner  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, and good morning to you!

I am doing a review on your poem "My Partner". I am not a professional reviewer, but I can give you feedback on how your poem has impacted me.

You have stated in your poem about if you want to be a partner with you, you have to run fast. If this is expected of you, then I would be a long way away from being that person's partner. I am not able to run. I am slow at doing things. Both of my knees are aching. I can see where many things are going to be expected of me. This scares me. I am not capable of doing some things. I am worried about the future now. I hope I can continue to write. We will see what happens. I do the best I can. The world is a different place now. It sounds as if the things keeping me going, are going to be taken away. The unknown is terrifying.

I encourage you to keep writing. Writing is a form of expression which should not be denied anybody. This country needs to be able to get along with each other. If we're unable to do this, then our country will be in a very sad state.

I hope you have blessings of friendships, good health, love, and happiness surrounding you throughout your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Defining ideals  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello and Good evening to you!

I am reviewing your little story "Defining Ideals". I am not a professional reviewer. I can give you feedback on how your story has impacted me.

There were a lot of musts in your life. I have often heard many You should do this, You must do this, and You have to do this, in my life. Some say everyone must work. I have a lifelong disability. I have worked, but it was hard to do that. I am hoping I can continue to write and publish some books. This will make me happy. I also like dancing and singing songs. I have done karaoke on the StarMaker website. I enjoyed doing that.

I see some similarities of mine in your poem. I encourage you to keep writing. It is good to share your story with others. You never know who you might help.

Rather than saying, "Defining Ideals", it would be better to say, "Defining Ideas". I hope my suggestion is helpful.

I hope you have blessings of friendships, good health, love, and happiness to last your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I am reviewing your story "A Journey to Trust". I am not a professional reviewer, but I can give you feedback on how your story has impacted me.

I appreciate the effort you put forth in writing your story. It was hard to write this story. I suggest you get a professional editor to read your story. Your story was good. Having a professional editor can help you make your story easier to read by making corrections concerning the proper grammar. I had a hard time reading it. I read it over slowly.

I encourage you to write. It sounds as if you may have been a bit scared when you wrote it. I admire your courage to share your story.

I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. I hope my suggestion has been helpful to you.


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Review of Eyes of poets  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I reviewed your poem "Eyes of Poets". I am not a professional reviewer, but I can give you feedback on how your poem impacted me.

From reading your poem, I would suggest having a professional editor review your poem. It is a very nice poem. Your poem would sound even better to have them go through it and help you make it into the proper style of poetry. I believe it to be a free-style poem, but I don't have enough expertise to know for sure.

I encourage you to keep writing. It is a beautiful poem for the eyes of poets. I hope my suggestion is helpful to you.

I hope you are surrounded with blessings of friendship, good health, love, and happiness to last a lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I am reviewing your story on "The Significance of Custom Keychains". I am not a professional reviewer, but I can give you feedback on how your story has impacted me.

I enjoyed reading your story about keychains. I was surprised about the many different things keychains are good for. I love keychains. They say a lot about us. Your story was very well-written. I didn't see anything that needed to be corrected.

I highly encourage you to keep writing. It was informative and useful to me. Thank You for sharing your story.

I hope you have many blessings of friendships, good health, love, and happiness to surround you for the rest of your lifetime.


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Review of Oscillating  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, and Good morning to you!

I am doing a review on "Oscillating". I am not a professional reviewer, but I can give you feedback on how your poem has affected me.

I can relate to your first stanza which reads as follows:

Well written
Well played
Players always seem to think sincere ones play games.

My sister does this more times than I can count. She insists that I tell her the truth when I told her the truth. She repeats herself constantly by wanting me to tell the truth as she sees it. I get frustrated when people do this in the relationships I've had. After sharing my poetry with my sister, she would say the following:

"I don't get this, and, "What you say doesn't make sense". I think along the lines of "Is she playing games with me? or do I need to work on something that only satisfies her?" She saw a magazine article about a poetry contest she thought I might be interested in. I submitted my poem and was happy when it got printed in their book. I was given a CD which had my poem read by a professional narrator, and I was given a beautiful plaque with my poem printed on it. The CD featured other poets as well. I was happy when I received them. My sister seemed excited when she told me about the contest but didn't seem as impressive or supportive as she used to be. It makes me wonder why the sudden change.

I encourage you to keep writing. Writing is a form of expression. It takes courage to share your story with others. I am happy that you took the first step in doing so.

I enjoyed reading your poem. I do have one suggestion. Try using different words to express yourself instead of using cursive language. Too many people are using these words today. As much as I don't like to admit, I am guilty of doing this. Expressing myself using other words to get my point across sounds much better.

I hope blessings of friendship, good health, love, and happiness surround you during your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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