I read your short story "Your Choices Define Everything", and I decided to give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer but I know how important feedback is to the writer.
Your story had a great impact on me. It's so wonderful that your daughter started reading at the age of six. She also decided that she wanted to travel like the two of you did. The library is a great place to go.
I encourage you to keep writing. I enjoyed reading your short story.
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I read your poem "My Weakness", and I decided to do a review for you. I am not a professional reviewer but feedback is important; it lets the writer know how their writing has impacted the reviewer.
Your weakness for love is nothing to be ashamed of. I also have a weakness for love. There have been people who say that we shouldn't stay together but that's all wrong. There are times I wonder if I'm loved as much as I love him. I hope that my weakness for love isn't a problem. I am going to stand by it all the way.
I encourage you to write; you've got the potential. I thought your poem was beautifully written.
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I read your poem "Pretending Just a Little Bit", and I decided to give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer but getting feedback is important. I will tell you how your poem has impacted me.
I like the title you chose for this poem. I enjoyed reading it. You expressed yourself well. All three stanzas said a lot. Just a little bit is just enough to stay in control, having a fantasy of what could be, and surviving life for what it is, reminds me of myself sometimes. I have a creative mind. I think I can change the world to make it a better place. For a little bit I dream about this, and then I realize it can't be done.
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I read your poem "The Sounds", and I thought I would give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer but giving insight into how your poem impacted me can be helpful to you.
You speak of the rain bringing music to your ears, the wind being music to your body, and hearing screams is music to your soul.
You say the following:
The sound of their screams is music to my soul.
Despair and agony accompany their screams
Begging and crying for hope.
Their pain and suffering bring me joy.
Despair, agony, begging, and crying for hope. It sounds like you were in a dark place. All of these brought you joy. It also sounds like, through all of this, you found happiness
Sometimes, going through a rough patch in life takes us out of the dark and into the light.
I can relate to that. Many times I cried over the circumstances I encountered, but when I won the battle by overcoming them, it made me stronger as a result.
I pray for blessings of friendships, good health, and happiness. I encourage you to keep writing.
I read "The Story of the Sensitive Heart", and I wanted to give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer but I can offer you feedback on how your story has impacted me.
I encourage you to keep writing. You have done a great job. I noticed a few minor things for you to correct in your story, but you may get help from a professional reviewer. I can relate to your story since it sounds a lot like me. I have hope one day I will get a family who will support me. I love the support I get from Writing.Com/ they are like family to me.
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, finding a good family, and happiness.
I read your article "Natural Relief For Cough", and I decided to give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer but I can offer feedback on how your article has impacted me.
Thank You for sharing that onions, honey, and lemon are a natural way of relieving cough symptoms. I will try this and see if my nagging cough will go away. I enjoyed reading your article and want to encourage you to keep writing. I appreciate any advice I can get on helping me overcome some ailments I have been struggling with. Do you know what can help with sinus problems?
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I read your poem "For Pringles =) and I decided to give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer but I can offer feedback on how your poem has impacted me.
Your poem expressed emotion and comedy. It gave me a laugh for today. I encourage you to keep writing. It takes courage to try and make people laugh, I admire you for sharing.
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
After reading your poem "Void of a Charcoal", I decided to give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer but the feedback on how it had impacted me can be helpful to you.
I enjoyed reading your poem about charcoal and a friend. The last stanza tells a lot about charcoal. It read as follows:
I am sure it doesn't matter,
But until that piece shatters,
the charcoal would stand flattered
for it too wishes for the moment in which it mattered.
If charcoal could speak, it would tell you that it had feelings. I encourage you to keep writing. I learned about charcoal today.
I have a friendly piece of advice for you. No words need to be changed unless you can shorten it up a bit. Some of the lines are too long. You can distribute them more evenly; this makes them look much nicer.
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I read your story of fanfiction, folklore, and fantasy "Fantasy World Build To Be Named." I am not a professional reviewer but I found your story fascinating. I learned a thing or two about diadems. It was one of those stories I wanted to continue reading for the information I got while reading it; I was happy to know that you are continuing this story.
I want to encourage you to keep writing. I have a wide range of interests and your story gave me an interesting perspective on learning about sci-fi. I enjoy the Star Trek movies.
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I read your story "The Role of Personal Expression" and decided that I would do a review for you. I am not a professional reviewer but when I give you feedback on how your story impacted me may benefit you.
Thank You for sharing your story. The last three lines of your story read as follows:
To conclude, the prohibition of "I" in academic writing is not an arbitrary rule but a carefully considered norm that promotes objectivity, encourages critical thinking, and supports the democratic and inclusive nature of scholarly communication. It is a practice that underpins the integrity of academic work and maintains the focus on the shared pursuit of knowledge.
I found this interesting. I am not sure if I got this right but what I got was that it's okay to use the word "I" in academic thinking; it opens the door for others to view their thoughts or opinions more, even though it isn't the arbitrary rule. If I haven't got this right, please, if you have the time, clarify this for me so that I can have a better understanding of it. Thanks for the information.
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness. Keep writing; this information will help others.
I just read your poem "Sky Watching", and I decided to give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer but giving my input on how your poem impacted me may be helpful to you.
You are a good writer; you have good vision. The star and seagull were a blessing because we are not one of them. Something fun to watch can disappear; this is rather sad. You give good detail in your poem. I enjoyed reading it.
Keep writing; I can see some good talent here. I am happy that you shared it.
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness. I hope you have a nice smile on your face today.
I read your story "Normal. Happy. Healthy, and I decided that I would do a review for you. I am not a professional reviewer but giving my feedback on how your story has impacted me will be useful to you.
I enjoyed reading your story. I especially liked the ending where Mike had been in love with her for six years and he wanted to ask her on a date. She found it boring for a while, then found it Normal, Happy, Healthy because her adventure had just begun.
I encourage you to write; your story made me smile today. Keep up the fabulous work; we need more stories like this.
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness. I hope my review brought a smile to your face.
I read your story "The Crocodile and the Plover" and I decided to give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer but giving you feedback on how your story impacted me may be of help to you.
I enjoyed reading your story. This story was a cute one in my book. I am glad you decided to share this story; I am sure that other people who read it will think so too. Keep writing; you're doing great! Whoever thought there would be such a friendship with a bird who cleaned out the crocodile's teeth and the crocodile for not eating the bird. Your story gave me a chuckle today.
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I read your short story comedy "The Equation of Destiny" and decided that I would do a review for you. I am not a professional reviewer but I can give you feedback on how your story impacted me.
Your story of comedy and pain as the universe had collapsed was a bit humorous, but at the end of your story, you mentioned how painful it was. I can see the humor and the painful sides of how this would occur. I remember the day when everyone talked about how the world would end and how frightened I was to hear it over and over again. At the time, I couldn't see any humor in this because of what they were saying. On the comedy side, I can see people running all over the place laughing at what was happening. If you have the time, maybe you can enlighten me about the humor you saw in your story.
Keep writing; you're doing great!
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I read your poem and opinion contribution "Resilience and Self-Discovery", and I decided to give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer but with the feedback of my review, I feel that it will be helpful to you.
I am very impressed by the last stanza of your poem:
In the embroidery of life, her story's told,
A demonstration of the force of the intense.
An African young lady, who battled to be free,
Also, in her self-realization, tracked down her evident excellence.
I found one thing that could be corrected in the first and last lines:
In the embroidery of life, her story is told rather than story's, and on the last line would be: Also, for her self-realization, she tracked down her evident excellence. In the last line in the second stanza, all you need to do is to omit the comma. I hope you don't mind the correction; it is only meant to help you.
I enjoyed reading your poem. In the poem, the first stanza reads as follows:
In the core of Africa, a young lady stood,
With dreams as tremendous as the desert sand.
Her soul furious, her vision clear,
She battled against uncertainty, and vanquished dread.
I found your poem to be inspirational. I encourage you to keep writing; I believe it will inspire more people too. It takes courage to say things and I am glad you did.
I hope you will be blessed with good friendships, good health, and happiness. I'm hoping I was able to bring a smile to your face.
The poem you wrote "The Acceptance" is true. I decided to do a review for you. I am not a professional reviewer but I believe that my feedback will be of help to you.
Even though we get hurt by those we love, we need to accept this because it is bound to happen sooner or later. The pain seems to be excruciating when we go through it at the time. Next, we find that after we've gone through it, we become much stronger than we were before. This doesn't make it any easier. Forgiveness is important; without forgiveness, it will eat at the root of our soul. When we forgive, we can feel at peace with ourselves.
I have had situations where the phone isn't picked up when I call and whenever I leave a message it's not returned. Nothing was said as to why this was happening. I may have done something wrong to have hurt them and not know anything about it. A friend or relative may be harboring unforgiveness and they can't find it in their heart to forgive. I pray for these individuals. I don't know what could be going on in their life that could be why they can't talk for whatever reason. Hopefully, they will come around one day; I keep the lens open for them. I am guilty at times to blame them for not accepting my call but then I understand that it could be the situation that they're in.
I hope that you are happy today. I hope that you will be blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I encourage you to keep writing. I enjoyed reading your poem.
I read your poem "Divided by Miles, (A Lost Love Poem)" and I decided to do a review for you. I am not a professional reviewer but offering feedback to how your poem impacted me, I believe, can be of help to you.
Your tribute to a lady you lost is very admirable. When a loved you is lost, it's hard to pick up the pieces at times. It's brave of you to share your feelings; this helps you get them out and other people who have experienced this can be helped also. Personally, I have experienced a lot of losses of friendships, relatives, and those I have loved. I found it to be helpful to write a note or a letter to the one you lost by telling them how you feel and telling them how much they have meant to you. Once this is done, you can either keep it or throw it away. It helps to release any pent up emotions you may be feeling.
The way you have honored her is precious. I encourage you to keep writing. I am happy that I got to read the tribute you gave to her. Keep this in your memory; it doesn't bring her back, but it can make it a little better for you.
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I read your short story about a relationship, death, and a tribute "Please Don't Cry", and I decided to give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer but giving feedback on how your story impacted me, I believe, can be of help to you.
Your story was sad. I can relate to this well. In my personal experience, I had a special connection to a man who was my dearest friend. He invited me to dinner one night. He was excited about what he had made. It was a sandwich. He no sooner stepped back a step and said, "I can't breathe and then passed away just like that. I was so shocked that I couldn't speak very well. One thing about it, though, I was told from the guy who prepared his body that he died with a smile on his face. He had never seen that before. Everyone that saw him felt comfortable to be around him. Even a little girl wasn't afraid of him being there in a coffin.
One thing I would like to share with you is to try to remember the good memories you had with him. Giving you flowers is a beautiful way to remember him. When you visit his grave, tell him thank you for the flowers. Even though it doesn't bring him back, you can remember the thoughtfulness behind it.
I hope this will help bring a smile to your face again.
I hope you will be blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I encourage you to keep writing; it is a way of sharing your feelings with other people. Other people can be helped who have gone through the same thing or a similar one.
I read your poem "Envious" and decided to do a review for you. I am not a professional reviewer but giving you feedback on how your poem impacted me is what I can do.
You noted at the beginning that you were a resentful and jealous creature. I can totally relate to this because I get that way when there are women who want to give my special man a hug. This seems like a small thing to get upset over but I find that it bothers me when they do that.
Your poem is very descriptive and gets right to the point of how you feel. I wrote a poem about a man who hurt a woman when he broke up the relationship. This poem was very descriptive and to the point.
I encourage you to keep writing. Your poem gets the message across. There are women out there who feel the same way. I'm glad that you shared this poem; it takes courage to do so.
I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I am going to give you a review on "What Lurks Beyond the Flowers" - Pt 1. I am not a professional reviewer but giving you feedback is what I can offer you on how your story had impacted me.
Your story was beautifully written. The character name Iris Larson is interesting to me because the first name Iris gives away the name of the flower. At he beginning there was an introduction of a letter inviting people to come to the farm since they haven't had visitors for a long time. This was a welcome letter. When Iris was asked, "Iris Larson?", I sent a letter to you of having an available guest room for her. Iris was unsure of what to do, but she was saved by a male voice who replied, "Is this any way to greet a guest, Horace?" Silas's voice replied, "It's lovely to see you, Miss Larson. Please come in." The foyer is spacious, thought Iris, and was met immediately with a with a rich sense of warmth and welcome. The surrounding walls were adorned with intricate woodwork, bedecked with a variety of picture frames containing artwork, pressed objects, and photographs. Beneath her feet laid an ornate rug woven in hues of crimson, orange, and olive green.
You gave a detailed description of what the house looked like. I like that.
I encourage you to keep writing. I have the impression that your story will be an interest to other people. Keep up the good work!
I hope that you will be blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I finished reading your story "Lost Umbrella", and decided that I would give you a review. I am not a professional reviewer but giving feedback on how your story impacted me is what I can do.
I enjoyed reading your story. It goes to show how the kindness of a stranger can uplift someone who has lost their umbrella and returned it to her. One never knows when an act of kindness will come around; there are still nice people around.
I encourage you to keep writing; your story will bring joy and remembrance to someone who is down and out and needs some inspiration to get them through the days ahead.
I hope you will be blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness for a long time to come.
I read your story "The Lost Kitten", and was touched by it. I am not a professional reviewer but will offer my input on how your story impacted me after I read it.
Your story was beautifully written in tribute to your son. Losing someone, especially one so young from cancer is devastating. His strong hands took care of a kitten who needed him. I don't have any kids but I can feel empathy for your pain of losing a child. I lost some animals that were dear to my heart; to me, that would be like losing a child.
I encourage you to keep writing; writing is good therapy for releasing your emotions. It takes courage to do so; it's a release of feelings kept inside to share with others who have gone through the same experience.
I hope you will be blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I decided to do a review for "Thursday." I am not a professional reviewer but I can offer my thoughts on how your story impacted me after I read it.
I am glad that you shared your thoughts about Thursday. You said that you were just rambling. It's okay to ramble sometimes; expressing your thoughts can be therapeutic. It takes courage to share with others what's going on inside. You have expressed them well. Keep writing. I encourage you to do so. Keep up the good work!
I hope you will be blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness.
I read your story "Quintanilla / PerezSelena/Una." and I wanted to do a review for you. I am not a professional reviewer but I hope that my contribution to how your story impacted me will be helpful to you.
Your story brought me back to the memory of Selena Quintanilla. She had a great voice and a compassionate nature to her. It was a huge loss when her life was taken from us. I saw the movie that was made about her life. Her smile was contagious. Everyone who knew of her loved her. Sharing the part about how she drove a long way to teach Caglar Juan Singletary his first aerobics class was amazing. This showed a lot of caring on her part. I'm glad that her music will live on forever.
I enjoyed reading your story. I encourage you to keep writing. You have expressed her memory well. I believe those who knew her would love to hear about her again. It shows that she is not forgotten.
Getting feedback on writing is important; it helps to learn how you're doing and where to improve. Even though I am not a professional reviewer, I can value my input on the impact it had on me after reading what you have submitted.
There are days when I try to read something and find that I am tired and then my eyes begin to feel heavy and then I fall asleep. It's usually not because I am bored; it just happens to be that perhaps my body is telling me that I need to rest for a while.
Your writing is well-written. You describe the emotions that went into your story; it was vivid and to the point.
I encourage you to keep writing; don't give up on that. Next time you read something, you can have a better perspective on what you've read, and find it not as boring, and you won't be bored. Reading someone else's story is helpful; your day will be brighter knowing you're not the only one who feels the way you do. Writing is good therapy.
Have a nice day; I hope you are blessed with friendships, good health, and happiness. I hope to see a smile on your face today.
Anna Marie Carlson
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