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DISCLAIMER
I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.
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INTRODUCTION
Hello Choconut ,
I have been reviewing pieces that come up in the Read and Review section, and I was so pleased to see your name come up with your item "Proof" . It's been too long since I've gotten to read any of your work.
So let's get right into it, shall we?
WHAT I LIKED:
The Story
I'm amazed by what you were able to accomplish in such an astonishingly short amount of time.
Your main character, Michelle, was someone I felt like I could root for immediately. You went back to show a little of her past, her moral compass, and what drives her in her work, while also hinting at a much deeper story beneath the surface of what we see.
You set a wonderful tone that really put the reader into the feel of a good detective story.
You created a sleazy villain that could send chills up the spine of the audience.
You offered up tangible tension when you established a deadline, and the importance of meeting it.
Lastly, you left me, as the reader, with hope, while also leaving me wanting more.
The fact that you were able to accomplish all of this in under 300 words is just incredibly impressive all the way around.
MY SUGGESTIONS:
Grit
If there was one thing I would have liked to see more of in this piece, it would probably have been details on the crime that had been committed in the first place.
I say this, of course, coming from the perspective of someone who likes True Crime more than mystery, and horror more than anything. My tastes do lean just a little more toward the dark and morbid, but my favorite part of any crime fighting story tends to be the gritty, shocking aspect of it, and that was something you didn't have a lot of time for in this piece.
Of course, that all boils down to personal preference - and I'm still blown away by what all you managed with this piece.
CONCLUSION:
I was very impressed with this piece, and I stick to that. Even if it wasn't as dark as I might have preferred, it was unarguably engaging and well crafted. Thank you for sharing it with the site!
I hope that I get the chance to read more of your work in the future, and as always, it had been a pleasure reviewing you!
Sincerely,
-Cat
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