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Review by Cat Voleur Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I thought this was a beautiful piece. Although I didn't quite grasp the narrative side of what was happening, there were distinct bits of imagery woven throughout, a consistent tone for the poem, and the words strung together beautifully.

There was one line that really caught my fancy:

So from far away, I’ll drink secretly from her hands
To quiet the strong rhythms of those far Eastern lands.


The meter and rhyme scheme were also exceptional, particularly in the excerpt. Well done!




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As I mentioned briefly up above, I didn't quite follow what was happening in terms of the story. I'm not sure if that was your intention or not, but if you are trying to tell a story my one suggestion is that you give the reader a few more hints toward the details of the situation being described.

Other than that, I think you've done a great job with this piece.

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All in all it was an enjoyable read, even if I didn't quite understand all the details. I hope that this review has been helpful, and I wish you all the best!

Sincerely,

Cat

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Review of My Saviour  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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I've never read your rhyming work, so I don't have much to compare it to, but on its own I think this is a great piece. Although rhyming can be a great thing in poetry, the focus of this piece is definitely on emotion, which in my opinion is the more important aspect of prose. So I'd say you've done a good job.

There was also a personal feeling to this piece, and it felt very deep in addition to emotional. I enjoyed it thoroughly, and I think it's always a good thing when the reader can feel that sort of connection to the writer of a piece.

All in all it's a good poem.



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Constructively I didn't notice anything wrong with the piece, and it hit on the important aspects of a free-form poem. My only suggestion is that you continue pushing the boundaries of your comfort zone and experimenting with new poetic/creative forms.

That's one of the best ways to grow and improve.


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I hope that this review has been somewhat helpful, and I wish you all this best in this and any future writing endeavors. It has been a pleasure reviewing you.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of Mock Epic  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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I loved the premise of this.

When I saw how short it was, I wasn't quite sure what to expect, but you so quickly have set up a scenario between two people that has me intrigued in the entire concept of the story, and the Mock Epic that you may or may not be writing.

The idea of reality being questioned seriously is the basis for many of my favorite stories, and I see a tremendous amount of potential for this project, especially if it's approached in the same surreal manner that this excerpt was.


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My only suggestion to you is that you change "may or may not be writing" to "am definitely writing." I'm serious, I thin this is a concept that would make a great basis for a longer project, and I feel as though I simply cannot encourage you enough to pursue that.

It would be a great story.


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I hope that this review has been encouraging, if not the most helpful/constructive. My interest was piqued by this little piece and I hope something I've said inspires you to work on this, on confirms that you should be.

It was a pleasure to review you.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of The Cry  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I really liked the simplicity and concise nature of this poem. You manage to communicate some very deep feelings in not a lot of words and while you avoid specifics, there's enough of an idea here that the reader feels a bit of empathy evoked.

I also like the dark tone, though a good portion of that is personal preference and my inclination toward dark things.



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My one suggestion is that you add an annotation. You mentioned in the description that this was published in an anthology, and that's something I'd be interested to know more about as your reader. Perhaps you could mention at the bottom of the piece which anthology it was published in, or even link out. Then you could use your description space to write more about the poem and draw in a wider audience.


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I hope that the review gave you a little something to consider, since your poem gave me a lot to contemplate it. I really enjoyed reading this piece of your work, and I hope that I get to see more by you in the future.

Sincerely,

Cat



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Review by Cat Voleur Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I love how this poem looks.

This structure combined with the formatting gives your poem a distinct look, and aesthetically it makes a strong impression before one even begins reading it, which is great. It's only fitting that a piece this strange makes a unique first impression.

The piece was a little vague, but that helped make it a little more mysterious and unsettling, which overall worked in its favor.

There was one line in particular that I really enjoyed:

"A powerful idea
destroying my mind."

Not only did this fit into the great poem's format, but it was a powerful line that really made me, as the reader, think.




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The only suggestion I have is that you consider changing the penultimate line of the poem. Although I didn't have a problem with the content per say the "..." at the end of the sentence draws the eye to an otherwise very symmetrical piece and detracts from the strength projected in the previous line.


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Aside from the one nitpicky suggestion, I thought the poem was great. I'm glad I got to read it and I hope that I get to see more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of Journey  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I really loved this poem.

Although I've seen a lot of prose that tackles the idea of the afterlife and the grief that comes with losing someone, this one sticks out to me - particularly the ending. The final stanza was so beautiful:

So love her now in memory
But pity not her state--
She's in a new dimension now
And such is all men's fate.


It concludes the topic of the poem, the meter is great, the message is universal, and it's just very beautifully written. It's without a doubt my favorite section of the poem, and something that I truly enjoyed.

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The only thing I'd suggest is that you re-work the description for the piece, which is a little bit misleading. I was expecting it to be much more about the afterlife you believe in and less of a narrative, just based off of the Title/description combination that you currently have.


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I hope that you enjoyed my review, as I certainly enjoyed your poem (particularly the end, which I'll say again was fantastic.) It was a pleasure reading your work and I hope I get the chance to do so again soon.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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This was a really interesting situation, and I can definitely see how this could be stressful. What a strange string of coincidences. I'm glad you decided to share because this is exactly the sort of account that really gets me thinking, and I like knowing that other people have these strange sort of encounters with the randomness of the universe.

I liked that you spelled out the situation in a way that was personable and easy to understand.



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The only thing I would suggest is adding either an introduction or a conclusion to sort of tie the piece together. Although it was interesting, I might have liked to see it presented a bit more like a story so that the craziness of the experiences are a little bit more plain to see, strange though they are.


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I hope that the suggestion was a little bit helpful, and that I get to see more of your work in this event. It was a pleasure reading Mama, Me and the FBI and I thank you for sharing this piece of your work.

Sincerely,

Cat

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Review of Not Alone  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I liked the set up. This seemed to be going in a very different direction than where it actually went, and that's exactly the sort of clever misdirection that I like seeing used in mystery pieces - especially shorter ones such as this. You were able to mislead your audience for a rather long time considering the length of the story.

The beginning poses quite the interesting quandary for the detectives, protagonist, and readers alike. Very well done.



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The only thing that I'd suggest is that you try to work in a few mentions of Uncle Joe in earlier to the piece. Obviously bringing him up too often would spoil the ending, but as the piece stands now that's the one bit of wrap up that just seems to strike the audience as out of the blue, and perhaps a little rushed.

Other than that, I thought the piece was well executed from start to finish.


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I hope that my suggestion has given you something to think about in regards to continuing this project, and hope that I get to read some more of your work soon as this was a fun mystery piece to review.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of Whispers  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My favorite thing about this piece was the formatting, which I found to be quite striking. I like how the penultimate line of the last stanza is indented with a word that repeats the final word from the line above it, bringing both verbal and visual emphasis to important aspects of the piece. It was a unique structure I hadn't seen before that I found to be quite effective for me as the reader.

As far as content goes, I like that the subject is described and while the nature of the relationship between the subject and the narrator is hinted at, it isn't explicitly spelled out. The subtlety counteracts the emphasis of certain details, and makes the poem feel very balanced as a whole.

Great job.


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I really don't have any suggestions for this piece, though it may be worth noting that the phrase "cranberry muffin crumbs" sticks out to me, I think because it's the most specific thing in the stanza.

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I hope that this has brought a fresh perspective to the piece, and that I get to read more of your work in the future. It has been a pleasure reviewing you.

Sincerely,

Cat

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Review of Malice Intended  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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I liked how you built up to a twist ending without being overly obvious. This was an expert example of ommitting information and averting attention, and I have to admit that I really didn't see the end coming until it was already happening - you did a great job.

I also thought you did a pretty good job with the foreshadowing early on when you mention that the hotel could thrive under new management. It made me a little suspicious, but then after the murder I didn't think about it again until right after the reveal. Very clever.




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My only problem with the story is how many flaws there were in Elsa's plan. It says that in the description (and I suppose that it's part of the point) but it just seems like she should have been a little bit smarter, and more careful.

Aside from that, I thought that it was great.


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This was a very entertaining read, and I'm glad to have found it for this event. I hope that the review was somewhat helpful, and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of Death Wink  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I thought this was really interesting.

I like that you didn't take too much time explaining the rules of the game, so it at no point became tedious. You let the scene play out very naturally, and it added a lot of tension without becoming confusing.

It's also a good illustrations of how being that close to death, being forced to play a game like that, is sometimes more motivating than just the flat out threat of death or injury, and how being faced with that kind of pressure can make a person really reconsider their life.



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The only thing that I would have really liked to see more of in the story is character development - especially in the narrator. Although the pacing was great and the tension is built very well, I would have felt a little more invested if I had gotten just a little more insight into the mind of the person laying this all out.

Other than that, I thought it was perfect.


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This was an intriguing concept with a brilliant execution, and I can see why it won those contests. I am very glad to have read this!

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I liked the slow build up to the piece, it made the ending much more surprising.

I also thought that the title/premise were a clever combination. You took a common saying that most people are familiar with, and you gave an unusual (and detailed) story around that premise. It drew me right into the story and kept me guessing all the way through.

Even though I could sort of guess where it was going, the tale was engaging and you really did make the ending your own. This was well done and enjoyable overall as a story.



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My only suggestion would be that you try to edit down the beginning a bit. Although I liked the piece overall and I thought the end was great, it does get off to a bit of a slow start - though I supposed the end does make it worth it. It is something to consider, though.

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Thank you so much for sharing your writing here, this is something that I'm glad to have read. I hope the review was somewhat helpful to you, and that I get to read more of your work somewhere down the line.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello {suserpatrice:} ,

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This isn't normally what I think of when I see the "mystery" tag but it was so interesting. I liked that instead f being a narrative sort of mystery, it was more of an existential mystery.

Additionally, I thought that many of the specific points you made were interesting as well. I had actually found myself wondering about a few of the points.

There was a good balance of more serious questions, and light-hearted questions. The piece carried both reflection and a touch of humor, which I enjoyed.



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Normally I would suggest a bit more structure, but since this isn't intended as an article or prose, I think it works well.

It gives off the impression of being a little wandering, but unless I'm mistaken, that's part of the point, isn't it?

In any case, I think the piece is just fine as is.


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Thank you for sharing some of your thoughts with the audience. I enjoyed reading through this and I imagine that I'll enjoy thinking about some of the questions raised for a good while, yet. I hope that the review has been somewhat helpful and that I get to read more from you in the future

Sincerely,

Cat

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I enjoyed your topic quite a bit. Although it's not the sort of thing that would usually hold my interest, it's something you're obviously well-versed in and it always shows when the writer has done their research.

I felt like I learned something about a piece of history that I had no prior knowledge of.

Best of all, I liked that there was a source included in the annotation. It not only brings credit to the great piece that you've written, but it encourages others to go and learn more - something I always appreciate.



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My only suggestion would be to add a further annotation. The tale of Ridgway Glover is mysterious enough that I can see the appeal in studying him, but it would be cool to know how you first learned about him or what inspired you to write the piece. Writer insights like that are just really neat tidbits, and they can help put the piece into some context.


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Thank you so much for sharing this and enlightening me. I feel a bit wiser for having read this, and I hope that the review was at least somewhat helpful.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I like that this was based off of a true story. Sometimes it takes a lot of bravery to talk about paranormal experiences, so I thank you for sharing your experience.

It was an interesting tale, and it left me with something to think about in regards to my own beliefs - which is why I find myself so drawn to these stories. You did a good job sharing what happened to you.



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I do have a couple quick suggestions:

The first is that you consider changing the name of the piece. "Horrifying Moments" didn't fit the impression that I got from the piece - especially since it's only the one moment that was horrifying and the focus of the piece isn't on the scare so much as what it was on being saved. I would try to find a name that reflects how this one moment impacted you.

The second is that you try to add just a little bit more information on yourself in the story. It can be easy to overshare when writing nonfiction accounts, but telling the audience a little bit about yourself and how events like these have changes you can make for a more gripping tale.


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Thanks again for posting this, it was a good read and an interesting encounter with ghost. I hope that my review has been helpful and that I get to read more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello brigitte ,

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I really liked the introduction, how it eases the reader into a false sense of security and then throws in "you don't think she suspects" into the mix. It was a very suspenseful break and a great way to pique the audience's interest.

I also loved the concept, and the mysterious nature of The Project. I lean toward speculative fiction, but I liked the science-fiction-y undertones and the way that the exposition is built up slowly throughout the course of the story.

The different layers work well together, and it makes for a deep, captivating read.


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The one thing that I would have liked to see more of would have been characterization for Alex. While I didn't think it was lacking, exactly, I would be very interested to see more of her personality.

Of course, I'd also have loved to see more on the concept in its entirety - so that might just be because I was intrigued. Though I think the story works well here, it might be better suited to a longer format, should you ever feel like expanding.


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I hope that you enjoyed the review at least half as much as I enjoyed the story. This was an interesting and well executed premise, and I thank you for sharing.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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The parrot.

I thought this was such a clever way to hint at culprit in a mystery.

The parrot spilling information is something that I've seen a couple times, but usually only in horror stories, and I was surprised to see just how well it worked here - especially because the clue was something as subtle and potentially misleading as a nursery rhyme.

The amount of plotting and outlining that must go into mystery stories like this is something that never ceases to amaze me.



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The one suggestion I have is that you consider extending this story.

The premise was incredibly interesting, but I feel like it might have worked better as a mystery story if it had been a bit more involved, including things like the standard red herrings and a bit more character development. I always like to feel as invested as possible in detectives when reading fiction of this nature.


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I hope that this is a concept you continue to work with or get back around to in the future, because it really has been quite enjoyable. Thank you so much for sharing, and I hope I get to see more of your work throughout this event.

Sincerely,

Cat

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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This was just a little sliver of what is obviously a much bigger picture, and keeping that in mind I think it's for the best that you didn't spell out the entire situation. Although I feel like a few more hints in the right direction might have been helpful for the audience, the fact that you go into such detail of what's happening in the moment rather than what happened leading up to the moment is very effective in building tension.

I also liked the setting and high level of description.


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The one thing that I would really suggest would be polishing up this piece a little bit, doing just a little bit of cleaning up. There was one sentence at the beginning that caught my attention in particular;


It was funny, she didn’t even feel frightened, much less frightened at least, then she’d been moments before in her bed.


Just the way that this was phrased, I had to read it a few times before it made sense. Aside from a few instances of things like that however, I thought that the story moved very well and was quite engaging.

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I hope that this review has been at least somewhat helpful. I really enjoyed reading your story and it left me with a ton to think about.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of Burned  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I loved the end.

I liked the twist, but more specifically I liked the final line. It was a good wrap up, it added levity to the story, and it hinted at what might happen after this piece concludes. It left me surprised at how invested I had become in your main character, and this is something I'd like to read more of.

Leading up to that, I think you did a good job setting up the scene without giving too much away or ruining anything.

Additionally, the tone was perfect. I got a very sneaky vibe from Margaret, and the atmosphere made me feel like I was reading a classic mystery novel.

Very well done.



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My only suggestion would be that you write more about Margaret. I get the feeling that this was just a taste of someone who promises to be a very interesting character, and I'd like to see more of her.


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To wrap this up, I think this was a great story. It could be a great stand alone piece or a great introduction to something more. Margaret was interesting, your writing style fits the subject matter perfectly, and I thank you for the very entertaining read.

Sincerely,

Cat



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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I loved this story!

There were so many little twists and turns. I was expecting one good twist, but they just kept coming.

In a very short story you were able to set up a good amount of characters, a few of whom had very distinct personalities. The story that the father told was very surprising and the way that it was told seemed pretty realistic. The writing style was engaging, and as a whole I think the piece worked really well.





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The one suggestion that I have is that you consider either extending the story, or cutting down the number of siblings. I think working so many characters into a piece this short is really difficult, and having the extra siblings around just drew attention from the most interesting dynamics. I think either branching out a little to set up Karen's relationships with the rest of her family or making it so that it's just her competing for the fortune against her brother and his wife would have worked a little bit better - but that's just speculation.

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I really enjoyed this piece, and it took me by surprise. I hope that the review was at least somewhat helpful.

Sincerely,

Cat



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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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This is one of the vest W/C entries I've read!

What I like best is the way that you were able to take the prompt in such a unique and vivid direction. Including the prompt up above the story really drew attention to what you were able to do, and in such a short amount of time.

I was also quite taken by the tone. Even in the opening line when you're reiterating information from the prompt, you got in the voice of your character and really set a vivid atmosphere for your piece.

I could feel tension, relief, and quiet friendship all so strongly while reading this, and was invested from start to finish. It was concise, unique, and well written.



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The only suggestion I would have is that you considering coming back to revisit this idea. The ending felt just a little bit rushed, but I imagine that's just because of the strict word count. I know I'd love to see a more fleshed out version, if this was ever something you wanted to work on more.


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I hope that this review was somewhat helpful, as I really enjoyed your piece and was very impressed with what you were able to accomplish so quickly.

Sincerely,

Cat

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I liked the structure.

The way that the poem is broken up into short lines at the beginning really makes it feel like it's mounting up to something, and then you really hit your stride toward the end of the first stanza where the lines are longer and the pacing picks up. It worked well in combination with the unusual rhyme scheme, and I must admit I've never read anything quite like it.

It' also really neat that you included the link to where people could hear the piece being read aloud. That's something that I find often helps my enjoyment of poetry, and it isn't something I see a lot on here.


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This isn't really a suggestion, but I thought it was worth noting that the piece is quite abstract. It did a good job putting an image in my head, but I don't feel like I fully grasp the situation surrounding it. Of course, that might not be an issue, depending on your intention as the writer.


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I hope that this review has been somewhat helpful. Although it left me with a lot of questions, I liked the flow and the imagery in this mysterious poem, and I'm glad to have read it.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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A great concept. The focus on the eyes really emphasizes the different layers happening in the story.

As always, I'm impressed by how intricate of a web you were able to weave in such a short amount of time. It was immediately engaging, well-paced, well-structured, and had just the right amount of dark content.

I could see where the story was going, but I wasn't at all disappointed when it came around because of the wonderfully potent way it was written.



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The only thing I would suggest would be perhaps tweaking the dialogue a bit between Horace and Chris. Chris seems to take bad news just a little bit too well, especially considering how violently he reacts to similar news later on. I imagine working in genuine reactions to emotionally draining news like Chris has to face in this scene would be difficult without adding too much to the story (and messing up the wonderful pacing that you have currently) but it was the one thing that didn't strike me as realistic.

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It has been a pleasure reading your story, and I hope that I get to read more of your work soon.

Sincerely,

Cat



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Rated: E | (4.5)
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In short, I liked how blunt you were. You had a message, and you got it across. I think in that respect, you did a good job achieving what you set out to.

This piece was short, sweet, and very to the point.

The message itself was also good. You can't achieve everything that you set out to, and this is a great mindset to get through mistakes and failures with.



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While I think the short piece was effective, you might want to consider expanding the premise. Depending on what you're going for, it's arguably too short in its current state.

If you want to really motivate people and push your skills as a writer, you could consider turning this idea into an article, or into more of a personal essay. Readers might be more inclined to take your mindset into consideration if they knew what events taught you to think this way, or where you learned this sort of coping technique from. A personal touch might make the piece easier to connect with and more memorable.


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I hope that my suggestions were a little bit helpful. I enjoyed reading the piece and this is something I'll keep in mind the next time I don't accomplish something the way I hoped to.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I thought the tone of this was great. It was tagged as personal and emotional, two feelings I think you conveyed well. It read quite honestly, and upon finishing I felt like I had gotten to see just a little bit of insight into the life of the person writing. That can be a rare thing, but it's something I look for in all my poetry.

I was also impressed with your clever use of internal rhyme in the first few lines of the poem.



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I do have two quick suggestions.

The first is that you play around with the format. Formatting free-form poetry can be a little tricky, but I think breaking up some of your longer lines will help present your words in a way that draws attention to way you've put words together.

The second suggestion would be that you consider switching out the "inspirational" genre tag for "religious" or "spiritual." It's not that I didn't think your poem was inspirational, but I find it's really helpful to give readers a heads up about spiritual content, at least in my experience.



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I really enjoyed your piece, and I hope that my suggestions were at least somewhat helpful. All the best with your writing!

-Cat

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