Cat Voleur's (cat.voleur) Reviews

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Review Style

Versatile: I'm good at reviewing different types of writing in different ways. Honest: While I do my best to be honest and encouraging in reviews, I don't omit things. If I tell you I like something about a piece, you can trust that I'm not just saying it. All-Inclusive/Well-Rounded: I look for the good and bad in writing. I'll give you an overall opinion as well as the highlights and what needs worked on.

I'm good at...

Giving feedback within set parameters. If you're looking to receive opinions on something specific, let me know and that's what I'll focus on when giving a review.

Favorite Genres

Horror - all time favorite. Science Fiction and Fantasy are tied in a close second.

Least Favorite Genres

Romance. (Exceptions: Dark erotica intrigues me if it's, you know, dark.) I will happily read and review romance pieces, but I might be a little tougher on it than on other genres.

Favorite Item Types

Static Book/Collections.

Least Favorite Item Types

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I will not review...

N/A I'll review anything. If for some reason you don't think I'll want to, feel free to email me with your concerns before submitting a request.

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#4234137

Review of Knock-Knock, Woo's There?

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello BD Mitchell

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This ally battle review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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I chose this piece because I've been reading a lot of dark stuff during the last week and I thought I could use something lighter. I'm glad I chose this one.

Now, onto the review.

THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

Let me start by saying how impressed I am at how well you conveyed the ghost's meaning by different variations on the word "woo." That can't have been easy, and I want to acknowledge that.

To branch that statement out a little to the rest of the piece, I've always found dialogue only pieces to be quite a feat on their own, and this has probably been the most entertaining one I've read thus far.

My favorite part however had to be the end. Since the dialogue at throughout the piece was so amusing I wasn't really expecting it to be leading up to a punchline which made it all the more surprising and enjoyable. You seriously did a fantastic job with that.

DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:

I really don't have any suggestions for this piece - I would absolutely leave it as is.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

To sum this up, I really liked this piece. It was a little weird, pretty humorous, and it definitely lightened up my day. Thank you for writing it and sharing it with everyone here. I hope I get the chance to read more of your hilarious dialogue piece soon.

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#4234134

Review of The Luring

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello Fairport

This ally battle review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

I really liked the poetic nature of this one. That probably sounds like a given because it was, in fact, a poem, but I thought the individual lines were all very well structured and beautifully phrased, which made it much easier for me to appreciate the piece as a whole.

The following was one of my favorites:

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DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:

I don't really have any overall suggestions for the piece. I had one punctuation thing to consider, but that got mentioned in the dropnote - which has left me nothing to put in this section other than to reiterate, good job.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

To sum this up I really liked the poem. The writing was good, it was dark, it was a little mystical and it was a fun read. I would gladly read more of your poetry at any time based off of this piece.

All the best,
Cat

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#4234130

Review of After Rain

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello turtlemoon-dohi

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I accidentally clicked on this item while looking through your portfolio, but I read it anyway and am glad that I did. It was a beautiful little poem and probably one of the best haikus I've ever read.

So, let's move onto the review:

THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

I really liked that each line is used to describe a fragmented bit of connected imagery, rather than trying to describe one specific thing over the course of the poem. This tied together very well, the pacing was great, and it left me with a very distinct impression of the ideas and feelings you were trying to capture without getting into a ton of specifics or going over 17 syllables. I was very impressed.

DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:

The one thing that I'll note here would be capitalization and punctuation. I am not going to offer specific corrections because in regards to the capitalization, I'm not sure exactly what would be correct for this poetry form and in regards to punctuation - I think how you punctuate will give the poem different tones. Just looking at how they're done now, it left me with the impression of being unedited, so it is something I thought I'd note.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

To wrap this up, I really enjoyed it. It was an expertly written haiku and although I had some questions about the technical aspect of it, I thought the words themselves were perfect.

I hope that I get the chance to read some more of your poetry in the future, because I really liked this piece.

-Cat

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#4234123

Review of There is no Prince Charming . . .

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello ruwth

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It is so neat to be getting the chance to review again!

THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

I liked the message in this piece. It was very sad, and all the way around this was a heartbreaking tale, but it was also well handled and enjoyable. I'm sure anyone who has been in an abusive relationship will appreciate reading about someone who goes through the same sort of mental process they do.

Your main character was strong - but a realistic sort of strong. Being strong and having weaknesses go together far more often than is ever depicted in literature. She stood up for herself, she got through it, but she falters with her resolve and that's absolutely okay. You did a wonderful job getting that all across in such few words.

DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:

There was one thing that bugged me, and it was a small thing.

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WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

Aside from my brief moment of nitpicking, I thought the piece was great. It was enjoyable to read, emotionally potent, and you did a wonderful job. It's been a lot of fun doing another review for you, and hopefully there are more on the horizon.

All the best,
Cat

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#4234076

Review of The Groupie

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello Jeff is Gru in #2343485

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After seeing you around the forums so much, it's very cool to finally get to review one of your portfolio pieces.

So let's get to it.

THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

I really liked this. The concept was disturbing, clever, and it ended on the perfect note. All the way around I think it was an incredible piece.

What I liked best about it though was actually the combination of the Title and the Description. A lot of people take those for granted since they're not part of the writing, but that's the first impression anyone gets of your story. There were so many intriguing stories in your horror folder - I had no idea how I was going to pick one, and then I read the description and I knew this was the one. It seemed innocent enough, but with a title that didn't match I knew straight away there would be a horrific twist - and I was not disappointed.

That was what pulled me in, and I'm so glad that it did.

DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:

The only thing I could really suggest would be to write more amazingly dark stories like this

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

To wrap this up, I loved the story. It was a chilling premise that was well executed and left me with nothing to complain about. I'm glad that this event led me to your portfolio and that this was the piece I chose. With any luck I'll be able to read some more of your writing very soon.

All the best,
Cat

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#4234070

Review of My life in the year 2000

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello acecorona ,

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

Let me just start by thanking you for sharing part of your personal life with us. I know that's something a lot of people would be afraid to do, but it was interesting to read and I'm really glad it's something that you've posted.

I also like the open and conversational manner in which you talk about your life and the things that you've been through. It was an interesting little window into the life of a complete stranger - and one with a positive outlook on things. That's always nice to read about and again, I'm really glad that you decided to share your story.

DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:

The one thing that I would suggest for future writing would be to try and focus your entries around a single theme. This obviously being nonfiction I'm sure it's more of a journal, and I know all too well how difficult it can be to theme those instead of just rambling (it's something I know I personally am really bad about.) Tying all your entries together though, giving them a purpose, it makes it easier for people who just stumble upon them (such as myself in this case) to see what a talented writer you are.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

So I guess that's about it. It sounds like you've got a very interesting life story, and this has gotten me intrigued to take a look at some of your fiction as well. I normally don't do a lot of interactive stories, but hopefully some time soon I'll get the chance to check some of them out from your portfolio.

All the best,
Cat

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#4233471

Review of November

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello maggie

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This ally battle review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

I really enjoyed this piece.

I'm so sorry about your mother passing, I know that's the sort of experience that's rough and I'm sure this was probably painful to write, but it was a beautiful way to remember and honor her.

The phrasing was beautiful and perhaps it was the nonfiction element of the poem, but it was a very emotional and very honest sort of poem that I think was easy to relate to. You have a very healthy attitude about the whole thing and this poem really reflects that, as well as your optimism for the future despite your loss. Turning a tragedy into something beautiful is not only a great way to move on and gain some closure, but it's also a wonderful thing to do. Sharing those creations with the world is very brave and in this case, very much appreciated.

It read well and I honestly can't think of anything that would make it better. You did a wonderful job.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

To sum up my review, I really enjoyed the poem. It was well written, honest, and emotional and I'd be happy to read more from you at any time. I'm glad that I happened to stumble across this and I hope that I get the chance to do some more reviews for you in the near future.

All the best,
Cat

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#4232319

Review of Ned Kelly, who loved his Mum.

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello Sparky

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

Source Material:

One thing that I think it's definitely worth mentioning is that I love you sourced your information on this. I love seeing source information on stories like this and you did a great job covering everything, which I for one really appreciate.

Premise/Genre:

There isn't a lot of nonfiction poetry. I love that you took a real story like this and turned it into a work of art (all the while citing your information.) It's a story that I think definitely deserves to be heard, and you are really making sure that it is. That's a great cause and a great reason to write.

DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:

Meter :

The one thing that I think could use a little work in this poem is your meter/phrasing. The poem didn't flow particularly well when read out loud and I think there were a couple grammatical errors. This is something that I think you could probably work out going over and doing a basic edit on the piece, but I did include one specific example that struck me as off.

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WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

Aside from the one suggestion I made about the flow of the poem, I thought it was phenomenal. I hope that I get the chance to read some more of your work some time in the future.

All the best,
Cat

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#4232298

Review of Closer

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello Shannon

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

Story:

What I liked best about this poem was the story that it told. We got to see into this woman's life and see where she's come from, what she's thinking about, and most importantly what's driven her to this point in her life.

It's a very sad narrative, but a very powerful one.

Phrasing:

You have a gift for expressing yourself through poetic phrasing, and that's something that I can really appreciate. There was one stanza in particular that I was drawn to and feel really stuck out.

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DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:

Notes:

My one suggestion (and this isn't really a way to improve the poem itself, because I don't think it needs any changes) is to consider adding a note at the bottom of the poem about the structure that you used. I don't think it harms the poem by being absent, but a lot of poems do have notes about the style being used, and as a poetically challenged reader I know it's something I always appreciate.

Just something to consider.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

To wrap this up, I thought it was fantastic! I'd happily read more of your poetry at any time, and I hope that I get the chance to do so sometime soon.

All the best,
Cat

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#4232282

Review of Hidden

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello Mitchopolis

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I was initially drawn to it because the description and the rating didn't seem to match. I was a little horrified as to why a "hallway dispute" needed a rating of 18+, and I just had to find out. All in all, I think probably 13+ would have been an alright rating, but I'm glad that I chose it to read and review all the same, because it was very interesting.

Now, on to the review!

THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

Unique Voice:

One thing that I really enjoyed about it was the unique voice that it's written in. It made it instantly stand out and was incredibly distinctive. There were a lot of little things such as your word choice, perspective, and language that made the style really pop, but I think the best example of this would be the following:

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DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:

Clarify:

The one thing (and really, the only thing) that I didn't like about the piece was that it was very confusing. The fragments of story pain a picture, but I feel like that picture is still blurry by the time that the story concludes, and I would enjoy it more if I had a firmer grasp on what was going on.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

To wrap this up, I think it was a good concept told in a great way. If it were a little less vague I think it would have been an exceptionally rare sort of story. I hope that this was at least somewhat helpful.

All the best,
Cat

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#4231821

Review of A Mother's Cry

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello ShellySunshine

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This ally battle review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

Sentiment:

This was a really beautiful poem, and I think a lot of that was the idea that you wanted to express. As you said yourself in the description and poem both, a mother's cry is like nothing else on earth, and I think that's something a lot of people don't ever really stop to think about. It's a very emotional topic however, and it's one that I think you tackled very well with this piece.

Here was my favorite line:

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DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:

I really don't have any suggestions for you. You did a good job conveying the ideas that you set out to, it was a good length, it had good structure, and it was all in all a very well rounded and enjoyable piece. Well done!

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

To wrap this up, I think it's a really great piece that you've got here. I'm glad that the Game of Thrones event led me to your profile and that this was the poem I happened to choose. I hope that I get to read some more of your work in the near future, because you'e done an excellent job with this one.

All the best,
Cat

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#4231819

Review of Our Poor Mailbox

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello Pico ヨハネス

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This ally battle review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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I was drawn to this item mostly because I was intrigued, and it was definitely interesting.

THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

Style:

What I liked most about the piece was your style. A lot of nonfiction gets boring because most nonfiction writers have a tough time explaining bits and pieces of their lives out of context in a way that's interesting. You have a conversational and very friendly, open style of writing that really helps to keep the reader interested in what you're saying.

DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:

Play up the Nostalgia:

One thing that I felt like you were going for (and by all means, correct me if I'm wrong) was to evoke emotions. I think a really good way to get the reader more invested in your mailbox story would be to really play up how it impacted your lives. You actually touched on this a little bit here:

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WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

This is definitely the best mailbox story I've ever read, and I think it's a great start. I think working on it a little more and expanding just enough to get the reader emotionally invested in the mailbox would really help the story, but it's not bad by any mean's.

I hope this was at least a little helpful to you. Thank you so much for sharing a little piece of your life here with us members as WdC and in this case, the members of House Stark.

Best of luck with your writing endeavors,

-Cat

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#4231807

Review of Princess Claudette

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello Fran 🌈🧜‍♀️

This ally battle review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

Atmosphere:

My favorite aspect of the piece was without a doubt the strong sense of atmosphere you created when describing the setting. It was built up excellently and gives off just the right level of creepy for a story of this nature.

Here was my favorite line:

EXAMPLE ▼

Due to the flash-fiction nature of the writing prompt, it's understandable that you couldn't spend too many words describing the surroundings, but you managed to do a great job with the words that you did use.

DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:

Pacing:

The one thing that I would suggest working on would be the pacing of the piece. I understand that with any story under 500 words, it's going to go by relatively quickly, but this one in particular felt a little rushed.

I think it's because of how slow the build up is right at the beginning. That sends a very steady, even tempo for the story, and then the dialogue cuts in very abruptly and the descriptions suddenly stop. Fleshing out the conversation with a little bit more action might help even this out a bit, hopefully without taking you over your word count.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

In conclusion, I liked the style used (particularly in the beginning) and the story itself was pretty interesting. I do think it would be better if it were extended just a little so that the moments of dialogue really have time to settle in with the reader, but of course that's just my personal opinion.

It was great reading your story, and I'd be happy to read more from you at any time.

All the best,
Cat

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#4231746

Review of Dollar Bill

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:

Hello tYpO/T.Boilerman

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This ally battle review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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I was instantly drawn to this item because of the description and the story pulled me in just as fast. I'm very happy to have this piece and am thrilled to be reviewing it now.

THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:

Beginning:

I really liked how the piece starts off. The discussion about coffee is one that's universal, and it breathes a little bit of life into your character and personality into your writing, establishing a great atmosphere before getting into the premise. That's very rare in flash fiction, but you did a good job with it and it really contributed to your story.

Premise:

What drew me into the piece was the ominous description, and the piece absolutely delivered. It was a little creepy, a little mysterious, and a ton of fun to read.

DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:

The Ending/Expansion:

The one thing that I really didn't like was the end. It was very open, which I think works sometimes, but wasn't my favorite in this instance. I think because the premise was so intriguing and the beginning so mysterious - that having the ending be too open was just a little bit of a let down. I didn't need everything laid out perfectly for me, but as the reader it would be nice if there was some kind of hint, or that it was set up in a way that I believe more strongly that you had a really good explanation - I just don't get to know what it is.

I would either try to work a little more hinting in there, or just expand the piece entirely. I think this is definitely the sort of plot that could support being fleshed out into a full story - and a long one at that.

Of course, that's just my own personal opinion, and I have always leaned toward longer stories.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:

Overall I thought it was a good piece. I think it would be a better piece if it were longer, but then again, I think that about most things. I do hope that you consider expanding on this idea one day, but in the meantime I'm sure you've got some other, wonderful writing to be getting done.

All the best,

Cat

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#4231105

Review of The Carousel Ride

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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DISCLAIMER

I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

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A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:
"Dark wings, dark words, me mother used to say, but when the birds fly silent, seems to me that’s even darker."

Hello Mumsy

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:
"Fear is for the winter, my little lord, when the snows fall a hundred feet deep and the ice wind comes howling out of the north."

Emotional Aspect:

I really enjoyed how you were able to tie something as cheerful as a carousel to something that was as emotionally deep as losing a loved one. You were also able to convey those feelings very briefly and effectively.

There was a section that I particularly enjoyed:

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DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:
"Nothing burns like the cold."

Premise:

The one thing that didn't work for me about this piece was that the overall concept seemed a little unlikely. It seems like your narrator went through a lot of work to have this experience, and there was one line in there that made it sound like it wasn't particularly worth it:

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WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:
"Summer will end soon enough, and childhood as well."

So sum this all, aside from the one nitpicky little thing, I thought it was very good. You did a great job tying deeper meaning into the prompt response, and as a story it reads very well. I hope that this was at least a little helpful, and that I get to review some more of your stuff in the future.

All the best,

Cat

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#4230961

Review of Othello's Adjustment

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

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A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:
"Dark wings, dark words, me mother used to say, but when the birds fly silent, seems to me that’s even darker."

Hello ♥tHiNg♥

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This ally battle review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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As someone who likes reading about cats and the second world war, this was an obvious selection for me the second I saw it on your portfolio, and I knew I would have to read it. I'm so glad that I did.

So, let's move onto the review:

THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:
"Fear is for the winter, my little lord, when the snows fall a hundred feet deep and the ice wind comes howling out of the north."

Concept:

Without a doubt one of my all time favorite things in literature is the depiction of terrible things from the point of view of someone too innocent to understand. This usually pertains to children, but in this case it applies to Othello.

You touched on some iconic and horrible truths about what was going on during that period of history, all the while creating a character that the audience cared for and genuinely wanted to see make it to the end.

DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:
"Nothing burns like the cold."

I honestly wouldn't suggest that you change anything. In an abstract sense I think a little more subtlety would have been nice, but I really don't think you could have found a better balance of incorporating real historical events into a work of fiction without really skewing the perspective of the narrator.

This really was a fantastic piece, and I can't imagine it being much better than it is right now.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:
"Summer will end soon enough, and childhood as well."

To wrap this up, I loved the piece. It fit in well to a lot of my interests (which of course didn't hurt) but you tackled a difficult subject very well and that's always something I can appreciate. I can see why you've called this your best piece because it's incredibly well done.

All the best,
Cat

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#4230894

Review of Olc and Maitheas

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:
"Dark wings, dark words, me mother used to say, but when the birds fly silent, seems to me that’s even darker."

Hello Fhionnuisce

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This ally battle review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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I am very glad to be representing my House in this review, and am glad that the event has led me to your portfolio, which I've found to be quite intriguing so far. I really enjoyed this piece specifically, which of course is the topic of this review.

So, let's get down to the reviewing portion:

THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:
"Fear is for the winter, my little lord, when the snows fall a hundred feet deep and the ice wind comes howling out of the north."

Premise:

What I think really drew me to this piece was how you took something as seemingly innocent as capturing fireflies and turned it into something so chilling. I know that this is a piece I'm going to be thinking about for awhile, and the idea was brilliantly executed.

Showing cruelty in children is always something that's creepy when done well, and tying it to an event that I'm sure a ton of people can very innocently relate to makes it hit home all the harder.

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DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:
"Nothing burns like the cold."

Expansion:

I think that you've done an excellent job. I wish I could do flash-fiction this well to be honest, and overall I was really impressed. The overall idea was very strong and you captured that in a very short amount of time.

One thing though, is that there are a lot of questions that didn't get covered because the piece is so short, and the characters really are interesting enough that I'd like to read more about them. If you ever find the time to revisit this idea and expand on the characters some, I hope you'll shoot me an email to let me know so that I can read them.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:
"Summer will end soon enough, and childhood as well."

In summary, I thought it was a great piece. Though I would love to know more about the characters, their relationship to one another, and the setting, the strong premise and chilling implications made this an enjoyable read.

I hope that you'll continue writing great pieces like this, and that I get the chance to review some more of your work in the future.

All the best,

-Cat

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#4229834

Review of The Day the Stars Became Round

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

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I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

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A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:
"Dark wings, dark words, me mother used to say, but when the birds fly silent, seems to me that’s even darker."

Hello Fivesixer

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This anniversary review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:
"Fear is for the winter, my little lord, when the snows fall a hundred feet deep and the ice wind comes howling out of the north."

Individual Lines:

I'm going to be completely honest, I didn't follow this one very well at all. There were however still a couple lines that really stood out and that I really enjoyed.

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DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:
"Nothing burns like the cold."

Confusion:

My biggest issue with this one was that I didn't really follow it. At the beginning I thought maybe that's how it was supposed to be (because the description left me with hope that if I kept reading eventually things would get explained) but the more I read the more confused I seemed to get.

Maybe that was just me not following very well, but it's something you should still probably be aware of.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:
"Summer will end soon enough, and childhood as well."

To wrap this up, this has probably been my least favorite so far in terms of premise and delivery, because I'm still not sure that I followed it completely. There were however still aspects that I liked, such as specific lines and the overall tone/feel of the piece. You have a style that is very pleasing to me, even at times when I don't understand.

I hope you continue to put out wonderfully stylized pieces such as this.

-Cat

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#4229829

Review of A Leaf Not Fallen

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: ASR

| (3.5)

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A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:
"Dark wings, dark words, me mother used to say, but when the birds fly silent, seems to me that’s even darker."

Hello Fivesixer

This anniversary review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:
"Fear is for the winter, my little lord, when the snows fall a hundred feet deep and the ice wind comes howling out of the north."

Tone:

In this poem you've given the impression of a timeless piece by using a lot of expressions that reference time in sort of a strange way:

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This combined with your writing style made for a very unique piece with a very open feel that definitely sets this apart from your other poems (at least the ones I've read.)

DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:
"Nothing burns like the cold."

Run-on Sentences:

I have always been of the opinion that grammar should take a backseat to style in creative writing (especially in poetry) so this is normally something I wouldn't mention. There were a couple sentences in here however that went on to the point I'm not entirely sure that they made sense:

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WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:
"Summer will end soon enough, and childhood as well."

To wrap this up, I think there are some great ideas and some great atmosphere to this piece and it could be really, really strong if you went back to clear some stuff up and restructure some sentences. Of course, those are just my opinions and I hope they don't discourage you in anyway, because I'm loving what I'm seeing on your portfolio.

All the best,

-Cat

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#4229826

Review of Sarcasm in its ugliest fine form

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:
"Dark wings, dark words, me mother used to say, but when the birds fly silent, seems to me that’s even darker."

Hello Fivesixer

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This anniversary review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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Hopefully you're not too tired of receiving reviews from me because even though I said I was done for the day, I have returned to do some more reviews anyway. So, here we go:

THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:
"Fear is for the winter, my little lord, when the snows fall a hundred feet deep and the ice wind comes howling out of the north."

Honesty:

What I liked best about this piece that despite the sarcastic nature of it, it seems to come from a brutally honest and perhaps even bitter sort of place. That makes it ring very true with the reader (at least it did with me) and that's always something that I can appreciate in writing, particularly in poetry.

I particularly liked the following line:

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DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:
"Nothing burns like the cold."

Confusion:

The one thing that I would consider doing is clarifying where exactly you as the writer of the poem are coming from. The title of the poem suggests that the entire thing is sarcastic (and there are obviously one or two lines that are in fact, very sarcastic) but some of it seems like it's meant to be taken more seriously. It can be a little confusing to the reader, and it's something that you might want to address.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:
"Summer will end soon enough, and childhood as well."

To wrap this up I enjoyed the poem quite a bit. It had a great concept, some great lines, and it conveyed some very honest feelings in a dishonest way. Keep up the excellent writing!

-Cat

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#4229783

Review of Slowdanced to Death

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.

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A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:
"Dark wings, dark words, me mother used to say, but when the birds fly silent, seems to me that’s even darker."

Hello Fivesixer

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This anniversary review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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This is probably going to be the last anniversary review I give you, so you can be free of me spamming you on behalf of my house very shortly

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:
"Fear is for the winter, my little lord, when the snows fall a hundred feet deep and the ice wind comes howling out of the north."

Strong Ending:

You've got a lot of really strong opening lines, but so far I think this piece has had the strongest end out of any of the poems I've read from you so far.

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DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:
"Nothing burns like the cold."

The Second Line:

I really did not like the second line of this poem:

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WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:
"Summer will end soon enough, and childhood as well."

I really liked this poem. I think I'm going to be done spamming you with reviews for today, but I just want to let you know I've had a really good time reading through your work. This has been a great way to start off a very stressful event and I'm glad that you had the first anniversary, because I have really enjoyed going through your work.

Hopefully you weren't too bothered by my flood of reviews and you didn't find them too tedious. You've got some amazing talent and I hope that I get to review some more in the future.

All the best,

-Cat

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#4229780

Review of A Pitcher In A Pint

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:
"Dark wings, dark words, me mother used to say, but when the birds fly silent, seems to me that’s even darker."

Hello Fivesixer

This anniversary review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:
"Fear is for the winter, my little lord, when the snows fall a hundred feet deep and the ice wind comes howling out of the north."

Title:

This seems like a small thing, but it really can make a huge difference. The title grabs attention and it really helps hold the audience's attention. In the back of my mind even as I was reading through the poem I was trying to relate it back to the title and it went a long way to tie the whole experience together for me.

Of course, the ideas presented in the poem were probably interesting enough that I would have kept reading anyway (and as always, your word choice was impeccable) but there's something about a good title that can really make or a break a poem. Perhaps because that's the first impression given of the piece?

Regardless of why, I liked your choice. It was sort of an abstract title for some philosophical pondering, and it worked very well.

DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:
"Nothing burns like the cold."

Convoluted Message:

The one thing that struck me as a little off-putting was that there seemed to be a small lack of continuity between the tone of the poem and the message. The tone conveys that there's a singular line of thought you have about how people should act, but the poem itself doesn't make that very clear.

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WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:
"Summer will end soon enough, and childhood as well."

To wrap it up, I thought it was a good poem, I was just a little unclear on your intent in writing it. Still, it read well and I'm looking forward to seeing some more of your work.

All the best,

Cat

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#4229776

Review of Flipping Off Cars

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

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A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:
"Dark wings, dark words, me mother used to say, but when the birds fly silent, seems to me that’s even darker."

Hello Fivesixer

This anniversary review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:
"Fear is for the winter, my little lord, when the snows fall a hundred feet deep and the ice wind comes howling out of the north."

Phrasing:

I'm sure you can gather that I'm very impressed with your use of words. Overall that's without a doubt what I like best about your poetry in general because there are always so many lines that are just absolutely incredible.

You've really outdone yourself this time however. That whole first stanza was amazing. The things you were saying were great, the way you said them was great, and even the meter and structure were way above par, you did a great job.

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DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:
"Nothing burns like the cold."

Last Stanza:

Really the only issue I had with this was the last stanza of the piece. Again, it wasn't that it was bad or anything, but in my opinion it didn't really contribute anything to my enjoyment or understanding of the piece, so I'm not sure it was worth the straying from the previous formatting, which up until that point was relatively consistent.

Anyway, of course, that's just my opinion. Here are the lines I'm referring to if you'd like to look them over:

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WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:
"Summer will end soon enough, and childhood as well."

To sum things up, I liked this one a lot up until the end. I think the piece might have been stronger without those last few lines, but it was strong enough up until that point that I was still incredibly impressed with what you managed to accomplish in this poem.

Really, truly, you've done a fantastic job. I'm looking forward to reading more pieces for your anniversary.

-Cat

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#4229775

Review of Can I Get An Amen From The Silent Guilty

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:
"Dark wings, dark words, me mother used to say, but when the birds fly silent, seems to me that’s even darker."

Hello Fivesixer

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This anniversary review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:
"Fear is for the winter, my little lord, when the snows fall a hundred feet deep and the ice wind comes howling out of the north."

Structure:

My favorite thing about this poem (at least, in relation to the other things I've read from you) is the structure that you open with. I've noticed that you seem to lean toward free verse poetry (which isn't a bad thing by any means) but it was nice to see a little bit more structured/patterned poem from you.

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DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:
"Nothing burns like the cold."

Formatting:

The downside of having the beginning be more structured was that it was a lot more noticeable when you started to stray from that structure in the second half of your poem. Although I like the second half very much (both in content and structure) I think it might have been better if you had stuck to the same sort of formatting all the way through. It would have read a little more consistently and it would have been more visually appealing (which of course isn't everything, but it does help with the initial impressions of a piece.)

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:
"Summer will end soon enough, and childhood as well."

I did enjoy the piece. The premise and wording were up to the high standard I've come to expect from you, and it showed that you can (for awhile anyway) stick to a more traditional poetry structure. It has gotten me all the more intrigued about the way you decide to format things and eager to see what other sorts of poetic forms you use.

Kind regards,

Cat

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#4229773

Review of Last Man Standing

Review by Cat Voleur

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

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A RAVEN FROM THE NORTH: AN INTRODUCTION:
"Dark wings, dark words, me mother used to say, but when the birds fly silent, seems to me that’s even darker."

Hello Fivesixer

This anniversary review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones"

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THE NORTH REMEMBERS: WHAT I LIKED:
"Fear is for the winter, my little lord, when the snows fall a hundred feet deep and the ice wind comes howling out of the north."

Conceptually Sound:

This was definitely one of your more vague pieces. I think that the concept was neat (at least, assuming that I'm taking away the right things from it) and as always I like how you've taken the ideas behind the piece and put them to paper (okay, screen in this case) in such a unique and poetic fashion.

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DARK WINGS, DARK WORDS:SUGGESTIONS:
"Nothing burns like the cold."

Vague:

I did mention this before, I thought the piece was a bit vague. I think up to a certain point vague poetry is good, but when a poem is written specifically for something or someone it might be good to elaborate just a little. That way the audience knows they're getting the right mental pictures, and taking away the message that you, the writer, intended.

WINTER IS COMING: A CONCLUSION:
"Summer will end soon enough, and childhood as well."

To sum things up, I thought that it was an enjoyable poem, though I would perhaps have liked it to be a tiny bit more clear and focus a bit more on the specific occasion/people that inspired it. Still, it was a good read and I'm looking forward to seeing more of your portfolio.

All the best,
Cat

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