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DISCLAIMER
I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.
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ALL ALONE :: INTRODUCTION
"From even the greatest horrors, irony is seldom absent." - H.P. Lovecraft
Hello Max Griffin 🏳️🌈 ,
Congratulations on having your item "A Walking Shadow" featured in the most recent horror newsletter! I have been looking for some more horror stuff to review, so I hope you don't mind me dropping by with some comments.
With that out of the way, let's get right in.
IN THE DARK :: WHAT I LIKED
"Terror is the desire to save yourself, but horror is rooted in sympathy." -Joe Hill
Setting:
What I liked best about the piece was the environment that you were able to build. You dropped us in the action and were able to keep up a steady space, showing the audience the world rather than telling them about it. The elements were harsh, and the "world-encompassing catastrophe" was harsher.
The imagery was vivid, and this is a world that I have a feeling will be sticking in my mind for quite some time.
Noah's Dialogue:
Without giving too much away, I really liked Noah's conversation with Enoch. Aside from being important to the plot, it was written with a tone that, while unexpected, makes a perfect kind of sense. It added a sense of realism to the bigger concept of the piece and I think it was incredibly well done.
SOUND OF SCREAMING :: MY SUGGESTIONS:
"Horror is the removal of masks." - Robert Bloch
While I normally use this as a suggestions section, I don't really have any suggestions for the piece. I highlighted two of my favorite aspects, but overall the story works as a whole and is enjoyable as is.
There is however one big question that I had. While I don't think it's a problem that there are no answers (in fact, that has kept me wondering about the piece in the days it has taken me to sit down and write this review) I thought I'd share it with you, as it would be an interesting thing to talk about if you ever consider revisiting the story.
What have Enoch's previous interactions with Noah been like?
Since we see this whole experience from his eyes, I think it would be really interesting to see Noah through his eyes as well in less dire contexts. After the end it was something I thought about a lot. I wondered if there were other signs Enoch had missed about the situation, I wondered if he was compelled to like Noah, to trust him, and I wondered how their conversation at the end would have been different if things had gone better. Would Noah have been as open about the world/situation? Would he have been so blunt? Is Noah always like that, or was it just because of circumstance?
Like I said, this isn't really a suggestion, it's just insight into where my mind wandered off to after finishing this piece.
WAKING FROM A NIGHTMARE :: CONCLUSION
"We make up horrors to help us deal with the real ones." - Stephen King
To wrap this up, I really liked the story. It was immersive, the concept was fantastic, and the great execution has left me thinking about it a lot, which is what I like stories to do.
I hope that I get to read more of your work sometime in the near future.
Sincerely,
-Cat
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