This poem I liked very much, although it was a bit dark for me and it sounded a lot like Shakespear. I liked the way it flowed and the way it was written. Good luck in the contest, I hope you do well. This is a nice formulated poem. Thank you for sharing.
This is a good story. It would be a good one to develop as this topic is very current at the moment. I liked the writing, but just as I got into it, the story stopped. This isn't a finished story, but an extract of one. Very well written though. Thank you for sharing.
This is a well written piece, not really the stuff I normally read. Ifound it interesting, if not a little boring and dry. The writer of this piece definitely has done their research and knows there stuff. It was very informative and learnt a lot about DNA. Thank you for sharing
This story was written very well. Just one thing, I think .in the beginning, you pointed out the writters mother was sick a few times when really you only have to tell the reader once. I like the way it was written though, the memory stopping the teenager doing her boring work. We can all relate to this. Thank you for sharing.
This is a well written story. I was a bit confused about the relationships of the two woman however. Were they lesbian lovers or was this a triangle love nest? Also I thought it was in the here and now, but as I read further I doubted that was true. Was it on another planet or on earth, but a long time ago? Or was it on a parrell earth? Thank you for sharing.
This is a good life write, I'm sorry, but I think your friends a dick. When I read the bit about him not wanting to know you when any of his cool friends are about, it took me back to my school days and the louts I called friends back then. I liked your story very much. Just one thing, it was hard to read and I reread a few lines twice as they were all bunched together. Thank you for sharing.
This poem made me smile. You are lucky to have friends like this. Most of my so called friends use me then spit me out, so it's refreshing to read a poem about what a true friend is. I like this concept, and the way this poem was written. Thank you for sharing.
This poem would make Shakespeare proud,although I don't like his work as I was forced to study it at school and have been scared for life lol. I like the way the words roll off the tongue, and the way it came together at the end, very well written. Thank you for sharing.
I like your passion, but there are quite a few mistakes.
'Yet (youâre) never there' you need a space or change to (you're)
'Be quiet! I (donât) need to hear it.' change to (don't)
'You will always be my father it just (canât) change,' change to (can't)
'But( youâll) never be a friend.' change to (you'll)
Your meter is out and the last line doesn't fit in with the rest of the poem.
Thank you for sharing.
This poem I like very much. The circle of life in a plant, very nicely done. I like the way it flows and the way it sounds. It reminds me of a Barry Manilow song, one voice, where soon he is joined by lots of voices. I live your meter as well, very well done. Thank you for sharing.
This was such a wonderful story and a pleasure to read. I felt for the girl and was so happy when her love was returned like that. Just one thing 'It shall take every ounce of my will power to be in the crowd (that’d) be cheering you' I think you meant (that'll) as in (that will) not (that had). Thank you for sharing.
This took me back to being at nursery and being told to express myself on paper. Kids are free painters, they do not have fixed conceptions about things and a great imagination. I liked your piece. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Wow this is a powerful story. I like your take on an old story told time and time again. You made it new and better and, although I am not a reader of the bible, very current I thought. I loved the end and the twist you put on it, very well written. Thank you for sharing.
This is a sad and dark poem my friend. It was written from the heart and soul, as all good poems are. I liked the end very much, although it was a bit final for me. I liked the picture and the tone of the poem. Thank you for sharing and very well done.
I love this poem its very like a statement and then the poet unpacking the statement I love to is a great opening line and each line builds on that line great poem I like the way it is written also thank you for sharing I think this is very well written
This is a nice poem although in places it did seem very forced I liked the star trex theme but the ending was a bit lame and it set the rhyming meter off a bit all in all a very good effort and with a tweak here and there it has potential thank you for sharing
This poem made me laugh lol I loved it and the questions as well it does make you wonder who came up with these sayings and the questions asked are all good questions lol you should do a poem and answer the questions lol now that would be good thank you for sharing
Wow this was good I liked the end it came to a stop 'ad death will be no more' that is about as final as it gets very well thought out poem I liked it very much and the way it flowed was very well done I loved the chill it sent down my spine thank you for sharing
this is a good start to a story I wanted to find out more which is always a good sign I liked the fast pace of the story but it did sound more like a diary entry rather than a story and was slightly off putting but all in all a good beginning thank you for sharing
this piece of information is interesting as I am writing such a story lol but my vampire/ were wolf story has a twist I enjoyed reading your work and found it very informative it was well written and made a lot of sense thank you for sharing and I like the way you think
This is a good story I think the second paragraph is a bit jerky as there are two 'she's' too close together I like the way you use descriptive techniques and the way you draw the reader into the story I think this piece is very well written thank you for sharing
this piece definitely made me think I am not sure I get all of what you are trying to say but what I did get I enjoyed reading very well thought out and I enjoyed the style you wrote in very well structured piece of writing thank you for sharing although it was short it said so much
this is a very sad poem it filled me with dread and hopelessness I thought it was alright and very well written and it made me feel emotion which in my opinion only really good poets have the ability to do I enjoyed reading it and thank you for sharing
this poem is very relatable to most people someone once told me aim for the highest star and you are bound to get one near the top very well written I felt a sense of a uplifting feeling when reading this I really enjoyed the read I like the way you write and think thank you for sharing
this poem bought a tear to my eye it was so sad but I can relate even though my dad is gone I can still hear him sometimes and he still has a grasp on me very well written I felt such sorrow engulf me thank you for sharing very well done I enjoyed the read
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