I am here to give you a review on this wonderful occasion known as 'Judy's Day'.
Your entire item is relaxing to read. There is an innocence and purity weaved through it which completely puts the mind in a state of ease. Your item is tranquil, bordering on mesmerising. I actually read this over twice because I liked it so much.
You have some wonderful memories to call upon. My grandfather used to tell me stories of times where people did not have to lock their front doors or windows. Times when the smaller things in life wre given the appreciation they deserve. It was very different during my own youth, those times had already long come to pass.
Your item is written so well and drew me into its depths with ease. I have yet to find one error in any of your items which clearly displays your skill in all areas of writing. You truly are gifted.
Well done and write on.
I am here to give you a review on this wonderful occassion known as Judy's Day.
The days of home visits from Doctors... I think all people, especially parents wish those days were not over. I had chicken pox when I was 6 and at that time home visits were just beginning to faze out. As you pointed out in your item people with ailments are now left with no other option than to leave the comfort of their homes to seek medical attention only causing them more discomfort. You should send this for publication. You make some very valid points which deserve the appropriate attention.
There are no visible errors in your item and no suggestions for improvement are needed.
Well done and write on.
I am here to give you a review on this wonderful day which is otherwise known as 'Judy's Day'.
This item is so honest and emotional. It is an item which I am able to connect with because I have lived through this same situation. The fact you were able to write so openly from your heart and share an experience with us all that is intimate is amazing. Your abundant talent for writing is clearly on display to all who read this.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
I love this Poem! I especially like the way the rhyme twists and turns. That was the highlight for me! Again this is another quaint Poem but full of meaning. The message is strong and shines through with ease, leaving no room for mis-interpretation. The scattering of questions in the item enhances the connection between the reader and the Poem because it draws them into the depths of your item and encourages them to seek answers to the questions you are asking.
There are no visible errors in your item and no suggestions for improvement are needed.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
This is a quaint free verse Poem about the significance of choice. The freedom to choose what we want to do and when we want to do it, even in regards to do with trivial things, is often taken for granted. One does not realize how precious this freedom is until the option is taken from us.
I like the Poem and enjoyed the message but would have preferred to have seen some more length added to it and other examples of small but meaningful things you enjoy having the freedom to do and decide, further enhancing the connection between the item and the viewer.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
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Aralls, you almost killed me! I choked on my drink.
I don't think I have the strength to write a huge review on this. I laughed it all out.
An excellent write, hilarious, brought tears to my ears, almost killed me in the process and I am still laughing now. This item is a classic!
I know all about children saying unexpected things. My own children come out with some of the worst WTH? statements I have ever experienced. Unfortunately it seems I am their personal target when they do. You were lucky that this one was directed at nanny.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
This was absolutely hilarious!!!! Hang on, I have to catch my breath...
Horrible things like this always happen to me too but after reading this, I think it is safe to say I can quit pitying myself. I have (yet) to experience something embarrassing of this magnitude. I emphasize the word yet because I know it is just around the corner and will present itself to me sooner or later.
I loved the quick cover up for the scream. A spider...
Sorry, that one brough tears to my eyes. Nevertheless you are somewhat of a Guardian Angel yourself. Imagine how 'James' would have felt if you were to reveal there was no spider?...you spared him a great deal of embarrassment.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
Your Poem is well written and I like and appreciate the darkness you have managed to capture in such a small space. The use of strong descriptive words enables your reader to connect effortlessly with your item. A somber tone of narration is detected and draws the reader into the depths of your words.
The format has been followed perfectly. There are no visible errors in your item and I have no suggestions for improvement. It is a delight just the way it is.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kndness and are not intended to offend.
Theme-I like and appreciate the message you are expressing in this Poem. Forgiving and admitting go hand in hand and are both equally extremely difficult to do. Admitting you have done wrong is the first step in taking responsibility for your actions and you should be proud in doing so. Unfortunately it depends on what you have done as to whether forgiveness will be given. This is a topic which can be just as controversial as politics and no one person will ever agree with the other. In my opinion I believe forgiveness should be earned and not something to be expected from the other.
Format- Your format is a little rough around the edges. You use stanza format for the first four verses then slip in a triplet. It is strangely out of place and has no reason for being there. I would consider adding another line so your format is consistent.
Rhyme- Majority of your rhyme is direct and strong in certain stanzas. However in some areas the quality begins to slip. For example:
6th stanza, 2nd and 4th line- 'be' and 'guilty' are indirect rhymes. They are highlighted to the reader because you have led your reader through a Poem which has been written to 'direct' rhyme.
7th stanza, 3nd and 4th line- 'sin' and 'again' are neither direct or indirect rhyme. They do not rhyme at all. These areas in your Poem are in need of some extra attention.
Besides these minor hitches I think you have done a good job with this Poem.
Well done and write on.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
The highlight to me in your Poem was the pace. It was fast and forcefully pushed the reader through, almost dominant as darkness usually is. This strengthened the sinister tone in which you were attempting to set for your item. I am a dark writer myself so you managed to capture my attention easily.
There are a few problems with your item and the first I will address is that there is not any real depth to your Poem. It is stated that this item is biographical yet it is not having any great impact upon me when I read it as one would expect. Your item is a scratch on the surface and if you wish for your readers to be entangled and intoxicated by your words then you must try to dig deeper and retract something more potent.
6th line- 'inconceivable' should read as 'Inconceivable'.
7th line- The use of 'forced'- This takes your item to the past tense instead of the present. I found this very confusing because I did not know if I was reading a memory of something that happened long ago or this was supposed to be based on things that are happening in the here and now.
Overall it was a good effort and with a few adjustments it should be a winner. This is certainly something I would like to read again.
Well done and write on.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
This Poem is attractive. It has the ability to reel the reader in and grasp their attention with force.
The entire piece is romantic, kindred, and I detected some undertones of appreciation flowing through the content.
My favorite part: Two spirits, deeply intertwined,
One the lock, the other the key.
*Those two lines are beautifully written. Absolutely stunning and Poetic in every sense of the word.
I did happen to notice you have some capitalization issues in your Poem. It is not necessary to capitalize the beginning letter of every line. If you smoothed out this minor bump in the road your item would take on a more natural display.
I would love to see more added onto this. Although what you have is fantastic, you ended it too abruptly and it gave me a feeling that I had missed a part of a bigger picture. Adding some length will do wonders for this Poem.
A tremendous effort has been shown here. I wish you the best of luck with your item and look forward to viewing more of your writing.
All comments and suggestions should not be taken in any other way than they are intended. Take what you feel is helpful and discard the rest.
I am here to give you a 'Simply Positive' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
Wow...there are so many things in this item that I like.
There is a very visible struggle between so many different emotions and they are all battling to push to the forefront. Much like a love/hate scenario. It is very bittersweet and above all, potent.
You describe the effect the person in question has on you in so much detail. In your first verse it is as though you knew this person would eventually cause a negative impact on you and yet a stronger emotion forced you to turn a blind eye and wholeheartedly embrace the relationship. There is a very sacrificial tone here.
Each individual verse can be extracted and used as a Poem of its own. They all have their own unique scene and sensation. Your Poem in its entirety is beautifully written. The emotional aspects are overwhelming and eject onto the reader with ease manipulating them to feel what you are expressing.
There are many dark undertones weaved through this, further enhanced by the behavior displayed through out the Poem of the callous person. A trememndous amount of yearning is portrayed in the item and this pulled on my heart strings with force.
There are no visible errors in your item and I have no suggestions for improvement.
*A job well done*
This is a deliciously wicked dark write your viewer is able to sink their teeth into.
The visualizations I received from this were amazing, combined with the sinister tone of narration, you hooked me immediately and would not let me go.
You throw the reader directly into the evil happenings right from the very beginning and I loved that about your Poem! Each individual stanza tells a story of its own and the smoothness of the transitions made almost go completely undetected.
I have one suggestion for improvement and that is for the last line of the second stanza.
'dears' stands out too much in the content because regardless of the way it is directed, it makes an endearing appearance and clashes with the sadistic notions of the character. It would better be replaced with something more derogatory but still classy. Afterall 'he' thinks everyone should be punished.
Well done, Aralls! Your items are starting to fill up my favorites.
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I have heard of the Abcedarius format before but have yet to try it. After closely studying over the complicated format all that I can say is well done.
Making sure each line precisely begins with the succession of each letter in the alphabet and more so making sure you still send a clear message to your viewers would be no easy feat, yet you have made it look effortless by writing such an exceptional Poem.
I have no suggestions for improvement because I honestly do not believe your Poem requires improvement. It is stunning the way it is. I loved it!
*A job well done*
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I am here to give you the last review from five that were gifted to you by Ben Langhinrichs from my package he won for Sherri's New Year's Auction. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
There is much heartache in this Poem as opposed to the sinister nature of your usual items. A sense of helplessness can be felt through the narration and it is quite sad to watch it unfold. Your item is moving and although there are dark undertones this Poem has a more potent nature to it that borders on something entirely different.
The last verse does not seem to flow as smoothly as the others, it may be because it is larger in size. A small tweak or a simple cut would work wonders with the flow.
There are no visible errors in your item and I have enjoyed my time spent in your port reviewing your items.
You truly do have an amazing talent for delving into the darker side of humanity.
I am here to give you the fourth review from five, gifted to you by Ben Langhinrichs from my package he won in Sherri's New Year's Auction. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
It is official. This is the best piece of Poetry I have EVER read on WDC. It gently calls to my darkside and I found it satisfying to read because it felt like you had read my mind, extracted my own thoughts and views and relayed them through a divine piece of Poetry.
I like that you openly and honestly display views that many others may find uncomfortable to read. You say what you want and do not give mind to those who do not agree. That is the way Poetry should be, an expression of the writer and not an item that is strictly written in an attempt to indulge every whim of the reader.
This item is a clear display of why you are my favorite author.
There were no visible errors in your item and I offer no suggestions for improvement. Your Poem is perfection.
I am here to give you the third review from 5 gifted to you by Ben Langhinrichs from my package he won in Sherri's New Year's Auction. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
There are many descriptive words scattered through out this item and once again you have been successful in stirring up a dark and somber scene for your readers to envision. There is a forlorn tone in the narration. You have heightened the quality of your Poem by touching upon sight, touch, smell, sound, etc...you name it and it is here.
This is very well done considering the size of the item. You have used a small space to paint your expression and turned it into something that feels much larger than it really is. You state this is your first attempt writing to this format. This is absolutely splendid for a first try of a complicated format and I would have to say you must be a natural.
Thank you for sharing your darklings with the WDC community. Us, dark writers, thrive on exquisite writing like yours.
Well done and write on.
I am here to give you the sixth review from ten, for my package you won in the ODTG Auction. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
This is right up my alley! It is very similar to a poem I wrote called 'Midnight Whispers'. Dark minds must think alike.
I could write a huge review praising almost every aspect of this Poem, but I wont. I will keep it short and simple. All of the necessary ingredients needed to write a successful Poem are visible in your item. Descriptive words, imagery, pace, message...the list goes on and it is all here minus one- your flow.
This aspect of your Poem requires further attention. Some of the lines are so long and abundant with information that it becomes harder and harder to distinguish one line from the next and it all begins to fuse together. Small compact lines would increase the strength of your poem in leaps and bounds. Re-writing this to meter would work a treat too, but that option is a bit extreme and time consuming and I think the reduction in lines would be sufficent enough to do the job.
My favorite part, hands down, is the fourth stanza: Wake me. This can't be real! Rescue me from slumber.
Mother, protector, sense my torture from devils within.
Save my mind from rodent's relentless hunger.
Sanity is slipping, shake me awake 'fore all is lost.
A sensational stanza! The third line is absolutely stunning.
Well done and write on.
I am here to give you the fifth review from ten, won by you in my package for the ODTG Auction. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
I like the darkness you have managed to capture in this Poem but I feel there is room for improvement. I was not able to connect with this Poem as I have with your others and I am sure it is due to the format to which this has been written. The format was distracting and I found myself concentrating more on moving back and forth across the page rather than solely concentrating on your content. Your content would read smoother if you were to center the Poem and divide it into triplets, whilst using italics for your couplets. Of course this is entirely your decision to make.
The theme is dark, further emphasized with the incorporation of the closet. Closets are always linked to ominous happenings because of the damp darkness that dwells within them. You have brought this old fantasy back to life.
I hope you find my suggestions helpful.
Goodluck and write on.
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I like this eerie read. Demons coming to life to quench their devious thirsts... certainly an item which lingers in the mind of the reader.
Your item conjures some amazing visualizations that go from one extreme to the next in each stanza.
A fast pace and a consistent flow, rapidly push the reader through each stanza.
Your direct rhyme was completely flawless, fitting into your content easily without feeling forced.
Suggestion- 4th line of the third stanza could use a slight tweak. This was the only bump detected in your flow. My suggestion is to drop one word from the line to keep it in rhythm with the rest of the stanza or re-work the line so it reads more smoothly.
A job well done. Definitely an item which strokes my darkside.
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This is a well written Poem centered on your imaginings of events that would transpire during the time of devils celebrations. Again, strong visualizaton has been scattered through your Poem to enable the reader to conjure a picture of these events. I can honestly say I feel like a kid in a candy shop reading your dark folder. I love the dark genre like no other genre.
The couplet format combined with partial stanzas is working well and helps to strengthen your flow. I liked that you changed your font color for the stanzas. It highlights them to the reader and their content is the most significant within the Poem.
One small suggestion-- gods would look better with the [g] capitalized.
I am here to give you the ninth review from ten won by you in Sherri's New Year's Auction. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
This is definitely an interesting story and one that is left wide open to the interpretation of the reader. Your story displays some vivid imagery and combined with direct but gentle narration I found myself completely immersed in your item. Many descriptive words brought the scenery, situation and characters to life right before my eyes. It was a pleasure to read.
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As individuals,we all have different things that spike an emotion within us whether it be a positive or negative emotion. It is our perogative to have this choice and experience the sensation. I can completely relate to your rant because it is not always huge, monumental things that get me riled up.
I think you did a wonderful job of managing your anger sufficently to compose a well written sonnet. In making this annoyance of your's known, anyone reading it is made aware to avoid sending superficial email to you. Not only is your item honest it is also educational because it gives others a small insight into the kind of person you may be.
You followed the sonnet format perfectly and there are no visible errors in your item.
A well written Poem. I hope you received the recognition this deserves.
Well done and write on.
I am here to give you a 'Simply Positive' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
This is a quaint, sweet Poem displaying some wonderfully descriptive wordplay.
Your rhyme is nicely composed and fits perfectly. I noticed you have not incorporated punctuation but oddly it does not seem to hurt the item. Strange...
I like the ending. A lovely way to end your Poem.
There are no visible errors.
Well done and write on.
I am here to give you a 'Simply Positive' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
This is a wonderful Poem which clearly displays perfect wordplay, exquisite rhyme and flawless pace and flow.
There are no visible errors with your grammar or punctuation.
The item is inspirational and in general uplifting. Your title is 'Covered In Love' but it is very easy to see that you also put a lot of 'love' into writing it.
Well done and write on.
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